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BrokenNoseOfQui-Gon Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 12/14/04 6:55am Subject: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan - Date Edited: 12/14/04 1:15pm (1 edits total) Edited By: BrokenNoseOfQui-Gon
	First viggie, and I'm not sure how good it is. I was on a caffeine rush when I wrote it and it has not been beta read. So, here goes... Luminous Beings “Can you ever forgive me, Master?” Qui-Gon turned away from his apprentice, unable to meet the need in those eyes. “I…” the Master hesitated, knowing how his words might wound the young man standing in the doorway. “I don’t know,” he finally said quietly. He shifted, once more looking at him. Obi-Wan’s shoulders slumped, his dejection clear in every line of his body. He nodded acceptance of his Master’s answer. “I understand, Master.” He turned to go, unable to hold in his grief and unwilling to display it in front of the man whom he had wronged. “But I will try, my Padawan, I will try,” Qui-Gon’s voice made him stop in his tracks. “Thank you, Master, I can ask no more of you than that,” the boy’s words were quietly spoken and then he walked away. Qui-Gon stared after his apprentice, wondering what would become of them. The betrayal he had felt when Obi-Wan had turned his back on the Order, on him had been a physical pain. He still felt the sting of it in his gut. And so, while he longed to ease the boy’s fears, to rush to him and tell him that all was forgiven, he stayed where he was. It would be unfair to both of them to make a promise he wasn’t sure he could keep, merely to placate him with empty words that would come back to haunt them both. He dropped easily to his knees and closed his eyes. Right now he longed for the peace that only the Force could give him. He dipped into the warm currents that were there for him, that had always surrounded him. To him, the Living Force was a friend, a lover, a part of him. It was ever changing and utterly constant. Qui-Gon breathed deeply, the turmoil of his thoughts gradually drifting into nothingness as he let the Force cradle him. He let go of his burdens, his troubled musings, and allowed the Force to lead him where it willed. As always, the journey was unexpected, but somehow the destination was exactly where he needed to go. He felt lighter with each passing moment, until it was as if he was completely separated from his body. Luminous beings are we, Master Yoda’s voice called softly to him. Luminous… His mind grasped onto that thought, as a ship will find anchor in an ocean. Swaying there on the waters that surrounded him, he let that single word echo in his mind. The light was the center of a Jedi’s life. The light revealed the truth, and the obstacles which might keep one from it. The light was both a guide and a companion. Qui-Gon sensed the faint tug of the anchor calling his attention, asking him to see what had been revealed. He felt the slight tension that had been building within him suddenly ease. The anchor was the truth. The light loved Obi-Wan, he was the light. He was the luminous center of Qui-Gon’s life, no matter what might have occurred between them. Once again, the Force had given him his answer. He had only to trust in the Light, in the Living Force, and he would find his way safely back to the shores upon which he had built a life with Obi-Wan. Forgiveness, he could see now, was a choice. He could choose to nurture the injury that Obi-Wan had given him. Or he could choose to heal it, to let it fade away and become so distant to him that it did not exist, even in his memory. With a sigh of surrender, he let go of the anchor, its purpose had been served. Slowly and gently he felt himself carried along the currents, coming ever closer to the shore that beckoned him. The journey would take time. But he could see Obi-Wan standing there, waiting for him. The boy would remain in that place, keeping a patient vigil for his Master. The destination was fixed now, the journey only needed to be completed. Qui-Gon drifted away toward the light that was Obi-Wan. -----signature----- My Name is Boba Fett http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/18371227/?0 Broken Nose of Qui-Gon http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=16981717& Luminous Beings http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17766838
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 12/14/04 7:08am Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Awwwww that was beautiful. The characterization here of Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan is right on target. Qui-Gon was very reluctant to take him back and I can't say that I blame him for that. Excellent vig and Congrats on your noms! -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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Jedikma Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 12/14/04 7:12am Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	I enjoyed this. I think you did a nice job capturing a very spiritual nature of the Force and also how healthy it is to forgive. He could choose to nurture the injury that Obi-Wan had given him. Or he could choose to heal it, to let it fade away and become so distant to him that it did not exist, even in his memory. With a sigh of surrender, he let go of the anchor, its purpose had been served. Slowly and gently he felt himself carried along the currents, coming ever closer to the shore that beckoned him. The journey would take time. I especially enjoyed this passage. Yes, sometimes it takes time. Wonderful! ~Jedikma -----signature----- Twice in a Lifetime 7/31 http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/16813029 A Quiet Afternoon http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/23305946 follow up vig to: A New Order http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/17525231
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 12/14/04 7:19am Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Beautiful! He had only to trust in the Light, in the Living Force, and he would find his way safely back to the shores upon which he had built a life with Obi-Wan. Forgiveness, he could see now, was a choice. He could choose to nurture the injury that Obi-Wan had given him. Or he could choose to heal it, to let it fade away and become so distant to him that it did not exist, even in his memory. With a sigh of surrender, he let go of the anchor, its purpose had been served. Slowly and gently he felt himself carried along the currents, coming ever closer to the shore that beckoned him. The journey would take time. But he could see Obi-Wan standing there, waiting for him. The boy would remain in that place, keeping a patient vigil for his Master. The destination was fixed now, the journey only needed to be completed. Qui-Gon drifted away toward the light that was Obi-Wan. Lovely work! That was my favorite part. -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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obi_ew Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 12/14/04 9:16am Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Very nice. I love to hear Obi decribed as being filled with Light. -----signature----- In Loving Memory Of CC Price of Courage- Obi/Whie/Luke- http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20124958/?37 Updated 4/20 Finally!!
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VadersMistress Registered: Apr '04	Date Posted: 12/14/04 12:15pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Very nice! My mom sent me over here to take a look and she was right. Great work! -----signature----- Harry Potter > Twilight Would I rather be feared or loved? Um... Easy, both. I want people to be afraid of how much they love me. Persia pwns your face.
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/14/04 12:40pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	oh, that was very sweet. Great job with both of them and with the depiction of the Force. Very nice work! -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Healer_Leona Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 12/14/04 2:15pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Lovely descriptions, how Qui-Gon wanted to ease Obi-Wan's ,but new better then to voice hollow promises. And the imagery of his meditating, how he trusted in the Force to provide him answers. Truly delightful. -----signature----- Break away from everybody Break away from everthing If you can't stand the way this place is Take yourself to higher places
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LilQui-Gon Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 12/14/04 5:07pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan - Date Edited: 12/14/04 6:25pm (1 edits total) Edited By: LilQui-Gon
	Very nice. I love it. -----signature----- Through Violence & Pain, Remember Someone Loves You. Class of 2006 Just give me Qui-Gon & I'll be happy.
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 12/14/04 5:10pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Oh that was great! And so touching! ahhh loved it!! Great work there with the characterizations! -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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Jedi_Chani Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/15/04 9:05am Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Beautifully done~ Your characterization of Qui-Gon was excellent. I can really see him thinking this way and trusting in the Force to help him. Great job. -----signature----- "I've got a bad feeling about this..." "The enemy to be feared the most is the one who wears the face of a friend."
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Odd-Thomas Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 12/15/04 1:43pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Very nice viggie. Great characterization of Qui-Gon. And the Force was portrayed very nicely as well. -----signature----- Peculiar things happen to me that don't happen to other people with regularity, if ever. The dead don't talk. I don't know why. Elvis is restless...
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MistiWhitesun Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/15/04 2:35pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Pretty. Nice job. Keep writing! -----signature----- Fade to Black (Vader finds Scout) http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/25847641/p1 "I should've known it would come to this."
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Master_Noi Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 12/15/04 2:42pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	The light loved Obi-Wan, he was the light. He was the luminous center of Qui-Gon’s life, no matter what might have occurred between them. Once again, the Force had given him his answer. He had only to trust in the Light, in the Living Force, and he would find his way safely back to the shores upon which he had built a life with Obi-Wan. Forgiveness, he could see now, was a choice. I loved the portrayal of Qui-Gon here and how hard it was to let go and forgive after being hurt - how he wanted to calm Obi-Wan's fears, but needed to heal at the same time. Very nicely written! -----signature----- For Such a Time as This ( 01/17/09) A Shrouded Path (03/21/09)
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LukesTheMan Registered: Apr '04	Date Posted: 12/17/04 7:16am Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	Great job! It makes sense that Qui-Gon would seek the Force to guide him in making his decision. And he is very wise to recognize that forgiveness is a choice. Great vignette. -----signature----- Of Metal and Flesh http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/19859245 Empty Vessel http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/19744934 Proud Master to Annika_Skywalker
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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 3/8/05 3:19pm Subject: RE: Luminous Beings - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan
	This was a beautiful vignette. He had only to trust in the Light, in the Living Force, and he would find his way safely back to the shores upon which he had built a life with Obi-Wan. Forgiveness, he could see now, was a choice. He could choose to nurture the injury that Obi-Wan had given him. Or he could choose to heal it, to let it fade away and become so distant to him that it did not exist, even in his memory. With a sigh of surrender, he let go of the anchor, its purpose had been served. I especially liked this part. -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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