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maychorian Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 6/2/05 11:09am Subject: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) note from the author 4/9 - Date Edited: 3/9/06 1:28pm (46 edits total) Edited By: maychorian
	::eeps:: I was going to wait 'til Friday to post this, but I'm just too excited! I'll be gone most of next week counseling at a junior high girls' camp, and I wanted to get in a few posts before I left. Next post ETA: Sunday Title: The Unchosen Author: Maychorian Timeframe: pre-TPM Category: AU (the what-if kind) Characters: Qui-Gon Jinn, Julune Graffon-Jinn (OC), Obi-Wan Kenobi, and many more Summary: Qui-Gon’s parents chose not to give him to the Jedi as an infant. Now he lives the simple life, content in doing good where he can. But missed opportunities have a way of coming around again, and the Force has a way of finding the right path regardless of individual choices. Notes: It was some discussion on the Qui-Gon character thread that got me thinking along these lines, I think. And writing the romance challenge gave me a good character and a bunch of ideas. Plus I just wanted an excuse to write angst and fluff (as always.) I don’t know how far this will go, or how long I’ll be able to keep it up. It’s probably the most complex plot I’ve ever attempted, as I usually hardly bother with a plot at all. Hope you enjoy reading this as much as I enjoyed writing it! Disclaimer: I don’t own them! (sob, sniffle, sneeze) And I don’t get paid, either! (sad glance at empty wallet) I write this for my own pleasure, and that of my lovely online friends. (hugs, kisses, and kittens for all) Chapter 1: Jedi on Bandomeer “I heard that a shuttle from the Jedi Temple is landing today.” Qui-Gon Jinn looked up from the morning newsflimsy, taking a moment to savor the sight of his wife as she sat across the table, bathed in early morning sunlight that caught her rich, dark hair in subtle highlights. He lived by the creed that every moment was precious, but this certainly was a delightful one. Letting the flimsy droop in his loose grip, he willed the moment to continue for as long as it wished. Julune’s full lips lifted at the corners, tiny wrinkles appearing around her eyes, and faint color rose to her cheeks. “Dearheart, I just made the bed. It’s very neat and tidy and I don’t want to do it again.” “Who said anything about the bed?” She smirked at him. Qui-Gon grinned mischievously and shook the flimsy out, laying it beside his plate. “Sorry, sweetheart. What were you saying? Something about a shuttle?” “A shuttle with supplies for the Agri-Corps is landing at tenth hour.” She shrugged lightly, toying with her teacup. “Just a bit of news I thought you might find interesting. Do you have any plans for the day?” Qui-Gon shook his head, loading his utensil with scrambled girok eggs and lifting it to his mouth. “Maybe I’ll stop by and see if they need help unloading.” The eggs all but melted on his tongue, with just the right hint of salt and spice. “Scrumptious as always, darling. And you? Any exciting plans in the offing?” “Just more harvesting and culture monitoring. They’re coming along very well—we might actually have something worth studying from Bandomeer.” As always, Julune’s color rose when she thought or spoke of her research. She sloshed her tea, spilling a few drops, and did not notice, to Qui-Gon’s ever-fresh delight. He loved this side of her, the curious scientist forever excited by what new discovery might be around the next experiment or data sheet. Her eagerness sometimes made her clumsy, fumbling over her own feet like a puppy with paws too big for its body, and he found this endlessly endearing. Julune’s dark eyes softened, and she looked at him with a gentle smile. “I’m looking forward to returning to Thyferra, though.” She fidgeted suddenly, and stood to begin clearing the empty dishes. Qui-Gon rose to forestall her, placing a hand on the tender swell of her belly. “I am too,” he murmured against her ear. “Our garden will need tending. And we’ll be there all through the growing season, for once.” “Maybe longer,” she whispered back, leaning into his caress. “I’m tired of hopping about the galaxy studying climates. Let another young researcher take over. Our garden is full of rare specimens that need special care, and we’ve neglected them too long.” He smiled, breathing the scent of her rich hair, slowly stroking the warm flesh beneath his fingertips. Soon there would be more to feel there, he hoped. They had tried in vain for years, too many, and now they would savor every moment of this new development in their lives. “He will be a strong, compassionate boy, just like his papa,” Julune murmured, her cheek on his shoulder. “She will be a beautiful, loving girl, just like her mama,” he corrected. She laughed warmly. This argument would not be resolved for another seven months, but neither minded. It was a sweet dispute, made the sweeter by the knowledge that the time was coming when it would be answered. They cleared the table together, taking pleasure in frequent brushes and light nips. At one point Qui-Gon paused abruptly, his head tilted slightly to one side, the washcloth limp in his hand. Julune recognized the glazed look in his eyes and touched his cheek softly to catch his attention. “Getting one of your feelings, dearheart?” Qui-Gon shook his head, clearing the cobwebs, and looked back at her with a slight frown. “Mmm . . . perhaps. Change, maybe, if events happen in a certain way.” Her brow wrinkled. “Change for good or bad?” He sighed. “It isn’t clear. Perhaps it will become so later.” Or perhaps the feeling would pass, as it sometimes did. He gave her a smile. “Nothing to be done about it, in any case.” Julune patted his cheek gently. “Very well. Keep me informed, though.” “Always, darling.” They finished their morning routine and parted with their usual kiss at the door. Julune was eager to return to her azhali cultures and record the overnight developments. Qui-Gon thought that perhaps he would meet that shuttle, after all. X Bandor was a dirty city on a dirty world, the sky above gray and flecked with the detritus of burning, the land about parched with neglect and ravished by deep, constant mining. Of all the worlds Julune’s research had taken them to, Qui-Gon felt the least happy and the least at home on this one. He knew it was because of his instinctive connection to the Living Force, which Jedi Knight Dooku had explained to him. The Knight had been astonished by how strong his connection was, even without the training and nurturing it would have had if Qui-Gon’s parents had chosen to give him to the Jedi. Surrounded by a dying nature, his connection faltered and gasped, begging for something to hold onto. The only places on Bandomeer that Qui-Gon felt truly at peace were in the Enrichment Zones set up by the Agri-Corps. Surrounded by green growing things, his bare toes mucky with dirt and his face raised to a clear, domed sky, he felt whole and complete, simultaneously a part of the universe and aware of the totality of existence. Lately he had taken to visiting the domed areas whenever he could, as the daily sight of the plundered planet burdened him more and more. Not that Qui-Gon had found nothing good in Bandor—far from it. Even as he walked down the street, beings on all sides greeted him in the Meerian way, arms outstretched with the palms up, calling cheerfully to him. The night shift was returning home from the mines, trudging wearily, the day shift moving to replace them with hurried steps to avoid tardiness, but many found time to greet the big human who had been a part of their community for a scant few weeks. Qui-Gon returned their greetings pleasantly, compassionate understanding burning bright within him. Even before he had married his beloved scientist, he had never settled down to a job. Nothing seemed to fit. He wandered from pilot to gunner to cantina owner to dishwasher without lighting on any occupation that satisfied him. He had just decided to look into farming, as a matter of fact, when he met Julune. Perhaps he would have found some peace there. But as it was, Qui-Gon found a great deal of pleasure in wandering about the galaxy with his well-paid wife, doing whatever came to hand that brought help to others and a warm glow to himself. He had always had a natural knack for settling disputes—he had an instinct for whether a being was trustworthy, and an intuitive sense of the wisest course to take. His broad, easy strength often served those who could not complete some weighty task on their own, and his gentle demeanor won him a simple trust from many who turned their faces from most authority figures. Helpful, too, was his “nose for trouble,” as Julune called it. And a large nose it was, bent but unbroken. He had endeared himself to the people of Bandomeer within a few days of arriving here, when he helped with a collapse in the Home Planet Mine, saving several miners who otherwise would have perished. Soon enough the people had begun to come to him for help and advice, sensing a large heart that would turn no one away. On every planet they had visited so far, Qui-Gon’s stay had followed the same basic pattern, with innumerable interesting variations, of course. Qui-Gon had learned to trust his feelings, as the Jedi Knight had long ago instructed him. He was, indeed, getting one of them now. As he strolled amiably toward the tiny spaceport it became a bit clearer, though not enough to provide direction. He sensed only some sort of need. Either he needed something on that shuttle—which was likely, as he’d been thinking about getting a new pair of trousers for quite some time—or something on the shuttle needed him. The second possibility made much less sense, so he focused on the first, hoping for the feeling to clear further. Jinn often helped with the unloading of supply shuttles—much the way that a kind young man would help his friends move again and again and again—so the dockmaster, BonMi, was not surprised to see him. They spent the time until the shuttle arrived in easy gossip and light-hearted chit-chat, only resorting to BonMi’s sabbacc deck when it became clear that the shuttle was going to be late. BonMi had heard that this particular shuttle had encountered some trouble on the way—pirates—and he shared the sketchy details he knew while they waited. It wasn’t yet eleventh hour when the damaged shuttle began to descend from the speckled gray sky, hull plating scorched in places, steam drifting from a vent that wasn’t on the ship in the original design. The six workers from Agri-Corps had arrived at tenth hour, greeting the dockmaster and the now-familiar human with friendly smiles and gestures, and now the eight of them watched the landing gear shakily extend from the bottom of the shuttle. The pilot had a delicate touch, and Qui-Gon only heard the slightest rattle of damaged plating as the vessel set down. A hiss from the hydraulics as the wings folded upward and the ramp descended, and the Agri-Corps workers converged to greet their contact from the Jedi Temple. Qui-Gon and the dockmaster stood back, giving them room, but they watched with curiosity. It wasn’t often that the Temple sent one of their own, and Qui-Gon, in particular, hadn’t seen a Jedi for several years. A swirl of long brown robes, and Qui-Gon blinked. There were two of them. A tall man with black hair and pale blue eyes . . . and a young boy. -----signature----- Kynstar's former Padawan The Unchosen: http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20049795/p1/ updated 2/16 When the darkness falls early, and the light hits the ground, there's a moment to be captured . . .
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 6/2/05 11:15am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Wow. Talk about original plot lines. Wonderful, wonderful beginning, may. -----signature----- What Light Breaks-AU Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon Anakin angst (collaboration with Spiritweaver) http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/29979222/p1/?0 You want an Obi-Wan epic? We've got it right here.
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 6/2/05 11:34am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Great start, May! I'm glad you're doing something different - looks like this could be really interesting! I don’t know how far this will go, or how long I’ll be able to keep it up. It’s probably the most complex plot I’ve ever attempted, as I usually hardly bother with a plot at all. You'll be able to keep it up - you're a good writer. Just keep picking away at it and you'll get there. Cheers, Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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VadersMistress Registered: Apr '04	Date Posted: 6/2/05 11:34am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Whoa. This is great! I love the start. Can't wait to see where you take this. -----signature----- Harry Potter > Twilight Would I rather be feared or loved? Um... Easy, both. I want people to be afraid of how much they love me. Persia pwns your face.
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Musing Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 6/2/05 11:50am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Now this really piques my interest... I've got a new place to lurk, thanks to you.
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 6/2/05 12:16pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Yay! You started posting it Padawan! I soooo loved this (as I've told you in the e-mails and chat) Great work! And I agree original Hope you have fun Becareful out there! Will miss talking with ya! -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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River_Stone Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 6/2/05 1:52pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Ohhhh, a very interesting idea. Be nice to see how this plays out. (Hint: hugs) -----signature----- "May it be a light to you in dark places, when all other lights go out." Galadriel, FOTR, LOTR trilogy Padawan to the wonderful dianethx
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Artanis Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 6/2/05 2:11pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Impressive, I think you've got me hooked already. Loved Qui-Gon's wife. And could it be that Obi-Wan is Xanatos' apprentice? Waiting for more! -----signature----- "What do you want?" "The usual...conversation with a liberal dose of sarcasm."
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Kylie_Jinn Registered: Apr '05	Date Posted: 6/2/05 2:18pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	o0o0o0o, intriguing! I like the idea of Qui-Gon trying to find other work, but never managing to settle down. Foreshadowing, are we...? -----signature----- "The dark is generous, and it is patient, and it always wins--" -Matthew Stover Oh continuity: a joy and a curse...well, maybe more of the latter.
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shanobi Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 6/2/05 4:00pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Very intriguing, Laura I'm hoping if I start reading at the beginning i'll be able to keep up as you post. I missed the boat on Candles-as you know. Got to find a block of time for that one. Great start, and looks like you've got all my fave characters plus some originals. It'll be interesting to see where you take this. More soon?? --shan -----signature----- The Plot Bunny Thread: http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/8535413/p1/?1308
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Kadi Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 6/2/05 4:11pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Very interesting. I'm assuming that the tall Jedi is Xanatos. I wonder if Obi-Wan is his apprentice or a unchosen initiate. The title seems to point to the later. We have to wait until Sunday?! That's three days from now. -----signature----- Barn's burnt down... now I can see the moon! - Masahide Wait a minute, how'd this happen! We're smarter than this. -Obi-Wan Kenobi
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 6/2/05 5:17pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Ooooooh you started posting it! I remember you telling me about this one. A most excellent beginning! -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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AnakinsHeir Registered: May '04	Date Posted: 6/2/05 7:04pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Oh this looks good! And anything with Qui and Obi is a good thing. -----signature----- Let Me Go http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/18359174/?2 Master to JediCallista_1_6_e54 A Mother's Wishes http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20272243/?0
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meg_an2006 Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 6/2/05 7:22pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Oooo I like this so far, I do hope that you will continue to write more! Can't wait for more!!! Great job!
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Darth_Luinel_Kun Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 6/2/05 7:52pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	How long do you think it will be? How much more will you add?
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 6/2/05 8:31pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU)
	Loved the plot line. Quite original and refreshing. I loved that Qui-Gon hadn't settled down into any one thing - must have been hard for one of his Living Force touch. Great job with the appearance of Jedi.. I will wait to see just how the pair are interacting with each other and Qui-Gon. Looking forward to more. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 11/2/09 jedidas3's Master Merlin - Diplomatic Immunity - http://boards.theforce.net/nswff/b10808/30459852
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