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Gabri_Jade_Wannabe Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 12/25/03 10:50pm Subject: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Hehe. This is obaona. Gabri knows who I am. She is also long suffering of my methods of amusing myself and torturing her. Thanks for clicking, btw. Title: She Sang A/N: Like the title thread says, written for Gabri_Jade as a little surprise/gift. She's already seen it - I PM'ed it to her earlier today, and she said I should post it despite it's shortness (though I think she meant under my obaona username). Not beta'ed, but I went over it a few times. It is set sometime during the NJO. Feedback is, as always and ever, treasured. ~~* Luke had never realized Mara was not a particularly talented singer. He hadn’t really thought of it, but he supposed it wasn’t surprising – Mara couldn’t be good at everything. Just a lot of things, he thought with a smile, watching his wife. She couldn’t see him from where he was – he was leaning against the doorframe, probably hardly more than a figure dressed in black from any direction, and not even really in the room, just at the entrance. She was sitting on their couch holding Ben. Of course, she was facing the doorway partially – this was Mara Jade, after all. She held Ben in one arm, the other playing with one of his small hands as she leaned over him. Luke didn’t fail to note the small blaster hidden in her sleeve, and thought he’d have to watch himself when he alerted her to his presence. Normally, she would have sensed him; in fact, had he been anyone else, she would probably have known he was there. At the moment, however, she was enraptured by their son. Late afternoon light cast the whole room in gold. The area was fairly austere with yellow and beige tones and not much else, but Luke actually liked it that way. He enjoyed having simplicity in his surroundings, considering how his life was at times. Coming home could be such a relief. In the end, though, Luke realized it was more likely what was at home, rather than the home itself, which never failed to calm and soothe him, as Mara was soothing Ben now. Ben was wrapped in a soft, blue blanket. Luke could just barely see a tuft of golden-red fuzz, and a tiny fist sticking out. The rest of him was enfolded within the blanket. Mara held her bundle close. Her long hair was loose around her shoulders, and kept falling into her face, onto Ben’s blanket. She had to tuck it behind her ear every few moments, but it didn’t seem to bother her. Her eyes were just slits of green, directed downwards. In the nearly bare room, she and Ben drew the eyes, arrested attention. It was like a living painting, a portrait of the two of them. They were the sparks of color in a room cast in gold. Mara was singing. She didn’t have a bad voice at all – it was feminine and fairly clear. But that was essentially all it amounted to – she did not have the voice of a professional singer, and the song she was singing was no masterpiece either. It was a lullaby, sweet and simple with a small, light melody. Probably gruesome in origins if Luke bothered to look it up, like most lullabies and children songs that were grown rather than written. Luke wouldn’t bother, though. It wasn’t important, and this . . . delightful moment was. It wasn’t Mara’s voice or the lullaby that made Luke smile in wonder. It was that she was singing to their son. It was the act of a loving mother, done alone to a child who would probably never remember it. It wasn’t calculated – like Mara so often tried to be – or necessary. It was Mara singing to her child. It just was. She was, Luke thought, showing her true spirit as she sang – as she missed a note, paused and tried to remember how the lullaby went, her forehead momentarily creasing in a frown, then smoothing into a smile as she began again. In moments like these, Luke was reminded afresh why he loved this woman. Not that he ever ceased to love her – he loved her with every breath, every time she looked at him and shot off a sarcastic remark, every thought and every gentle touch. But he saw the why of it, and he regretted again that they had not taken the time to learn to love each other sooner. Luke made a slight noise, tapping the door as Mara reached a lull in the song. Mara reacted instantly, looking up and body tensing, her wrist moving slightly to make the blaster available. Before she could even fully ready herself, though, she relaxed again. Her mind had instinctively reached out for his, and her realization of his identity made her settle down without thought. She trusted him, and that was enough to still her. Her green eyes narrowed for a moment, and then she smiled. She didn’t start singing again, just waited. Luke came forward and sat next to her. The air was cool against his skin as he moved, and when he sat near here, he drew his hand over her back, not quite touching, simply feeling the warmth. He kissed her lightly, causing her to close her eyes, and tucked a smooth strand of hair behind her ear. Then he glanced down at Ben. His son’s eyes were tightly squeezed shut as he slept and his face was scrunched up. Luke felt, as he always did, a surge of protectiveness and fierce love. Any worry or fear was swept away by the serenity of the moment as Ben slept on. He felt Mara’s content, and matched it with his own. [fin] -----signature----- I think the username says it all, don't you think? Gabri_Jade keeps changing her icon so ours don't match. But she says I can be her mini-me! Mini-Gabri!
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KatarnLead Registered: Oct '02	Date Posted: 12/25/03 11:00pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	ooer! A beautiful image, if ever I've seen one painted - great job! -----signature----- I am a penguin... Oba won my pants!
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 12/25/03 11:14pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Ah, yes, Gabri does know that it's oba, and she's quite accustomed to oba's need to tease others relentlessly. Or maybe it's just me she does this to? Anyway, I'll save the elaborate comments for others, since oba's already heard what I think of this in great detail. Suffice it to say that I think this vignette is simply beautiful. I absolutely love it, dear. Maybe I should go change my icon again.... -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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Jedi-2B Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 12/26/03 6:39am Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	The real Gabri alerted me to this, and I'm so glad she did. Beautiful little story, oba. I love seeing tender family moments in the Skywalker househould. I liked how Luke thought to himself that Mara didn't have an extraordinary singing voice, but that he knew she couldn't be perfect at everything! -----signature----- It was on her fifteenth day in the darkness of the Nirauan cave when Mara Jade awoke to discover a rescuer had finally arrived. It was not, however, any of the potential rescuers she would have expected. It was Luke. ~~And the rest is history~~
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Gabri_Jade_Wannabe Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 12/26/03 4:32pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Burkie: Thank you! And I had the oddest dream where someone was going by Burkie (who wasn't you) and I got really mad . . . Gabri: Well, I do tease others, just not quite to the degree I do with you. Thank you, dearest. huggies And please don't change your icon - icon chasing is so tiring. Jedi-2B: Thank you! Aye, it's really just a cute little moment and not much more. As I told Gabri, part of the reason I did it that way was because of the Mara-haters who say she's good at everything. (She's not - she can't cook, either. ) But anyway - thank you. -----signature----- I think the username says it all, don't you think? Gabri_Jade keeps changing her icon so ours don't match. But she says I can be her mini-me! Mini-Gabri!
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J_M_Bulldog Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 12/26/03 4:51pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Aww, that was beautiful. I loved it. -----signature----- BA(bad attitude), aka Thwack, of TKL's Lomin Ale Wraiths I am never down. I am either up or I am getting up, but I am never down. Stop telling God how big your storm is; instead tell the storm how big your God is.
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dreamspirals Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 12/26/03 5:15pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Oba, that was so sweet!! Just wonderful! -----signature----- Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy. None are more hopelessly enslaved than those who falsy believe they are free.
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RebelMom Title: TFF Secretary Registered: Apr '00	Date Posted: 12/26/03 5:23pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Lovely, Oba. I love little family moments. -----signature----- Short Story: Pressure Point http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/26961243/p1/?7 Jacen Solo and Anakin Skywalker - as it should have been. TFF: Cheryl
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Jaina_and_Jag Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 12/26/03 5:58pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	That was awesome!!! The feelings throughout it were displayed so well!
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/26/03 9:49pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	J_M_Bulldog: Thanks! dreamspirals: Thank you, Gabri's sister. RebelMom: Aye, so do I. But I usually have more plot. Ah well. Thank you! Jaina_and_Jag: Thank you! That's mostly what I focused on - just presenting what little stuff the story had to it. -----signature----- atty is the bestest! MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty
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JadenSkywalker Registered: Apr '01	Date Posted: 12/26/03 11:05pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	That was great, obaona! Those sweet family moments are the best, aren't they? I've always admired your works, and this one, though short, was extremely enjoyable nonethless. -----signature----- "I like things to happen; and if they don't happen, I like to make them happen." – Winston Churchill
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kayladie97 Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 12/27/03 8:29am Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Ohhh, so sweet! Nobody does these little looks into the Skywalker's private moments like you do, Oba! I loved every second of it. -----signature----- My new philosophy of life (borrowed from Elvis Presley) "The sun's down and the moon is pretty. It's time to ramble."
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Rivad_Bacar Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 12/29/03 9:58am Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Outstanding Oba! Very beutiful, and loving! -----signature----- " Fear God and dread naught"- Admiral Sir Bruce Fraiser, First Sea Lord, His Majesty's Navy Circa 1912 Recently married and on cloud twentyseven! Rivad_Bacar: X-wing pilot and diehard romantic.
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EmilieDarklighter Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 12/29/03 3:39pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	Oba! I've discovered two lovely L/M viggies in one day! How marvelous! Thankees! I just love the image of Mara singing to Ben...and it's wonderful that she's not good at everything. What a beautiful little family! -----signature----- Master of Jedi_Emeritus Former Padawan of Gabri_Jade Little sister to Gabri_Jade and LadyPadme 25 Rules for Successful Writing http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/28400222/p1/?2
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LianaMara Registered: Oct '00	Date Posted: 12/29/03 6:54pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade) - Date Edited: 12/29/03 7:13pm (1 edits total) Edited By: LianaMara
	How beautiful! oba, this was very lovely. And once again, your descriptions were esquisite. I love how you can tell a story simply by describing the setting and what Luke's feeling. And I liked that Mara can't really sing. That was so in her character. In moments like these, Luke was reminded afresh why he loved this woman. Not that he ever ceased to love her – he loved her with every breath, every time she looked at him and shot off a sarcastic remark, every thought and every gentle touch. But he saw the why of it, and he regretted again that they had not taken the time to learn to love each other sooner. huggies for a wonderful viggie -----signature----- "For us, there is only the trying. The rest is not our business." --T.S. Eliot Leilaé, handmaiden of the Crest \|\| petit Jedi enfant of obaona \|\| Lani & Lali's blonde triplet
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/29/03 7:06pm Subject: RE: She Sang (L/M viggie; a gift/surprise for Gabri_Jade)
	JadenSkywalker: Thank you! And aye, they are. They're fun to write, too. And thank you again. 'Tis short, though, I agree. kayladie97: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed, and how flattering you think I do these kind of things so well! Rivad_Bacar: Thank you. Emmi: You have? You did? Aye, I like the image, too. I could really picture it in my head, that's why I could write it down so well. Liana: Thank you. Aye, I suppose that's a favorite technique of mine. And yep - I think of it this way: she can dance, why should she be able to sing? She's always danced, never sung, so there has to be a reason for it. huggies -----signature----- atty is the bestest! MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty
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