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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 11/27/04 10:10pm Subject: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Thanks for clicking. Title: Good Like This Summary: Mara thinks about her life. Yes, that's all that happens. A/N: Eh. Gabri got to read this first? I wrote this a few months ago, read it, thought "Nah." and left it alone until I found it last night, when my internet went out and I was bored - randomly clicking on files that I could not remember what they were. Feedback is, as always and ever, appreciated and adored. I hope you enjoy; this fic is just meant to make you relax and smile. It wasn't supposed to be like this. Not so good like this. You know that. You never deserved it. For every wrong act, every wrong thought, for it all and all the rest of the sins laid upon you by yourself. By him. By life. Everyone has those things laid upon them, and so did you, but you never fought it off, and that's your fault. It's more than forgiveness; forgiveness just means acceptance. It wasn't forgiveness that made him say he loved you. That he saw who you really were, and that just felt so damn good, how are you supposed to deal with that? You can't, you can't. You sit in the garden and watch him play with your child, and this smile you've got, you can't stop it. He's laughing. You like him laughing, and he doesn't do it enough. When he's playful he sings, when he's happy he plays, and when he loves . . . he's everything to you. He's not perfect, but something perfect and good must have given him to you. What else could it be? You were always practical, ever practical and proud of it, and there's no problem throwing that into a black hole now because you know this is the exception; this is a gift. You like this exception. He picks up Ben and shows him the different flowers. You don't imagine he knows the species and genus like you do, because you're paranoid like that and you have to research these things. He's probably commenting on the color, the design, the beauty. Ah, he glances at you. A slight mental touch, and you smile, and he relaxes in your contentment. You expected to die in an alley somewhere, when you thought about it at all. A snap of a bond and a corpse, that's all you'd be, and you rather thought Palpatine would mourn the loss of the best operative, but you know that's all self-deception. You knew you'd die fighting; you wonder about that now. He gives Ben a flower, probably tells him not eat it; toddlers are that way, and you both learned that the hard way. He walks over to you. "So do I," he says to you, and you look at him. "Peeking, Skywalker?" you say, but there's no animosity this time; not that it doesn't piss you off at times, but this time, it's all right. One of those exceptions, you're sure. He wisely ignores your comment; arguing with him can be fun. "I thought I'd die in a bed," he tells me. "With eight grandkids and a boring life to show the galaxy." You start; how closely was he going along your thoughts, anyway? "You were being morbid. I could sense it," he says, and you know it was just that he knows you disgustingly well. "And now? You think you'll die bravely somewhere fighting for the good and righteous?" He smiles, with a touch of sadness, and you see memories and other things, as you do sometimes: his turning, his nephew, his father. Family and emotion; vengeance, maybe. "I don't know, anymore. Life has taught me uncertainty." "And living in the moment," you concur. And this moment is wonderful, for all the bad ones in the past, and maybe the ones up ahead, too. You know that's inevitable, anyway; not at all uncertain. If not, it'd surprise the hell out of you. "That, too," he nods. You look up at the sky, the same color as his eyes, as your son's eyes. You feel lazy today. No fire, but everything else that lights up inside. "We could get Han to babysit and make this a better day," he suggests. You want to laugh, but instead you look at him closely . . . and stretch, very deliberately. And he laughs. [finis] -----signature----- atty is the bestest! MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 11/27/04 10:12pm Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything) - Date Edited: 11/27/04 10:21pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Gabri_Jade
	snags first post EDIT: Hee hee! I love this one. Nice and relaxing and mushy. It's also very in character for both Luke and Mara. You expected to die in an alley somewhere, when you thought about it at all. A snap of a bond and a corpse, that's all you'd be, and you rather thought Palpatine would mourn the loss of the best operative, but you know that's all self-deception. You knew you'd die fighting; you wonder about that now. Perfectly Mara. He gives Ben a flower, probably tells him not eat it; toddlers are that way, and you both learned that the hard way. Small detail, but very true to life. My niece eats flowers and leaves and bugs when no one's looking. You look up at the sky, the same color as his eyes, as your son's eyes. You feel lazy today. No fire, but everything else that lights up inside. "We could get Han to babysit and make this a better day," he suggests. You want to laugh, but instead you look at him closely . . . and stretch, very deliberately. And he laughs. My favorite part. Lovely, dear! -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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Pallas-Athena Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 11/27/04 10:29pm Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Awwwwwww I just love the mush! You sit in the garden and watch him play with your child, and this smile you've got, you can't stop it. contended sigh -----signature----- Do you ever get bored and find yourself scrolling down a thread just to read the signatures?
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Jaina-Solo-Fel13 Registered: Dec '02	Date Posted: 11/27/04 10:49pm Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	This is a delightfully short and sweet moment with two of the most difficult characters to write in character. You did a very nice job and I really liked how you tied in this part: He's laughing. You like him laughing, and he doesn't do it enough. with the last line: And he laughs. It made me warm and fuzzy without them even kissing. -----signature----- "I don't care what you smell! Get in there!" -Han Solo, A New Hope "Life's more painless for the brainless..." Dancing Through Life; Wicked:The Musical
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Jedikma Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 11/28/04 5:50am Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Ooohhhh!!! A mushy Luke and Mara viggie. Enjoyed this one. Interesting style in second person. It really gave the story a different feel. -----signature----- Twice in a Lifetime 7/31 http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/16813029 A Quiet Afternoon http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/23305946 follow up vig to: A New Order http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/17525231
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StarFighter5 Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 11/28/04 6:07am Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Very sweet Oba! -----signature----- "I hope I slept with you to get the job. if not, then who the hell was that guy?" - Carrie Fisher "Now that I'm a pez and a lego, I shall want for nothing else." -Jeremy Bulloch "Thank you for going to the movies. Especially mine." - George Lucas
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kayladie97 Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 11/28/04 7:44am Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Loved it, oba! I liked the 2nd person view and you really get into Mara's thoughts very well. I also love to picture Luke playing with Ben. It's nice to imagine that they do have some quiet family time sometimes. LOVED the ending! -----signature----- My new philosophy of life (borrowed from Elvis Presley) "The sun's down and the moon is pretty. It's time to ramble."
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VadersMiharu Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 11/28/04 7:58am Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Beautiful vignette Very well done! -----signature----- Laya: "Mom, Dad: our cat's name is going to be Obi ." Moi: "Aww that's great, honey! " My husband: "Isn't Obi that little green Jedi Master of Star Wars? " Laya: " rolls eyes NO! That's Yoda, Dad!"
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JediArwen Registered: Dec '02	Date Posted: 11/28/04 10:22am Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Another magificent viggie, obaona! Love it! So relaxing and sweet! Very well done, dear!
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ThePariah Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 11/28/04 11:15am Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Oba-Mush! Ah, you never fail to make the sweetest moments simultaneously all profound and existential. It's not just mush--it's high-quality educational mush! Or something like that... It makes you think. SQUEE! -----signature----- Eternal Groveler to rhonderoo, VaderLVR64, Knight_Aragorn, Oba, & the SJRS crew Has a postcard from the Dark Side. "I suspect that most if not all the world's ills could be cured by humour transplants."--Karen Traviss TEMPORARY SET-UP!!!
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Jedi-2B Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 11/28/04 11:16am Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Sweet, lovely mush. Beautiful, oba. -----signature----- It was on her fifteenth day in the darkness of the Nirauan cave when Mara Jade awoke to discover a rescuer had finally arrived. It was not, however, any of the potential rescuers she would have expected. It was Luke. ~~And the rest is history~~
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Jedi Trace Title: • SouthEast RSA • FanFiction Manager Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 11/28/04 2:30pm Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Always nice to see happy Skywalkers - especially of the L/M/B variety. -----signature----- "This has the potential to blow up in everyone's face and be totally awesome in the process." ~ Bri_Windstar on Legacy
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maramijade Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 11/28/04 5:22pm Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	I agree with Gabri, very relaxing. very easy going pace, almost lazy give the setting perfectly Wonderful as usual obaona -----signature----- If computer Geeks were wizards. . . . . . I'd be a second year at Hogwarts, born to muggles
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SarkaVrae Title: PR Emeritus Chattanooga Registered: Jun '04	Date Posted: 11/28/04 6:41pm Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	once again, obaona--wow! what a great little viggie you have written! and much at that! thanks for sharing--maybe you should dust off all your unposted files in your PC--this one was great! i really did feel relaxed after reading it! great job! -----signature----- are you crazy? it's a very dangerous thing to do exactly what you want TwiLekJedi is so silly "I will sin my own sins, with my eyes open"
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Anastasia_Fel Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 11/28/04 10:40pm Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	That was absolutely beautiful, one of the best pieces of work I've read. Brilliant to say the very least. -----signature----- If you are reading this, your thread has just been: Destroyed and most possibly Spammed Now is the time to bow down before me By the way, this is all just a figment of your imagination
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 11/28/04 10:58pm Subject: RE: Good Like This (L/M viggie - second person, mush if anything)
	Gabri: Snagging the first post, eh? Anyway - I'm glad you like it. It's supposed to be relaxing. Your niece eats flowers and bugs? I remember tasting dirt, but never eating stuff like that ... I'm glad you liked. Thank you. Pallas-Athena: Mush is great, isn't it? Thank you! Jaina-Solo-Fel13: Yes, they are hard. They're very complex people. I'm glad you think I got them down, and as for the laughing part - I didn't even see that, really. It's been a while, what can I say? Thank you! Jedikma: I do write mush sometimes. I'm glad you like the second person - I remember when I was writing it, it was actually meant to be angsty, and it just - changed on me, being about contentment. Thank you. StarFighter5: Thank you! kayladie97: I'm glad. In hindsight, I think second person was an odd choice to make, but I'm glad it works. I also like to picture Luke playing with Ben - I always thought Luke would make a great father, and what a contrast between Luke's relationship with his father. Anywho! Thanks. VadersMiharu: Thank you! JediArwen: Thanks! I'm glad. ThePariah: Really? I just - well. It would be really interesting if I went for profound and existential on purpose, wouldn't it? Thank you! Jedi-2B: We all need a little mush sometimes. Thanks. Jedi Trace: Thank you. Aye, I don't see enough Luke/Mara/Ben stories around here. maramijade: Exactly what I was going for. Thank you! SarkaVrae: rueful Aye. I'm glad you felt relaxed after reading it. That's so cool. Anastasia_Fel: Wow, thank you. -----signature----- atty is the bestest! MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty
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