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-Tenel-Ka- Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 7/19/05 6:35am Subject: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK, OCs + supernatural flare - 03/14 - ch. 11 - O noes! I came back! >:D ] - Date Edited: 3/14/07 8:31pm (12 edits total) Edited By: -Tenel-Ka-
	So the writer's block on my main stories comes again and what do I do? Start yet another story. I'm horrible, I know. -_- But anyways, I started this story because I wanted to try something more supernatural in the SW universe - it starts out normal and all that... but hopefully later it'll get all crazy. I don't think it'll be too long of a story, but sometimes I look at the outline I made and think otherwise, so I can't say how long it'll be either. Yeah, and I'm at work. So I'm bored and rambling. Hehe~ Anyways, onto the story! (The first part is the prologue though, so it's short. >_<) ____________________________________________________ HOLLOW SOULS-- [ primary characters, in alphabetical order ] // Jacen Solo [male human from Coruscant] // Kanah Teva [female human, origin unknown] // Synje Raoull [male human from Fondor] // Tenel Ka [female human from Hapes] [ secondary characters, added as they come ] // Gadell Vessau [male human from Hapes] // Prince Isolder [male human from Hapes] ____________________________________________________ part 0: THE END This is the end. I sit here breathing in and out, quite heavily, I might add. It comes out in a cloud which drifts away with the icy draft that seems to wrap around me like a blanket of Hoth snow. I sit, huddled in the corner of the parlor I seem to have stumbled into, my back is pressed against the wall, my hands are numb, my eyes are wide. I haven't seen Tenel Ka since the motions we made to each other through the transparisteel wall of the main hall -- I hadn't even spoken to her then, we couldn't hear each other. I lost her. We can't find our way back to a place where we can meet up, this whole place is a madhouse. Who knew a building existed with so many rooms. Who built it? Who inhabited it? I wanted to find these answers when we first stumbled upon it. But now I just want out. I want Tenel Ka and I want to get out of here. But instead I have this girl, no this young woman. Her hair looks like fire, her eyes look like ice and she's just standing there -- she's standing there staring at me. She looks familiar... I try to ask her questions. She just moves her mouth, slowly, extremely slow... like she's chanting or something. I can't make out what she's saying. I can't feel her through the Force, I can't feel anything. It's blocked somehow. I'm blind. I'm cut off and blind. My shoulder is still bleeding and I'm still crying blood -- I'm blind. But I can still see her. And now she speaks. I can hear. "You're the one who killed me." ____________________________________________________ Weee! Alright, why is the office so cold. goes to get a jacket -----signature----- [ http://echuta.net/ - we're doomed! http://whatthefun.net/cosplay - my cosplay site! http://echuta.net/chivalry - my J/TK fanthings <3 http://echuta.net/oc - EU costuming http://tenel-ka.livejournal.com - the eljay ]
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RK_Striker_JK_5 Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 7/19/05 7:11am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle]
	'You're the one who killed me.' ... She can'ts die! tricksy, tricksy Heather! This one sounds intriguing, yes it does. -----signature----- E-married to the wonderful DarthIshtar. Now also her Padawan. Member of the Y.J.K. Revolution Staring into the Darkness http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27537567/p1/?23
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theatrejock Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 7/19/05 7:13am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle]
	Wow! That was very interesting. I'd guess Jacen's having a very, very bad day. It would be great if he and Tenel Ka were able to somehow get together. Having read a couple of your other stories, I'd say that it has a good chance of happening. Now, what did Jacen do? He's not exactly the type of person I'd classify as a killer. Anyway, nice job. -----signature----- "What man is a man that does not make the world better?" -Balian of Ibelin, from Kingdom of Heaven
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Thrawn McEwok Title: TFN EU Staff Registered: May '00	Date Posted: 7/19/05 7:49am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle]
	-TK-: grins Now that's a return to form. If you can't write something that's already started, you can always write something new... WB!! - The Imperial Ewok -----signature----- A/T = OTP :===8[#]8===: Kyp/Jaina fans: stand up and be counted!
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JainaZekk_Index Registered: Feb '05	Date Posted: 7/19/05 9:18am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle] - Date Edited: 7/19/05 9:19am (1 edits total) Edited By: JainaZekk_Index
	NOTE: This message was accidentally posted my DathomiranAuthor. -----signature----- The Jaina/Zekk Index and Resource Thread: http://boards.theforce.net/Fan_Fiction_Resource/b10304/20496232/?28 Support J/Z! The J/Z Challenge Thread: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=20818153&brd=10477&replies=71
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DathomiranAuthor Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 7/19/05 9:20am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle] - Date Edited: 7/19/05 9:26am (1 edits total) Edited By: DathomiranAuthor
	Very sorry about that...forgot to log out. Very powerful, great description. Shocking ending too ...I'm so confused! edit: smilies and clarification
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 7/19/05 9:42am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle]
	Oh! Nicely done! -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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Maggy Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 7/19/05 10:45am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle]
	interesting start looking forward for the next part book marks ~Mags~ -----signature----- The Revenant - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b10477/28313064 - co authored with Jedi Ant "Maggy rawks " - YodaKenbi Proud Recipient of the Golden Elegos™
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-Tenel-Ka- Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 7/19/05 7:45pm Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle]
	Striker: Thanks Jon~! I hope it all turns out okay, you know how I am with making stories super confusing. XD Muahah! (And you know me - tricksy is my middle name! Well, on the days my middle name isn't 'insanity' or 'snark'... ) theatrejock: There's definitely a very good chance of them getting together -- it'll take a couple posts for their relationship to be firmly established... but it'll come up at some point. As for what Jacen did... that'll come up as well. Heeehehe~ thank you for reading though! I'm glad you enjoy it so far! Thrawn!: Thanks for the WB! Yeah, but you know me - I'll start something new and then slow down horribly on all the old stuff. I need to get out of that habit. O_O Seriously~ hehehe~ DA: LOL~ it's okay - I do that with socks all the time. Thank you for the comments! And it's okay to be confused, stuff I write is always confusing -- and it only makes works out and I'm satisfied with it when everything is tied up in the end. LOL~ ^_^ VaderLVR64: Thank you! I hope I can just keep it up, LOL! Maggy: I'm happy you're enjoying it so far! And thanks for sticking around~ Actually I should be posting the next part later tonight. Heeeehehe~ scurries off -----signature----- [ http://echuta.net/ - we're doomed! http://whatthefun.net/cosplay - my cosplay site! http://echuta.net/chivalry - my J/TK fanthings <3 http://echuta.net/oc - EU costuming http://tenel-ka.livejournal.com - the eljay ]
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-Tenel-Ka- Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 7/19/05 11:12pm Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle] - Date Edited: 3/14/07 8:24pm (3 edits total) Edited By: -Tenel-Ka-
	part I: THE ARRANGEMENT "We have to get you out of here," Jacen Solo fumbled with an intricate Hapan puzzle cube that usually sat on the ornate desk in front of him. The puzzle cube that usually sat under stacks of flimsiplast and letters. "Who knows when they'll strike next." Then Queen Mother seemed intent on finishing her work - she hadn't even looked up at him. "Gadell says they're putting the Palace on quarantine. On lockdown. He thinks you should leave as well. I just came from his office." She shook her head at something on her datapad and reworked the entry. "Tenel Ka." Finally she glanced up to him, her tired eyes boring into Jacen. "What good will me leaving bring? Who will run the Consortium while I am gone, Jacen?" "With the Palace on lockdown, the Council can take care of things. The courts will be shut down, so they would only have to deal with civil business, internal problems and the like." Jacen paused, seeing that this was getting him nowhere. "At least leave with me till this whole threat blows over. Having a price on your head isn't an easy thing to deal with, I've heard that from my dad so many times that frankly, I'm sick of it. We wouldn't be gone too long. And look at you..." Tenel Ka stared to Jacen, the gray, half-lidded eyes still locked on his wide chocolate browns. "...you're paying so much attention to your work now that you aren't even giving any thought to these bounty hunters. You're leaving yourself wide open." She grabbed the edge of the desk and pushed her chair back, standing up and stretching her legs a bit. "Well, that is why you are here, correct?" "I'm here investigating who sent them after you, Tenel Ka. You know that." She did know that, but she was sick of arguing. It was all she and Jacen seemed to be doing for the past couple of days, over extremely inane things which was even worse. They were both stressed, tired -- her head felt heavy, her body protested the late nights she had been putting in. She could see it in Jacen too. His hair was tangled, mussed; there were black circles under his eyes, his shoulders sagged. With a sigh, she walked around the desk, resting the small of her back against it. "So then what good would me leaving with you do?" "It would get you out of here." Jacen reached around her and set the cube down on her desk. "And Gadell and I have a lead. He's going to follow it while we're gone. It'll confuse them to say the least, if the person who is supposed to be inspecting the whole thing just leaves." Tenel Ka seemed to think on this. It seemed to be sinking in, but Jacen knew she would want the last word, she would want to make sure everything would be perfect if she left. "I have to speak to Gadell first." "He's going to say the same thing I am, Your Majesty." "What about my father?" "Gadell already spoke to him as well." "There is too much to pack, and I still have work to finish. I cannot --" "Anhaje already took care of your packing." Narrowing her eyes, Tenel Ka clicked her tongue, silently admiring Jacen's will and drive. "You are impossible," She added, still keeping her admiration quiet. "I'm a Solo, sweetheart." Tenel Ka inhaled deeply, turning her head back to look down at the desktop. Datapads everywhere, pieces of flimsiplast in crooked stacks, notes scribbled here and there. She debated on what to bring along, her right hand running along the edge of the desk. If she brought the econom--- "Oh no, and you're not bring any of that with you." Jacen grabbed her hand away from the desk and spun her around towards the door of the offices. "Now go throw your boots on, we're out of here within the next standard hour." He waved his hands at the door, motioning for her to leave. Scowling, Tenel Ka let out her deep breath and stalked towards the door, barefeet smacking the stone on the way. "Impossible," she repeated under her breath. Jacen waited until she was gone from the room before he let the Solo grin appear on his bright visage. He was hoping this would be a good time for her to relax as well as a good time for her to escape the bounty hunters who seemed to be plaguing Hapes at the moment. He glanced back at all of her work that sat atop the desk and frowned. She really needed some time to herself, some time to herself that didn't involve the politics of her everyday role. Later that evening, Tenel Ka found herself walking beside her Commander - a man named Gadell Vessau. His bright blue eyes were locked on the corridor ahead of him as they moved, striding side-by-side. "Everything will be fine, Tenna." A smile appeared on his face as he turned his head, shifting his gaze to her. "You have nothing to worry about. I think Jacen and I have this thing figured out and while you two are gone it'll be taken care of. And you'll return to your normal everyday routine when you both get back." She nodded solemnly. She didn't like the way that sounded. Normal everyday routine. A shadow of a scowl passed over her face. Well, it was better than bounty hunters on the loose, she could admit that to herself. "Thank you, Gadell." "Of course," he stopped at the entrance to the hangers, grabbing Tenel Ka's wrist and stopping her from entering. "One thing though." The sudden halt brought all of her attention to him as she stared. "Yes?" "Be careful, just in case." "Of course." She replied with his usual line and squeezed his shoulder before turning and entering the hanger bay. As she strode up into the ship they were going to be taking, Jacen passed her on the ramp, exiting the hatch. Gadell stood outside on the hanger floor, waiting for him to emerge. "Jacen," motioning him over, Gadell gave a glance around to make sure there wasn't anyone too close to them. Solo also gave a quick look before stepping over to the Commander. "We'll contact you once we get where we're going. I have a couple options right now and I'm still trying to think of which one would be the best to go to." Gadell nodded in response. "It would be better if none of us know where you're going anyways, not until you get there at least." They continued their hushed conversation as Tenel Ka poked around the ship. It was a fair-sized cruiser, two bunks, a common area, storage units -- it was called the Spectre. A name Tenel Ka found interesting albeit a little bland. She found her luggage neatly placed at the foot of one of the bunks and with a sigh she sat down on the edge of it. She feared that if she interacted with Jacen right now, the temper she seemed to have lately would flare up and they would snap at each other again. That lead her to the decision that it was time to take a short nap. Tenel Ka had no idea where they were off to, which meant she had no idea how long she would be cramped on this ship with Jacen, so she thought spending the least amount of time with him for now would prove the best course of action. "Alright Gadell, take care." "You too Jacen. And may the Force be with you." Jacen smiled brightly, backing up the ramp and throwing a lazy salute to Gadell. Slamming the hatch shut he headed towards the cockpit to start up the ship. "Tenel Ka?" He called out as his fingers ran over switches and buttons, his voice echoing throughout the chambers. "You didn't slip off the ship while I wasn't looking to go try and work, right?" As he let the ship warm up, he meandered out into the common area, peeking into her bunk. "Tenel Ka?" He spoke at a lower tone, just in case she was already asleep. It suprised him that she already was. He figured he would leave her alone then since he was the one always bugging her to get rest. Jacen wandered back into the common area, grimacing at the silence that surrounded him. If he strained, he could hear the hum of the ship warming up, he could hear his heartbeat, but besides that he found the lack of noise a bit unnerving. Little did he know that in the days following that, he would learn that the beating of his heart could prove to be quite comforting. It would be the only thing that reminded him that he was still alive. --- Alright, it's 2am. O_O I should be in bed. Hehe! -----signature----- [ http://echuta.net/ - we're doomed! http://whatthefun.net/cosplay - my cosplay site! http://echuta.net/chivalry - my J/TK fanthings <3 http://echuta.net/oc - EU costuming http://tenel-ka.livejournal.com - the eljay ]
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AvenKiel Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 7/20/05 1:19am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle -- 07/20 - part ONE]
	Yes, well, so should I, but eh, no biggie... throws bedtime to the wind This looks intriguing, more soon please! -----signature----- I'm a naughty little Kitty... Meow! Grilled Cheese..... mmmmmmmmm..... http://www.livejournal.com/~jediliz/ I don't know what I'd do if I couldn't dance , sing and hop around all day, I'd probably die. Death from fidgeting!
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DathomiranAuthor Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 7/20/05 7:28am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle -- 07/20 - part ONE]
	Narrowing her eyes, Tenel Ka clicked her tongue, silently admiring Jacen's will and drive. "You are impossible," She added, still keeping her admiration quiet. "I'm a Solo, sweetheart." LOL! That's a brilliant line. And great ending...now I need to read more!
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RK_Striker_JK_5 Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 7/20/05 7:53am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle -- 07/20 - part ONE]
	So, someone's after Tenel Ka... Bounty hunters? Bah! And a vacation sounds cool. Awesome last line, I must say. What'll happen? Argh! Must get back to own fics! -----signature----- E-married to the wonderful DarthIshtar. Now also her Padawan. Member of the Y.J.K. Revolution Staring into the Darkness http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27537567/p1/?23
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Maggy Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 7/20/05 12:19pm Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle -- 07/20 - part ONE]
	-Tenel-: I'm happy you're enjoying it so far! And thanks for sticking around~ you are welcome "You are impossible," She added, still keeping her admiration quiet. "I'm a Solo, sweetheart." teehee Little did he know that in the days following that, he would learn that the beating of his heart could prove to be quite comforting. It would be the only thing that reminded him that he was still alive. very promising I wonder who is insane enought to hand out a bounty on Tenna ... they would have to deal with the whole palace guard and the Jedi ... looking forward for the next part ~Mags~ -----signature----- The Revenant - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b10477/28313064 - co authored with Jedi Ant "Maggy rawks " - YodaKenbi Proud Recipient of the Golden Elegos™
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-Tenel-Ka- Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 7/20/05 11:21pm Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle -- 07/20 - part ONE]
	AvenKiel: More soon, no worries! And sleep is so overrated. Heeehehe! hi5s DA: Haha! Thank you! I was wondering if it was something that would fit, but Jacen always had that underlying layer of Solo charm and it shows at random points in the YJK and stuff -- I thought it escaping his system would be appropriate here. XD Striker: Something crazy will happen, like it always does. And thank you for the comment on the last line, I was hoping that would top off the chapter well. Maggy: Oh you know the Hapan extended family of doom, it could've been one of them or who knows... it could be anyone. Thanks again! More to come soon! -----signature----- [ http://echuta.net/ - we're doomed! http://whatthefun.net/cosplay - my cosplay site! http://echuta.net/chivalry - my J/TK fanthings <3 http://echuta.net/oc - EU costuming http://tenel-ka.livejournal.com - the eljay ]
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jade51999 Registered: Nov '99	Date Posted: 7/21/05 7:09am Subject: RE: 'Hollow Souls' [ J/TK - with a bit of a supernatural flare, heh~ cackle -- 07/20 - part ONE]
	hmm.. promise not to keep us hanging on this one? raises eyebrows.. sounds good.. p -----signature----- Story in Progress: Into Oblivion (L/M) will be finished October 30 http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/30188512/p1/?0 Updated Monday, Wednesday, and Friday Living in De'Nile, TKL Apts
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