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Deyla_Heren Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 3/20/05 11:58pm Subject: Clone Wars: War at Hypori - Date Edited: 3/22/05 8:56pm (2 edits total) Edited By: Deyla_Heren
	Main Characters : Daakman Barrek, Sha'a Gi, Obi-Wan Kenobi, and Anakin Skywalker. Storyline : After the Battle of Naboo, the Republic passed strict laws that severely hampered the manufacture and distribution of battle droid armies. Massive corporate entities like the Trade Federation appeared to comply with the new legislation, shutting down numerous factories within the Republic borders. In truth, they simply moved the bulk of their operations to worlds outside the Republic's jurisdiction, continuing their work in secret. Geonosis was one of the largest of these covert foundries. The leaders of the Baktoid Armour Workshop sponsored a colonial effort, transporting the entire Geonosian hive to other worlds. Though different terrains were tough to assimilate into a true and proper hive-mound, the Geonosian workers nonetheless turned the planets into massive foundries, churning out battle droids in preparation for the war to come. The Clone Wars. Master Barrek and Sha’a Gi needed to find out if a factory was on Hypori, a world nearby Geonosis. Tell me if you guys think it'll be a good idea, and i'll post chapters, one by one! Note that I might change the name of the story...I'm not sure I like War at Hypori -----signature----- Jedi Master in the SWC Jedi Trials Former Padawan to Axle-Starweilder Current Padawan: (Awaiting a new Padawan) Previous Padawan's: pucifur27, Darth_Vaderous, Adm_Thrawn, Darklord07 \|-Member of the official Obi-Wan Kenobi fanclub-\|
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sdhfs Registered: May '04	Date Posted: 3/21/05 8:17am Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori
	i like i like -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/16229314/?30 Up is obidala at it's best love chooses you you don 't choose it. Death is but death why are you afraid of it ?
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Deyla_Heren Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 3/21/05 7:10pm Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori
	Sorry about the delay. Heres the first chapter, I hope you like it! CHAPTER ONE Jedi Master Daakman Barrek, and his Padawan Learner, Sha’a Gi, walked hesitantly through the rocky terrain of Hypori. Daakman Barrek kicked aside some rubble as he started to climb up a large rocky hill. Sha’a Gi hopped up on the rock and waited for his Master to continue climbing up the steep hill. Thinking backwards, Daakman remembered why they were there, as he pushed himself up with his foot, higher up the hill. After the Battle of Naboo, the Republic passed strict laws that severely hampered the manufacture and distribution of battle droid armies. Massive corporate entities like the Trade Federation appeared to comply with the new legislation, shutting down numerous factories within the Republic borders. In truth, they simply moved the bulk of their operations to worlds outside the Republic's jurisdiction, continuing their work in secret. Geonosis was one of the largest of these covert foundries. The leaders of the Baktoid Armour Workshop sponsored a colonial effort, transporting the entire Geonosian hive to other worlds. Though different terrains were tough to assimilate into a true and proper hive-mound, the Geonosian workers nonetheless turned the planets into massive foundries, churning out battle droids in preparation for the war to come. The Clone Wars. Master Barrek and Sha’a Gi needed to find out if a factory was on Hypori, a world nearby Geonosis. It was likely, seeing a factory had been found, and luckily destroyed, on another neighbouring planet of Geonosis. Daakman Barrek continued to climb the steep hill of sheer rock. He spat out the dust that had gathered in his mouth as he gripped at a small crevice that he used as a handhold. He placed his large boot on the crevice he had used just before to hold himself. He glanced down at his Padawan, who was following his lead, grabbing onto the small cracks in sheer face of rock as well as he could. Barrek made a lunge for the top of the hill and made it, his hand grabbing onto the top of the face of rock, which was blocking his and his Padawan’s way through the canyon-like alley. He pushed himself upwards, knowing he had a firm grip on the, so he could just see over the face of rock. In the distance he saw plume of steam rise in the air. There was a figure under the steam that Barrek couldn’t make out. Unfortunately, Barrek’s grip wasn’t as firm as he had thought it was. Is hand slipped and he started hurtling downwards, towards his Padawan. His eyes widened as his stomach collided into Sha’a Gi’s head, pushing them both towards the ground. Daakman grabbed his Padawan by his tunic and pulled Sha’a Gi over his back, so his Padawan would not get hurt. Then they landed. Hard. Sha’a Gi rolled off his Master’s back, and tried to rise, but slumped back to the ground. He groaned in pain. Daakman shakily rose to his feet, as he threw back the hood of his cloak. He leaned against the tall face of rock and winced at the pain of having his Padawan fall on him, even as he hit the rock hard ground. We’re lucky we didn’t land on the rocks, he thought looking at the sides, where sharp rocks lay. He helped his Padawan rise to his feet. “I saw a slight plume of smoke in the distance when I nearly got to the top of the rock,” Daakman told his apprentice. “It could be a factory, after all every factory which produce Battle Droids would have smoke drifting from the building. Well, mostly anyway.” Sha’a Gi nodded. “That’s true. Well…” he trailed off as he looked the cliff up and down. “…It’s behind the cliff…” “I think if we can get over the cliff again we should check it out,” said Barrek as he turned and started to grab onto a crevice, still watching his Padawan. Sha’a Gi winced, still looking at the cliff. “…Yeah…” starting to trail off. “There has to be a easier way to get up the cliff,” he murmured, talking to himself. Daakman Barrek shook his head. “If there is I can’t think of one. This lump of rock is too slippery for a grappling hooks to hook onto. We have to climb it.” Sha’a Gi slumped to the ground. “Not again!” he said. His Master stiffened, and Sha’a Gi looked up at him. “What?” Barrek frowned. “I feel a disturbance in the Force…” Using the Force, his lightsaber shot into his hand. They heard a sound of heavy steps. “Droids.” Sha’a Gi turned shakily towards the noise. He grabbed for his lightsaber, but fumbled, just as ten simple Trade Federation Battle Droids, turned around the corner, blaster rifles in hand. -----signature----- Jedi Master in the SWC Jedi Trials Former Padawan to Axle-Starweilder Current Padawan: (Awaiting a new Padawan) Previous Padawan's: pucifur27, Darth_Vaderous, Adm_Thrawn, Darklord07 \|-Member of the official Obi-Wan Kenobi fanclub-\|
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Deyla_Heren Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 3/21/05 7:49pm Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori
	Was that good? -----signature----- Jedi Master in the SWC Jedi Trials Former Padawan to Axle-Starweilder Current Padawan: (Awaiting a new Padawan) Previous Padawan's: pucifur27, Darth_Vaderous, Adm_Thrawn, Darklord07 \|-Member of the official Obi-Wan Kenobi fanclub-\|
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Darth_Skywalker2 Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 3/21/05 7:52pm Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori
	yes it was, more soon please How many years after AOTC is this? -----signature----- "Something's happening. I'm not the Jedi I should be. I want more." - Anakin Skywalker
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Deyla_Heren Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 3/21/05 7:56pm Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori
	Thanks, there'll be more soon! As to the question, about half-way between ROTS and AOTC! -----signature----- Jedi Master in the SWC Jedi Trials Former Padawan to Axle-Starweilder Current Padawan: (Awaiting a new Padawan) Previous Padawan's: pucifur27, Darth_Vaderous, Adm_Thrawn, Darklord07 \|-Member of the official Obi-Wan Kenobi fanclub-\|
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Darth_Skywalker2 Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 3/21/05 8:16pm Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori
	yay cool! can't wait -----signature----- "Something's happening. I'm not the Jedi I should be. I want more." - Anakin Skywalker
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Deyla_Heren Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 3/21/05 9:59pm Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori - Date Edited: 3/21/05 10:12pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Deyla_Heren
	Heres the second chapter! Hope you enjoy it! CHAPTER TWO Daakman Barrek’s lightsaber was activated in a flash, deflecting the blaster bolts that came towards Sha’a Gi and him. Sha’a Gi got a grip on his lightsaber and he activated its green blade. He swung his lightsaber to deflect a bolt heading his way but. Luckily the Battle Droid had bad aim, and the bolt whizzed past Sha’a Gi’s head. Barrek lunged forward towards the Battle Droid’s and swung his blade in a deadly arc. He dislodged the Battle Droids’ head and then rolled to the side to block several other stray bolts. He poked his lightsaber forward and cut of another droids legs. Then he twirled and kicked the droid into another. Both Battle Droids fell to the ground. Barrek stabbed down to finish them both off. Suddenly the Battle Droids turned all their fire on Sha’a Gi, but Barrek was too quick. With one slice of his blue blade, he had cut three more in half. Now only five remained. Sha’a Gi jumped towards the droids, but on of them swung the end of their blaster rifles into Sha’a Gi’s face, who had jumped to close. Barrek, in a hurry used the Force to slam two droids into each other, and then swung through the last three. He deactivated his lightsaber in a smooth motion and walked over to his apprentice, who had landed on the rocks, his forehead bruised. He lifted an unconscious Sha’a Gi off from the rocks and laid him on the smooth rock. Shaking his apprentice, Daakman Barrek kept an eye over his shoulder, in case of more droids. He sat by his Padawan’s side waiting for him to wake. Occasionally he shook his Padawan, but it seemed he was dead, though he was still breathing. Daakman Barrek studied the sheer face of rock next to him and his unconscious apprentice and he didn’t think he’d be able to get up it. Earlier, most of their gear had been crushed, including their cable launchers, during a cave-in. They hade been walking through a large cave-like structure, when it began to collapse. They had only just gotten out. Things were getting from worse to worse on this rocky planet Hypori. When they had landed they had find something they had thought important, perhaps a clue, just after they had gotten through the crashing cave. They went back to the ship to transmit a message, but the ship had been turned into a burning hulk. Now that they were sure there was a factory one this planet, seeing the Battle Droids would’ve come from nowhere else, unless a Separatist ship had recently landed. That was possible, but Barrek thought it unlikely. He was sure that he would find a factory here. That plume of smoke from a distance, the object under it. He was certain it would be a factory. Barrek stood and started to walk towards the rock when he heard a slight clack of a rock. More droids? thought Daakman, as he turned and walked in front of his Padawan protectively. And suddenly more droids came, stepping around the corner with their blaster rifles raised, just as the last batch of droids had done. Barrek turned his lightsaber once again activated. He took a step back in surprise as two Super Battle Droids followed the six normal Battle Droids. Blaster fire suddenly shot towards Barrek, but he raised his blade and easily deflected the laser blasts. Then he leaped into action. He jumped in front of a droid, and ducked, as the Battle Droid he was standing next to took a swing at him with its blaster rifle. The Jedi Master swept low with his blade, still in a crouching position, and the droid that he was ducked under crumbled to the ground, its legs now separate from its body, blaster holes in its chest, from the lasers of the careless Super Battle Droids, who were intent on killing their target. Daakman Barrek kicked aside the remains as he got back to his feet to deflect more blaster fire coming from the remaining seven droids. He rolled to the side, towards another Battle Droid and avoided several blaster bolts. He stood and kicked the Battle Droid he was standing next to in a smooth motion, and then slammed his lightsaber through another droid, nearby. The Jedi Master then raised a hand and used the Force to push over another Battle Droid, which crashed into pieces on the rocks. Now there were four droids left. Daakman took a retreating step backwards as the fire from the Super Battle Droids increased in number. He then lunged with full force into another Battle Droid, which he fell on, and then rolled through the legs of another Battle Droid. He got to his feet and was pleased to see his plan had worked. HDaakman had wanted to get the two Super Battle Droids into a corner. He saw that he had made the two remaining Super Battle Droids step back into a corner. Now he had a good advantage. He lunged for the two Super Battle Droids and finished them off easily, swiping through ones chest, ducking under blaster fire, and then swiping up through the last droid. Then he deactivated his lightsaber, and sat by his Padawan, waiting for him to come into consciousness. _____________________________________________________ There you have it. Chapter II. Hoped you like it By the way, if theres any improvemnets you think could be done tell me please! -----signature----- Jedi Master in the SWC Jedi Trials Former Padawan to Axle-Starweilder Current Padawan: (Awaiting a new Padawan) Previous Padawan's: pucifur27, Darth_Vaderous, Adm_Thrawn, Darklord07 \|-Member of the official Obi-Wan Kenobi fanclub-\|
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Darth_Skywalker2 Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 3/21/05 10:31pm Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori
	that was a great chapter, loads and loads of action! woo hoo! you are great at writing action scenes! Eagerly awaiting the next chapter. -----signature----- "Something's happening. I'm not the Jedi I should be. I want more." - Anakin Skywalker
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Deyla_Heren Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 3/21/05 10:47pm Subject: RE: Clone Wars: War at Hypori
	Thanks heaps...probably won't do another post until tommorow... Thanks again -----signature----- Jedi Master in the SWC Jedi Trials Former Padawan to Axle-Starweilder Current Padawan: (Awaiting a new Padawan) Previous Padawan's: pucifur27, Darth_Vaderous, Adm_Thrawn, Darklord07 \|-Member of the official Obi-Wan Kenobi fanclub-\|
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