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Mystralgurl Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 5/6/08 3:48pm Subject: Child of the Shadows - update 7/1 - Date Edited: 7/1/08 10:25am (11 edits total) Edited By: Mystralgurl
	Yes, I know it's been a loong while since I posted on a story... RL has been crazy, trying to graduate highschool and getting ready to leave for college in the fall. Insane. I had formerly stated that I wasn't going to post this story until I had finished A Soul's Reason, but I'm not even going to be able to start ASR until I get my laptop due to computer issues. Thankfully, I already had this story on a disc before my computer decided that it wasn't going to work with my cd burner.. etc. etc. etc. Anyway. I'm posting this story now, and I hope to be able to start writing A Soul's Reason in a month or less, depending on when I get my laptop. Hopefully, I can finish writing it before college starts, and maybe start A Soul's Relief also. And then I can write the sequels to this story... well, let's not plan that far ahead. I need to survive the summer first. I'm posting the PM list here, whenever anyone asks to be put on it, so if you want to be added to the list, but aren't sure if you are, check here. Jedi_Eruanne Draconarius This is a rewrite of my former 'Death's Release', but I've pretty much changed around everthing. It also ties in with my short story Origins of an Empire, which I would suggest reading as it gives some background on the story. But please, bear in mind this was written at the beginning of my fanfic career, and really really sucks. And thanks for reading! Constructive critisism is always appreciated, and no, I do not own this or any part of Star Wars. I am not making any money off of this, etc. etc. Contains mostly OCs with appearences by Palpatine and maybe some from Vader. Prolly considered drama/angst. -----signature----- Finally writing again... Child of the Shadows: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28428878&brd=10476&start=28428884 Sorry, my brain was thinking one thing, and my mouth was saying the same. - Me, after accidentally insulting my mother
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Mystralgurl Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 5/6/08 3:50pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows
	The Emperor looked into the mirror across the room, mourning the scars on his face, his sagging flesh, the putrid yellow eyes. He never meant for it to end up this way. He just wanted everyone to remember Kalmiya. After all, a person so wonderful, so perfect, as his younger sister had been deserved to be remembered forever. Palpatine sighed, pushing himself upright from his seat, in the deepest parts of his quarters in the Imperial Palace on Coruscant. No one was allowed here, not even his apprentice, Vader. No one could know him so weak, or he would be dead before anyone realized he had a breaking point. And all memories of Kalmiya would go with him. Which was why he worked on this secret project, two years after the galaxy had been united under his rule. To create someone who would remember Kalmiya too. No one would suspect anything, nothing aside that he had stolen another child from someone to mold to fit his purposes, as he had already done with several people. The most prominent of whom, in his group of personal assassins, the four-year-old in training, Mara Jade. He had stolen some of her DNA, just one drop of blood. Just a bit of cells from Darth Vader. Just a bit of himself. This would be his third try, because it was absolutely vital that the child he was creating be Force-sensitive. The first had been, but not nearly enough. The second had ended up being more Force-sensitive, but male. He had disposed of both, of course. The DNA patterns had been isolated, making it as close to perfect as possible. Red hair from Mara Jade, just like Kalmiya. The Force was with her, a gift from all three. Green eyes like Kalmiya. Sometimes Vader had wondered why there were so many redheads in Palpatine’s group of assassins, not aloud, of course, but in his mind. Because of Kalmiya’s beautiful red hair, of course. Palpatine had always like red hair. She would be average height, just like Kalmiya, no blemishes on her skin. Mara Jade might have done, but she had so many freckles. Kalmiya had never had freckles. Somewhat angular face, high cheekbones, long eyelashes. Shell shaped ears. Long fingers, long legs and arms. It always made Kalmiya look taller than she was, the length of her limbs… so much perfection in one being… Soon, he would have some of Kalmiya back. And he would give her the memories he had from Kalmiya’s mind. She would become Kalmiya for him. ~ ~ ~ -----signature----- Finally writing again... Child of the Shadows: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28428878&brd=10476&start=28428884 Sorry, my brain was thinking one thing, and my mouth was saying the same. - Me, after accidentally insulting my mother
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divapilot Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 5/7/08 3:01am Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows
	Interesting start! I like how you are giving Palpatine something that kind of looks like a heart. (weird, I know...) -----signature----- Never tell me the odds. UConn: Huskies forever! RIP Jasper Howard, #6 "Focus on what matters. It's about the GAME, not each other. Dumb humans."
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Vaders_Angel Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 5/7/08 3:03pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows - Date Edited: 5/7/08 3:04pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Vaders_Angel
	Very intriguing. It's nice to see a 'semi' human side of Palpatine, I'm always interested in stories that portray him as having some shred of humanity.. Though with disposing of those children he deems 'unfit' sorta cancels that right out doesn't it? -----signature----- See user profile for my fics. View my gfx here: http://s7.photobucket.com/albums/y294/rhaya/ I'm more than willing to take banner requests ..If you'd like to request, pm me Proud Browncoat - Bring back Firefly now! Padawan of NYCitygurl
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Mystralgurl Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 5/10/08 1:19pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows
	divapilot Interesting start! I like how you are giving Palpatine something that kind of looks like a heart. (weird, I know...) Yeah, I'm all about finding the sympathetic side of characters. Okay, not really. It just suited the story. Vaders_Angel Very intriguing. It's nice to see a 'semi' human side of Palpatine, I'm always interested in stories that portray him as having some shred of humanity.. Though with disposing of those children he deems 'unfit' sorta cancels that right out doesn't it? I never thought of it that way, oddly enough. All other future readers/lurkers Thanks for reading so far and I will hopefully hear from you! I will try to post every tuesday if possible. At least once a week, if not on tuesdays. -----signature----- Finally writing again... Child of the Shadows: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28428878&brd=10476&start=28428884 Sorry, my brain was thinking one thing, and my mouth was saying the same. - Me, after accidentally insulting my mother
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Jedi_Eruanne Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 5/10/08 1:57pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows
	YAY! My Evil Twin is WRITING AGAIN! tackle hugs EGADS! Palpy, you sick sick sick sick sick sick sick gaaasp sick sick sick sick sick sick sick THING! 'Tis very intriguing, my dear! I will look forward to more! adds herself to the PM list -----signature----- <><Jedi Knight For Christ><> Links to Fics in Profile---go check em out! Loyal Reader of Quiet_Mandalorian. MystralGurl's CRAZY Evil Twin (mwuhahahaha) Have you hugged your evil twin today?
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XANl Registered: May '06	Date Posted: 5/11/08 3:37am Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows
	Nice plot, hope you keep posting the story. The beginning is addictive, awaiting my next chapter! -----signature----- Diary Challenge 2009 Diary of a Dark Rouge
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Mystralgurl Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 5/13/08 6:59am Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows
	Jedi_Eruanne YAY! My Evil Twin is WRITING AGAIN! tackle hugs is tackle hugged HI!! EGADS! Palpy, you sick sick sick sick sick sick sick gaaasp* sick sick sick sick sick sick sick THING!* 'Tis very intriguing, my dear! I will look forward to more! adds herself to the PM list doesn't need to add Eru to the PM list because she has already taken care of that herself XANl Nice plot, hope you keep posting the story. The beginning is addictive, awaiting my next chapter! Barring unforeseen computer issues, this story will be posted because I've already got the whole thing written. Glad you like it so far! And here is your next chapter.. -----signature----- Finally writing again... Child of the Shadows: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28428878&brd=10476&start=28428884 Sorry, my brain was thinking one thing, and my mouth was saying the same. - Me, after accidentally insulting my mother
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Mystralgurl Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 5/13/08 7:00am Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows
	~ ~ ~ Sha Kalmiya ignited her green lightsaber, its light casting a strange glow on her face, heightening her cheekbones, and making her eyes incredibly feral. She smiled at the man lying on the bed in front of her, his fear palpable. “Do you know what your crime is?” Her voice always got huskier when she killed. This was what she was born to do. “You betrayed the Emperor. The Empire. You should be ashamed, not afraid.” With that, she cut off his head. Slipping out the window next to the bed, she used the Force to stick herself to the wall. //Master// //You have completed your mission, Kalmiya?// //The traitor is dead. I have the memories of his last moments.// //Good. I will look at them later. Meanwhile, I want you back on Coruscant. I have some things I wish to speak with you about.// //As you wish, Master.// Sha climbed down several stories, then swung into another room. She slipped into the uniform of a serving girl, and walked calmly out of the room, her weapons concealed. Easily, she was out of the manor before anyone realized the traitor was dead. ~ ~ ~ * I reached my ship, concealed in the forest beside the manor. Entering in the access code, I stepped inside as the door hissed open. I stripped off the servitor’s uniform, tossing it into the garbage chute. It would be incinerated and then dumped before I went into hyperspace. Standard procedure. I sat down in the pilot’s seat of my modified Headhunter, lifting off swiftly, because I had left the ship without turning anything off. It had been a simple, in-and-out, assassination. I would berth at the spaceport near the Imperial Palace, and enter the way I normally do – into the Emperor’s private sanctum, where no one save the Emperor and myself has ever been. Then he would give me my next assignment. And I could get some sleep while in hyperspace. ~ ~ ~ -----signature----- Finally writing again... Child of the Shadows: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28428878&brd=10476&start=28428884 Sorry, my brain was thinking one thing, and my mouth was saying the same. - Me, after accidentally insulting my mother
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Jedi_Eruanne Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 5/14/08 7:47pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows - update 5/13, we meet Kalmiya
	hugs Yay! Thanks for the postie AND the PM! Ick...talk about one creeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeepy lady. Interesting switch between third person and first. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next! -----signature----- <><Jedi Knight For Christ><> Links to Fics in Profile---go check em out! Loyal Reader of Quiet_Mandalorian. MystralGurl's CRAZY Evil Twin (mwuhahahaha) Have you hugged your evil twin today?
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Mystralgurl Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 5/20/08 2:49pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows - update 5/13, we meet Kalmiya
	Jedi_Eruanne hugs Yay! Thanks for the postie AND the PM! You're welcome! Ick...talk about one creeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeepy lady. Interesting switch between third person and first. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next! I like creepy ladies.. And now our post! ~ ~ ~ The dreams were worse than normal last night. I always dream that I’m someone else. I always look a lot like me, but I know that I’m not. And I see Palpatine. A younger, handsomer, Palpatine. It’s hard to imagine, I know, but he was fairly handsome at one point. Red hair, somewhat like mine. Mine is a dark, glossy, straight red. His was a bit lighter, a bit wispier and not as thick. I always feel like I know him. Or actually knew him. I get the feeling like he was taken away from me, and returned… dirty. There isn’t really any other way to describe it. But I always start waking up at this point. And I have this sickening feeling in my stomach, like someone I loved once was taken away forever, and I’d never see them again. It may not sound terrifying, but it is. I’ve always had dreams; it’s become a way of life for me. Actually, become isn’t the right word. I thought that everyone had dreams like I did, at least before I started eavesdropping on other people’s dreams to learn how close to waking up they were. Sometimes my master doesn’t want them to wake up while I’m killing them. I practiced on the other trainees, while they were asleep and I was supposed to be. I was never caught. Punishment was always terrible when the young assassins were training. Some would be permanently damaged, others would never wake up from their Force-trances. The first and last time I was ever punished was the time I woke up screaming from a dream. I wasn’t returned to for nearly a month. When I got back, my trainer had been replaced with the Emperor himself. He’s really ugly. I had spent all my childhood up to that point surrounded by beautiful people. We had to be, if we were going to use our bodies to help in killing people. That was just the way it worked. One girl got cut across the face during training and was never seen again. I suppose that so far my story sounds a bit as if I had a few friends or something before I turned seven. But that wasn’t the way things worked, you know? I rarely ever saw the other students. I mean, sure, we all slept in the same large, echoey room, but when they put me on my bunk, I fell asleep fast. They pushed me really hard. Mealtimes, or when I had sparring lessons, were the only times I saw the other students. And I was always taught that they weren’t students like me. They were focuses for my controlled rage, focuses for what the Emperor told me to do. If he told me to kill that student, then I had kriffing well better kill that student, or I disappeared. Well, they disappeared. I don’t know why, but I was always the best. I never disappeared. I only got in trouble once. I always pushed myself harder. Like I had something to prove. Or more accurately, like I had some inkling of what would happen if I failed. When I was seven, I had just recovered from my punishment, and had been given to train with the Emperor himself. They told me it was such a big honor, and maybe I would get to be one of his personal bodyguards, or assassins. I was just scared. Who wouldn’t be? I was raised to fear him. He was in charge of everything, down to whether I got dinner or not. When I was allowed to sleep. Who I was supposed to kill. Whether or not I lived. I killed my first student at the age of four. Young, right? The student was one of the bigger students. A seven-year-old. We had been put into a ring, and were told to kill each other. I had been training about as long as he had. I mean, I was born in the Palace; this was what I had been doing my whole life. He had been brought in around two or three, the normal age for beginners. I killed him quickly, a short cut to his jugular vein with my vibroknife. I stepped aside so that I wouldn’t get in trouble for having blood on my pure white uniform. And that was that. I’ve been killing people ever since. Anyway, back to the Emperor. Force, I’ve been rambling all over the place. I guess it’s because I’ve never put my story anywhere before. I have so much of it inside of me, it’s spilling out far to quick. But I was terrified of him. And he was ugly. Up to that point I had always been called Sha. Most beginners were given a two to five letter name, always one syllable. Their names were taken away when they were brought in. Mine has always been Sha. At least, as far as I know. I think that my parents were just donors. My mother donated an egg, my father some sperm, and I was created by the Empire for the Emperor. So I doubt I was ever held in anyone’s arms, while they smiled at me, or sung to me, or named me something that had more than one syllable, that had a history, a meaning. I walked in, and he smiled at me. Horrible yellow teeth that looked as if they hadn’t been cleaned in ages. At least, not since he took over the galaxy. “Kalmiya.” That wasn’t my name, but I wasn’t about to tell him that. If he wanted to call me Kalmiya, that would be my name. At least it had more than one syllable. And he began training me. For about five years after that he trained me. When I turned thirteen I went on my first mission. Whoa, I’m coming out of hyperspace. I need to hide this datapad, and go see what my Master has planned for me next. ~ ~ ~ -----signature----- Finally writing again... Child of the Shadows: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28428878&brd=10476&start=28428884 Sorry, my brain was thinking one thing, and my mouth was saying the same. - Me, after accidentally insulting my mother
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Jedi_Eruanne Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 5/20/08 10:55pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows - update 5/13, we meet Kalmiya
	.....oh my word. She freakin' freaks me out!!!!! hides behind MG Save me!!! -----signature----- <><Jedi Knight For Christ><> Links to Fics in Profile---go check em out! Loyal Reader of Quiet_Mandalorian. MystralGurl's CRAZY Evil Twin (mwuhahahaha) Have you hugged your evil twin today?
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Draconarius Registered: Feb '05	Date Posted: 5/21/08 7:50pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows - update 5/13, we meet Kalmiya
	Stars... I don't know what's creeping me out more; Kalmiya, or this nice-side of Palpatine. Can't wait for the next post, Mystral! tacks name on end of PM list -----signature----- Anakin/Tahiri and Jaina/Jag - two best couples in Star Wars "Damned if I'm gonna lose to you!" "Then damned you shall be!" - my brother and I playing Smash Bros.
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Mystralgurl Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 5/27/08 12:50pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows - update 5/20
	Jedi_Eruanne .....oh my word. She freakin' freaks me out!!!!! hides behind MG* Save me!!!* saves her crazy evil twin Don't worry, she won't hurt you. Draconarius Stars... I don't know what's creeping me out more; Kalmiya, or this nice-side of Palpatine. My goal in life is to make you confused, so it's all good. Can't wait for the next post, Mystral! tacks name on end of PM list It's lovely to see you again! adds to PM list And now, update! ~ ~ ~ Sha left her ship, walking out after shutting it down and locking it up. She walked past the Imperial guard, who sat there day after day until he was rotated elsewhere and someone else was sent to guard her berth. She wondered if he was ever curious as to why an extremely attractive woman had a ship berth so close to the Imperial Palace, and why it needed to be guarded day after day, and why she dressed like she did. But if he did wonder, then he never said anything about it. That is what he was paid to do. Sha walked down the street, and into the Palace, through the parts that were open to the public. Past the servants entrance, past where the droids were kept when they were being wiped or modified, or scrapped. Past the medbay. She stopped at a curtain-draped alcove. It was a tribute to Kuat, the ship company, in honor of all the years of service to the Empire. It was also a hidden entrance. Pausing, as if examining it closer, she stepped inside, entered an extremely long code and stepped into the narrow hallway when the door hissed open. Two seconds later it closed and locked again. Sha walked up four thousand, three hundred and seventy-two steps to reach another door with another twenty-digit entry code. There was a long hallway, mined, and bristling with lasers, ready to blast anyone who’s DNA didn’t match who was allowed inside. The Emperor’s and Sha’s. Another door, another twenty-digit entry code. Finally a screening, if the Emperor himself didn’t flick the button that would open the door, the small room would fill with gas, and she would die within seconds. Both a security to keep people other than her out, and somewhere that if the Emperor was displeased, she would disappear forever. She waited. The door hissed open, and she could see the Emperor waiting beyond for her. ~ ~ ~ I can’t believe it. I can’t believe what my Master has done. I had better start at the beginning. The Emperor was waiting for me in his secret rooms. We walked out into his hidden audience chamber, where he instructed me to wait in the shadows. I was dressed in a black, formfitting jumpsuit, with my hair pulled back and covered. My necklace lay next to my collarbone, under the suit, so it didn’t glimmer. I was hidden, in the shadows, like so many times before. Vader walked in. I was expecting this, I must say. He came in a lot, to talk with the Emperor. I was nearly always there. And if I wasn’t, the Emperor usually filled me in on what had happened afterwards. Vader kneeled, and went through his whole ritual of abasement, the one that the Emperor always likes to cackle to me about after. The Emperor just grinned at him. “What is thy bidding, my Master?” “I am most pleased with you, Lord Vader.” The Emperor had more to say, I knew it, but he paused so that Vader could appropriately gush over the praise. “Thank you, my Master. I live to serve you.” The Emperor continued to smile. It looked more like a grimace to me. “Which is why I have decided to give you a gift.” I caught my breath. Surely he didn’t mean me… But he motioned me forward. I could feel Vader’s mechanical eyes looking at me. “A.. girl, my Master?” “An assassin. She will stay aboard the Executor, and carry out the missions you give her.” Meaning that the Emperor would give him missions for him to tell me to do. Vader just stood there. I could feel his shock. //Kalmiya.// //Yes, my Master?// // I want you to spy on him. Make sure of his loyalties. He will not take advantage of being in charge of you.// //As my Master wishes.// Okay, I suppose I do what Vader does also. It’s kind of stupid. I can only imagine how much more I could accomplish without all the fancy speak that basically means that I’m his slave, and we both know it. “As my Master commands.” Palpatine motioned me forward again, so that I was standing in front of Vader. “So be it. You will take her with you to the Executor and find her suitable quarters. I will inform you later of her duties.” “Thank you, Master.” Vader bowed again, and walked backwards out of the room. I sent my Master one last glance, before averting my gaze, and turning on my heel, to follow Vader. ~ ~ ~ -----signature----- Finally writing again... Child of the Shadows: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28428878&brd=10476&start=28428884 Sorry, my brain was thinking one thing, and my mouth was saying the same. - Me, after accidentally insulting my mother
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Draconarius Registered: Feb '05	Date Posted: 5/27/08 7:48pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows - update 5/20
	Kalmiya has been pawned off to Vader as a... slave? pet? It will be interesting to see where this goes. Keep 'em coming, Mystral! -----signature----- Anakin/Tahiri and Jaina/Jag - two best couples in Star Wars "Damned if I'm gonna lose to you!" "Then damned you shall be!" - my brother and I playing Smash Bros.
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Jedi_Eruanne Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 5/27/08 10:30pm Subject: RE: Child of the Shadows - update 5/20
	Oooo, this is getting INTresting...I say, old bean, this isn't a ROMANCE, is it? wink wink nudge nudge YAY! VADER! tackle hugs the Big V get's Force choked Damn! -----signature----- <><Jedi Knight For Christ><> Links to Fics in Profile---go check em out! Loyal Reader of Quiet_Mandalorian. MystralGurl's CRAZY Evil Twin (mwuhahahaha) Have you hugged your evil twin today?
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