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Jade_Pilot Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 10/30/08 12:52pm Subject: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker - Date Edited: 10/31/08 6:51am (2 edits total) Edited By: Jade_Pilot
	Title: Heir of Darkness Author: Jade Pilot Characters: Luke Skywalker and… Timeframe: Post LOTF - AU Genre: Drama Summary: Written for the Over 30 club's ‘Bad to the Bone’ challenge. Take a Star Wars character and write an AU where this person has gone bad. Jedi, pilot, princess or pirate use your creativity to portray a canon personality in all their evil glory. A/N: Thanks to ginchy lee for the beta! This kill is mine… Luke startled awake as his eyes strained to adjust to the darkness. A dream—it was the dream again. He breathed in the dank air around him and began to cough. His chest exploded in pain as he tried to fight against the involuntary spasms. He placed his left hand against his rib cage, feeling the top two bones give under the pressure of his fingers. He coughed again, realizing that he had acquired two new broken bones as a result of yesterday’s interrogation. Not for the first time did he futilely try to draw on the Force for help. Pushing up from the thin mattress, Luke moved to a sitting position and dropped back against the cold wall of his imposed home for the last three years. Three years! Had it actually been three years since…his bearded chin fell to his chest against the agonizing pain that refused to dissipate. Never had he felt such hopeless anguish…not even when his beloved wife had been taken from him so cruelly. Perhaps it was best she had not lived to see— The rusted sound of metal brought him back to the present as the door leading to his confinement opened. Luke grimaced, trying to prepare himself for the onslaught that was to come. Alone and without the Force he was not equipped to fight the Monster that has plagued him these long, lonely years. “Good morning, Master Skywalker.” Luke gritted his teeth against the rush of emotion that washed over him, knowing that he would eventually have to meet the eyes of his enemy. “What? No greeting for me today? No entreaty or supplication to turn from the dark side? Have you truly and whole heartedly accepted what I’ve become then?” “No.” “No? That’s your entire rebuttal—no?” Luke closed his eyes against the sound of the Monster’s taunting voice. He coughed again, the metal taste of his own blood on his lips. Then he felt it—the tiny awakening sense that was life itself to him. He gasped as the sweet presence of the Force began to surge within him. “Do you feel it?” Luke paused, not wanting to give his captor any satisfaction. But as the veil began to lift he breathed deeply, savoring the sweet sensation. “Yes,” Luke whispered. He could feel the presence of his captor drawing nearer, his moist breath against his cheek. “Does it cry from deep within you to be released?” “Please…” Luke could feel the cold needle against his throat. “Please, don’t.” “It doesn’t have to be this way. I can put the syringe back into its case. It’s so easy—so easy. You know what you have to do…” Luke cringed at the malevolence that surrounded him, swallowed against the small metallic needle that would deny him the Force yet again. He felt the tears slip down his cheeks unfettered. “You’ve fought for so long and endured so much. No one could have held on for as long as you have.” “I can’t,” Luke whispered, his shoulders shaking. “You know I can’t.” “Oh, but you can, dear one.” The Monster’s lips were centimeters from his ear, the needle almost piercing his skin. “The dark hungers for your acquiescence. The pain will be but a memory. Isn’t that want you want? To be whole again?” Luke felt a hand brush against his hair, cradling the back of his head. So tired. He could feel the dark power of the Monster encase him. How could he hold against such malevolence…such strength? “Come, embrace it—you have done so in the past and can easily do so now.” “I was wrong…as you are now.” The Monster laughed. “Stubborn to the end. I’ve always admired that about you. But enough. It’s been three long years and it is the time to embrace your destiny. The dark side of the Force is near at hand, waiting for you to join me. Together, we will rule the galaxy as father and son.” Luke opened his eyes and looked up into the face of his only child. A face he barely recognized anymore. Gone were the clear blue eyes that were once, so like his own, and the shimmering red-gold hair of his mother. In their place was the visage of a madman who had removed any resemblance of his maternal parent and whose sickly yellow eyes bore down into him like some demon from beyond. Not even the face of the most transformed Yuuzhan Vong could compare with the hideousness that stood over him. “Make a decision Father…your time is drawing nigh.” Luke blanched as he heard the staccato march of the interrogators coming down the hallway—knew he might not survive the physical torment of his son’s avatars yet again. He reached out with his senses drawing on the Force, hoping he might have just enough time to steel himself against what was to come and then gasped as the needle penetrated his skin and began to empty the ysalamiri blood-mixture into his system. “No…” Luke said hoarsely as the Force faded from him, leaving him drained and weak. The Monster yanked the syringe from Luke’s throat and stood back. “We were close this time, weren’t we Father? It is, after all, only a matter of time.” He turned and opened the door, a malicious smile pulling at his lips and allowed the torturers to enter. “Perhaps tomorrow…” Luke stared at the departing figure of the man that was once his son and feared that he would someday, perhaps soon, be correct. end Happy Halloween! -----signature----- I'm so adjective I verb noun.
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SithGirl132 Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 10/30/08 1:10pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	shivers That was fabulously frightening. I have seen Ben turned to the Dark Side before, but never in such a frightening and realistic manner. This was an amazing vignette! -----signature----- if loving you is wrong, i don't want to be right UDC 4: http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29954776/p1/ The Way of the Sith: http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29545048/r29567455/ Fics in Prolific Writers' Thread.
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Jade_eyes Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/30/08 1:23pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Oh, wow!!!!! I thought it might be Ben... but I thought also: Woo! What if it's Leia? Magnificent superb writing as always... you'll never be rusty either ... what's a spoilt rotten fangirl to do? Huggles!!!!! -----signature----- E-sib to Mira_Jade, whose yummies inspire & gooify I call her Mira_Pilot because I'm in orbit Nyota/Spock--my angels, till there was you, only you !! Have 10 buckets Cheesecake Squggles!
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ginchy Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 10/30/08 1:28pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	You posted it! You know I loved it. So evil--that Ben is one bad boy! Too bad his Momma isn't around to whip him into shape! And my heart just breaks for poor Luke... I hope he can hold on. I think this calls for a sequel. ducks GREAT to have you back, lady! -----signature----- Something wonderful has happened... EDD: April 25, 2010
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evilpilot Registered: Oct '08	Date Posted: 10/30/08 1:38pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Oh, wicked, wicked Ben! I loved it! The idea that he has held his own father hostage for three years... and Luke still won't turn. You've taken Ben down the path that Jacen would have brought him. Excellent viggie! -----signature----- Quoth the raven ... Nevermore.
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barriss31 Registered: Apr '05	Date Posted: 10/30/08 6:20pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Glad to see something new of yours on the boards! If you have a pm list please add me to it. It never took too much effort to imagine Ben going over to the dark side. He is so ambivalent.
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dm1 Registered: Jun '04	Date Posted: 10/30/08 8:27pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Oooh, so evil! Wow, Ben trying to drag his own father to the Dark Side! -----signature----- Internet Mom to HSG! Hey, HSG, watch those explosives, be careful!!
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JediVegeta Registered: Dec '00	Date Posted: 11/1/08 6:27pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	I never read a Dark Ben that attempts to sway his own father to the Dark Side, but I liked it very much! Father/Son bonding is a good thing. It would be really cool to see an update (even though this was a challenge), to just see what happens to poor Luke Great Job! -----signature----- JOIN THE MUFFIN SIDE DEXTER!!!! Igiari!!!! That's the playful side of Torgo. He's the clown that makes the dark side fun.
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Jade_Pilot Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 11/3/08 5:07pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Thanks y'all for your warm reception of my dark story! sithgirl132: "This was an amazing vignette!" Thank you so much! I don't usually write dark, but HEY it was a lot of fun. I appreciate you reading! Jade eyes: Thanks for your kind words and PM. If only DRL would cooperate! I'm in the middle of Advacned Fiction Worshop, but should have more time for FF in December...yeah, right! gincy lee!: I'm gonna start calling you the Queen of Sequel Requests! Thanks for the beta and all your lovely support! evilplot: Thank you! Evil Ben is just too much fun to write... barriss31: How are you???? "Glad to see something new of yours on the boards!" Awww...thanks so much! I wish I had a lot more time to do some fun writing. School has me by the ear and won't let go. But I'm hoping to slow down soon... dm1: Perhaps Ben is the only one who could truly do so??? Bwahahaha! Thanks for reading! JediVegeta: "It would be really cool to see an update (even though this was a challenge)," Hmmm...perhaps I'll take this under advisement. Thanks so much for reading! -----signature----- I'm so adjective I verb noun.
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Jedi-2B Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 11/5/08 8:00am Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Oooh, chilling scenario. I, too, think this would be a great beginning to a longer story. With appropriate flashbacks, of course, as to how Ben ended up this way. Good job! -----signature----- It was on her fifteenth day in the darkness of the Nirauan cave when Mara Jade awoke to discover a rescuer had finally arrived. It was not, however, any of the potential rescuers she would have expected. It was Luke. ~~And the rest is history~~
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Wifflesnip Registered: Oct '08	Date Posted: 11/6/08 6:06pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Oooh, that's a shiver provoking, creepy, brilliant little vignette. I love this little dark tale that is surprisingly believable, you could really see Ben going either way at this point in the canon. If Ben went to the dark side, I think Luke would just crumble in a very similar manner to what you have depicted. Anyway.....sequel? -----signature----- There are no passengers on Spaceship Earth. We are all crew - Marshall McLuhan
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madman007 Registered: Aug '07	Date Posted: 11/6/08 8:46pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Yikes! That was outright scary. It was a total guess at who the monster was. At first I thought Jacen and then when he said Father and son, I thought maybe Anakin Sr. was still alive. I didn't guess it would be Ben - then I looked at the title. And since Mara is already gone in this, I have to wonder, did Ben kill his own mother? A definite Shakespearean quality in this. Alas, poor Mara, I knew her well... I was wondering at how the Force was taken away and that was genius to mix Ysalimiri blood with human. -----signature----- "Progress is not possible without deviation from the norm." - Frank Zappa Traits Of Descent is complete! Read it all from the beginning! http://boards.theforce.net/Boards/Message.aspx?topic=28968173&brd=10476&start=29053268
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_ThatJediScum_ Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 11/10/08 1:08am Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Oh Ben! You're breaking my heart! But seriously, watching Luke suffering and then finding out it's Ben who's inflicting such pain was heartbreaking. I really didn't expect it. Good job. bran
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Jedi Trace Title: • SouthEast RSA • FanFiction Manager Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 11/11/08 10:50pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Oooooo.... What a wicked fic, J_P! Luke opened his eyes and looked up into the face of his only child. A face he barely recognized anymore. Gone were the clear blue eyes that were once, so like his own, and the shimmering red-gold hair of his mother. In their place was the visage of a madman who had removed any resemblance of his maternal parent and whose sickly yellow eyes bore down into him like some demon from beyond. shivers Perfect Halloween story! -----signature----- "Luke Skywalker kicks ass. Next question." - Tom Taylor "Sometimes bad guys are the only good guys you get." - Leverage
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Jade_Pilot Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 11/24/08 3:29pm Subject: RE: Heir of Darkness Bad to the Bone Challenge Luke Skywalker
	Jedi-2B: Thank you! I'm starting to think I should make it longer and I love your idea about flashbacks! Wifflesnip: Thanks so much. Sequel?? I'm starting to consider it! madman007: Thank you for your kind words! I really appreciate them. ThatJediScum: Yes, it is heartbreaking. I'm surprised at it myself. Thanks for reading. JediTrace: Wicked indeed! Thanks for taking a look! -----signature----- I'm so adjective I verb noun.
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