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Kelly Kenobi Registered: Mar '00	Date Posted: 8/5/00 7:43am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Love the way Obi is breaking down Raya, I know he will be able to show her the light. Hopefully after a lot more struggle Qui-gon seems to be taking his apprentices kidnapping and presumed death pretty well, he must know deep down that Obi will be ok or else he would be a little more desperate and upset! This is still going great, hope for more soon!
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/5/00 9:22am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Sorry this is so short. I'll post more later, if I get time. ********************* Qui-Gon walked to his room, it was late and the day’s actions had exhausted him. He collapsed in the nearest chair. Concentrating he tried to feel Obi-Wan through their bond and ran into the same barrier that had always stopped him before. Only now he had no idea if his Padawan was even alive. Closing his eyes he felt the first tear fall down his cheek. He put his head in his hands and let the tears flow. The reality that his Padawan was dead or dying was finally starting to sink in. He’d spent the whole day immersing himself in other things so he would be too busy to think about his apprentice, and now he’d run out of things to do. His heart was aching so badly he thought it would burst. The Jedi Master spent the rest of the night weeping for his lost son. ********************** Please send feedback. -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Kelly Kenobi Registered: Mar '00	Date Posted: 8/5/00 9:31am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	I should have realized, denile is the first emotion! Poor Qui-Gon so sad about Obi, breaks my heart! He will be so happy to find out Obi is not dead and seems to be breaking down the Sith!
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JEDIMASTERYU Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 8/5/00 9:57am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	More More! MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE! -----signature----- "The first step to wisdom is recognizing your ignorance" - Yoda, Shadows of the Empire "Don't call me clumsy" - Obi-Wan JA #2 "Join me and we can rule the galaxy father and son" - Darth Vader ESB "I don't believe it" - Luke ESB "Be Quiet! All of you"
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/5/00 12:17pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Her's my next post, hope you like it. *********** Obi-Wan tried to sit up in bed and after three failed attempts managed to do it. His shoulder still was bothering him, but not as much as a few days ago. He still felt extremely weak but he could tell he was getting better. He was fully confident the Sith wasn’t going to hurt him, he couldn’t even see her starting to warm up to him slightly. He had a feeling the girl could use a mind healer. She tried to be cold and uncaring but she wasn’t. Why else would she be so nice to him while he was sick. She didn’t even lock the door when she left. She’d said she needed to keep him alive and well to blackmail Qui-Gon. Now she didn’t need him and he was still in a comfortable room. She’d tried to kill him, but he doubted she would have gone through with it had he not interrupted her. She looked so lonely and sad. Maybe if he talked to her a little more he could get her to let him go. Swinging his feet over the sleepcouch he tried to stand. He managed to shakily get to his feet. Using the wall to help support him he made his way out of the room and went to find the girl. An hour later after what seemed like miles of walking Obi-Wan found the Sith in a training room. The stood in the doorway leaning against the frame for support. The walk had exhausted him and he doubted he could go another step. She hadn’t noticed him yet and was training with her lightsaber. Looking at her Obi-Wan realized what a pretty girl she was especially in what she was wearing. She had on a black tank-top, black shorts, and knee-high black leather boots. The clothing obviously gave her more mobility as she slashed through droids like they were paper figures. He could see how well trained she was by the way her muscles rippled under her skin. But seeing her practicing also reminded him that even though her eyes looked sad and lonely she could still be a deadly opponent. If she had been found by the Jedi, Obi-Wan thought, she would be one of the best there had been in a long time. He was convinced she didn’t want to be evil, maybe he could help her. Just then the Sith looked in his direction and saw him. Striking down the last droid, she walked over to him. Noticing the sweat on his brow she looked him up and down once. “You don’t look like you’re in any condition to be up walking around.” she said. “I wanted to talk to you.” She studied him for a minute. “Why?” “I was lonely and figured you might be too.” he said. “I hope your no thinking that you can talk me into letting you go.” Great, Obi-Wan thought there goes that idea. “I was watching you, you’re very good.” “Better than you.” “Yeah well I wouldn’t be here if you weren’t.” “You look tired.” she said. “This place is huge. I don’t think I’d ever find my way back to my room.” “You mean my room.” she corrected. “You let me stay in your room?” She didn’t answer and turned away, which Obi-Wan was thankful for because she didn’t see how really weak he was. He tried to take a step forward and collapsed. The Sith turned quickly and caught him before he hit the ground. Then she picked him up and carried him back to her room, where she set him down carefully on the bed. “Thanks.” he said weakly. She started to leave and then heard him say, “Wait, you still haven’t told me your name.” “Well I’m going to kill you anyway so I guess it won’t hurt. My name is Raya.” “Raya... that’s a pretty name.” Perfect, she thought, now he’s delusional. She watched him fall asleep and left. “He's really nice.” she said to herself. Then she realized what she’d just said. “He’s a Jedi,” she scolded herself, “Sith don’t say stuff like that about Jedi. We don’t even have friends, just people we control.” It’s just lack of sleep, she told herself, you’ll be fine once you get a good night’s rest. Reassuring herself she went to the room she was temporarily sleeping in and tired to rest. ********************** I may post more today, but I don't know if I'll get more time. -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Kelly Kenobi Registered: Mar '00	Date Posted: 8/5/00 1:37pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Obi is slowing but surely melting the ice in her heart!!!!!! Love it!!!!!!!!!
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JEDIMASTERYU Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 8/5/00 5:57pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Oh Come on! you can't leave it there! POST! POST! POST! POST! -----signature----- "The first step to wisdom is recognizing your ignorance" - Yoda, Shadows of the Empire "Don't call me clumsy" - Obi-Wan JA #2 "Join me and we can rule the galaxy father and son" - Darth Vader ESB "I don't believe it" - Luke ESB "Be Quiet! All of you"
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/6/00 6:14am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	More to come. ****************** Raya stood in front of her Master. “You’ve killed Master Jinn and Obi-Wan Kenobi?” Lord Sidious asked. “Yes my Master.” she replied. “I am pleased.” With this Raya smiled, she had pleased her Master nothing else mattered. “Unfortunately,” he continued, “you’ve become to powerful. I can’t have an apprentice that almost matches my strength, can I?” “I don’t understand, Master. I’m no where near as stron-” she didn’t finish because right then she felt a lightsaber burn through her chest. As she lay there dying she could hear him talking. “You had too much good in you to be a Sith.” Raya awoke to a beeping sound on her wrist link. It was just a dream, just a dream, she told herself over and over. My Master didn’t really murder me in cold blood, unless the afterlife looks exactly like the interior of my ship. She looked down at her still beeping wrist link. The scanner that alerted her to movement around her ship had picked up something. She hurried to the cockpit and brought up a hologram of the disturbance. About a half mile away there were twenty armed men coming in her direction. They must be looking for the boy, she thought, I’d better take care of them. She threw her cloak around her them noticed she hadn’t changed her clothes from last night. Maybe she could use that to her advantage. Hiding her lightsaber and making sure her hood was down, she walked out of her ship and into the morning sun. About 15 minutes later Raya rounded a corner and came face to face with one of the men. Suddenly she had 20 blasters pointed in her direction. “Take my money, just don’t hurt me.” She said trying to make her voice sound small and scared. “We’re not thieves, we won’t hurt you, just tell us why you’re up here. These mountains don’t get many visitors.” the leader said. “I hiked up here yesterday and camped out here.” “Don’t you have school?” “Yeah my teacher, Mrs. Feld, excused me from classes so I could come up here and gather plant samples for my biology project.” Raya answered hoping none of them new the teachers at the local school. The men lowered their weapons. “You’ve seen anyone around here?” “Actually last night I saw a boy with spiky ginger colored hair and pale skin. He had a long braid behind his ear and a ponytail in the back.” “The lost Jedi boy.” the man said to the others. “Which way did he go?” “That way.” she replied pointing northeast. “Lets move out. Thank you little girl.” “Don’t mention it.” she said, and she really meant it. The area she’d sent them to was constantly having rockslides. One every half hour, she wouldn’t have to worry about them any more. **************** Give me feedback and I'll post more. -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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JEDIMASTERYU Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 8/6/00 8:42am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Please post soon. -----signature----- "The first step to wisdom is recognizing your ignorance" - Yoda, Shadows of the Empire "Don't call me clumsy" - Obi-Wan JA #2 "Join me and we can rule the galaxy father and son" - Darth Vader ESB "I don't believe it" - Luke ESB "Be Quiet! All of you"
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Kelly Kenobi Registered: Mar '00	Date Posted: 8/6/00 8:45am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Devious little minx ain't she! The dream was also very intreging.
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/6/00 2:37pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	This post is kind of iffy. If you don't like it just say so and it's gone. *************************** Obi-Wan sat up in bed. He was thinking about Raya. She was so alone, even if he could get away he couldn’t just leave her. No matter what she’d done in the past, she didn’t deserve a life full of hate and sadness. She needs help, he thought, a young extremely beautiful girl with sad green eyes and a perfectly shaped and fully developed body shouldn’t have to be a slave anger her whole life. I wonder if when she gets help she’d consider going out with... Stop it Kenobi, he told himself, that’s the last thing you should be thinking about right now. But he couldn’t seem to get it out of his mind. He kept picturing her in the tank-top and shorts carrying him through the halls. Force Kenobi, you can sure pick the girls you’re attracted to. I honestly don’t think the council would approve of you dating a Sith. Well, Sith apprentice anyway. Footsteps aroused him from his thoughts. Raya walked in the door and found Obi-Wan staring at her. She went to get something from a desk drawer, his eyes followed her every move. “Ok, what’s up?” she asked suspiciously. “Nothing.” “Then why are you staring at me?” “Didn’t you wear that last night?” he asked. “So you do remember some of it. You were in and out for a while.” “I remember you carrying me.” he saw her blush slightly. “When are you going to kill me?” “When I get the time. You make it sound like you’re anxious to die.” “No, but if you’re not going to kill me anytime soon something to eat would be nice.” “Fine, I’ll get you something.” she said and turned to leave. “Raya... wait a second.” “What.” she said sounding slightly irritated. “Come over here and sit down.” Seeing her hesitate he added, “I’m not going to bite you or anything, besides I can barely walk. How could I possibly hurt you?” Raya walked over and sat on the bed beside him. “This had better be good.” she said. He leaned forward and kissed her on the lips. Raya sat there stunned for a minute. “What was that?” “It’s called a kiss.” “I know that, but why did you just kiss me.” “Because since I saw your face for the first time I haven’t been able to stop thinking about you. I can‘t help feeling attracted to you, after all you‘re one of the most beautiful girls I‘ve ever seen and I think I’m beginning to like you.” “Is that all?” she said still stunned. “I was also trying to be cute and spontaneous.” “Oh.” Raya got up and left not really knowing where she was going, her head was spinning. That was the first time she could remember anyone kissing her or calling her beautiful. Distantly she thought how ironic it was that the first to say those thing was the person she should hate most. -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Kelly Kenobi Registered: Mar '00	Date Posted: 8/6/00 2:43pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Interesting idea... put the move on your kidnapper, makes it harder for her to kill you!!
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JEDIMASTERYU Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 8/6/00 2:48pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	I hate to be redundant but... WHOA! MORE! -----signature----- "The first step to wisdom is recognizing your ignorance" - Yoda, Shadows of the Empire "Don't call me clumsy" - Obi-Wan JA #2 "Join me and we can rule the galaxy father and son" - Darth Vader ESB "I don't believe it" - Luke ESB "Be Quiet! All of you"
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/6/00 5:07pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	This isn'the best I've written, sorry. ************************* Qui-Gon walked out into the dark gardens, there was still no sign of the men they’d sent up into the mountains. It was a beautiful night, not that the Jedi Master noticed, his thoughts were of his Padawan. He missed Obi-Wan so much. He didn’t want to think it was possible for him to still be alive, he didn’t want to get his hopes up only to have them crashed down again. It was just so much to bear by himself. He needed to talk to someone, but the one person he could always talk to was gone. ----------------------------------- Raya walked through her ship not going anywhere in particular. The surprise from Obi-Wan’s kiss was finally starting to wear off. She rounded a corner and ran strait into her Master. “Master? What are you doing here?” she said. He was the last person she wanted to see. “You haven’t given me a report in some time. I wanted to know what you were up to.” “Everything is going perfectly, Master, you really didn’t need to come.” “Actually, I wanted to ask Kenobi a few questions concerning the Jedi temple, where is he?” Raya hesitated to give him an answer. “Never mind I’ll find him myself. The boy radiates light it should only take me a few minutes to find him.” Lord Sidious turned and walked down another hall. Raya stood there a moment. She had the urge to run and get as far away from her Master as possible, because when he found Obi-Wan in her room he wasn’t going to be pleased. It didn’t matter however, he returned turned a minute later. “I will teach you not to lie to me.” he said. then he beat her to unconsciousness. She awoke some hours later in her own bed. She started to get up, hissed in pain, and laid back down again. Turning her head she could see Lord Sidious with his back turned to her. “Master, I-” she began. “No need to explain apprentice. I got all the information I needed from that pitiful excuse of a Padawan. After reading his mind I know that you weren’t doing what I thought and that he was trying to persuade you to let him go. I understand the only reason he is still alive is that you thought his Master would crack. By now though you must realize that he is of no more use to you.” “Yes, Master.” “I have other business to attend to I will return in three hours. The boy better be dead by then. After we have gotten rid of the body I will decide what your punishment will be for failing. I can promise you, you won’t like it.” “Yes, Master.” she watched him leave, then tried to use her pain to try to get the energy to stand. It didn’t work she couldn’t even call on the dark side. She slowly eased herself out of bed and changed out of her torn blood soaked clothes. She placed her lightsaber on her belt and slowly headed for where she felt Kenobi. Obi-Wan felt terrible, the Sith had torn down all of his mind shields and read his mind. It gave him the worst feeling of invasion of privacy. The Sith Lord had dragged him out of Raya’s room and thrown him in his original room. He had no idea where Raya was, but he now had new respect for her, after all she had had to grow up with that man. He heard the door open and saw Raya come in. Force, what had happened to her? There was blood coming from a gash on her forehead and her bottom lip had been split open, there was a large dark bruise under her right eye. She also walked like every step caused her pain. “Sorry Obi. Now I have to kill you.” she said. he looked at her eyes, they were more tired then they had been. “Your Master did this to you, didn’t he?” Obi-Wan asked. “It’s not the first time and it won’t be the last.” “After all this and you still follow him.” “What am I supposed to do! He has power over me, he always has every since I was little. Whenever I did something he didn’t like he punished me for it, and it wasn’t just making me sit in a corner either. He did terrible things to me.” she was crying now. “And whenever I hurt and killed people he would praise me for it. And you know what? I’m sick and tired of hurting people. I thought it was easy, that I would never feel any guilt, but I do. I just kept it buried so it wouldn’t ever show, so I wouldn‘t ever feel it, but since I met you I can’t hide it anymore. And it hurts, it hurts to know I killed so many and ruined the lives of others. I don’t want to anymore, but as long as my Master is still around I don’t have a choice.” With that she sank to her knees and buried her head in her hands. She kept crying even as she felt warm comforting arms surround her. ****************** Well how is it so far? -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Obi the Kid Registered: Apr '00	Date Posted: 8/6/00 5:35pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	keep it up Ibis !!! This is movin along great. -----signature----- Come and join my Ewan list: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/EwanLiam2/ My TPM fic site: http://www.angelfire.com/movies/obithekid/
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