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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 9/13/04 10:00pm Subject: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette) - Date Edited: 9/13/04 10:44pm (1 edits total) Edited By: obaona
	Thanks for clicking, and welcome to my 4,000 post! Title: Blood Summary: It's got Luke and someone else, you've got to guess who. (It is a known character.) A/N: Thanks to Gabri for looking it over and pronouncing it postable (quality-wise and rating-wise) - and even liking the R rated version. Yes, people, there is an R rated version. Shocking, I know. It's my very first - really, I'm not even sure if it's rated R, but it's not PG. (Edit - I don't think you're really missing anything here, I wrote it the other way due to pacing.) If you want it, just PM me and confirm your age. I think that's how it works . . . A/N2: This is my 4,000 post. I wanted to post this for it because, well, I think the story is good. Feedback is, as always and ever, appreciated and adored. [face_nervous] He doesn't know her. She's beautiful in a strong way – nose a little too long, mouth too wide, jaw too hard. Her eyebrows arch perfectly, highlighting startling green eyes he can see from here. She moves gracefully, like a dancer, except he has the strange feeling she's not. She's wearing a black dress – floor length, rather surprising in this kind of bar, where half the females are taking credits. Her hair is dark, a vague kind of color that is not really brown, black, or red. He knows it's kind of odd that he's watching her, but something about her calls to him, calls for his attention, as if he would be a fool not to stare. She meets his eyes, and nothing stirs in them; then she walks over to his table. He glances down at the table, wondering what kind of front he's presenting; at the moment, he rather suspects he looks like a drunk. Not that he drinks often, but right now he's drinking like he does. Alcohol usually knocked him off his feet, but not tonight – dirty glasses littered the tiny table. She doesn't sit opposite to him in the other chair – she takes it, places it where she wants it like a man would, and then delicately sits down. She ignores the empty glasses, and puts an elbow on the table, puts a hand under her chin and smiles at him. "Hi," Luke manages. The word slurs slightly, not very surprising – to either of them, he would assume. She smiles. Her other hand creeps over to his, brushing over his knuckles, and it feels somewhat erotic. He shivers when he realizes that she is touching his new hand. "What's your name?" Luke asks, curious, but not anxiously so. "I don't think either of us are here to learn names," she replies in a knowing tone, raising a perfectly groomed eyebrow. Luke fights down the urge to hiccup. "Is that any reason not to?" he asks flippantly. "My name's Luke." Her eyes flicker down for a moment. "Hello, Luke," she says softly, but he hears it clearly anyway, the words slicing through the noise of the bar. She eyes one of his glasses, takes her hand from his and traces its rim. "So why are you here?" "Getting drunk." She smiles again. "I can see that," she remarks, and he flushes slightly, but he's not too embarrassed, a little too drunk for that. "Drinking my sorrows away, then," Luke amends, having heard the phrase, and feeling it at least somewhat appropriate here and now. People drink together, like he and Han, when having fun – when you drank alone, you did it to drown your sorrows. He knows this in the manner of strange cultural matters so irrefutably known. "Sorrows?" she asks, looking into his eyes. For a moment he stiffens – secret, can't tell a secret – then he relaxes. What does it matter, if he gives no details? She doesn't know he's a Rebel. What he had to drink over even another Rebel wouldn't understand. "Family," he said simply. That startles her. "Not over a . . . friend? Lover?" she asks him. Her eyes dart around briefly at the decidedly disreputable place. Luke smiles wryly. "Friends hold your heart; family holds your blood." The nothingness briefly returns to her eyes. "Sounds profound," she said lightly. Luke lets his gaze wander away. He looks down, and eventually at his wrist; he can see his blood moving, the slight movement from his pulse. He felt suddenly and irreversibly vulnerable. "You can take your heart back, but not your blood," he says, and it makes sense to him, anyway. A finger gently touches his chin and lifts his head. "But a lover . . ." she says. "A lover takes your heart, the life of your blood?" She lifts an eyebrow, and Luke smiles, admitting silently that she has a point, taking his analogy to its end. "Forget about family," she says. "At least tonight." He looks into her eyes, and his heart beat increases, wondering if she was implying what he thought she was; feeling naïve and innocent for the first time in weeks, since his new hand, since all that and the utter lack of resolution about any of it. "Okay," he whispers. "Come with me?" she says with a wicked smile, a sensual smile. "And what holds your blood?" Luke has to ask, knowing what he wishes to leave behind, and what of her, then? That surprises her, he sees it in her eyes. "Duty," she says, "loyalty." She pauses, expression going dark briefly, then smiles. Luke knows, suddenly, that she has her own things to leave behind, except she's still deciding now if she really wants to or not. "Come?" she says, and holds out her hand. It's completely natural for Luke to take it. He doesn't know where she takes him; it's dark and private and close by, and that's all that seems to matter to either of them. Everything is rushed and strangely heightened, like he can't believe this is happening to him, but it is and it seems so starkly real. Colors are bright and people faded. She is the one who pushes him to the bed. She climbs on top of him while he lays dazed, and kisses him roughly. He runs his hands through her hair, along her scalp, and he sees hints of red at the roots, that indefinable color suddenly defined: she has red hair. A fiery spirit. Something sharp touches his neck. It's a knife. She's above him, breathing hard, and that nothingness is back in her eyes. He wonders if it's those things she spoke of, duty and loyalty, that are calling to her now; why she has the knife to his neck seems unimportant, and he realizes dimly that it should be important. "Does your blood call?" he whispers, and it seems the right thing to say. She nods, pressing her lips together, and her body quivers. Then she puts the knife above him, away from him. She kisses him again, and he runs his hands up her strong body – she's strong, he knows that now, not at all delicate – and she bites his neck where she had the knife. He gasps, but the pain is only erotic. "Let's ignore it," she whispers into his ear. He groans. "Isn't that what you were doing?" she breathes, halting the kiss, meeting his eyes again. "Yes," he says, and it's the right thing to say; he feels it in the Force. It's true. She pulls off his shirt. He twitches when she roughly caresses a sore spot, from some fight or another, but that doesn’t stop her. He lifts up her skirt, runs his hands over her thighs. His hands meet at the small of her back, and she lays on top of him in response. He flips them both over, so he's on top, and his hands are everywhere. She's aggressive, but when it comes to the beginning, she's as tentative as he. Luke slows, gentles, and the rest is sweet and awkward and smooth like shimmersilk. Their breathing is slow and deep. "You have red hair," he whispers into her ear, and she turns her head to look at him, a sensual smile on her lips, but satisfaction in her eyes. "I was never here," she says back, and it's meaningless to Luke, but it means everything to her. "And now?" he asks, running his hand over her naked stomach. A slight crease appears between her eyes, then she laughs, and it's just a laugh but it seems like more. "Now I'm here." When he wakes, she is gone. She leaves nothing behind but the memory in Luke's mind – and bruises and one bite mark. His head hurts unbelievably, so much so he understands why some always go to the med droid for a hangover; he sure feels like he's dying. Physically, at least. Everything is rushing to him, his drunkenness, the lack of a name for the woman he had slept with. Perhaps he should feel ashamed, as he had been raised to do, but he feels sad instead. Loyalty and duty, she had said to him. That is her blood, her family – abandoned, in a fashion that he wasn't sure of, for that night, for their night. He thinks of his father, how he ran and had been running, and wonders if she, too, is running. The beautiful woman. She was right; blood is life, but cannot be without a heart. What was his father, if not his blood with no heart? Having destroyed and betrayed and killed? And what of the woman's – did her blood have heart and soul? He hardly knew her, but he misses her. Red hair for a fiery spirit, had gone the tale, and green eyes that had showed so little. He wishes her well, and hopes that the night before had been as much for her as it had been for him. [finis] -----signature----- atty is the bestest! MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 9/13/04 10:05pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	i assume that was Mara? Very well-done, if subtly explicit. -----signature----- "I feel like a more down-to-earth Pink 5 when I'm writing Leah. Same attitude, less lip gloss." ~Me on how to get in the right mindset for Twilight fanfic.
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JediMaster_Jen Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 9/13/04 10:14pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	Was that Mara? Wonderfully done. -----signature----- "Qui tacet consentit"~~ (silence implies consent) L.A. Lakers--2009 NBA Champions!!! L.A. Dodgers--2009 World Series Champions!! Hopefully!!
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vader_incarnate Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 9/13/04 10:44pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	snags third post I'll type out a response, but my internet connection's about to shut down, methinks -- just saving a place. Ignore this until I put something that makes sense here. -----signature----- La sang et le vin ont la meme couleur. I think, therefore I am. I dream, therefore I become. Zelré, Handmaiden of the Crest
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Vivid_Scripts Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 9/13/04 11:17pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	aye, there's not a truly significant difference between this version and the ahem R Rated version- I thought it would as expansive as Breezy's PM Chapters (er... no need to mention those) he anyways, this vig was great- the description of the mystery girl (MJ?) was great, and I really liked Luke's friend/family = heart/blood metaphor... it really seems to fit both characters. Some very HOT stuff... great vig. -----signature----- "The Force shall set me free" -The Sith Code-
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 9/14/04 12:29am Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	Oooooh, it's up! I adore this vignette. He knows it's kind of odd that he's watching her, but something about her calls to him, calls for his attention, as if he would be a fool not to stare. I love this line. Trouble is, I don't really know how to explain why I love it. I just do. He glances down at the table, wondering what kind of front he's presenting; at the moment, he rather suspects he looks like a drunk. Not that he drinks often, but right now he's drinking like he does. Alcohol usually knocked him off his feet, but not tonight – dirty glasses littered the tiny table. I can completely believe that Luke would set out to get drunk after everything he's been through. Poor Luke. She doesn't sit opposite to him in the other chair – she takes it, places it where she wants it like a man would, and then delicately sits down. She ignores the empty glasses, and puts an elbow on the table, puts a hand under her chin and smiles at him. I love this part too. It's perfect characterization. I love the contrast, how she moves the chair without a second thought and follows it up with such daintiness. Luke fights down the urge to hiccup. "Is that any reason not to?" he asks flippantly. "My name's Luke." giggles People drink together, like he and Han, when having fun – when you drank alone, you did it to drown your sorrows. He knows this in the manner of strange cultural matters so irrefutably known. Perfectly phrased. For a moment he stiffens – secret, can't tell a secret – then he relaxes. Just the right mix of drunkenness and dutifulness. Luke smiles wryly. "Friends hold your heart; family holds your blood." The nothingness briefly returns to her eyes. "Sounds profound," she said lightly. This is a wonderfully accurate little detail. "Forget about family," she says. "At least tonight." He looks into her eyes, and his heart beat increases, wondering if she was implying what he thought she was; feeling naïve and innocent for the first time in weeks, since his new hand, since all that and the utter lack of resolution about any of it. "Okay," he whispers. Amazing how one paragraph can sum up Luke's emotional turmoil so well. Perhaps he should feel ashamed, as he had been raised to do, but he feels sad instead. sighs What was his father, if not his blood with no heart? Having destroyed and betrayed and killed? And what of the woman's – did her blood have heart and soul? Love the parallel. He hardly knew her, but he misses her. Red hair for a fiery spirit, had gone the tale, and green eyes that had showed so little. This is like 'If it must end, then it will end together' from Of Endings. Some lines are simply so right that they stay with the reader, and this is one of them. Absolutely beautiful from beginning to end, dear. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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Jedikma Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 9/14/04 5:33am Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	You have a PM version???!!!! Is it hot in here? fans self I love the premise of this story! Obvoiusly, MJ is there to kill him as she was told to do, but sleeps with him instead. I wonder if years from now she will confess to him that it was her. That could be an interesting follow up. I really liked this one!!!! ~Jedikma -----signature----- Twice in a Lifetime 7/31 http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/16813029 A Quiet Afternoon http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/23305946 follow up vig to: A New Order http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/17525231
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager in Combat Boots Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 9/14/04 5:33am Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	That was incredible! You did such a fantastic job of capturing Luke's pain. WOW! Luke smiles wryly. "Friends hold your heart; family holds your blood." The nothingness briefly returns to her eyes. "Sounds profound," she said lightly. Luke lets his gaze wander away. He looks down, and eventually at his wrist; he can see his blood moving, the slight movement from his pulse. He felt suddenly and irreversibly vulnerable. "You can take your heart back, but not your blood," he says, and it makes sense to him, anyway. I loved the line about friends and family. Lovely, lovely work! -----signature----- The Night Shift http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/30112305 Legal, Schmegal http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28454351 Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 629 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 9/14/04 6:51am Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	Oh, excellent viggie! It was so intense and emotional. You portrayed Luke's turmoil and pain so well. "I don't think either of us are here to learn names," she replies in a knowing tone, raising a perfectly groomed eyebrow. Luke fights down the urge to hiccup. "Is that any reason not to?" he asks flippantly. "My name's Luke." Her eyes flicker down for a moment. "Hello, Luke," she says softly, This part really struck me. There are the obvious connotations, the reason most people are in the bar doesn't require names, not wanting him to know her name because she is there to kill him, etc., but then I couldn't help but think, if she was sent there to kill him, it would be only natural for her to want to "distance" herself from him as a person. I mean, of course she would know the name of her target, but the closer she gets to him, the harder her task could be. I mean, their conversation, getting to know him, obviously caused an inner conflict for her. Oh, well, just a thought. Again, excellent viggie! -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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VadersMistress Registered: Apr '04	Date Posted: 9/14/04 8:05am Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	Fabulous work obaona! It is worthy of a scratch-n-sniff sticker! What scent do you want? thumbs through her collection LOL! This is really good, I enjoyed every word. -----signature----- Harry Potter > Twilight Would I rather be feared or loved? Um... Easy, both. I want people to be afraid of how much they love me. Persia pwns your face.
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Bri_Windstar Registered: May '02	Date Posted: 9/14/04 1:24pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	gives low whistle Wow, that was, well i'll admit, that was unexpected, Oba The thing that really struck me was that it had a real sense of loss and helplessness to it, as if they were both like, "what am i doing here, in this situation?" It's thought provoking in its melacholy, really. I liked that. It made you step back and look at the situation. -----signature----- Mediocrity- it takes a lot less time and most people won't notice the difference before it's too late. * OMG! SO RIDICULOUSLY AND AGGRAVATINGLY PERFECT!- Gabri * 11010110101000101011
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 9/14/04 4:33pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	DarthIshtar: Yep. Subtly explicit? rereads story Well, maybe. Thank you. JediMaster_Jen: Yes. Thank you. Elli: I'm waiting. Vivid_Script: I wanted it to be tasteful - I don't believe in biology lessons via fanfic. (Also why it's rated R, not NC-17, which is different.) I wrote the R-rated version for pacing reasons. Thank you. It does fit both characters - they're both trying to figure out where loyalty and love lie in their relationships with some twisted people. Gabri : Maybe you like that line because it's a different way of saying 'she was beautiful'. Or 'she captured his attention'. That's why I like it. Yep, poor Luke. I think it's realistic because he's been in the Rebellion for years - and fighter pilots would certainly get drunk. I wonder if he ever got drunk before that . . . plot bunny Well, that's Mara. She can act dainty, but she's a tomboy at heart. Thank you. I really wanted to show Luke's anguish and confusion, and Mara's as well, in an indirect fashion. And you like the last line that much, huh? I actually wasn't sure about it - I felt it was . . . weak, I guess. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you. Jedikma: I do. Mara was planning on getting him alone and then killing him - actually going through with the lure part wasn't part of the plan. Thank you. Maybe I'll do a follow-up someday. Who knows? VaderLVR64: Thanks! That was a lot of the focus of the story - Luke's pain. I'm glad you liked the family/friends thing, it just - came to me, and I wondered if it was confusing. Gina: Before I even wrote it, I knew it would be intense. Some stories just are. You're very right about her, it's not just where they are or the practical things, it was about emotional distance as well. I doubt she even realizes that consciously - she would probably think herself above getting that close to someone that quickly, getting empathy for her victim. It's a good thought. Thank you! VadersMistress: Oooh! Berry! Thank you. Bri: I bet. You really hit it on the nail - that's what it is. What am I doing here, and what am I doing with my life? Thank you. I did want to make the reader think about what they're going through - and really feel their pain. I just want to say, the R-rated version is not that different. I wrote it (and prefer it) mostly for pacing reasons. -----signature----- atty is the bestest! MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty
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StarFighter5 Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 9/14/04 4:46pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette) - Date Edited: 9/14/04 5:01pm (1 edits total) Edited By: StarFighter5
	I thining it was Arica/Mara. It was very interesting, and hot without being graphic. Is the PM more like Pg-13 than R? I can have it if it is, but if it's R then I can't, I'm not 17. -----signature----- "I hope I slept with you to get the job. if not, then who the hell was that guy?" - Carrie Fisher "Now that I'm a pez and a lego, I shall want for nothing else." -Jeremy Bulloch "Thank you for going to the movies. Especially mine." - George Lucas
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Jedi-2B Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 9/14/04 5:59pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	I don't remember any scenes like this in Shadows of the Empire! Very sensuous, oba. Loved it. My only question -- Had Mara not seen a holo of Luke yet, and didn't know who he was? I doubt she'd pass up a chance to take him to the Emperor, no matter how good a time she had with him. LOL! -----signature----- It was on her fifteenth day in the darkness of the Nirauan cave when Mara Jade awoke to discover a rescuer had finally arrived. It was not, however, any of the potential rescuers she would have expected. It was Luke. ~~And the rest is history~~
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 9/15/04 10:59pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	StarFighter5: Thanks! Well, I've had three people tell me I probably could have gotten away with posting it here, so it probably wouldn't be a problem. Perhaps I mis-rated it. If you still want it, PM me. Michele: LOL! Nope. You know, I was blushing furiously when I was writing those parts - er, the PM'ed ones, anyway. No, I'm working on the assumption Mara knew who Luke was, and knew Palpatine wanted him dead, but she had a lot of latitude - like Palpatine wasn't even sure Luke was there. And, well, I like the idea of her not, so she didn't turn him in. Thank you! -----signature----- atty is the bestest! MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty
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Lonewolf89 Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 9/16/04 3:39pm Subject: RE: Blood (Luke/? - dark vignette)
	"Does your blood call?" he whispers, and it seems the right thing to say. Amazing! Dark and eerie, and wonderfully written. That was a great look at Luke’s thoughts of his father. I loved how you hinted at the woman’s identity, too. Very good job, Oba! -----signature----- Nom Anor: I witnessed the death of perhaps the greatest of them all, the one called Anakin Solo. Anakin Solo: You want me to move? Come on and move me! Jacen: Count on Anakin to be the last Human to get out of Duro space alive. Member of the FADA & ATF
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