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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 2/14/05 2:48am Subject: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette) - Date Edited: 3/27/05 1:23pm (2 edits total) Edited By: obaona
	Thanks for clicking. Title: Slide cover art Summary: Every time they slip, it slides into anger and jealousy. A/N: Huge thanks to Pallas-Athena for beta'ing. She really, really improved this story. The title ... eh, couldn't think of anything else. And, believe it or not, I had to edit this down to make it postable. A/N2: That said, this is all Liana's fault. Write Obi-Wan, Siri, and a prostitute, she said ... I can't wait to see yours posted. [edit] Oh yeah! Bri dared me to work in the word 'peep', so I did. Also, note that this deals with mature themes. Like, very. I can't stress that enough. Thanks to LadyPadme for looking this over for acceptability (and so quickly, too! ). Feedback is always appreciated. Her hand slid up his thigh as he tore his hands through her hair. Her kiss was wild, passionate. Her shaky exhale – her breath warm against his skin – was the most erotic of her touches. “So, did you sleep with her?” “This is not the time to be discussing this,” Obi-Wan warned, walking away from Siri. His gaze roamed over the area, and he wished, faintly but desperately, that something would happen, just to break this. He focused on their immediate surroundings, the dirty and dark side alleys and heaps of trash that could easily become hiding places for watchers. Night had swallowed Ventus IV, but he imagined even in daylight, things were never truly bright here. Siri quickened her step, walking by Obi-Wan’s side. Her black unisuit gleamed slightly in the dim light and the dark jacket she wore over her customary outfit hid her lightsaber well. Her blond hair was slicked back, bringing out the sharp bones of her face and making her accusatory gaze even more intense. “Retreating to formality, I see,” she snapped, her fingers twitching as if to reach for the blaster slung low on her hip – though Obi-Wan knew she really wanted to reach for her lightsaber. “I am putting the mission ahead of childish thoughts,” Obi-Wan retorted, meeting Siri’s blue eyes for a moment, and had the satisfaction of having her look away first. Then … “Was she good?” She took off his belt, running her hands along his stomach as she did so, making him shudder uncontrollably. She dragged her nails along his back, lifting his tunic, and he pulled it the rest of the way off. He kissed her again, his hand going up her side. Obi-Wan ignored her fighting words. “She hasn’t seen the Senator, but she gave us some leads on who might have taken him.” There was a sudden pause in Siri’s step, a sudden discordance, and Obi-Wan looked at her in query before he could stop himself. “All right,” Siri said at last. There was an awkwardness to the way she carried herself, a tenseness like something inside had been fractured. “What did she say, exactly?” “She’s heard the Senator has been involved in underground dealings, such as gambling and … less illicit games,” he told her dryly. Hardly a mission normally requiring two Knights, but they had been closest to the planetary system at the time. “We knew that,” Siri said with an edge to her tone. “She gave me an idea of who his ‘contact’ might be,” Obi-Wan continued. He glanced at Siri again. “Which is where we’re heading.” Siri said nothing, only continued her own weary inspection of the street. Obi-Wan also kept watching for any suspicious activity. It was hard to say how bad things were with the Senator, so he was taking all possible precautions. Besides that, this wasn’t a very safe area – the blasters he and Siri wore would probably discourage any casual thief, but there was no telling if there were gangs nearby. “It doesn’t take too long to learn something like that,” Siri said at last. Obi-Wan didn’t reply, only gritted his teeth. “Considering how much you paid her, I doubt she’d mind a tumble,” Siri said nastily. “You could have gone with me,” Obi-Wan said darkly, forcing himself not to clench his hands and really give away his anger. There is no passion … “That would have suspicious, as I’m not the normal clientele,” Siri muttered. Obi-Wan looked at her sharply and stared. “And I am?” he growled, wondering what exactly she was implying. To his surprise, Siri backed down. “You – you look like you are,” she said conciliatorily, gesturing at his outfit. Black, like hers, sleek and functional. His coarse beard gave him the look of a hardened criminal, instead of a Jedi Knight. The blaster on the hip, the knives hidden in the boots, and the way he walked: straight, hard-edged, not graceful, but smooth. There was just skin. The soft areas on her body, where years of hard work had not touched - the small of her back, the inside curve of her arm … He lightly kissed those spots. She pulled him up, on top of her, impatient. Touching his skin, running her hands up and down his back, smiling at him. Breathing hard. “We’re almost there,” Obi-Wan said after a moment, changing the subject. He could almost imagine they weren’t Jedi, right now and right here. At least ... it was hidden. Pushing that way, he gestured at a darkened building nearby, the windows shot out. A man, filthy and twitchy – almost seeming not human, in the strange, drugged look of his walk – paced the entrance. “You want to go in first?” Siri shook her head. “You got the information directly, I might miss some detail. You take the lead, I’ll watch out for us both.” Obi-Wan nodded, already calming himself in preparation for his role. “Understood.” He walked up to the guard, his movement smooth, without hesitation or deception, and unexpected by the man for that reason. The guard stumbled back, startled as he neared, but he managed to clumsily reach for his weapon. Obi-Wan waited a second for him to get it in his hand, only to slap the guard’s face hard with the butt of his blaster. He snatched the weapon out of the guard’s hand; another blow, and the man was at his knees. “Don’t get up,” Obi-Wan ordered roughly. Inside, though, he felt smooth and cool – not truly reacting, only doing his duty. The frightened guard – probably no more than an addict with ‘bills’ to pay – nodded and cowered back. Obi-Wan stepped past him into the building, making no attempt to disguise his presence but walking forward confidently. Siri followed, still watching for trouble despite Obi-Wan’s swagger. Obi-Wan, in his role, didn’t even bother – eyes up, above it all and yet intense in focus nevertheless. He briefly looked around at what he now realized was a bar of sorts, seeking a Rodian matching the description the prostitute had given him. He found him quickly. The Rodian was, by the looks of things, quickly getting drunk. When he saw Obi-Wan heading for him, intent clear, he clumsily reached for his blaster. Not wanting the contact to get off a shot and cause trouble – he imagined everyone here was carrying blasters or weapons of some type – he quickened his pace and before the Rodian could raise the weapon, Obi-Wan was on him, twisting his arm back and hitting a nerve in the Rodian’s hand, causing him to drop the blaster. “You don’ want trouble from me, peep,” Obi-Wan said with a native’s accent, keeping his voice hard and even. He ignored the presence of Siri, who was probably staring out at the other denizens of the bar, daring them to challenge her. Probably smiling, too, he imagined, as if ready to seek violence. The Rodian stared at Obi-Wan, then nodded. “You want somethin’?” “I wan’ the location of a client,” Obi-Wan said. The Rodian was already shaking his head. “I ain’t –” Obi-Wan hadn’t let go of the Rodian’s wrist. He squeezed, enough to hurt a little bit, and then stopped, raising an eyebrow. He wasn’t going to seriously hurt the contact, but that was something he couldn’t know – in fact, Obi-Wan was depending on that. If he had to, he could pay for the information, but this whole mission was already going badly without having to resort to giving the criminal class more money than they already possessed. The Rodian wavered. Her skin was so soft, her hair silky beneath his fingers. He stroked her eyebrow, ran a finger down the curve of her cheek, waiting for a long moment, not moving otherwise, and she gasped out his name. “Tell me where Gelbac is,” Obi-Wan demanded, letting his eyes grow even colder – detached, like what he was about to do next wouldn’t bother him in the least. As if his compassion had finally been burned away. “I dun – his creditors –” the Rodian babbled. “Where,” Obi-Wan said flatly. “Up fifth street on the Halo’s bar,” he said weakly. He fell back when Obi-Wan let go of him. The other bar clients had already gone back to their drinks, seeing a simple dispute that wasn’t likely to turn deadly. No friends of the Rodian’s, apparently. Obi-Wan glanced at Siri, and she gave an imperceptible nod. Obi-Wan turned his back on the Rodian and walked away, Siri following silently. Her sigh was silent. So close to her, he could feel the movement of her body as she exhaled, but she made no sound. Her fingers brushed against his lips, her blue eyes showing she understood his own silence. He kissed her shoulder, slick with sweat. “Where next?” Siri asked calmly, quietly here, in this place and on this street. Obi-Wan sighed. “You mean, do we contact our Padawans for backup?” “Ferus doesn’t need to see a place like this,” Siri murmured. Anakin already has, Obi-Wan thought sadly, remembering the bitter, knowing look in the fourteen year old’s eyes. Do I look bitter like that now? “He’ll have to sooner or later,” was all he said. “They want to be in on the action,” Siri said softly. “At their Masters’ side.” “As we always wanted,” Obi-Wan reminded both himself and her and, for once, she didn’t take offense at the presumption, right or wrong. “We can handle this,” Siri decided finally. “They can stay with the Senator’s family.” She paused. “Can you imagine how they would reacted to being in the brothel? Best they just stay out of this mission. They’re still young enough.” Obi-Wan smiled tightly, gazing at Siri. “They probably wouldn’t have assumed I slept with the prostitute,” he said, sniping, yet unable to help himself. “You’re mine,” she whispered into his ear. “You’ll always be mine.” He met her eyes and didn’t deny it. “Don’t, Obi-Wan.” “If I did,” Obi-Wan confronted, losing his patience, the buildup as much on his part as hers, “would it matter? It would just be sex.” Siri glared at him. “And when would it become attachment?” “It wouldn’t with a prostitute,” Obi-Wan challenged. “Not with a prostitute, not with anyone.” For some reason, her gaze softened. “It wasn’t that for you,” Siri said. And there it was, this shift in meaning. “Stop it, Obi-Wan. Trying to taint it after the fact won’t help any.” She turned away, eyes dark with the wisdom of pain. Obi-Wan squeezed his eyes shut. “Obi-Wan.” Her kiss … “Obi-Wan, what have you done?” “There is no passion,” Obi-Wan said blankly. Siri’s blue eyes were unexpectedly gentle. “You must discontinue the relationship you have with her, Obi-Wan. I don’t care if it was one night. I know sexual relationships aren’t forbidden per se, but this isn’t just a sexual relationship.” His voice was heavy, an order laid down, crushing. “End the relationship, or you will be cast out of the Order.” “So what now? Are you going to compare me to – a lady of the night?” Her words were sharp and unyielding. “No,” Obi-Wan said icily, shortly, “perhaps you’re the one drawing the comparison.” He knew that would sting. A moment of still anger. “Cruel, Obi-Wan, even for you,” she said in a clipped tone. When had it become about them? Obi-Wan wondered. Maybe it always was. “Then don’t ask who I sleep with.” Can we at least have the bliss of blindness? This at least we should not challenge. Siri nodded, walking faster, apparently eager to rescue the Senator from his own illicit crimes. “Especially,” Obi-Wan added brusquely, “when you know perfectly well the answer is no one at all.” She paused, lowering her head, her shoulders trembling – just for a moment, and he treasured that moment – and then nodded, not speaking. “Obi-Wan, I’m sorry. We never should have –” “I know,” he said quietly. “The relationship will end,” he said, just blunt. As if he could wield his pain like a sword, striking his feelings down, and it’d be done. Done. “Yes,” Siri said simply, eyes dull. “But will that be enough?” He looked away, knowing the answer to that as well as she. [finis] -----signature----- atty is the bestest! MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 2/14/05 4:10am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	Oh, I really loved the way you wove the one night he had with Siri - making people think that he slept with the prostitute - and making it so incredibly sad. Wonderful job. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 9/22/08 jedidas3's Master
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RedGold Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 2/14/05 5:15am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	You have a wonderful way with relationships... really, you do! -----signature----- Legend... Recluse... Forgotten... Will one day return... http://www.starwarsfanfic.com
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Jedikma Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 2/14/05 5:34am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	I loved this when I first saw it, but the changes you made really did improve this a lot. Yup, I liked how you made us think he did sleep with the prostitute when he was really remembering a time with Siri. But it is so sad!!!! And the way they sort of stab at each other trying to ease the pain they feel for not being able to be together and rationalize crossing the lines of their commitment to the Order. **** code!!! Nicely done! -----signature----- Twice in a Lifetime 7/31 http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/16813029 A Quiet Afternoon http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/23305946 follow up vig to: A New Order http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/17525231
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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 2/14/05 6:02am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	Your writing never ceases to amaze! You conveyed their pain so eloquently. It was heartbreaking. I, too, thought he was remembering the prostitute. “I know,” he said quietly. “The relationship will end,” he said, just blunt. As if he could wield his pain like a sword, striking his feelings down, and it’d be done. Done. “Yes,” Siri said simply, eyes dull. “But will that be enough?” He looked away, knowing the answer to that as well as she. I think that expressed their situation and feelings perfectly! Beautiful vignette. -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager in Combat Boots Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 2/14/05 6:09am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	Wow! Incredible! I felt their pain and despair in every word. “Obi-Wan, what have you done?” “There is no passion,” Obi-Wan said blankly. Siri’s blue eyes were unexpectedly gentle. “You must discontinue the relationship you have with her, Obi-Wan. I don’t care if it was one night. I know sexual relationships aren’t forbidden per se, but this isn’t just a sexual relationship.” His voice was heavy, an order laid down, crushing. “End the relationship, or you will be cast out of the Order.” Absolutely enthralling! As usual... -----signature----- The Night Shift http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/30112305 Legal, Schmegal http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28454351 Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 629 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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Master_Noi Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 2/14/05 6:32am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	What a beautiful and painful vignette. I could feel the tension all the way though it. -----signature----- For Such a Time as This ( 01/17/09) A Shrouded Path (03/21/09)
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LianaMara Registered: Oct '00	Date Posted: 2/14/05 9:50am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	It's finally up! Oh, oba, this was so sad, and you described their pain so well that it hurt me to read it. I thought the descriptions were of Obi-Wan and the prostitute, too - but once I realized it was Siri, everything clicked and the viggie just felt even more tragic to me. The fact that, because of the Code and their responsibilities to the Order, they would have to deny the feelings they felt towards each other - gah, I can't continue. Too sad. Wonderful job, mum. Let us take over the boards with Obi/Siri/prosty ficness! -----signature----- "For us, there is only the trying. The rest is not our business." --T.S. Eliot Leilaé, handmaiden of the Crest \|\| petit Jedi enfant of obaona \|\| Lani & Lali's blonde triplet
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Lady-Kenobi Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 2/14/05 10:01am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	NICE! -----signature----- Yours in the Force Lady-Kenobi Master to CrystalKenobi "No try- Do or do not there is no try"-Yoda "We write to taste life twice"-Anais Nin
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 2/14/05 10:39am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	shakes head I did wonder just a little if even you could pull off this premise. I really should have known better. This is absolutely masterful, oba (even with Bri's dare ). The pacing, particularly, is a work of art, but the whole thing is truly fantastic in every detail. Trés magnifique, my dear. Your turn, Li. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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LaYa_ Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 2/14/05 10:52am Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette) - Date Edited: 2/14/05 10:53am (1 edits total) Edited By: LaYa_
	Wonderful! Simply wonderful! “So, did you sleep with her?” “This is not the time to be discussing this,” Obi-Wan warned, walking away from Siri. His gaze roamed over the area, and he wished, faintly but desperately, that something would happen, just to break this. He focused on their immediate surroundings, the dirty and dark side alleys and heaps of trash that could easily become hiding places for watchers. Night had swallowed Ventus IV, but he imagined even in daylight, things were never truly bright here. Siri quickened her step, walking by Obi-Wan’s side. Her black unisuit gleamed slightly in the dim light and the dark jacket she wore over her customary outfit hid her lightsaber well. Her blond hair was slicked back, bringing out the sharp bones of her face and making her accusatory gaze even more intense. “Retreating to formality, I see,” she snapped, her fingers twitching as if to reach for the blaster slung low on her hip – though Obi-Wan knew she really wanted to reach for her lightsaber. “I am putting the mission ahead of childish thoughts,” Obi-Wan retorted, meeting Siri’s blue eyes for a moment, and had the satisfaction of having her look away first. Then … “Was she good?” This part reminded me of a movie.. "Closer", with Julia Roberts, Jude Law, Natalie Portman and Clive Owen. Have you seen it? It really reminded of the part where Larry (Clive Owen) character asks Anna (Julia Roberts) if she had slept with Dan (Jude Law). She answers (hmm.. Obi doesn't ) and then he asks if Dan was good and she doesn't answer . Okay, I am weird. But I really enjoyed this viggie! Really great! -----signature----- The last enemy that shall be destroyed is death.
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LadyPadme Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Sep '02	Date Posted: 2/14/05 12:25pm Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	oba, As always, I'm amazed at your ability to pull out so much emotion and passion so effortlessly. (or seemingly effortlessly) There's something so beautiful and sad in the way you convey their forbidden love for each other it was quite a treat to read -----signature----- Crest MD Naimé Evil Twin of Gabri_Jade When a baby smiles the world is happy VOTE OBAMA '08
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Pallas-Athena Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 2/14/05 1:42pm Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	Yay, oba I imagine you already know how I feel about this fic from working on it with me. Very well worth the effort and it turned out beautifully. The little twist at the end, so bitter sweet. And you can really feel their emotions. No one else has commented on this, kinda surprising, actually: I love the dialogue between Obi-Wan and the Rodian. It's so realistic, like a dielect we have on Earth, but not quite. Great way to throw in the word "peep" - very creative way. And bravo on the toning down ... tis a sad day for meaningful smut, oba, a sad, sad day -----signature----- Do you ever get bored and find yourself scrolling down a thread just to read the signatures?
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SarkaVrae Title: PR Emeritus Chattanooga Registered: Jun '04	Date Posted: 2/14/05 2:00pm Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	what a powerful & emotional viggie, oba!! great job! “I know,” he said quietly. “The relationship will end,” he said, just blunt. As if he could wield his pain like a sword, striking his feelings down, and it’d be done. Done. that was just gut-wrenching! -----signature----- are you crazy? it's a very dangerous thing to do exactly what you want TwiLekJedi is so silly "I will sin my own sins, with my eyes open"
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StarFighter5 Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 2/14/05 2:16pm Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	I liked this. It was dark, but for the jedi there can be only heartache in relationships. Well done. -----signature----- "I hope I slept with you to get the job. if not, then who the hell was that guy?" - Carrie Fisher "Now that I'm a pez and a lego, I shall want for nothing else." -Jeremy Bulloch "Thank you for going to the movies. Especially mine." - George Lucas
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Opal Registered: Nov '03	Date Posted: 2/14/05 3:12pm Subject: RE: Slide (Obi/Siri darkfic, vignette)
	Wow! I really enjoyed this.
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