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Rapture (A/P, Obidala, Jinn, Dooku) AU (Romance/Drama/Adventure) Chapter 11 9.13.05
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darksideyesplease
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Rapture (A/P, Obidala, Jinn, Dooku) AU (Romance/Drama/Adventure) Chapter 11 9.13.05
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Title: Rapture
Characters: Anakin Skywalker, Padme Naberrie, Obi Wan
Kenobi, Qui-Gon Jinn, Count Dooku
Genre: Romance, Drama, Adventure (In that order most
likely) Alternate Universe
Summary: Obi Wan Kenobi was once the pupil of Qui-Gon
Jinn, and now is a Jedi Knight and his apprentice is
Padme. Qui-Gon took on the so-called Chosen One
Anakin Skywalker as his padawan after Obi Wan was
knighted.
Anakin is 20, Padme is 24, Obi Wan is however old he
is in AOTC, and Qui-Gon is 10 years older than he was
in The Phantom Menace. Obi Wan was knighted 11 years
prior and took Padme as his Padawan when she was
thirteen. A year later Anakin was discovered on
Tatoonie, and Qui-Gon never thought he would take on
another apprentice but Anakin's abilities quickly
changed his mind.
Padme's past will be explained later in the story, I don't want to give away any details, as it is the main hook of the story.
Chapter 1 coming soon.....
Rapture -
1. The state of being transported by a lofty emotion; ecstasy.
2. An expression of ecstatic feeling. Often used in the plural.
3. The transporting of a person from one place to another, especially to heaven.
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windu-the-warrior
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7/7/05 7:28pm
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RE: Rapture (A/P, Obidala, Jinn, Dooku) AU (Romance/Drama/Adventure) Summary Posted!
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hmmm interesting...though a lot like another story i've read....want to see where this goes...btw...don't u have another day job??
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darksideyesplease
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RE: Rapture (A/P, Obidala, Jinn, Dooku) AU (Romance/Drama/Adventure) Summary Posted!
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yes, i do work 40 hours a week, but i work graveyard 
i admit i'm an insomniac.
i doubt this story will be like anything you've ever read, it might start out similar to other things, but as my readers know, I will have a huge twist, and when everyone finds out what it is, they will either puke or love it. perhaps both.
I'll post Chapter 1 in the morning.
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windu-the-warrior
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7/7/05 7:33pm
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RE: Rapture (A/P, Obidala, Jinn, Dooku) AU (Romance/Drama/Adventure) Summary Posted!
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i know...i've read every other story you've written onm THE SAGA and loverd them all...btw r u gonna finish DEception and DEciet??
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iLoveAnakin7
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RE: Rapture (A/P, Obidala, Jinn, Dooku) AU (Romance/Drama/Adventure) Summary Posted!
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This sounds fun!
windu-the-warrior to answer your question darksideyesplease gave the story to someone else who will update it instead.
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windu-the-warrior
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i know..he told me... btw..when is this gonna start??
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Lieutenant_Jaina
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RE: Rapture (A/P, Obidala, Jinn, Dooku) AU (Romance/Drama/Adventure) Summary Posted!
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Sounds good to me, you'll definately have me here reading (:p)
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darksideyesplease
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Chapter 1
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Rapture
Chapter 1
That rear end
Obi Wan Kenobi stood to the side wall of a training room inside of the Jedi Temple. He watched as his Padawan, Padme Naberrie easily deflected bolt after bolt from three remote droids, testing her saber techniques.
Kenobi’s arms remained folded as he intently watched his student become more proficient in her abilities by the day. She was good, no doubts there. Obi Wan often caught his mind wondering about that. Yes she was good, and in more ways than one. He had to shake those feelings from his head. It just wasn’t proper.
On one hand he was several years older than she was. But that wasn’t even the chief reason. He was a Jedi. She was a Jedi. They had a code to abide by. The fact that she was his first and only student complicated matters even worse.
Luckily he did not feel that she looked at him the same way. To her, he was just her Master, he was sure of that. Or was he?
He had often wanted to go to his own Master, Qui-Gon Jinn for advice. If anyone could understand a circumstance like this, it would be him. He would not judge Obi Wan for his feelings the way the Council surely would.
Most of the time he was a good lad though. Sometimes he did catch himself looking at her rear end in those tight female Jedi garbs, but besides that, he had never once even contemplated acting on his fleeting thoughts.
After all, if she were going to break the code, she would certainly pick someone else. Someone like Qui-Gon’s apprentice, Anakin Skywalker. Although Anakin was like a little brother to him, as himself and Qui-Gon remained the best of friends over the years since his knighthood, he found himself becoming slightly jealous of Anakin and the way Padme paid attention to him around the Temple.
Surely it was just friendly tête-à-tête, but Padme had a difficult time coming to Obi Wan with her problems. Not only was he her Master, but being a different gender didn’t help matters much. She was a Jedi, but still a woman first and Kenobi was completely lost in certain situational conversations.
“Is that enough training for today, Master?” Padme’s voice sounded out of breath.
Kenobi’s mind seemed to have drifted off someplace else.
“Master?” She asked again.
Obi Wan shook his head and fluttered his eyes before making eye contact with his pupil.
“Yes, I’m sorry, what did you say?”
“I said, I’m a bit winded, can I take a break?” She repeated.
Obi Wan smiled at her and chuckled to himself at his absent mindedness.
“Yes of course, actually that’s enough lightsaber training for today.”
Padme rolled her eyes, as that is what she had originally asked.
What is up with him lately? She wondered.
The last year or so, she had noticed a severe change in Obi Wan’s training methods. At first he was coy and dry. He was always a very nice man, but somewhat of a stick in the mud.
Lately though, she had noticed something different about him, but she just couldn’t put her finger on it. She shrugged to herself and exited the training facility leaving Obi Wan to ponder his thoughts.
Obi Wan watched her petite body exit the room.
Get a grip Kenobi! He told himself. It’s wrong! It’s just wrong! She’s your Padawan for blast sakes! You’ve trained her since she was thirteen!
He noticed himself continuing to stare even though he had scolded himself. He then noticed two tall men passing by Padme and greeting her with much admiration.
“Having a good day, Obi Wan?” Anakin asked nonchalantly as he took his saber from his belt and activated the remotes Padme had just been working with.
“Yes, fine… why do you ask?” He shot back sharply.
“Um… I was being cordial, Obi Wan. But I wouldn’t expect you to have ever heard of such a thing.” Anakin said sarcastically as he deflected several blaster bolts with ease.
“You seem a little on edge today, old friend.” Qui-Gon stood beside his former padawan as they both watched Anakin go through his daily routine. The remotes were much too easy for him now, but Qui-Gon made him do it nonetheless.
“Really, I’m fine.” Obi Wan retorted, refusing to turn towards Master Jinn.
“Obi Wan, I’ve known you since you were a boy, I think I can tell when something is eating away at you.” Qui-Gon folded his arms inside of his cloak, his eyes never leaving Anakin. “Good Anakin, you’re getting faster every day.”
“Perhaps we could discuss it some other time.”
“No time like the present Obi Wan.” Qui-Gon smiled.
“It’s personal.” Kenobi added.
Qui-Gon nodded in agreement. They would just have to talk about it later.
“The Council has an assignment for us.” Qui-Gon informed Obi Wan.
“Us?” Kenobi was dumbfounded.
“I thought it was odd as well. They said they wanted more than just two Jedi for this mission, so we are to bring both of our Padawan’s along.”
“Well that should be interesting.” Obi Wan shot back. The two men had still not made eye contact during the entire discussion.
“As much as I enjoy an audience.” Anakin stated, as he turned his lightsaber off. “You two really need a hobby.” He shot his most sarcastic grin at the two Jedi’s.
“To say the least.” Qui-Gon responded to both of their statements at once. “Why don’t you call Padme back in here Obi Wan, and we can watch our two students spar.”
“Best idea I’ve heard all day. Perhaps this time you can win Anakin?” Obi Wan raised a suggestive eyebrow to his friend.
Anakin rolled his eyes. What they didn’t know, is that in previous sparring sessions with Padme, he had let her win. He wasn’t about to tell anyone, not even Padme that. He thought for some odd reason, she would like him more, if she thought she had the upper hand in the fight.
It was a ridiculous notion though. Anakin could school any other padawan in the Temple, and on several occasions had bested Jedi Masters, even a few on the Council itself.
Obi Wan called Padme on her com and told her to come back to the training room. Padme only could smile to herself when she heard that, she knew Anakin wanted another go around.
I guess he wants to let me win again. He’s so sweet.
A few minutes later Padme came back into the room, and Obi Wan’s thoughts drifted away from him again. His thoughts for his padawan betrayed him. He closed his eyes trying not to look at that delectable rear end of hers, and he used the force to calm himself.
“Ready for another beat down I take it, Skywalker?” Padme winked at him as she ignited her green saber.
“Anytime, Padme. Anytime.” Anakin shot a charming wink back at her and his blue saber slid from the hilt.
“Force or no force?” Padme asked about the rules of the duel.
“NO FORCE!” Qui-Gon and Obi Wan said simultaneously.
The two padawan’s laughed at their Masters. They then circled around each other in the middle of the room. A few other padawan’s in the room stopped their training and one yelled aloud down the hallway.
“Anakin and Padme are dueling again!!!” The young one said, as Jedi Knights and Padawan’s alike filled the room to watch the two gifted students spar.
Anakin shook his head in disbelief at everyone watching them.
“You did say you liked an audience.” Obi Wan chuckled.
“Now be careful Padme, last time you almost chopped my arm off.” He pointed at her with a warning finger.
“Oh trust me, if I cut something off, it won’t be your arm.” She winked as their sabers clashed.
Their sabers were almost too fast to see as there was a flurry of attacks. Padme backed up as she lost her balance and Anakin kept walking forward for more.
Padme ducked and rolled past him and slung her saber at him, only to have it easily deflected.
Anakin had this duel won. He saw how he could knock the saber from her hand, but he hesitated and left an opening of his own on purpose. Padme then used her blade to twirl his saber from his hand as it flew across the room.
The green blade hummed by Anakin’s neck, as Padme stared at him emotionlessly.
“I guess you win.” Anakin said as Padme lowered the blade to her side.
“I guess so.” Her lips curled into a half smile.
Anakin used the force to bring his saber back to him as he pushed his way through the crowd of onlookers.
“Hey Anakin!” She yelled at him before he could exit the room.
He stopped and looked back at her.
“Next time, try not to LET me win!” She laughed as his face turned fifty different shades of red. The entire room joined her in a fit of laughter as Anakin stormed off in complete embarrassment.
Obi Wan walked up to Padme with an evil grin on his face.
"You just love tormenting him, don't you Padme?"
"Ah, he'll be alright. Maybe next time he won't take it so easy on me." She zestfully replied as she hooked her lightsaber back on her utility belt.
"So what are you saying Padme? You like you rough?" Obi Wan nearly choked when he heard himself ask a question with such undertones to it.
Padme shook her head and laughed at his growing uneasiness.
"Maybe..." She gave him a sly wink as she strolled past him exiting the training room once more. Obi Wan had to control himself not to turn and watch her walk away. He hated to see her go, but he loved to watch her leave.
Qui-Gon acknowledged Padme with a small chuckle as she walked by him. She only nodded with a radiant grin.
Oh that woman is going to be the death of me. Obi Wan sighed to himself as he turned to face his former teacher.
Obi Wan placed his hands on his hips in defiance.
"What are you laughing at?" Obi Wan barked.
Qui-Gon only shook his head at his younger friend and left the room himself.
"And I have to go on a mission with all three of them... Terrific!" Obi Wan threw his arms up in defeat.
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Ladynaye
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Obi has a crush on Padme!! Very interesting!!
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"Oh trust me, if I cut something off, it won’t be your arm"....I love that line!!!
Great story and I will defintely be following it!
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RE: Rapture (A/P, Obidala, Jinn, Dooku) AU (Romance/Drama/Adventure) Chapter 1 Posted 7.8.05
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Yay a new fic from Darkside 
"he hated to see her go, but he loved to watch her leave"
Love that line!!!! So Mr. perfect Jedi has it bad for his padawan.. and now all four of them on a mission together!!
I can't wait to see how you get me with this one Darkside, you are the master of evil twists 
can you PM me when you update please?
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Starshine
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Was this an AU you were talking about?
I mean AU what is a little too AU even for you 
Anyway, I am going to read it.
Obi-Wan has a crush on Padme? If so then things should get interesting.
You really must have much time to write so much 
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I'll certainly be reading this one. It looks very interesting and I can't wait to see where you will take this.
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**cackles**
you think its AU now! just wait till you learn of Padme's past.
thanks for the quick replies guys, you truly are fans
I'm so happy that I've made a name for myself here on these forums, and that I can continue to produce interesting material for you all to read
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This looks very intriguing to say the least.
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Ok let me start off by saying that this story not only looks good but it's already FUN! Looks like you got to have your way with Padme in this story talking about her rear end. 
I always loved a good triangle Obi/Ani/Padme
And it would be equally funny if Qui-Gon got some action
Sometimes he did catch himself looking at her rear end in those tight female Jedi garbs, Obi-Wan is quite the horn doggy. 
update soon!
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