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Author	Topic: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette - Now a Short Story - Updated 8/27 Complete!
bek Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 8/10/05 5:50pm Subject: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette - Now a Short Story - Updated 8/27 Complete! - Date Edited: 8/27/06 6:21pm (11 edits total) Edited By: bek
	Author: bek (a.k.a. Bekah_K) Genre: AU Characters: OC, Obi-Wan Summary: Obi-Wan's first solo mission goes wrong. With Commander Swyer's help, he gets a message back home. Disclaimer: The character (Obi-Wan) belongs to Lucas. I make no profit from this. It's just a hobby. However, Commander Swyer is my creation. Author's Note: This is intended to stand alone; however, I may continue it at some point. Edit: New chapter posted. The continuation will not be very long, maybe two more posts or so. Bring Him Home The earth shook from the aerial shots that after their spectacular arched performance whistled their impending arrival before scorching the ground in which they dove. Dirt and debris rained down upon me as I counted the seconds till the next blast. The hill I was on could barely be called by its name; pieces of the hilltop were missing from the targeted scrapes of enemy fire. I burrowed down into my makeshift trench clutching my gun to my side. I listened as booted feet rolled cannons closer, as gun ships hovered above the once green grass awaiting any sign of air support. I closed my eyes and waited for my impending death. There were no others, they were gone. Each killed without remorse or a second glance. Our planet had been plundered into political chaos and war, each side forgetting what they were initially fighting for until all that was left were loyal armies doing someone else’s vengeful bidding. Behind closed eyelids pictures of my wife and son came into view. My little one is barely two years of age. A tear trekked down my cheek as I thought of never being able to hold him again or teach him the things he would need to know. My wife, my beautiful wife. How many times had she pleaded for me to resign my position with the coalition? How many times had I soothed her, reassuring her that I would return as I always had? I can see her smile; I can feel her touch. I close myself off and live within my memories. “Are you okay?!” The hand on my shoulder roughly shakes my upper torso. “Commander!” As I surface from my thoughts, I feel the ground shutter as an explosion hits close by sending fragments of dirt and metal through the air to land on top of us. A heavy weight lies across me and I briefly wonder if this is another casualty of the war. I open my eyes and find my sight blocked by thick brown material. “I’m okay,” I answer, my voice hoarse from screaming out commands and warnings the past few…months? The days, weeks, have run together. The figure shifts, raising himself up till we’re face to face. His eyes fix on mine and his hand falls upon my forehead. His pupils’ dilate and his gaze takes on a faraway look. He smiles, relief plays upon his features, “We’ve got to get you out of here!” Not really concerned with who this man – boy – is I readily agree to follow him back to the fort, to safety, to home. We slide down the hill on our backsides being cautious of the wreckage left in the enemy’s wake. Gun ships discover us half way down and begin firing upon us creating ruts and ditches within the semi-barren ground. He falls back into me pushing me into one of said trenches. “We can’t go that way,” I state the obvious and he turns to grin at me. “Of course not Commander that would be too easy,” he states rather cheekily. I laugh – a foreign sound to my own ears, “What do you suggest?” “There’s only one thing we can do,” he states seriously. Wary of his sudden change in demeanor, I look at him, “And what would that be?” “When night falls, you’re going to travel the rest of the way down on your own. The gun ships will revert back to base at dusk, the troops will move in. I’ll hold them off from here.” I look at his young features and wonder what in the hell he thinks he’s doing, “Are you out of your mind? You can’t hold them off; there’s too many of them!” He smiles reassuringly and pulls a weapon from his belt, “I’ll be okay,” he simply states, standing and leaning over the edge to account for our position. “Their lining up.” “I can’t leave you here alone! We don’t leave men behind!” “There’s nothing you can do here. When the time comes, go home to your family,” he looks down at the cylinder within his grasp and his hands tighten. “That’s not how we do things here! We fight together and we go home together!” I stated with as much authority as I could. His hands convulsed as they twisted around the sphere, “This is my duty! This is what I trained for!” “What, to die! To give up?!” I scream, wondering why this kid is so bent on being left to face more than he can handle. Gesturing at the metal rod, I try another tactic, “What about your family? What do I tell them when I walk in without you?” His eyes don’t leave the rotund casing within his grasp. “Tell him it was my decision. Tell him I did as I was taught,” he looks at me momentarily, “Tell him…tell him I’m grateful for everything. Swear to me.” “Your father?” His eyes snap up to meet mine, seeming to be momentarily stunned. Nodding hesitantly he replies, “As close to one as I’ll ever get.” The look in his eyes tell me that I’m fighting a loosing battle, that his mind is made up and that one way or another he’ll have his way. Resigned to the inevitable I ask, “What’s his name? How do I find him?” “You’ll find him on Coruscant at the Jedi Temple. His name is Qui-Gon Jinn.” His eyes brighten at the mention of his home. My eyes widen and he laughs. “Promise me,” he says again. “I promise.” X We spent the remainder of time in silence. He seemed to be resting as his eyes were closed and his breathing slow. I leaned back against the dirt made wall and sank again into the comfort of holding my rifle tightly against my chest. How could I leave this boy? He couldn’t have been more than twenty years of age. How can I tell his father I just left him? I fell asleep with my troubled thoughts. “Wake up!” a loud whisper next to my ear. “It’s time.” I groggily opened my eyes, a light flashed from behind us alerting me to the fact that the ground troops were on the move. I could feel the vibration of pounding feet. He helped me up and pointed me in the direction of where I was to go. I climbed out of the ditch and crawled on my belly until I was a fair distance away. Looking back, my gaze met his and with everything I felt I silently thanked him. He smiled with a curt nod as if he had heard and waved me on. The last I saw of that young man was him leaping from the trench with a long glow rod in his hand. The members of my company that had made it back alive greeted me warmly when I walked through the open flap of the large tent. Whispers gradually grew to voiced greetings, which grew to yelled welcome homes, which turned into fierce hugs and cries of joy. After being checked over by the makeshift military infirmary, I made my way to the command center and requested the use of a comm. unit. I pushed the record button and spoke of the young man who had saved my life. Jedi Jinn, my name is Commander Swyer, I’m calling to tell you of a courageous young man who despite the odds came back for me when I was stranded on the edge of enemy territory. Most of my platoon had been wiped out except a select few who were able to escape. I was the last and although I won’t lie and say that I was ready to meet my fate, I was coming to accept the possibility of never again seeing my wife and son. I had closed myself off from the chaos around me and that was when I saw him. He came out of nowhere amidst the bombs and destruction. His only concern was that I was all right. We made it half way to safe ground when gun ships stopped our progress. We hid out in one of the trench’s the cannon guns had made. When we discovered that their ground troops were gathering we knew we were trapped. He told me to go home to my family. I swear I didn’t want to leave him but he was rather insistent in a very stubborn way. Lowering my head, a shuddered breath escapes. The man I speak of was your son, or, at least he said that you were as close to a father as he would come. He did his training justice, Jedi Jinn. He asked me to tell you that he was grateful for everything. He asked me to tell you what his fate was…he was captured and is in enemy hands. I am sorry. We are planning a recon mission to get him back although somehow I don’t think he will be too keen on seeing my face when he is rescued, as I am suppose to be returning home. Not knowing how to continue I push the stop button; selecting the corresponding digits to the Jedi Temple, I press send. X …I was up on a hill I was out there alone When the shots all rang out And bombs were exploding And that’s when I saw him He came back for me And though he was captured A man set me free And that man was your son He asked me to write to you I told him I would oh I swore -Mark Schultz (Letters from War) X X X X Question: So, what do you think? -----signature----- Update 6/23/09 - Chap. 42 - Life Beyond the Code (OWK/Anakin) - Saga Update 9/3/08 - Strength to Begin Anew - (OWK/QGJ/Xan) - Saga Update 9/24/09 - Stuck in Yesterday - NM Sequel Update 11/10/09 - Somewhere in the Middle - (OWK/QGJ) - Before Saga
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obi_ew Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 8/10/05 6:06pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	Oh Bek, that was wonderful! You have to continue it! Obi-Wan was written so beautifully and I loved the passage, it made the post even more emotional. Please finish this! WOnderful OC also. -----signature----- In Loving Memory Of CC Price of Courage- Obi/Whie/Luke- http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20124958/?37 Updated 4/20 Finally!!
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Ani-maniac Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 8/10/05 6:12pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	Wonderful! I do hope that at some point that you do continue this, it would be a very interesting story. I am so curious to find out if Obi-Wan makes it.... Ani-maniac -----signature----- "I can't exactly use, 'Well, I was locked up in a secret government facility,' as my alibi." -- Alec, Dark Angel. "There is no better place to be than in God's will, unless it's in His presence." -- Last Flight Out Jesus is Lord.
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Master_Noi Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 8/10/05 6:20pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	His eyes don’t leave the rotund casing within his grasp. “Tell him it was my decision. Tell him I did as I was taught,” he looks at me momentarily, “Tell him…tell him I’m grateful for everything. Swear to me.” That was so beautiful. I loved Obi-Wan's decisiveness and stubborness and that the other man kept thinking of him as a boy. Please, you must continue. -----signature----- For Such a Time as This ( 01/17/09) A Shrouded Path (03/21/09)
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maychorian Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 8/10/05 9:17pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	Very lovely. And very Obi-Wan--strong and brave and stubborn, but just a little wistful, when it comes down to it. I liked Commander Swyer, too. Please continue! -----signature----- Kynstar's former Padawan The Unchosen: http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20049795/p1/ updated 2/16 When the darkness falls early, and the light hits the ground, there's a moment to be captured . . .
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Sabe126 Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 8/11/05 12:31am Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	Have book marked to read over the weekend -----signature----- Luminous beings are we...not this crude matter. Conversations With My Master - Joint fic with ForceAchtungBaby - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20217597/?1
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Genimay Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 8/11/05 12:40am Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	So sad...yet I think Obi-wan would do something like that. -----signature----- (\_/) Everyone is alone in some way. That dosen't mean you have to stand alone. I'm trapped here,so I might as well go insane too. destinysdomain2.proboards98/index.cgi
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jedi-k8 Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 8/11/05 3:02am Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	"This is intended to stand alone; however, I may continue it at some point." Please, please continue. I want to know what happens next. “We can’t go that way,” I state the obvious and he turns to grin at me. “Of course not Commander that would be too easy,” he states rather cheekily. Especially loved this bit for the sharp contrast with the seriousness of everything and the so very in character cheekiness.
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PadawanKitara Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 8/11/05 9:42pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	Oh WOW -----signature----- Courtier of the Royal Order of Shambling Dufi We are Dufi...Resistance is Futile! UCLA BRUINS
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Idrelle_Miocovani Registered: Feb '05	Date Posted: 8/11/05 9:46pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	Oh wow, bek, this was beautiful! I must add that I only clicked on it because the title reminded me of the song Bring Him Home from Les Mis... and I'm glad I did! It's too beautiful for words... -----signature----- Nat is my new Muse. Yes, you may have one of those flowy Greek-robe things you say you can't spell. This Time Around: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/27062943/p1/?2 DarthIshtar's Padawan
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bek Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 8/13/05 5:50pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette
	OE: You have to continue it! Obi-Wan was written so beautifully and I loved the passage, it made the post even more emotional. Thank you! The passage is from a song that I heard recently. Different scenarios began coming to my mind until I finally got one down on screen. I do intend to add another post but do not know how soon that will be. Thank you for reading; it means a lot! Ani-maniac: I am so curious to find out if Obi-Wan makes it… Kinda depends on the rest of the passage…then again, perhaps I’ll tweak it a little. Master_Noi: I loved Obi-Wan’s decisiveness and stubbornness... Obi-Wan is following his training in putting others before himself. By sending a message to Qui-Gon he feels as though he is tying up loose ends. maychorian: And very Obi-Wan—strong and brave and stubborn, but just a little wistful, when it comes down to it. He wants his master to know that he did his training justice, that he didn’t let him down when it came down to it. I liked Commander Swyer, too. Thanks! Sabe126: Thanks for reading! Genimay: Me too! He just has that selflessness about him, putting others before his own needs. jedi-k8: Especially loved this bit for the sharp contrast with the seriousness of everything and the so very in character cheekiness. I’m glad that came across well. I was trying to capture some of his dry humor. PadawanKitara: Oh WOW Thank you! Idrelle_Miocovani: Oh wow, bek, this was beautiful! I must add that I only clicked on it because the title reminded me of the song Bring Him Home from Les Mis... and I'm glad I did! It's too beautiful for words... I’m glad you liked it! Thank you for reading! -----signature----- Update 6/23/09 - Chap. 42 - Life Beyond the Code (OWK/Anakin) - Saga Update 9/3/08 - Strength to Begin Anew - (OWK/QGJ/Xan) - Saga Update 9/24/09 - Stuck in Yesterday - NM Sequel Update 11/10/09 - Somewhere in the Middle - (OWK/QGJ) - Before Saga
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Sabe126 Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 8/14/05 1:36pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette (Replies 8/13)
	You captured Obi-Wan's humour, nobility and bravery perfectly! I could easily picture everything that happened. Bravo! -----signature----- Luminous beings are we...not this crude matter. Conversations With My Master - Joint fic with ForceAchtungBaby - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20217597/?1
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JOINME Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 8/30/05 7:54am Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette (Replies 8/13)
	This was wonderful! That is a wonderful example of Jedi courage and putting others before themselves.. so sweet of Obi-Wan. He may be a 'boy' in the Commander's words, but his decisions and courage are that of a man's. The man I speak of was your son, or, at least he said that you were as close to a father as he would come that was so sweet! so sweet! this is a great little viggie on it's own, but is just begging to be expanded! In fact, there simply must be more! Please put me on the PM list if you do update! -----signature----- President of the Sal Vinz Club Proud Master of Padmay_Skywalker Sith Padawan of the supreme JMT, He's taking over the galaxy and I'm gonna inherit all
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kateydidnt Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 9/1/05 12:40pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette (Replies 8/13)
	Beautiful! I do hope to see more of this, but even alone it is fantastic! -----signature----- R2D2: The Swiss-Army Knife of Droids The Outer Rim: Minor Character Index http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21597215
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stormqueen874 Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 9/1/05 1:41pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette (Replies 8/13)
	Beautiful, wonderful, haunting, excellent... (continues on in this vein until her synonyms are exhausted) I love your charcterizations of Obi-Wan and the OC; this story gave me chills! Obi-Wan, being stubborn and strong, and refusing to leave... just The letter really got me too. You have to continue this, even though it was meant as a viggie! I want to know what Qui-Gon thought of it all, and if Obi-Wan ever gets himself out of this situation! Stormqueen -----signature----- Master to kenobiwanobi Shadows of the Future: TPM timetravel AU, Obi/Ani/Qui bonding http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24413082/p1/?0
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Peagis Registered: Apr '05	Date Posted: 9/1/05 1:54pm Subject: RE: Bring Him Home - (Obi-Wan) AU Vignette (Replies 8/13)
	wow that was great i hope u do continue it ! -----signature----- "life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away." - George Carlin
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