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Agent_Jaid Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 8/24/04 7:20pm Subject: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst) (link to the sequel posted) - Date Edited: 10/29/07 8:31pm (10 edits total) Edited By: Agent_Jaid
	Title: Words Miscommunicate Author: Jaid Disclaimer: Alright, the song is “The Last Thing She Said” by Ryan Tyler ( I almost sobbed my heart out when I heard it for the first time… It’s absolutely beautiful… I cried…) and SW belongs to George Lucas the Almighty One. The plot is MINE. No… no… hey…. don’t touch it… slaps at greedy hands Key Words: Mara, Luke, accident, regret Authors Note: Well, my first non Jaina/Someone songfic! It’s also my first attempt at this particular genre (I actually wrote a hospital scene!! ). I know that I suck when it comes to using medical terminology, and that I have a tendency to end up among the “cliché” without meaning to so please, bear with me. I tried to keep as close to the emotion in the song as I could, but I don’t know if I managed it or not… aw heck, I’m rambling, sorry. Anyways, please read it! And if you enjoyed it – review? Authors Note II: Some of my reviewers insisted that I warn you to bring a tissue box... so.... hands them out to people as they start reading Enjoy!! Authors Note III: The sequel, Fall Like Fire is now up! I hope you look into it as well! Summary: Luke and Mara had been married almost a year before, but Mara still hadn’t started her training to become a Jedi. The couple went to visit Leia, Han, Karrde and the children on Coruscant as well as have an early second honeymoon. One calm morning over a seemingly peaceful breakfast, Luke tried to convince Mara to agree to start her training once they got back to Yavin IV. One thing led to another and then it became an argument that had repercussions neither one foresaw… -------------------------------------------- Words Miscommunicate When she opened up her eyes, she was blinded by the lights Everything was flashing red and blue. Mara cracked her clouded jade green eyes open, and a tremor racked her body. A keening cry slipped from her lips as the pain stabbed into her, trying to turn her inside out. Her eyes slowly focused on the world around her; it was flooded with red and blue lights. Her head felt like it was floating and the rest of her body was filled with burning agony that wouldn’t rest. She could feel warm blood trickle down her face, the sticky liquid matting in her eyelashes. She groaned when she closed her eyes again. Sweet Force, she thought despairingly. What have I done? She heard, "Do you know were you are?" as they pulled her from her car She saw the helicopter and she knew, oh, it must be really bad. “Ma’am!” a uniformed Twi’lek yelled, bending over to look Mara in the face. “What’s your name? Do you know where you are?!” “I-I…” Mara tried to speak, her eyes slitting open, seeing through her matted lashes a closed shuttle, obviously built for speed and her heart burned with regret. “…Mara Skywalker.” She whispered, closing her eyes. Even though she hadn’t scanned herself with the Force, she knew it was bad, really bad. The hands that were carefully peeling apart the crumpled speeder from around her body froze for a split second. Harsh gasps of surprise escaped her rescuers, and then they hurried even more, knowing that they couldn’t let anything happen to her. Her family would tear them apart if they could’ve saved her and didn’t. Cool hands wrapped around her and pulled her from the wreckage, pain flying through Mara until she could hardly focus enough to stay conscious, never mind touching the Force. The Force obviously wanted her frozen with pain, because the only thing she could think about was Luke. And as they lifted off the ground, The only thing that she could think about, Was the last thing she said to her husband that morning, As the ship took off, Mara’s mind tormented her with images, sounds and emotions. She knew that when someone was in extreme pain, all that the person can think of was the pain they were experiencing until it was finally too much and they blacked out. Maybe with Force users, it was different, her mind thought abstractly. It would definitely explain why she was still fairly lucid. It also explained why she kept watching a replay of the terrible morning in her head like it was some third-rate, horror-holofilm that would only be played after midnight. An' the look on his face when she slammed the door. And the way she drove off, without one ounce of regret. And knowing "I love you" was not the last thing she said. Mara might have been crying beforehand, but she had no recollection of it. Her eyes, which had been cloudy with misery, filled with tears, making them swim with regret. Every nuance of her last conversation with Luke filled her sense, overshadowing even the physical pain she was in from the accident. She tried to tell herself that it was all just a figment of her very active imagination; that it was all a bad dream; that it wasn’t real; that it hadn’t happened… …And then she would remember the hurt look in her husband’s eyes, the slight film of tears turning the pale blue into intense cobalt. She then would remember the look that had been on Luke’s face when she had finished yelling at him. And finally, She would remember the silence that had hung in the air when she slammed the door shut behind her. And her heart would break. Mara’s face was awash with blood and tears. A nurse cursed as he tried to mop up the blood and placed several bactapatches around the shard of metal imbedded over Mara’s right eye. The bleeding wouldn’t stop. The nurse spoke a few terse words to the pilot and she nodded, reaching for the comunit. They would need at least seven pints of blood on hand when they reached the medward or their patient wouldn’t live. She tried to stay awake long enough to see his face, Wishin' she could take the whole day back. Mara was pulled from the shuttle with a needle slid into a vein in her arm, and they began pumping blood into her immediately. A pleasant breeze broke over her heated skin as she was rushed off to an open operating room. As they pushed her along in a repulsorbed, Mara grew frightened. She had been injured before, several times it had even been life threatening. Every time she had been able to pull through it, and never once had she felt so Force forsaken dizzy. Fear was an emotion that, while it was not alien, was most definitely something she had little experience with. Mara bit down on her lip as hard as she could, trying to ease the pain that was exploding through her head. She didn’t even react when she bit through her lip. She wished so much that she could just rewind time, if for no other reason then to erase the memories that filled her mind. Where was Luke? Her fevered gaze scanned every face she passed, trying to get just a glimpse him. Just to see his messy hair that she loved to run her hands through. Just to see his eyes that could fill with laughter or show the pain of past mistakes. Just to see his lips that would often as not quirk up in a smile before he kissed her gently. Just to see Him. She kept asking where he is, and "Am I gonna live?" While the voices in the room faded fast. Before she drifted off, they tried to calm her down. The rooms slid in and out of focus, and the voices grew muted. Mara thrashed around, oblivious to the arms that were trying to hold her down and unmindful of the restraints that they tried to impose on her. She was babbling, terrified. “Where is he? Where is Skywalker?? Luke!! Will I live?? Where is he? I need him!! Luke, where are you??” The surgeons all looked at each other, swallowing hard. Luke had arrived almost exactly when Mara had brought in. He had glimpsed her through a thick transperasteel wall as they had wheeled her off into the operation room. He had pounded on see-through barrier and yelled for her. His sister had been close on his heels and she tried to peel him off of the view port. Luke hadn’t really left. His eyes were dark with agony as he had allowed himself to be dragged away. Pain had been intermingled with worry as he touched her mind with the Force and found she didn’t recognize him. He was almost reeling from the slamming her shields had given him. He fingered his lightsaber with one hand while he clenched his mechanical one over and over. The surgeons had the eerie feeling that if they messed up and Mara…died, then Luke would kill them. They were right. But on and on, all she talked about, Was the last thing she said to her husband that morning, An' the look on his face when she slammed the door. And the way she drove off, without one ounce of regret. And knowing "I love you" was not the last thing she said. The surgeons worked mechanically, removing the metal shards from her body, cauterizing the burst blood vessels and trying to make her whole again. They didn’t let themselves think or react. Mara was speaking with the Force. She was filling their minds with repeats of the morning. Of the way she had sneered “All I am is something you can’t tame, and you can’t stand me for it!” Of the way she had cut off his every word. Of the way she had snarled the words “I hate you!” at him. Of the looks of desolation and soul bending agony that had flitted across his face as each barb sunk deeper and deeper in his heart. Her mouth was sealed shut, or else she would’ve screamed out her rending sense of loss. She had torn Luke’s heart to pieces. Even if she survived, she had lost him… Utter self-loathing and anguish filled her heart and mind. He was waitin' in the hall, starin’ at the wall, When he finally saw the doctor walk his way. Luke wasn’t sitting in the waiting room when the surgeon’s finally left. He was leaning against a wall, staring blankly ahead at the wall, his face covered with tear streaks. His blonde hair was messed up and his skin was pale. He was breathing shallowly, and any attempt to speak with him was repulsed. His sister hadn’t wanted to leave but her husband had pulled her away, saying that her children needed her. Luke had told her to go ahead. The surgeons hid in the supply room and drew straws to see who would have to speak to the famed Jedi Master. Someone whispered that he probably already knew how she was, but the others shushed him and he drew the long one. Taking a deep breath, the Mon Calamari adjusted his uniform before leaving. Rolling one of his eyes to look at his coworkers, he left the room apprehensively. Luke looked up when he felt the doctor approach and hurriedly straightened up. “Yes?” he asked anxiously, wanting news of his wife more then anything he had ever wanted in his life. His mind was still slightly bruised from his constant attempts to read Mara with the Force and the constant attacks she met him with. He knew that it was a reflex reaction to keep people from hurting her while she was down. …It still hurt though Oh, he was scared to death, just holding his breath, Right up until he heard the doctor say: "She’ll be okay, "And right now she needs her rest, but she wanted me to tell you she’s sorry” Luke was terrified. Not even when he had thought she would die in the underground tunnels had he been so afraid for her. He watched as the doctor shifted his feet uneasily. He wasn’t breathing, too worried to be bothered by something as nonessential as oxygen. The doctor’s brown eyes looked at him, and then swiveled away. “Doctor, please…” Luke pleaded desperately. The doctor took a fortifying breath and then looked Luke straight in the eyes. “Master Skywalker, she’ll be okay.” A torrent of relief swept through Luke so strongly he stumbled and almost collapsed. The doctor caught him, alarmed. Wasn’t Master Skywalker pleased with the news…? Luke shook his head and waved the doctor back as he picked himself up. “Can I see her, now?” Luke asked hopefully. The doctor shook his head negatively. “I’m sorry sir, but right now she needs her rest, and she needs undisturbed rest. If the Force wills it, she’ll be out of the bacta in a few days, you can see her then.” Luke sighed, impatient and resigned. “Are you sure?” “I’m positive,” the doctor softened. “Master Skywalker, your wife asked me to tell you she’s sorry.” A second wave of relief tore through Luke and his tired lips rose in a terrific grin. "And ‘I love you’ was the last thing she said." “Oh yes, and the last words she said before she succumbed to the sedatives were ‘Luke, I love you’. I hope you have a good day, Master Skywalker.” The doctor said formally, shaking Luke’s hand before he turned and scurried off with a nurse at his shoulder reading him something off of a datapad. Luke turned to the clear wall, fixing his eyes on the hall that Mara’s room was down. Tears of happiness filled his eyes and he started to cry again. His voice was broken but his words were clear. “I love you too, Mara…” -----signature----- Wasn't Enough: One-Shot http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21015893
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Jaina_Solo_15 Registered: Dec '02	Date Posted: 8/24/04 7:30pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	Wow...just wow! This was an awesome story. I'm not normally a fan of songfics, but this one was just perfect. The way you threaded the story through the lyrics and managed to tell and heartrending story at the same time was awesome. You managed to capture the perfect feeling of Mara and Luke and the way that they fight and then regret what has been said. Awesome story! I loved it. -----signature----- http://jaina47.livejournal.com/ - Come here for fic teasers & writing news
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Darth_Elu Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 8/24/04 7:33pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	I've already this and i've read it again. Must say, awesome job sis! applauds for like ten minutes straight Personally, I think this may be one of your best works. -----signature----- Brittnee My love, my life E-married to the love of my life! "Ichigo! Come out and fight me, you *******!" Master to Yukari_Nahashi I am Death: RIP George Carlin
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J_M_Bulldog Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 8/24/04 8:05pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	Wow! That is, that was, uh, you've got me speechless. Awesome story and I'm very glad it ended happy. Can't think of anything else to say, except wow. -----signature----- BA(bad attitude), aka Thwack, of TKL's Lomin Ale Wraiths I am never down. I am either up or I am getting up, but I am never down. Stop telling God how big your storm is; instead tell the storm how big your God is.
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AvenKiel Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 8/24/04 8:46pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	Hot Damn and YEEHAA that was good! -----signature----- I'm a naughty little Kitty... Meow! Grilled Cheese..... mmmmmmmmm..... http://www.livejournal.com/~jediliz/ I don't know what I'd do if I couldn't dance , sing and hop around all day, I'd probably die. Death from fidgeting!
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Tahi_Mara Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 8/25/04 9:22am Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	.... Wow. That was... amazing!! It even made me log in just so I can review - and that's something that TKL hasn't even done. Well done!! I thought for a while that you were gonna kill Mara off... Thank you for resisting!! (I read your other stuff too - this is the best one though) Awwwwwwwwwwwwww...
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GenOochy Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 8/25/04 9:38am Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	Note #1: I will not metion my current emotional state after reading this, and don't ask. Note #2: Where's the tissues? That was so sad! I was sure you were going to kill Mara. Great writing, though.. I understood everything! But, it was so SAD!! -----signature----- http://swfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Category:Wolatarians "..We've got the Empire, now as then. We don't doubt; we don't take direction.. ..Lucretia, my reflection. Dance the ghost with me.."
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Funk_Jazzer Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 8/25/04 11:45am Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	This was a wonderful piece of writing! I really liked it. I'm not a real big fan of songfics, but I thought the song went really well with the story. It was all so sad, so heart-wrenching. Excellent job! -----signature----- Now JadenBlue07
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Mirax-Jade Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 8/25/04 1:32pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	::sob:: That song IS sad... Must...find...song. That was beautiful Jaid. Absolutly beautiful. And I can see it happening...because for some reason...I don't see the first few years of their marriage as completely and utterly happy. LOVE IT. ::sniff:: -----signature----- www.livejournal.com/users/wild_n_kayzie be still my heart, this could be a brand new start, with you www.milliways-bar.livejournal.com
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RK_Striker_JK_5 Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 8/25/04 2:35pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	As the one who betaed it, I'd just like to say again how wonderful and heart-wrenching that was. Kudos, Mel. -----signature----- E-married to the wonderful DarthIshtar. Now also her Padawan. Member of the Y.J.K. Revolution Staring into the Darkness http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27537567/p1/?23
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JAGSGURL15 Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 8/26/04 7:44pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst)
	OMG! tear JERKER! next time.. warn us to bring a box of tissues.. LOL great Job! Me LoVeYs! -----signature----- Mush Queen of TKL's LOMIN ALE WRAITHS Living In DE'NILE i <3 JJ REDICK ~&NY YANKEES&~ (((DUKE BLUE DEVILS)))
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Agent_Jaid Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 8/27/04 3:46pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst) - Date Edited: 8/27/04 7:46pm (2 edits total) Edited By: Agent_Jaid
	Jaina_Solo_15 Wow...just wow! hugs her first reviewer This was an awesome story. I'm not normally a fan of songfics, but this one was just perfect. happy sigh I am sooo glad... I was fairly certain that this was a good one, but, I didn't know if anyone other then my really good friends would like it. shrugs embaressedly/happy The way you threaded the story through the lyrics and managed to tell and heartrending story at the same time was awesome. bows down to you You make me smile with thine happy comments!! Thank thee ever so much for them all!! You managed to capture the perfect feeling of Mara and Luke and the way that they fight and then regret what has been said. Personally, the fighting was what made me fall in love with the L/M pairing in the first place!! It's just too sweet, and I am honored that you think I managed to capture it. Awesome story! I loved it. Even if you hadn't said anything else, those five words would've made my day anyways. Patrick I've already this and i've read it again. Must say, awesome job sis! applauds for like ten minutes straight YAY!! My brother likes!! Personally, I think this may be one of your best works. Really? I'm leaning towards that myself... J_M_Bulldog Wow! That is, that was, uh, you've got me speechless. YES!!! No - seriously. Did I? Awesome story and I'm very glad it ended happy. Can't think of anything else to say, except wow. I'm glad it ended happily too... And I'm also glad you seem a little... lost for words? AvenKiel Hot Damn and YEEHAA that was good! That's probably the most energetic reaction I've EVER gotten from anyone!! Thanks Aven!! Tahi_Mara .... Wow. That was... amazing!! It even made me log in just so I can review - and that's something that TKL hasn't even done. Well done!! O.O I... I.... stammers I thought for a while that you were gonna kill Mara off... Seems to be a fairly common thought process if you know me... Thank you for resisting!! My pleasure. (I read your other stuff too - this is the best one though) Patrick? I think you were onto something... Awwwwwwwwwwwwww... laughs Glad you enjoyed! Ty Note #1: I will not metion my current emotional state after reading this, and don't ask. Are you sure?? Please?? pouts Note #2: Where's the tissues? hands you a couple starts to grin That was so sad! YES!!! Someone said it!! dances gleefully I was sure you were going to kill Mara. I didn't!! Great writing, though.. I understood everything! For my writing, that IS great!! But, it was so SAD!! sniffles Ty? I looooved writing it.... O:-) Funk_Jazzer This was a wonderful piece of writing! I'm starting to feel like I'm under a heat lamp or something... I really liked it. I'm not a real big fan of songfics, but I thought the song went really well with the story. Thanks, I love songfic's, but lately I've been seeing that most of them are just stories that the lyrics apply to, and, well, it kinda annoys me. The stories are still beautiful!! Don't get me wrong, they just don't seem much like songs that have been turned into stories. I'm glad you thought that it went well together. It was all so sad, so heart-wrenching. sniff That's what I thought about the song... Excellent job! Thank you VERY much!! Mirax-Jade ::sob:: That song IS sad... Told ya so!! hands you a tissue Must...find...song. sigh I can't find it anywhere 'sept for the radio... her site has like a 2 second clip playing though... Ryan Tyler That was beautiful Jaid. Absolutly beautiful. kisses the ground you walk on What can I say? I'm a sucker for compliments.... And I can see it happening...because for some reason...I don't see the first few years of their marriage as completely and utterly happy. MARA JADE?? Adjust to living with Luke on Hermit Planet?? falls over laughing I think they fought probably more then the average couple, but with Mara (she who has great big temper and very nice weapons) and Luke (he who is patient enough to watch paint peel and think he's actually doing something productive) well, they can come through anything. LOVE IT. Oh I'm so glad!! ::sniff:: hears song sniff Jon As the one who betaed it, I'd just like to say again how wonderful and heart-wrenching that was. Aww... Thanks bro! hugs Well, in that case, I'd just like to say again how grateful I am that you rescued me!! LONG LIVE THE BETA READERS!!! Kudos, Mel. Thanks. Oh Oh Oh!! And I finished the Senshi story!! beams JAGSGURL15 OMG! tear JERKER! next time.. warn us to bring a box of tissues.. LOL snickers Box of Tissues?... Okay Okay, I'll go do that... great Job! Me LoVeYs! I'm flattered, overjoyed, and thrilled to hear you say that!! wipes a happy tear away from her eye -----signature----- Wasn't Enough: One-Shot http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21015893
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Darth_Elu Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 8/27/04 4:12pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst) (i.r.'s up)
	Of course I was on to something. It is your best work. -----signature----- Brittnee My love, my life E-married to the love of my life! "Ichigo! Come out and fight me, you *******!" Master to Yukari_Nahashi I am Death: RIP George Carlin
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Agent_Jaid Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 8/27/04 7:49pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst) (i.r.'s up)
	Of course I was on to something. It is your best work. I'm starting to believe you.... Who am I kidding?? I love it and it is my favorite work -- even more then I Lied!! -----signature----- Wasn't Enough: One-Shot http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21015893
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ForGoodOrForAwesome9 Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 8/29/04 9:15am Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst) (i.r.'s up)
	sniffs wow, song fics are usually really hard to write well (i've never done it to justice) but yours was really really well done! hugs Agent_Jaid you're my new favourite writer! do you write L/M often? becasue you do it really well!! all mushy and angsty -----signature----- "So, remember kids: Every time you screw up punctuation, God electrocutes Orlando Bloom with a cattle prod." I live with 3 small furry creatures... I call them tomato, cheese, and red pepper... they live in my fridge. Good thing tomorrow's garbage day.
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Agent_Jaid Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 8/29/04 5:15pm Subject: RE: Words Miscommunicate (L/M, Non-NJO, Mush/Angst) (i.r.'s up)
	Duch (new nickname ) sniffs hands you tissues wow, song fics are usually really hard to write well (i've never done it to justice) but yours was really really well done! Thank you... they're actually pretty easy for me to do, if I can find a good song... hugs Agent_Jaid you're my new favourite writer! [voice=stutters] You-You-You... Really??