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Author	Topic: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges - New Challenge Up!!!
rhonderoo Title: Former Head Admin Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 9/10/04 11:47pm Subject: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges - New Challenge Up!!! - Date Edited: 7/31/05 3:06pm (14 edits total) Edited By: rhonderoo
	Welcome! This is the Challenge Entry thread for the Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Discussion/Challenge thread in Fan Fiction Resource found here. That's right! It's that time again. It's August and time for a new challenge! Anakin's Ghost. That's right. Anakin in the afterlife: Must be between 1000 and 2500 words. Must contain humor. Must contain the words: disincorporate extrasensory lexicon sappy sarcastic Post them Beyond the Saga entries here. They can be moved to their own thread after two weeks. Post Saga entries here: This is where the fun begins! -----signature----- DT421
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager in Combat Boots Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 9/27/04 7:54pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges - Date Edited: 9/27/04 7:57pm (2 edits total) Edited By: VaderLVR64
	Consider this mush "from a certain point of view." Forever and Always The metal caught the light, the glint drawing my eye to the monstrosity once more. I avoided the sight of it as much as possible, but I always knew it was there. How could I not? I hated the artificial arm and everything it represented. That arm mocked me, reminding me of my failures. The hated appendage was a symbol of all I had lost since I left Coruscant to protect the woman I love. Master Obi-Wan had finally forced her to leave my room a few hours ago. She had deep shadows under her eyes and she was groggy with fatigue. I know it was wrong, but a part of me rejoiced that she cared enough to push her body to its limits to be with me. A voice inside of me assured me that I had finally become more important to her than herself. I liked the thought; I needed it to be true. When I had woken up to see nothing more than a blackened stump where my arm had been, I had been struck dumb by horror. I had clung to the desperate thought that it had all been an illusion, a vision from the Force, anything but reality. But I faced the truth at last; my arm was the price I had paid for all those I had failed. My list of failures was long and spectacular. There were no ordinary failures for the Chosen One. I had not saved my mother. Even now, she was rotting away in a sandy grave. What sort of son are you, to let your mother die? The dark voice hissed at me. I had failed myself and the Jedi. I would be dead, along with Master Obi-Wan, if Master Yoda had not intervened and saved our lives. I let my need for revenge get in the way of wisdom and tried to take on the Count by myself. I thought I was invincible, a notion he had cured me of quickly and without mercy. Oh yes, you are truly the Chosen One of prophecy. The voice mocked me from the shadows within. I had failed Padme. I had not kept her safe. She had almost died in that dusty arena. She had saved herself while I stood by, helpless to save her. She had finally admitted that she loved me, but I had been given no moment to declare my heart to her again, to reassure her that I would always love her. There had been no haven of privacy to tell her that I wanted to make her my wife, to tell her that I loved her more than any man had a right to love a woman. I loved her too much, I knew that. But I could not help it, and I hoped it would serve to bind us together even more closely. If you love her, you must do whatever it takes to make her your own. The dark voice challenged me now. Was this it, then? Was this my chance to redeem myself and make up for the failures that littered my path? Would I finally have something good in my life that was mine alone? I lifted up my new arm, trying to reconcile myself to it. It was a part of me now; I could do nothing to change that. I hated it, the clumsiness of it, the strange whir and click as I moved it. It was grotesque. How could Padme still love me when she looked at me and saw this monstrosity that was now attached to me? The thought of touching her with this mechanical horror was nauseating, but the thought of never touching her at all, never making her mine, caused my heart to stop and my breath to catch in my lungs. The look I had seen in her eyes as she hovered over me gave me hope for our future. I had seen love there, and fear for me. Perhaps she could love me, disfigured and unworthy as I was. I didn’t deserve her. I had no right to claim her. I was not allowed to love and she was far above my humble reach. But I loved her and she loved me. The Jedi and the Senate and the whole galaxy could be cast into a black hole for all I cared. I loved her and I would have her as my wife. We would belong to each other, no matter what the Jedi had to say on the matter. I would give her my heart and claim hers in return. I had no possessions to speak of; I had no titles or riches. Even my body was marred and broken. But my heart belonged to her alone, and it would remain hers until the day I died. I would give her my name, the only thing other than my heart that was truly mine to give. And though it would remain a secret, and she would be mine. My wife…the sound of it made my body break out in a sweat that had nothing to do with my injury. I had been born a slave; I was trained as a Jedi. But it would be as a husband that I would find my salvation and my peace. She would be mine, forever and always. -----signature----- Someone who loves me carries an M16. My baby boy wears combat boots.
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rhonderoo Title: Former Head Admin Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 9/27/04 8:12pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	Wow. That was really, really good. I just watched the DVD's on commentary on ESB, and when it comes to Luke's arm Irvin Kershner says that they wanted Luke's arm and hand to look real, even though it was mechanical, so he could touch and feel, and even make love . They contrasted this to the arm that Anakin was given - cold, mechanical, and practical. It made you think that what they were saying was that Anakin's arm was the first step to what George says later in the commentary of the duel about every day that passes Vader loses more of himself to the machine and his humanity slips away. shiver Very thought provoking piece you have there! -----signature----- DT421
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AnakinsHeir Registered: May '04	Date Posted: 9/28/04 7:14am Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	I would give her my name, the only thing other than my heart that was truly mine to give. And though it would remain a secret, and she would be mine. My wife…the sound of it made my body break out in a sweat that had nothing to do with my injury. I had been born a slave; I was trained as a Jedi. But it would be as a husband that I would find my salvation and my peace. She would be mine, forever and always. Mushy from a certain point of view, creepy from all! Great vignette, a little disturbing, but very well written! -----signature----- Let Me Go http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/18359174/?2 Master to JediCallista_1_6_e54 A Mother's Wishes http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20272243/?0
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Mike-Sunrider Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 9/28/04 8:21am Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	Definately creepy, I like it. A great written piece by you again -----signature----- ~~My Fics~~ Check bio for more. Order of the Alliance (Ben Skywalker) : http://boards.theforce.net/Beyond_the_Saga/b10477/20169930/ Disposable Heroes (Clone Vignette) : http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/19345408/
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BrownEyes_Blue Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 9/28/04 6:47pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	This is a great viggie. Another look into Anakin's feelings about Padme....although it kinda feels like he's obessing about her. -----signature----- "He who learns but does not think, is lost! He who thinks but does not learn is in great danger." Anakin & Padme....the greatest love story in a Galaxy Far, Far Away.
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JediMaster_Jen Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 9/28/04 7:13pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges - Date Edited: 9/28/04 7:56pm (1 edits total) Edited By: JediMaster_Jen
	I think it's a great piece, VaderLVR. I think you showed a wonderful character flaw in Anakin--his need to possess. He wants Padme to be his forever. It's a flaw all humans have and you captured it perfectly. Great job. -----signature----- "Qui tacet consentit"~~ (silence implies consent) Red Wings Rock!!!!!!!
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RebelScum77 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Aug '03	Date Posted: 9/28/04 7:47pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	Oh I loved it!! The characterization was dead on, complete with a little dark foreshadowing. Beautiful stuff! -----signature----- CHEAP SLIT!!
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LukesTheMan Registered: Apr '04	Date Posted: 9/29/04 5:46am Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	I think Anakin is somewhat obsessive about Padme. It is a part of his character, that desperation that is inside of him. Great job of peeking into his head! -----signature----- Of Metal and Flesh http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/19859245 Empty Vessel http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/19744934 Proud Master to Annika_Skywalker
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Jedi_Chani Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 9/29/04 10:24am Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	I think that's a fair portrait of what happens when the galaxy's ultimate bad boy falls in love! I loved it. -----signature----- "I've got a bad feeling about this..." "The enemy to be feared the most is the one who wears the face of a friend."
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Reihla Registered: May '02	Date Posted: 9/29/04 3:52pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	What sort of son are you, to let your mother die? I think that was it in a nutshell. The sum total of Anakin's conflict with the Jedi Order. He defines himself as someone's son - something very few other Jedi can understand or identify with. That failure is huge to Anakin and, combined with all the other failures it seems to catalyze, might be the very thing that sends him over the edge. -----signature----- SagaJournal.com - an academic journal celebrating the Star Wars myth http://www.sagajournal.com/rslaughterofinnocents.html
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Jedi Trace Title: • SouthEast RSA • Fan Fiction Manager Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 9/29/04 7:24pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	OK, that was creepy. Right-on-target, romantic, and just plain shiver-worthy. I can't write Anakin and totally admire people who can get inside his head like this...... Wow!! -----signature----- "There are plenty of people who pray for peace, but if praying were enough it would have come to be." ~ Jewel “Umo ji muna, Cade mojo. ” ~ Jan Duursema
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AERYN_SUN Registered: Apr '01	Date Posted: 9/30/04 5:31am Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	Normally, I don't read Anakin viggies but I have to agree with whoever said it that Anakin's feelings about Padme, are really close to obsession than real love. I don't like Anakin at all but the characterization I would say, is about right. ~aeryn -----signature----- my livejournal - http://obisgirl.livejournal.com Realm of Attatchment (Obidala and Sabewan Thread) - http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27453838&brd=10304&start=27455097
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Jedi Trace Title: • SouthEast RSA • Fan Fiction Manager Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 9/30/04 7:49pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges - Date Edited: 10/1/04 7:19pm (4 edits total) Edited By: Jedi Trace
	This is a moment for the OT Missing Moment challenge, and I do mean "moment"...it's really short. Standoff Some might have called it beautiful. The fragments of what had been Alderaan flashed and blazed with independent light before turning into cold, black space debris. Lord Vader watched impassively. The wave of terror from an entire planet of sentient beings had ripped through the Force, and a weaker man would have collapsed under its weight. As it was, the black armor that had nothing to do with his attire deflected the torrent that subsequently washed over him unheeded. The Princess trembled involuntarily. Horrified beyond comprehension and numb with shock, she wavered slightly before him. For a moment, he thought she might faint and he tightened his grip on her shoulder. She gave no notice as she fought dry heaves of nausea. Governor Tarkin turned to face her, eyes of cold duracrete burning into hers. The challenge was all she needed to pull her back from the brink of despair. Straightening her narrow shoulders against Vader, she spoke with a poise that defied her youth, “And you call yourselves human.” Tarkin glared at her before turning his back to leave, “Vader. Take her away.” She did not wait for Vader’s cue and began the trek back to the prison block of her own volition. Arriving at her cell, Vader waved the stormtroopers away and followed her into the dark cubicle. Leia sat on the low bench and Vader felt her relief that she no longer had to rely on her quivering legs for balance. Grasping the edges of what served as a bed, she stared at the floor and devoted a great deal of concentration on simply breathing. Grief swelled within her and threatened to break the determined resolve that held it, barely, at bay. She would weep, but not in front of him. She was much too proud to let him see her tears. Realizing that he had not moved, she glanced up at him, “What?” He spoke with eerie calm, “You lied.” “Of course I lied,” she spat. “Did you honestly think I wouldn’t?” Vader looked down at her, almost admiring her defiance in spite of himself, “You cannot win, Leia. I will not allow it.” Leia rose to her feet and looked him directly in the eyes. She answered with calculated precision, “And you cannot destroy the Alliance. I won’t allow it.” Vader returned the hard stare. It was a standoff. Her latent Force ability bristled in his presence like filaments under a static charge. He wondered if she would ever notice it. Turning on his heels, Vader left with a swirl of black capes. This had not been the first contest with the Princess. But it was the first time that neither of them could claim victory. A/N: The line "And you call yourselves human" comes from a deleted scene in the documentary Empire of Dreams. Thanks for reading! -----signature----- "There are plenty of people who pray for peace, but if praying were enough it would have come to be." ~ Jewel “Umo ji muna, Cade mojo. ” ~ Jan Duursema
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rhonderoo Title: Former Head Admin Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 9/30/04 9:01pm Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges
	Wow, that was powerful, Trace. Lovely imagery there, I could see every bit of it happening. Great characterization, also! Very beautiful. Poor Leia. -----signature----- DT421
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager in Combat Boots Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 10/1/04 5:07am Subject: RE: Anakin Skywalker/Darth Vader Character Challenges - New Sep. 29 - Saga Vader/Luke or Vader/Le
	That was gorgeous! And sad! I wrote about the same encounter, sort of, but it wasn't that good. You did it much better than I did. Lovely, lovely, lovely! I can't believe you said you've not written Vader without help before. I just don't believe it! You captured Leia perfectly! -----signature----- Someone who loves me carries an M16. My baby boy wears combat boots.
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