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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 6/29/07 10:22pm Subject: Unbreakable--A Leia post-Bespin poem--Nominated for Best Poem - Date Edited: 6/15/08 10:50pm (1 edits total) Edited By: DarthIshtar
	Author's Note: This was inspired by the carbonite scene in The Empire Strikes Back and a lot of musings on Leia's characterization. I am aware that it does not rhyme. I write very free verse with very purposeful breaks in the cadence. ***** Unbreakable is what they call me is what they have to believe is what keeps me on duty rosters through every tragedy every loss every nightmare every day without Han Father Mother Alderaan my sanity myself Those who fancy themselves honest call me Unbroken and that is as much a lie as the title of Unbreakable. who told them I was unbreakable? what told them that? was it the eternity that I stood in a war room rather than lying broken and beaten and vulnerable in a medcenter somewhere below at Yavin? was it the entirety of my rallying speech after every defeat massacre and atrocity that all my ideals could not stop? or is it the fact that I love beneath the surface of my duties? Is it that I have lost the one man that I dare to love still and forever and I still fight this damned war? I am not Unbroken. I have never been Unbreakable. I have my shatterpoints and my weak spots but I allow myself to appear Unbreakable and Unbroken not because I am ashamed of my cracks but because I cannot control who sees them. -----signature----- "I feel like a more down-to-earth Pink 5 when I'm writing Leah. Same attitude, less lip gloss." ~Me on how to get in the right mindset for Twilight fanfic.
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brodiew Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 6/29/07 10:43pm Subject: RE: Unbreakable--A Leia post-Bespin poem - Date Edited: 6/29/07 10:48pm (2 edits total) Edited By: brodiew
	Wow! seems really trite. This stream of consciousness is outstanding. Leia's vulnerability seeps through every word, but her defiant control also runs as an undercurrent. She is at once rejecting and accepting the perception, because: but I allow myself to appear Unbreakable and Unbroken not because I am ashamed of my cracks but because I cannot control who sees them. Seamless. Excellent job. -----signature----- “You were right about one thing, Master. The negotiations were short.”
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palpyisgod2 Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 6/30/07 2:28am Subject: RE: Unbreakable--A Leia post-Bespin poem
	Fab! Loved it! -----signature----- "Oh, Janette...I didn't know you could do that... I think I feel an election coming on..." -John Howard "Keating" - The Musical We Had To Have
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Idrelle_Miocovani Registered: Feb '05	Date Posted: 6/30/07 10:16am Subject: RE: Unbreakable--A Leia post-Bespin poem
	Wonderful, Ish! Leia's character really comes through strong here. And I love free verse! -----signature----- Nat is my new Muse. Yes, you may have one of those flowy Greek-robe things you say you can't spell. This Time Around: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/27062943/p1/?2 DarthIshtar's Padawan
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_Tenel_Ka_ Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 6/30/07 1:02pm Subject: RE: Unbreakable--A Leia post-Bespin poem
	sniff Oh poor Leia... It makes me sad, because I think of all the rest she faces later on as well... Interesting sort of rhythm! -----signature----- Sister to _Alisas_Silverleaf_ "One day love just hits you with a flash, leaves you staring blindly just like a photograph..."
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 7/2/07 2:16am Subject: RE: Unbreakable--A Leia post-Bespin poem
	brodiew--LOL, thank you seems really trite. Thank you so much for finding my very inadequate offering to seem outstanding. The conflicted balance was something I was really trying hard to capture here, particularly in how fragmented the entire cadence was. Thank you, thank you. palpyisgod2--Thanks! Glad you loved it. Idrelle_Miocovani--Thanks, Idri! Free verse is so much easier for me because it feels more like thought than couplets. I'm glad the characterization held. _Tenel_Ka_--Thanks, _Tenel_Ka_. Hands over tissue. Yes, there's so much she faces later on. The rhythm was kinda hard to decide on. -----signature----- "I feel like a more down-to-earth Pink 5 when I'm writing Leah. Same attitude, less lip gloss." ~Me on how to get in the right mindset for Twilight fanfic.
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