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Spyman290 Registered: Jun '06	Date Posted: 2/1/08 8:12pm Subject: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic. Thanks for the Noms Everyone!! - Date Edited: 6/17/08 12:04pm (3 edits total) Edited By: Spyman290
	"Threads of a Broken Heart" Spyman290 Summary: During the Clone Wars Obi-Wan receives comm call that will change his life. The song is ‘What Hurts the Most’ by Rascal Flatts. This was done for the Country Music Songfic Challenge. Timeframe: Clone Wars Disclaimer: Guess what? I don’t own Star Wars, Star Wars owns me (kinda frightening isn't it!) Many thanks to Flowerlady for the beta! There is now a lull in the battle, and I hear someone’s voice, “General…” “Over here.” “Sir, incoming comm for you on channel V6R14.” “Thank you, Cody.” Listening to the rain, I input the code. As I wait for the connection, I wonder about the report and why it is being sent over one of the more secure Jedi only channels. The last time a message came to me like this, there were problems and some close friends of mine died. I can take the rain on the roof Of this empty house That don't bother me I can take a few tears now and then And just let 'em out It takes a long time for the comm to connect and my mind wanders back to Siri. I wonder how she’s doing and where she is this cycle. I'm not afraid to cry Every once in a while Even though, going on With you gone Still upsets me I try to listen to the reports of more places lost and people dead. Some of them are close to me, while some are not, but I can’t help but feel a sense of dread filling me faster and faster. There are days Every now and again I pretend I'm okay But that's not what gets me. “General, I regret to inform you that General Tachi was severely wounded on the battlefield. We extracted her but……” “But what?” I ask, as my dread hits its utmost. I start to blank out all that’s going on around me, fearing the worst, as I wait for him to finish his sentence. “But she died before we could get her any medical help.” “Are you sure?” I ask my voice low and threatening as I try to cover how much this hurts me. “Sir, I helped get her as far as we could. But she just…Sir, she asked me to tell you that she was sorry and she loved you. I have a holo log of it if you wish to see it.” “Yes, please send it over.” What hurts the most Was being so close And having so much to say (much to say) And watching you walk away As the holo starts transferring, tears start to fall from my eyes. I think about the last time we said good-bye to each other and how we ignored the feelings we had for each other. Watching her walk towards the transport that would take her to her next mission, I was still trying to convince myself that Jedi aren’t to have these kinds of feelings. And never knowing What could have been And not seeing that loving you Is what I was trying to do As I wait for the big holo file to download on the slow connection, I go on rounds to make sure everything gets done the way it should. It's hard to deal With the pain 'a losing you Everywhere I go But I'm doing it As I take one report after the next, I try to keep a smile on my face and to keep up the morale, but it’s nothing like the one that should be on my face. I should be wearing the expression that spoke of hope, like the one that was on my face before the comm. It's hard to force that smile When I see our old friends and I'm alone “General your transport is ready to take you back to the Temple for her funeral.” Again, I put on the fake smile, as I thank Cody for his thoughtfulness. I board the transport, and before I know it, I’m back at the Temple. Many of my old friends, who were able to make it to the funeral, greeted me, all thankful to see me, while I forced the same smile on my face. Still harder Getting up, getting dressed Living with this regret I wake up the next morning and find it’s so hard to get out of bed and dressed for the funeral. My heart is in pieces on the floor as I find myself walking toward her favorite spot in the Room of a Thousand Fountains. Soon, I am sitting and reflecting to the peacefulness of the sounds that fill the room. After a while, I remember I hadn’t watched the holo the commander had sent. I pull out my data pad, and slip in the chip. Pulling up the file and fast-forward to the spot the commander had marked, I start to watch. **************************************************** “Commander, move up squad alpha on the right before they break through.” “Right away, General.” I watch as she moves in to fill a spot in the line. Before the droids break through, she is fighting brilliantly, and then it happened so fast, I had to back the holo up some to see it again. From what I could tell, she slipped on what I can only describe as black ice. As she lost her footing, several shots got through and hit her saber disabling it. Followed by a torrent of shots which hit her from ahead of her, mutilating her body. I had to stop the recording for five minutes to get my emotions under control. I wanted to vomit, but got myself under control again. After a while, I hit play to watch the rest. The commander and 2, or so, dozen other clones move quickly around her to protect her. Several of them pick up their general and move her back in the line. An extraction team is called, and less than a minute the ship appears. They get her in and are moving fast to get her to the med center, but about halfway there, she pulls the commander down and whispers a few things to him. The commander turns up the volume, allowing the microphone pick up her words. As tears stream down my face and my heart breaks, she struggles to speak. I can make out her what she is saying. “Commander…” Siri says, but a hard cough interrupts her, “…please cont…” more coughs rake her body, but she continues to struggle with her words, “…please contact General…” another hard cough, “…Knobie. Tell him that I’m sorry and I…” her voice breaks a little and another cough threatens to take her breath,”…tell him I love him.” She laid down her head and I could hear her last breath escape her body. There is a deathly silence aside from the throb of the engines, and then I hear the commander, the only other commander I know almost as well as Cody, say in a voice laden with emotion, “Yes, General, I promise I will do what you ask.”The holo ends, and for the next half hour, I cry out of grief and pain. Eventually, I slowly try to pull myself together for the funeral. I walk to the funeral room and numbly watch the proceedings. Several of the others walk up to the burning pyre of ash to silently pay their last respects. Finally, as I take my turn, I think about all that I wish I would have said and done, and now would never be able to do. But I know If I could do it over I would trade, give away All the words that I say In my heart, that I left unspoken What hurts the most Was being so close And having so much to say (much to say) And watching you walk away And never knowing What could have been And not seeing that loving you Is what I was trying to do (ooh) What hurts the most Was being so close And having so much to say (much to say) And watching you walk away And never knowing What could have been And not seeing that loving you Is what I was trying to do (ooh)
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Jedimaster_JainaSolo Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 2/2/08 8:22am Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic.
	bravo! Nicely done! Dana -----signature----- Excited padawan of NYCitygurl Behind the Durasteel Mask: http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/28439445 "Don't let anyone look down on you because you are young..." 1 Timothy 4:12
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divapilot Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 2/2/08 8:44am Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic.
	Beautiful interpretation of the song. -----signature----- Never tell me the odds. AKL Happy new year!
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-DarkScorpion- Registered: Jun '06	Date Posted: 2/2/08 5:45pm Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic.
	Like I told you while you were writing it, Ya Shoulda Had a Happy Ending . Other than that, Not bad Bro!! -DarkScorpion- -----signature----- I Proudly Ship Jacen/Jysella J/K L/M H/L and others i cant think of right now IRL Brother to TnTornado,Spyman290 and...... .... do you really wanna know???
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Jade_Pilot Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 2/2/08 6:51pm Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic.
	Nice responce to the challenge! -----signature----- "It is in giving that we receive." ~ St. Francis of Assisi
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Spyman290 Registered: Jun '06	Date Posted: 2/4/08 12:00pm Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic.
	Dana: Thanks Divapilot: thanks and it helps to listen to the song while you are writing it so you can get the emotion. DarkScorpion: tough luck on that happy ending Jade_Pilot: was it really that sad? and thanks for the review.
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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 2/4/08 6:05pm Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic.
	So heartbreaking! But beautifully done! -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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Spyman290 Registered: Jun '06	Date Posted: 2/6/08 11:44am Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic.
	Gina: Thanks for the review and i'm glad i was able to take the emotion from the song and put it in the fic!
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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 6/14/08 7:15am Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic.
	That illicited a sob from me. Great job.. i have to go get a tissue! -----signature----- "Change. It can be good. It can be bad. It can be expected or come as a thief in the night. Invited or not, it always comes." ~Koria "Tender Shadows", co-written w/ The Musical Jedi "Two Peas Out of the Pod" http://www.nanowrimo.org/eng/user/205643
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Spyman290 Registered: Jun '06	Date Posted: 6/17/08 12:03pm Subject: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic. Thanks for the Noms Everyone!!
	Alexis_Wingstar posted: That illicited a sob from me. Great job.. i have to go get a tissue! Sorry AW but your response somehow brings a smirk to my face because I was able to bring out the emotion of the song into the story. I'm glad you liked it. And I wanted to thank everyone for all the noms I've had so far, it means so much to be as it is my first time getting anything in the the awards so it means a lot to me so cookies and hugs to you all!!! (ok will coffee do they didn't quite have a cookie.)
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Trika_Kenobi Title: SFFBC banner maker and Arena MVP Registered: Nov '99	Date Posted: 7/14/08 5:35am Subject: RE: Threads of a Broken Heart - A Country Music Songfic Challenge Fic. Thanks for the Noms Everyone!
	OMG. Just beautiful. I'm glad you linked me here! This was well thought out and organized, and it really twisted my stomach into knots, to be honest. Thanks for the read, and if you ever post another songfic or something like it, be sure to let me know. Trikes -----signature----- http://www.TalonIntelligenceSquadron.com Flame is the game The game we call gaslighting Abbie
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