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JediNemesis Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 2/20/08 4:04pm Subject: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Thanks for the noms! Replies 26/6 - Date Edited: 6/26/08 4:51pm (3 edits total) Edited By: JediNemesis
	Title: One Last Time Author: JediNemesis Genre: Angst, drama Characters: Obi-Wan; OCs; Anakin Skywalker (sorta) Era: few years after ROTS Written for the Dare Challenge. My dare was: I know that Labyrinth of Evil gave us the reason that Obi-Wan said that Cato Nemoidia didn't count...but when Anakin says that he's saved Obi-Wan's neck however many times. I dare you to write a fic about one of the other times. They can be in any sticky situation you would like but Obi-Wan has to be in peril and Anakin has to save him. Seems innocent enough BUT, You must include the following words: intransigent, intractable, intelligentsia, intemperate, intermediary, intestate. And must include the following phrases: "I hate it when he does that." "I have a bad feeling about this." "I thought they smelled bad on the outside." and "You don't want to sell me death sticks." So I did. DISCLAIMER: GFFA belongs to Lucas, no money has changed hands, etc. etc. Obi-Wan leant on the bar in the Bura Delta nightclub, sipping a meagre measure of Corellian whisky with one hand and keeping the other close to his concealed lightsaber. Every so often he looked around, discreetly scanning the crowds of customers for anyone who looked like they might be his contact, and also for potential trouble. The Delta was supposed to be a haunt of the intelligentsia and so was only lightly policed, but there was always room for trouble. That could have been it . . . Obi-Wan put down his drink as a slender young woman with dreadlocked hair and one cybernetic hand worked her way through the crush towards him. He made room for her at the bar; she pressed into the narrow space, fished a narrow packet out of the neckline of her sleeveless top, and whispered “Cilona? You won’t get it cheaper.” “You don’t want to sell me death sticks.” Obi-Wan said tiredly, and half-turned away, waiting to see what she would do. “Nah,” said the girl, sliding the packet away, “actually, I want to go home and rethink my life.” She smiled broadly. “You want to come with me?” Obi-Wan finished his drink and followed her out of the club, wondering what particularly intractable nostalgic streak had made him pick on that little exchange as sign and countersign. He remembered the time he’d first used it, in a club on Coruscant what seemed like centuries ago, and sighed. They took an airtaxi through the murky streets which dropped them off in a district Obi-Wan didn’t recognise. The girl led him around one corner, then down an alley, until they came to a dirty-looking building with a line of Gelmak characters over the door, and underneath an Aurabesh sign saying - “Abattoir?” Obi-Wan said under his breath. Well, it made sense as far as a safe house was concerned; certainly nobody in their right mind would go into one unless they had a very good reason. Inside, it stank of Gelmak wildlife, both the edible sorts which had once been dissected there and the inedible ones which had colonised it afterwards. “It reeks.” the girl said cheerfully, spotting his reaction. “You get used to it after a while.” “I thought they smelled bad on the outside.” Obi-Wan said drily. “It must work wonders for keeping people away.” “Yeah, mostly.” She sounded distracted; they had come to a heavy metal door with a new-looking combination pad beside it, and she stood in front of it for a long time with one hand hovering over the numbers. Obi-Wan took advantage of the time to scan the room they were in for exits and escape routes in the event of trouble. The door was heavy metal, enough to distort his Force perception, and he made a mental note of that as a potential difficulty. Finally his contact tapped a long code into the door pad, and the door groaned open. The walls of the room beyond it were metal too, and sitting against the far wall were a line of mostly young people in dirty and much-repaired Gelmak dress. One of them rose as Obi-Wan entered, and half-bowed in greeting. His voice was wryly ironic as he said “Welcome to the urban headquarters of the Gelmak resistance movement, Master Jedi.” He motioned Obi-Wan to the room’s one seat, an upturned crate, as the door closed. “Luckily, the freezing systems have been broken for years.” Obi-Wan sat down and looked over the dozen members of the Gelmak resistance, feeling his heart sink. He’d known they’d taken casualties, but for there to be so few left? And they were all so young. The Senate had only allowed Jedi Padawans to be placed in combat situations after a long and fractious debate, eventually granting them exemption from the laws on child protection on the grounds of exceptional training. These teenagers had nothing, only the conviction that something needed to be done . . . Obi-Wan opened his mouth to speak, and was framing a hesitant greeting when the girl who had brought him to the abattoir burst out crying. The door slid open. Obi-Wan looked into the standard-issue facemasks of the planetary guard, and tensed himself for battle, his hand going to his lightsaber. Out of the corner of his eye, he saw the colour draining from the resistance fighters’ faces, and hands creeping towards weapons. He had a duty to them to draw the attack if he possibly could. Once again he was forestalled. “Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi?” the lead guard said from behind the mask. “Consider yourself under arrest. The families of these criminals are in custody and will be executed if you resist.” So that was why, and that was why they had chosen the abattoir, with its metal-lined freezer chamber that warped and distorted his connection to the Force. The one place, possibly in the whole city, where he couldn’t sense danger quite so well. He stood up. The boy who had greeted him started up as well, saying urgently “They’re lying -” Obi-Wan cut him off with one raised hand, and said heavily “I can’t take that risk.” The guards formed a tight bunch around him, and escorted him to an armoured speeder that was hovering in the alleyway outside. Within minutes they were at that sector’s holding facility, and the news had gone out to the Governor of Gelmak, to the sector authorities, and to the galaxy in general that Obi-Wan Kenobi, the Negotiator, had been captured. At last. * * * Administrative Officer Donar Melik was working his way through the mountain of paperwork generated when a high-ranking prisoner had died intestate, and wondering why the facility didn’t farm this sort of thing out to external lawyers, when his datapad emitted the shrill pinging sound that meant a level-two priority command. Sighing, Melik switched windows, and found that the ping had heralded the arrival of a note from the Governor’s office ordering the termination of prisoner designate 11701, Obi-Wan Kenobi. “I have a bad feeling about this,” Melik muttered. On the other side of the room his colleague Upash Stelle raised his head off his elbows, pushed aside the box containing the previous shift‘s takeaway, and said muzzily “What?” “Nothing.” Melik checked the records, opened up a schedule, booked out one of the facility’s humane termination apparatus for the following morning and a transport for an hour earlier, and sent off the obligatory notice informing Imperial Central of the decision. Scarcely a quarter of an hour had passed - barely long enough for an encrypted message to negotiate the fourteen hyperspatial relays between Gelmak and Coruscant and back - when the datapad pinged again, this time in the manner indicating a level-one priority code. Melik opened up the relevant window, and found a message sent direct from the personal servers of Lord Darth Vader summarily vetoing the termination, without giving a reason. Melik looked blearily at the message for a moment, contemplating the trouble that Lord Vader’s personal involvement inevitably brought, and said plaintively to himself “I hate it when he does that.” Upash Stelle opened his mouth, and closed it again when Melik shook his head. * * * Thirty-two hours later, a hang-nosed Imperial shuttle touched down on the gubernatorial landing pad in the middle of an overcast and intemperate Gelmak night, and disgorged half-a-dozen stormtroopers and, last, the towering, cloaked form of Lord Darth Vader. Transport was hastily arranged. The warden of the holding facility was woken, to his embarrassment and that of the exotically dressed young woman with whom he had been sharing his sleeping quarters, and was waiting, red-faced, to greet Lord Vader when the speeder from the city arrived. The warden hurried his illustrious guest through the corridors until they reached the cell containing prisoner 11701. Would His Lordship be requiring anything else? No? Then would it be possible to - “Stay here.” Vader said curtly, cutting off the warden mid-plea, and went into the cell. * * * Obi-Wan wondered, every time the cell door opened, if it would be a patrol come to escort him to the termination facility. He had come to the conclusion that the only safe escape plan would be to wait until he was actually at the facility, from where he would, having extricated himself, be in the right place to fabricate a record of his death. It was a good plan, and hopefully it would both see the families of the Gelmak resistance fighters spared and fool Imperial Central for a little while. Only a little while, long enough for him to get back to Tatooine and sink back into obscurity. He shouldn’t have accepted any mission from the Rebellion; it left Luke exposed. But Bail Organa could be remarkably intransigent where genocide was concerned, and he had patiently explained in a series of coded transmissions that Gelmak’s native population was being decimated by Imperial ‘peacekeeping’, that historically the planet had had a great respect for Jedi, that it was barely two parsecs from Tatooine, and that the Rebellion were stretched too thin elsewhere. And so he had taken it, met the local intermediary, negotiated the terms on which the Rebellion would help the Gelmak and try to draw Imperial resources away from the system . . . And, once again, it had gone wrong. It was almost like the old days. At that thought, Obi-Wan smiled. It was still good remembering the old days, even if it did inevitably lead to the pain of remembering what had followed. But a mission gone unpredictably wrong, and a tricky escape to be engineered; it was just like the old days, except that he was alone, without Anakin’s competent but occasionally overenthusiastic assistance. Obi-Wan was lost in nostalgic thoughts of gundark nests when the door did open, revealing the prison warden wearing his uniform jacket over a salmon-pink sleeping robe and looking as if his night could not, by any concatenation of interplanetary malices, get even the slightest bit worse. And, behind the warden, someone who had to stoop to bring his shoulders through the doorway, and whose long dark cloak whispered across the dirty floor. Obi-Wan sat up as the warden scurried from view and the door closed, his mind still, ridiculously, haunted by visions of gundarks. Once upon a time, once upon so many times, he had on the very edge of disaster reached out a hand and had it grasped by the same one that flexed restlessly under his visitor’s right-hand glove. Very little other than that hand remained of Anakin Skywalker, and the memory of how it had happened wrung Obi-Wan’s heart. It had nearly killed him, those years before, to turn his back and walk away, leaving Anakin - Anakin whom he had loved - behind to burn. Anakin. Obi-Wan had never stopped thinking of him as Anakin, not even after the reports of the atrocities committed by Darth Vader in the Emperor’s service had been proven. It was still Anakin, the person behind the monstrosities, and that was the agony of it. Anakin folded his arms, the cloak rippling, and said without preamble “The Governor sent an order for your termination.” “I’m hardly surprised.” Obi-Wan said quietly. “I am, after all, a dangerous criminal.” “The order was rescinded after I interposed my veto.” Anakin said bluntly. Obi-Wan sank back against the wall, trying to sense any vestige of human pity in the shielded mind, and after a long while asked wonderingly “Why?” A long moment passed, and Obi-Wan looked into the blank black mask that covered Anakin’s ravaged face and wanted to ask again, why, why this? “There is something,” Anakin said quietly after a long silence, “that you know, and that you will never tell me, and that will go with you to your grave. As long as you are alive, though, the chance is greater that you will tell someone, and that they will make a mistake.” “And then?” Obi-Wan asked as lightly as he could. “And then,” Anakin said with awful simplicity, “I will have my child.” He turned, the door sliding open at his look, and said to the warden “This is not Obi-Wan Kenobi. Once again, the incompetence of sector governance astounds me.” Obi-Wan heard the thud of the falling body through the groan of the closing door. Later that day, they took him to the city limits, and let him go. He took a long-haul freighter to Commenor, and made his way back in a series of criss-crossing hops to Tatooine. And all he could think about, all the way, through the haze of grief and anger and fear for what he would find when he returned, was that Anakin had saved his life for him one last time. Feedback, as always, much appreciated Nem -----signature----- BeTS Best Author '08 NEW Eleven Summers - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29657584 Lightning and Diamonds - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29251762 Into The Shining Day - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29224914
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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 2/20/08 6:43pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	Well that was unexpected! Here I was expecting to read a story about a younger Anakin, before he turned, saving Obi-wan. I like surprises Well done. -----signature----- "Change. It can be good. It can be bad. It can be expected or come as a thief in the night. Invited or not, it always comes." ~Koria "Tender Shadows", co-written w/ The Musical Jedi "Two Peas Out of the Pod" http://www.nanowrimo.org/eng/user/205643
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darksideyesplease Registered: Feb '05	Date Posted: 2/20/08 7:08pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	That was a very interesting way to spin the challenge, making it Vader almost giving Obi-Wan a free pass more than saving his life from the actual brink of death, but still it works nicely and nice to see you think outside the box on this. -----signature----- FelsGoddess AU inspired by upcoming Clone War release http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28104890/p1/?0 Anakin, Padme, Ahsoka, Obi-Wan
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 2/21/08 4:53am Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	This was great. I didn't expect it at all, thinking it was a younger Anakin. I certainly didn't expect him to let Obi-Wan go but I loved that he did. Wonderfully done. Really thinking outside the box! Great job. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 9/22/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 11/20/08 jedidas3's Master At last - Hope for our country
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager in Combat Boots Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 2/21/08 6:01am Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	That was incredibly well done, but that is no suprise at all! Obi-Wan sank back against the wall, trying to sense any vestige of human pity in the shielded mind, and after a long while asked wonderingly “Why?” A long moment passed, and Obi-Wan looked into the blank black mask that covered Anakin’s ravaged face and wanted to ask again, why, why this? “There is something,” Anakin said quietly after a long silence, “that you know, and that you will never tell me, and that will go with you to your grave. As long as you are alive, though, the chance is greater that you will tell someone, and that they will make a mistake.” “And then?” Obi-Wan asked as lightly as he could. “And then,” Anakin said with awful simplicity, “I will have my child.” He turned, the door sliding open at his look, and said to the warden “This is not Obi-Wan Kenobi. Once again, the incompetence of sector governance astounds me.” His reasoning REALLY made sense. I loved it! -----signature----- Someone who loves me carries an M16. My baby boy wears combat boots.
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Bri_Windstar Registered: May '02	Date Posted: 2/21/08 9:21am Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response - Date Edited: 2/21/08 9:25am (1 edits total) Edited By: Bri_Windstar
	Omg! I'd wondered what direction the story would take after seeing the dare and the era, but nothing I absently tried to come up with even came close. I am totally, head over heels in love with this vig. You feel Obi-Wan's pain, the mix of nostalgia and remorse that comes with having to live with the events that transpired, the good ones and the bad. So many speculate about what his days are like and where his thoughts turn during those years in exile on Tatooine, but 19 years is an awfully long time and I don't think one can really grasp what kind of regret or guilt can build up in that kind of solitude, knowing the one thing that keeps you going is the boy you swore to look after. This story does such a wonderful job of portraying that; I really feel like I'm there with Obi-Wan, in his head, in his thoughts, knowing what he's feeling and going through. And the end! I really have no words. This passage- Obi-Wan sank back against the wall, trying to sense any vestige of human pity in the shielded mind, and after a long while asked wonderingly “Why?” A long moment passed, and Obi-Wan looked into the blank black mask that covered Anakin’s ravaged face and wanted to ask again, why, why this? “There is something,” Anakin said quietly after a long silence, “that you know, and that you will never tell me, and that will go with you to your grave. As long as you are alive, though, the chance is greater that you will tell someone, and that they will make a mistake.” “And then?” Obi-Wan asked as lightly as he could. “And then,” Anakin said with awful simplicity, “I will have my child.” -just gave me absolute goosebumps! I tried before to rationalize how Vader could potentially run into Obi-Wan before ANH and find reason to leave him alive, and that passage just delivers it beautifully. I also especially like how, right before, Obi-Wan thinks to himself that the person before him will always be thought of as Anakin to him. You're reminded of that small spark of humanity that remains in Anakin that remains buried so deep, and then with that last line you're painfully reminded of the hate and darkness that exist to blot out that spark. It brings back the reality that the characters find themselves in at this point in time. Just... wow. Thank you for this vig. -----signature----- Mediocrity- it takes a lot less time and most people won't notice the difference before it's too late. * OMG! SO RIDICULOUSLY AND AGGRAVATINGLY PERFECT!- Gabri * 11010110101000101011
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ratna Registered: Mar '07	Date Posted: 2/21/08 1:47pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	Whoa!!! This is so utterly amazingly good. Those were hard words to use, but you managed an overall writing tone that let them fit in without jarring. I can only say 'wow!' AND the story packs a real emotional punch. Great imagination. Great little vig. -----signature----- Ou n'a tu pas tellement aime quelqu'un que tu avais peur de l'aimer au peur des souvenirs?
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KELIA Title: The Pretty In Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 2/22/08 7:51am Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	“And then,” Anakin said with awful simplicity, “I will have my child." That sent chills down my spine but I can totally see Vader doing that. I thought for sure you would answer the challenge while Anakin was Anakin. What a lovely surprise to discover otherwise. Great response to the challenge -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 Undue Circumstances: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28530583/p1/?10
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brodiew Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 2/22/08 8:04am Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response - Date Edited: 2/22/08 8:15am (1 edits total) Edited By: brodiew
	Very well done, JediNemesis. I didn't even realize that this was inter trilogy until the Empire was mentioned. You characterization fof Obi-Wan is rich. From his reservations about taking the mission from Bail to his nostalgic remembrances of Anakin. I'm also like Vader/Obi scenes post ROTS-PreANH. -----signature----- Drabble Babble the Third: http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29083113/p1/?23
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Irish_Jedi_Jade Registered: Jul '07	Date Posted: 2/22/08 3:04pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	Wow! That was truly wonderful!!! An excellent, different take on the dare, wonderful job!! Very poignant and sad, though. I loved the part about Obi-Wan reminiscing about the past. Excellent job!!! Irish -----signature----- "Merry Christmas." "And a Happy go to Hell." ~House, M.D. Season 3: exactly my thoughts after the holidays working in retail. ~**~ Don't forget me...no matter what.
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 2/22/08 7:35pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	Huh, very interesting. -----signature----- "I feel like a more down-to-earth Pink 5 when I'm writing Leah. Same attitude, less lip gloss." ~Me on how to get in the right mindset for Twilight fanfic.
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BrentusofGath Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 2/23/08 11:01pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	"I thought they smelled bad on the outside." Obi-Wan said drily. "It must work wonders for keeping people away." LOL! Good way to incorporate that line. Good fic. -----signature----- In time or so I'm told, I'm just another soul for sale, oh well Feel it in my bones when you break my back, break it just to watch me bend Why'd you have to go and Let it Die? -Foo Fighters http://conscienceoftheking.blogspot.com/
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azizah Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 2/26/08 1:04pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	This was a joy to read. So original and clever and at the same time you kept the characters true to the original. I liked this And, once again, it had gone wrong. It was almost like the old days. At that thought, Obi-Wan smiled. It was still good remembering the old days, even if it did inevitably lead to the pain of remembering what had followed. But a mission gone unpredictably wrong, and a tricky escape to be engineered; it was just like the old days, except that he was alone, without Anakin’s competent but occasionally overenthusiastic assistance. And the ending was perfect. Great job! azizah
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Persephone_Kore Registered: Jan '06	Date Posted: 2/26/08 3:59pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	You are brilliant. -----signature----- Protégé: Chosen: http://boards.theforce.net/f/b1/28612428 A Rose in the Ashes: http://boards.theforce.net/f/b1/29028814 Lost Ones: http://boards.theforce.net/f/b1/29061459 Morality and the Sith Apprentice: http://boards.theforce.net/f1/b1/27581326
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JediNemesis Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 2/27/08 12:20pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response
	Hello everyone! Alexis_Wingstar Well that was unexpected! Here I was expecting to read a story about a younger Anakin, before he turned, saving Obi-wan. To be entirely honest I think that was what the darer intended, but half the fun of the Dare Challenge is bending the rules until they twang Well done. Thanks! darksideyesplease That was a very interesting way to spin the challenge, making it Vader almost giving Obi-Wan a free pass more than saving his life from the actual brink of death, but still it works nicely and nice to see you think outside the box on this. I'm glad you liked the spin I put on it. Thanks for clicking! diane This was great. I didn't expect it at all, thinking it was a younger Anakin. I certainly didn't expect him to let Obi-Wan go but I loved that he did. Well, it said in the dare that he had to . . . glad it seemed plausible though Wonderfully done. Really thinking outside the box! Thanks! VaderLVR That was incredibly well done, but that is no suprise at all! Vadey, you've got to stop saying this kind of thing, it's embarrassing But thank you. His reasoning REALLY made sense. I loved it! I could sort of see it happening - after all, Ben wouldn't voluntarily 'fess up, even under torture. Bri_Windstar Omg! I'd wondered what direction the story would take after seeing the dare and the era, but nothing I absently tried to come up with even came close. I spent two weeks sitting staring at it - I'm glad that the bunny that eventually appeared was satisfactory I am totally, head over heels in love with this vig.You feel Obi-Wan's pain, the mix of nostalgia and remorse that comes with having to live with the events that transpired, the good ones and the bad. [...] This story does such a wonderful job of portraying that; I really feel like I'm there with Obi-Wan, in his head, in his thoughts, knowing what he's feeling and going through. Wow. Thank you. I don't write Obi-Wan so often any more, and it's good to know that his character rang true. And the end! [...] -just gave me absolute goosebumps! I tried before to rationalize how Vader could potentially run into Obi-Wan before ANH and find reason to leave him alive, and that passage just delivers it beautifully. Awesome I also especially like how, right before, Obi-Wan thinks to himself that the person before him will always be thought of as Anakin to him. You're reminded of that small spark of humanity that remains in Anakin that remains buried so deep, and then with that last line you're painfully reminded of the hate and darkness that exist to blot out that spark. It brings back the reality that the characters find themselves in at this point in time. Well, yes. Because we know that Anakin is redeemed in the end, it's easy to forget how far he fell and how long he stayed there - nearly twenty years before anything like that 'spark' emerged again. In the years between ROTS and ANH he's consumed with darkness. Just... wow. Thank you for this vig. Believe me, you're very welcome ratna Whoa!!! This is so utterly amazingly good. Thanks! Those were hard words to use, but you managed an overall writing tone that let them fit in without jarring. I can only say 'wow!' Yeah, they were. If the culprit would like to confess . . . I hate word lists. AND the story packs a real emotional punch. Great imagination. Great little vig. Once again, thanks, and I'm glad you found it moving KELIA That sent chills down my spine but I can totally see Vader doing that. That's the thing - he's not some mindless killing machine, even in the worst years, but capable of restraint and patience when necessary. I thought for sure you would answer the challenge while Anakin was Anakin. What a lovely surprise to discover otherwise. Hehe, I'm glad that it was a nice surprise rather than an unpleasant one. I did my best brodiew Very well done, JediNemesis. I didn't even realize that this was inter trilogy until the Empire was mentioned. This is something I've noticed more than once and begun to consciously exploit: people don't read the notes. It's brilliant. Your characterization of Obi-Wan is rich. From his reservations about taking the mission from Bail to his nostalgic remembrances of Anakin. Thank you! I'm happy you think he was true to character Irish_Jedi_Jade Wow! That was truly wonderful!!! An excellent, different take on the dare, wonderful job!! Very poignant and sad, though. I loved the part about Obi-Wan reminiscing about the past. He strikes me as the sort of person who would wander off on the odd nostalgia trip; after such an eventful early life, to be stuck on Tatooine for 19 years must be boring as hell. Excellent job!!! Ta! DarthIshtar very interesting. Thanks for reading. BrentusofGath LOL! Good way to incorporate that line. The only reason this fic ended up visiting an abattoir was because I couldn't think of any other way to get the damn line in Good fic. Thanks. azizah This was a joy to read. So original and clever and at the same time you kept the characters true to the original. I'm glad they came through well; like I said to someone above, I haven't written Obi-Wan in so long. And the ending was perfect. Thank you! Persephone_Kore You are brilliant. . . . Whoa. Thank you. Er . . . not sure what else to say here Thanks everyone who read and replied, and the lurkers, if there were any Nem -----signature----- BeTS Best Author '08 NEW Eleven Summers - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29657584 Lightning and Diamonds - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29251762 Into The Shining Day - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29224914
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padawan_learner86 Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 2/27/08 2:11pm Subject: RE: One Last Time - Obi-Wan, post-ROTS, one-shot - Dare Challenge Response - Replies, 27/02
	This is amazing! First off, your style is just awesome. Love the way you weave the words together to get such a stunning result. The story in and of itself is both hopeful and heart-breaking. So many catch phrases that are used just right. I've much enjoyed reading this. -----signature----- One who accepts only the SW movies as canon. Thus, refuses to read any of the SW books. ^^; Fics in Bio
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