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JediMasterGaraceDane Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 1/17/06 6:05pm Subject: Sith Wars: A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 1 new edit 5,6 update 2-14-06 - Date Edited: 2/14/06 3:09pm (23 edits total) Edited By: JediMasterGaraceDane
	Well this is my first time writing and posting in the fan fic area i hope this is as entertaining as it was and is still for me.....this is a short story series novels(about 10-12 chapters when done.) Book Series: Sith Wars Title: A Hero's Legend Ends Characters - Garace Ryn: Jedi Knight, Rom Onis: Republic Admiral, Izak Vopak: Jedi Padawan, Farrik Grubri: Jedi Master, Darth Vlug: Dark Lord of the Sith, Darth Traag Sithlord-Asassin. Timeframe - 1000 years before Episode I, last Great Sith War... Rating: PG (chapter 5 PG-13) Disclaimer - All rights of Star Wars and characters, vehicles, etc. are properties of George Lucas creator and master of the Star Wars galaxy. Preface A Long Time Ago...In A Galaxy Far Far Away...... It is a perilous time in the galaxy. The jedi the constant protectors of the galaxy are under constant threat from the sith and their dark jedi. Most jedi are assigned now to a battalion of Republic Soldiers and are advisors to their Commanders. The Sith on the other hand are always on the move using Sentry Droids and Sith Elite shock troopers to attack the Republic strongholds and have even succeeded in taking over some of the core worlds. The Sith are lead by a villainous Darklord of the Sith named Darth Vlug. Vlug has created yet another Sith fleet and continues his war against the Jedi. As the Sith Fleet looms over the core worlds of the Republic, another evil looms in the distance as another Dark Lord is hunting jedi down for sport and is interfering in the battle for the galaxy. This sith named Darth Traag takes the heads from the jedi he kills and sends them to the newly formed Jedi Council on Coruscant. He also keeps their Lightsaber and feeds off of the dead body’s force power. Though the sith threat has become very real with the Republic crumbling, the jedi are holding their own with the help of the Republic soldiers and their starships. The jedi number around 5,000, around 1,000 years before the events of ‘The Phantom Menace’. While the sith under the Dark Lord Vlug and his apprentice Darth Strijder number in the range of 9,000 Dark Jedi. While the jedi numbers seem small they are well trained in the jedi arts and are well trained in Lightsaber arts. Meanwhile out on the Outer Rim territories, on a darkened planet named Velmor IV, two Jedi, Garace Ryn and his Padawan Izak Vopak check out a report form the jedi council about a secret sith base being built..... Chapter 1 Garace and his apprentice Izak land in their newly designed jedi fighters on the outskirts of the capital of Velmor IV, Vijjun City. The city was very small all that was the true city was but a small town. Most of the city was being built by the Sith. Garace now a jedi knight of the order, wears somewhat different clothing from traditional knights. He is draped in Dark Brown shirt, tunic and overtunic. And over that is a lighter brown jedi cloak. His pants are black as are his boots. His hair in traditional jedi code was longer but not too long. He had spiked up hair look. He also had the usual jedi utility belt with a lightsaber on both sides of the belt. They were purple for Garace had always wanted uniqueness. He traveled far and wide and his travels ended on a planet called Belkadan on the farthest reaches of the galaxy. It was here were he found his crystal that would come to symbolize him. Garace at the temple had studied and mastered: Form I, III, IV and studied form VII but with limited success. With the out break of war, he had little time to try and master the form. Vaapad of course is a dangerous form to master. It harnesses darkside energies along with lightside energies and can only be mastered with years of physical and mental training. The hardest part for Garace was the mental training for he had already mastered the physical aspects of the Form. And that is what he's been working on with every free moment he has. He has also incorperated the Form of Jar'Kai or Duel lightsaber form into Vaapad and form VII. Its really tough but Garace so far is the only one in the order who has successfully intigrated this form with the physicality of Vaapad. Vaapad was taught only by Farrik leading member of the Jedi Council. Even he says he's incomplete in this technique. As for Garaces's apprentice, Izak who is with his second master thanks to a fight with the Neimoidians over trade disputes, his master Omi-Jinnowi, was assinated by the Neimoidians when they hired a sith assasin to do their dirty work. Izak was an engetic jedi and was never patient. He wore Dark brown jedi cloak, with all black with a tint of blue Tunic overtunic and shirt. His pants were dark brown as were the boots he wore. Izak had a nice trim hair style and as all padawans do, he had the braid to signify he was still a student. Izak had a single hilt teal colored lightsaber at his side on his utility belt. He studied and mastered Forms III and IV within 2 years and earned him a spot in the Jedi Archieves. He also took the hilt from his master and made modifications to it so that he would always have a part of his former master with him. Izak opened his eyes with amazement and spoke to Garace. “Master, the jedi council was correct. The Sith are here.” Garace replied, “Yes my apprentice they are here but why they are staging here instead of the closer Mid Rim systems to strike at the heart of the Republic is anyone’s guess.” The two moved away from their starfighters and climbed down the rocky terrain of the planet. The Sith construction cranes and other tools were massive and lift thick and dark colored metal. The two jedi finally realized that the Sith were building a fortress not only a fortress but a new Sith Temple. Izak quickly asked Garace, “Master what to do now?” Garace only replied, “We must reroute a message to Coruscant and get a Republic Armada out here now. The Sith already out number us jedi now, if they bring in more recruits, who knows what the future would hold for the galaxy if this monstrosity was built.” “I agree master, we must take it out!” answered a brash Izak. “Patience my young padawan. We mustn’t be too hasty there are bound to be at least a few elite jedi under the command of a Sith General,” said the patience Garace. “Master we must not let this happen I’m going in now.” said the bash young padawan. The young padawan defies his master and ignites his newly built single hilt teal-colored lightsaber and attacks 6 sentry droid guards and destroys them. Garace races to help his padawan and is cut off by two dark jedi. Garace Ryn leaps into action against the dark jedi. Garace ignites his two violet-colored lightsabers and twirls them once. The dark jedi looked surprised. "Well you have made the challenge do you have the will to back it up?" said a confident and stern Garace. They both flung forward and initiated combat. The dark jedi attacks were relentless Garace blocked their attacks left and right as the dark jedi kept the up pressure. Garace used the force to sling the dark jedi up and then drew his Lightsaber and with two quick jabs to the stomach the dark jedi fell to the ground. The other recovering from the force push got back up and lunged at Garace. Garace looked up and was pushed down. The two warriors rolled around trying to gain the upperhand. Garace finally used his newly aquired skill of the Force Barrier and used it against the dark jedi which flung him upward and then Garace took his lightsabers leaped upwards and thrust his lightsaber into hte chest of the dark jedi. The fight was over. “They don’t teach ‘em like they used too,” said Garace as he put away his lightsaber. At that time the young padawan held his own very easily against the sentry droids. The alarm didn’t going off and the two jedi were safe for the time. To the knowledge of the jedi they thought the fortress was under heavy guard from two elite dark jedi, but the leader of the Sith offensive General Karrinhang was there overseeing the development of what was to be the new Sith Empire’s Capital in the galaxy. “General the fortress is on schedule and is impenetrable,” said the commander of the fortress. “I should hope so commander the credits could be used for more Star Triards,” said General Karrinhang. Star Triards are similar to star destroyers only sleeker and smaller. “The money could also be used commander for our new capital ship model, the Vanguard class Triard,” said the general in a sly manner. “Sir the fortress will be completed and will be well worth your time sir,” said the commander. The two looked at each other and then the general left the room to the launch pad to climb aboard the Exalta-class shuttle. As he left the commander got on the backs of his officers and wanted this fortress online within the next few months. Our Jedi friends, while quietly tip toeing around the fortress, found more trouble in order to get into the only gate they saw they could get in. The fortress itself was massive, it had no windows on the outside, no balcony, and the walls were pure Platanium alloy a metal that can not be climbed up. Garace and Izak both looked at each other and then wondered what to do. Izak wanted to charge in and get into the fortress by force. Garace being the diplomatic type like his master Farrik, thought that maybe there could be another way in. "Izak we will not do things your way as we did before, we were lucky that they didn’t get to the alarm. This time they will with ease,” suggested Garace. “Master, we must stop this thing from being built the Republic can not stand against an enemy with a massive fortress like this for long, the fortress can be used to train and recruit units not only that but used as a factory this close to the Republic Core Worlds would be a nightmare to the jedi and the Republic,” pleaded Izak to Garace. “Easy my young padawan we will destroy this abomination. The Republic can’t survive if no one knows of this I say wait and come in with a battalion of troops and other jedi,” suggested Garace. “Humph, whatever you say Master even thought I think we can take care of these ourselves,” said a defiant Izak. Garace looked to him with open eyes and could feel the eagerness for conflict within his young padawan. This look could only lead to the Dark Side of the Force. Garace must stop not only the fortress but his padawan also from falling from the Jedi Order. The two get on their new jedi star fighters and head back into Republic Territory to tell the already battle and war wary Republic of the new threat that could bring down the 18,000 year old Republic, the Battle Fortress on the planet Velmor IV. - Garace's hair his much like Ulic Qel-Droma's with a tint of white on the sides. -----signature----- "A padawan's tie to his Master should never be broken in a time of WAR."-Jedi Knight Garace Ryn. http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22902108&brd=10475&replies=0 -Sith Wars Series: A Hero's Legend Ends Padawan to Darth Ishtar
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Gkilkenny Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 1/18/06 1:38am Subject: RE: Last War of the Jedi, WAAAAY before the saga fan fic, Preface & Chapter 1 started 1-17-06
	Hello JediMasterGaraceDane Your first Story? Good start. Maybe try breaking up the chapters a bit more. The jedi are outnumbered and Garace has a Padawan who doesn't take orders very well He is already outnumbered if his Padawan doesn't listen They need to stick together. -----signature----- Proud Padawan to p_stotts Peace over anger - honour over hate - Strength over fear. Links to Stories in my Bio. Obi-Wan forever.
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Healer_Leona Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 1/18/06 7:01am Subject: RE: Last War of the Jedi, WAAAAY before the saga fan fic, Preface & Chapter 1 started 1-17-06
	I concur, for a first stoy this sounds very intriguing. Welcome to fanfic JediMasterGaraceDane. -----signature----- I've been waiting so long to be where I'm going
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JediMasterGaraceDane Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 1/18/06 3:53pm Subject: RE: Last War of the Jedi, WAAAAY before the saga fan fic, Chapter 2 updated 1-18-06 - Date Edited: 1/29/06 7:45pm (4 edits total) Edited By: JediMasterGaraceDane
	Thanks for the comments you two they are very appriciated. And without further a do....the Continuation.... Chapter 2 While the two jedi head back to the jedi council and to inform the Galactic Senate, the Sith Wars rage on and on the populace planet of Munnilist in the Raioballo Sector the republic fleet makes urgent calls to the newly formed banking clan to sign on with the Republic to push sith forces off their home world. The Republic forces are led by war hero Rom Onis, Firehawk of Space. Rom set of a meeting on the planet of Sinsang far from war torn Dantooine and Munnilist. Rom meets up with the Senator form Agamar a system that just recently joined the Republic. Rom sets down in his republic transport and meets up with Adli Kana Senator from Agamar. The Banking Clan sits down at the table and demands are set. Rom replies,” These demands are bit much for the Republic to handle right now, we cannot spare too many credits because of the war effort. Even if we did give you these credits and whatever else you asked for how much help would you really be for the Republic.” Banking Clan member Sana Bilta added, “I have legends of droid starfighters we just constructed over our secret base at Morishim. They are top of the line units, the sith will never know what hit them.” Rom was baffled by this information. Never had he thought that the Muun’s would be able to develop technology to have Droid Starfighters. Rom then replied, “In that case we accept your aid. However Sith intelligence gets wind of the meeting on Sinsang and send a force of 20 Starships to bombard the already worn torn planet. This fleet was headed by none other then Scourge of Jagga Two, Admiral Bagra. Rom gets the signal from the fleet, that there is a battle under way and the sith are under the command of Bagra. Rom rushed out. Rom shouted, “Make way to your ships make and wait for the Republic to punch a hole in their line so they could get to lightspeed.” The delegates got out of there and the battle was under way. Republic ships now under Admiral Rom immediately formed up. Two Capital Coruscant class cruisers and 7 Destroyer class Vilar cruisers formed up on 20 Star Triard Destroyers. Though the Republic Fleet was out gunned Rom was known as the most spectacular tactician the Republic has known since Carth Onasi. The republic ships struck right through the head of the Star Triard formation, destroying two Triards with main cannon fire and ship blasters. The space was wide enough apart for the delegation to get to lightspeed. “Now go you guys and get your armies ready Sana and we shall see you on the battlefield.” Yelled Rom as the delegation went to Lightspeed. The other Star Triards reformed and opened fire on the 3 destroyer class Republic ships. This attack disabled 2 of the 3 cruisers and destroyed the other. Rom had to make a run for it otherwise the fleet and he would be destroyed. He quickly made a decision to split the fleet up to confuse the enemy. Admiral Bagra wasn’t so easily fooled and instead attacked both capital starships as they split. The Berserker got away while the Chancellery the flagship of the Republic took heavy damage. The other ships stood their ground in order to help the Chancellery. Rom ordered, “Get out of here! Your doing no good here go get help.” The other captains reluctantly obeyed and made a run for it and escaped. The admiral was going self destruct the ship before she would go down but the Star Triards fired two new Ion Torpedoes and disabled the Chancellery. Rom was in disbelief and offered unconditional surrender. Admiral Bagra accepted and took the entire crew hostage. Chapter 3 Meanwhile, Garace and Izak two jedi coming back from their expedition into sith territory landed on the Jedi Temple landing platforms and exited. "Izak quickly make your way to Master Tri-Uk to see if you can get an information on the disappearances of two padawans Diark, and Dorike." Izak obeyed his master and ran off to the war room. Garace meanwhile moved onward toward the Jedi Council to inform them of the Fortress on Velmor and about his pupil’s aggressiveness in battle. The council finally sent for Garace. Garace entered the chambers and the council looked on. Garace stood in the middle of the circle of Jedi Masters. Farrik leading member on the Jedi Council and former master to then Padawan Garace Ryn spoke first. “Master Ryn what do you have to report to us?” asked a curious Farrik. “Master, I have some grim news about the sith forces on Velmor. The Sith are building a massive fortress which will soon become their capital and is by all counts going to also be a major recruiting center and shipyards there as well. The fortress is covered in Platanium alloy a metal only destructible by a fusion bomb charge. Also I felt tremor in the force and I think that the fortress is under the watchful eye of Darth Vlug’s pupil Darth Strijder. I had to eliminate two dark jedi already and my padawan destroyed a detachment of war droids. And that is my full report, Master.” Gada spoke clearly on the subject,” Most disturbing this is. Forsaken the planet of Velmor we have. Fallen to the dark side of the force it has.” concluded Gada. “I must agree.” said Farrik agreeing with Gada. Li-Kida Nuda said, “The Republic will lie in ruins if this fortress is not taken down. But if it is plated with Platanium alloy not even our lightsabers can penetrate these walls,” said Li. “A job for our elite jedi and Admiral Rom this must be.” said Gada. “I concur with this if only Rom wasn’t captured by the sith we would be able to implement a plan.” said Li. A look of surprise ran across Garace’s face as he could not believe what he just heard. “Master Farrik is that true that Rom was captured by the sith?” asked a surprised Garace. “Yes, indeed. A dark day for the Republic this is. Master Ryn is that all?” answered Gada. Garace continued to stand their, and in a moments time he raised his head and,” yes Master there is.” At that time Izak came over and over heard what was being said in the council chambers. “Go on Master Ryn,” asked Farrik. “My padawan seems too edgy lately. He rushed into battle after I cautioned patience. Izak ignored my warnings and rushed into battle leaving my to battle two dark jedi that were lying in wait.” exclaimed Garace. “Hmmm, watch your Padawan we will. More patience teach him and help him sort through his anger you must.” exclaimed Gada. “Yes Master I will try.” said Garace as he exited the chambers. Izak waited by the halls of meditation for his Master. He was upset, heartbroken, and angry at his master not having faith nor trust in him. He looked down to the inner depths of himself and there was a yearning for battle and to fight. As Garace walked by, Izak asked “Master how was council meeting?” Garace replied, ”Not so well my young apprentice, Rom Onis has been captured by the enemy and we are going in to get him back because without him the Republic no matter how many jedi we have, it will be doomed.” Izak looked surprised and answered back quickly, “Master let me and you rescue him. It will be easy.” “IZAK, he’s being held by Darth Vlug on the capital Star Triad-Vanguard.” answered an annoyed Garace. The Vanguard is a Super Star Triad that is about 7 times the size of a regular Star Triad. Garace looked at his apprentice and could still see a dark cloud hanging over the boy. “Then at least let me be in on the mission, sure he’s your closest friend even more so then me but he’s also my friend too you know,” said a desperate Izak. “Alright Izak lets go to the war room and begin the plans to rescue Rom.” said a surprisingly happy Garace. hope you like..... -----signature----- "A padawan's tie to his Master should never be broken in a time of WAR."-Jedi Knight Garace Ryn. http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22902108&brd=10475&replies=0 -Sith Wars Series: A Hero's Legend Ends Padawan to Darth Ishtar
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JediMasterGaraceDane Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 1/25/06 9:15pm Subject: RE: Last War of the Jedi, WAAAAY before the saga , Chapter 4 updated 1-26-06 - Date Edited: 1/29/06 7:51pm (6 edits total) Edited By: JediMasterGaraceDane
	here ya go yet another chapter in my exciting Fan Fic. Chapter 4 The battle reached the office of the Chancellor which was Chancellor Yalina. Yalina was horrified by the news of the Chancellery’s capture and destruction that she immediately informed the Jedi Council. In a closed session of the Senate the Jedi and the Chancellor immediately called for rescue attempt for Admiral Onis on the Vanguard. Special Envoy to the Supreme Chancellor Noss Grathor suggested a diplomatic solution or a surrender to the sith. “That’s something we cannot allow Noss,” said an outraged Senator Organa I. “Giving in to the sith would invite certain destruction, just as in the years of the First Great Sith war with Darth Malak. “I must concur with the Senator.” said Farrik. There was much mumbling going on in the senate. Many wanted to rescue the admiral but some already weary of war wanted to surrender and be under sith rule. There was also a shroud of the dark side surrounding the senate a great deal of corruption and black market dealings have made the Senate look weak to too many member worlds and made the Sith Empire look very strong compared to the Republic. Jedi Master Li-Kida and Jedi Knights Ulic Dealn and Garace Ryn were outside the closed session awaiting the fate of the brilliant General. To rescue or not to rescue. Farrik exited the floor. “The Senate has given the go ahead on the rescue but barely,” said Farrik. “ Master, why is the Senate like this, cant they see if we give in we give up our way of life,” insisted Garace. “Yes my friend but the Senate is very war wary and is ready to give in to Sith demands. This cannot happen." said Ferrik Senator Organa walks out. “Ah, Master Garace how are you doing, this situation must have you upset? asked Galdin Organa. “Yes sir it does, but now that the Senate has given the go ahead for a rescue, the Jedi can implement our plan,” said Garace Ryn. “Yes I believe you guys can do it and then bring this war to a close. There has been too much death and we need to win. I put my full faith into the Jedi Order and our brave military. Good day to you all,” Senator Organa nods and leaves the floor. Later the jedi order plans their assault on the Vanguard Triard. The plan calls for 20 jedi to sneak into the Vanguard while a Republic Taskforce takes on the main Sith Fleet outside the Contruum Shipyards where the main sith fleet lay in wait. The fleet will consist of 50 Raidiant Cruisers, and 20 Harbinger Capital starships, and the newly developed Ultima Star Dreadnaught. A simple three step process is drawn up which was devised by the Strategist on the Jedi Order Master Farrik. Strike, Rescue, and Escape. Many were skeptical about the plan but knew that even if the assault fleet did escape Coruscant would be the next target. There, laying in wait, would be the biggest fleet of all of the Republic’s history gathered to defend Coruscant, 1000+ starships. Garace boarded the Ultima, the biggest starship to ever roam the galaxy with amazement in his eyes. “Master Farrik, this is unbelievable. To build such a ship in ultimate secrecy is….wow.” exclaimed Garace. “Yes my young friend. It is a grand ship capable of destroying entire continents with its firepower. But to my distain it still won’t dent the Battle fortress on Velmor IV,” said Farrik. Garace was stunned but then again It was armed beyond anything anyone one of them has seen. Garace gave the council their wish to have Garace accompany another jedi padawan on a Harbinger Capital ship as Izak would be under the watchful eye of Jedi Master Farrik on the Ultima. Garace was to accompany Farrik in the rescue operation. But something that Garace didn’t like was that the shroud of the Dark Side really was falling on this mission. Garace looked back when he was discussing the situation in front of the Jedi Council in the Chambers. "But Masters surely you know that a padawan should never leave his master's side especially during a war. This bond that we have must not be broken. With his already hot aggress..." Garace was cut off. "Aggressiveness the council thinks it best to have him under the watchful eye of the leading member of the jedi council and that is your former master Farrik. Trust the wisdom of the council, you do not?" asked Gada. "Yes I do, Master Gada. But this cannot be..." again he was cut off by a master. "be. But it will. We will temporarally assign you to another padawan during the rescue operation there you and Farrik will lead the jedi team into battle onboard the Vanguard. That is all we have to say. GOOD DAY Young Jedi!" exclaimed jedi master Li-Kida.' With the shroad of the dark side falling all around the Republic and the Order, Garace was for the first time since his jedi trials, afraid, afraid of what the future holds, for him and for the galaxy. To be Continued........ Please Comment!!!! -----signature----- "A padawan's tie to his Master should never be broken in a time of WAR."-Jedi Knight Garace Ryn. http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22902108&brd=10475&replies=0 -Sith Wars Series: A Hero's Legend Ends Padawan to Darth Ishtar
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JediMasterGaraceDane Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 1/28/06 11:18pm Subject: RE: Sith Wars Series, A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 4 updated 1-26-06 - Date Edited: 1/29/06 7:35pm (1 edits total) Edited By: JediMasterGaraceDane
	Dont get upset mods at this post...just saying I revised some editing and some parts of the storyline for Chapters 1-4 and updated a new title for the fan fic. And feedback is great....also Chapter 5 will be posted later one today 1-30-06. -----signature----- "A padawan's tie to his Master should never be broken in a time of WAR."-Jedi Knight Garace Ryn. http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22902108&brd=10475&replies=0 -Sith Wars Series: A Hero's Legend Ends Padawan to Darth Ishtar
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Alley_Skywalker Registered: Sep '05	Date Posted: 1/29/06 4:06pm Subject: RE: Sith Wars: A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 4 updated 1-26-06
	Not bad especially for a first story I like Garace. izak is very naughty as i can see garace is going to have his hands full. Oh..and maybe make your paragraphs less chunked, especially in diologue. It's easier to read that way. -----signature----- Knight of the Fanfic Order (trained by oqidaun) Master to CodyMonKenobi & mujapple-juicey Proud Obi/Ani shipper! Facades: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24152038/p1 Class of '09 forever!!!
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DaenaBenjen42 Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 1/30/06 11:36am Subject: RE: Sith Wars: A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 4 updated 1-26-06
	Very interesting. Very much would like to see more of this, JediMasterGaraceDane! (Welcome to the boards, by the way.) Good story. -----signature----- "Say it with me now. Postcard. Zoo. Not. Shopping." master to jackyyy17, micky-nikki, & Trimaj e-sis to BrightFeather All cats are leopards after dark.
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Dos_Venn Registered: Jan '06	Date Posted: 1/31/06 9:46am Subject: RE: Sith Wars: A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 4 updated 1-26-06
	Great story, keep up the good work! -----signature----- The Nightmare Lord http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/22971909/p1/?0 Go read it, you know you want to.
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 2/5/06 12:54pm Subject: RE: Sith Wars: A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 4 updated 1-26-06
	I like Garace and his Padawan a lot and you're right that he seems to be a quiobi in style. While I have a bad feeling about what's coming up, I have a good feeling about this fic. -----signature----- "GET OUT OF THE WAY." Yoink It's coming
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JediMasterGaraceDane Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 2/11/06 2:04am Subject: RE: Sith Wars: A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 4 updated 1-26-06
	Again posting to say i have edited a little of chapter 1 because it needs to link to a certain chapter thats coming up soon....anyhow also finally got done with chapters 5 and 6 tonite/morning watever lol......they will be up as soon as i get it beta approved from Ishtar. -----signature----- "A padawan's tie to his Master should never be broken in a time of WAR."-Jedi Knight Garace Ryn. http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22902108&brd=10475&replies=0 -Sith Wars Series: A Hero's Legend Ends Padawan to Darth Ishtar
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JediMasterGaraceDane Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 2/11/06 9:53pm Subject: RE: Sith Wars: A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 4 updated 1-26-06 - Date Edited: 2/13/06 10:03am (2 edits total) Edited By: JediMasterGaraceDane
	Chapter 5- This chapter is rated as PG-13 for graphic cotent(description of character) Meanwhile on a not so decent world, where the air is thickly polluted and the ground is wet, and all there is is mud and smell every which way, three jedi look for a powerful sith. This world is none other then Nal Hutta. The jedi, Tra’ri Crajo, and two padawans, Dorike and Diark are searching for the a former jedi knight named Kevde Cripra. He left the order after he killed his master over greed and jealousy of his love for Ali-Menal. Tra'ri a human women in her mid 20's is a hardened jedi knight and has been fighting the sith for around 12 years. The two padawans fresh from their masters arms were to accompany Tra'ri on this mission to destroy the sith that was killing jedi. “Man, Tra'ri what are we looking for. I'm sure if he's a true sith he's definitely changed his looks.” said Dorike. “Yes you are telling the truth Dorike but none the less what the council gave us is what we have to work with.” said Tra'ri with confidence in her voice. Lurking in the shadows was a figure that was following our three heroes. “Well I don't know Tra'ri does the council know what its doing sending fresh field padawans and a lone jedi knight on such a dangerous mission?” said Diark. “You are right, young padawan. I am the most dangerous thing on this planet!” said a dark and disastrous voice. “you are Kevde Cripra jedi padawan to....”said Dorike before he was cut off by Traag. “That name no longer has any meaning to me!” said Traag. “I am now and always have been a Darklord of the Sith, Darth Traag.” said Traag in a stern evil voice. Traag had skin that would make chills go up and down your spine. The skin was hard and flaky like dead skin. His eyes were all black with sith eyes and had a scar that was open and never seemed to heal. It was a deep gash across the face from left eyebrow down to the right side of the jaw. Nasty wound from one of the jedi he has killed. He was draped in all black, cape metallic boots and thin metal pipes integrated into his skull almost like his jaw was taken from him or incinerated. "This is our Sithlord we are hunting!?!” exclaimed Tra'ri. “Yes I am the sith you are hunting and the very last person you are going to see!” shouted Traag. “Prepare yourselves guys!” yelled Tra'ri. Traag leaped into the air and connects his red short-lightsaber with Tra'ri yellow double-bladed lightsaber. As they clashed Diark came running into the fray to help Tra'ri, only to get electrocuted by Traag's force lightening. Dorike came in as soon as Diark was thrown back by the force power. His blue lightsaber ignited as he clashed with Traag's other red short-lightsaber. As the three warriors battled Traag was holding his own. Traag was blocking all attacks and thrusts the two jedi were giving him. He was thwarting all attacks from the two jedi's lightsabers. Traag then unpredictably back flipped and used his force powers to throw steel objects at the two jedi. As they fell back Traag flipped and came down for the kill, but to his dismay Dorike came to the rescue using force push he learned and improved under the guidance of Master Gada. Traag was slammed into 4 buildings in the Nal Hutta main starport. Dorike then passed out from the amount of force he used and the wounds he sustained from the force lightening. “We must get out of here and report back to the council.” said Tra'ri putting Dorike on her back. “He's too powerful for us to even keep up.” said Diark. “Agreed,” said Tra'ri. With that the 3 jedi made their way to the space pad where the Republic shuttle was lying there in wait. “Quick we are almost there,” said Tra'ri. With Dorike on her shoulder. Traag swoops down on the unsuspecting jedi as they make their way over to the shuttle. “I will let you go. But be known that there is a price to pay,” as he steps off their shuttle and ignites a single lightsaber. "Traag take me, kill me, do whatever, just let these padawans go!” answered Tra'ri. "Ha...ha...haha...hahaa” snarled an evil laugh from Traag's mouth. “I think NOT!” yelled Traag as he quickly used a force choke on both Tri'ri and Diark, leaving Dorike on the ground still unconscious. Then he dashed forward and took Dorike putting him on his shoulder. When Tra'ri and Diark came to after almost being suffocated. They saw that Traag had taken Dorike. Dorike their friend and Diark's brother was gone. Both jedi made their way to the shuttle beaten and bruised and plotted a course for Coruscant. They had to deliver the news that not only did the Sithlord live, but also to tell the jedi council that for all intents and purposes jedi padawan Dorike was dead. Chapter 6 Meanwhile around Coruscant the Republic Task force was ready to strike finally. Garace Ryn and his temporary padawan, Enach Sundrick. Garace was mediating in his quarters, trying to remember the time when the Republic wasn't at war with the Sith Empire. All he can see in his mediations was betrayal, fear and finally death....death of so many he cares for. Now Garace was very accustomed to the laws of the Jedi Order. One law that even the most famous of all jedi knights give in to is love. whether it be love of a padawan, friend, siblings or even a love of a women. Garace had both a love of a father to his padawan, Izak, but also a forbidden love of a fellow jedi member, Degale Norome. She was very pretty and they were closer then jedi should be. Garace and Degale because of the Sith War have been separated for 7 years fighting the Sith Empire. Garace though often thought of her everyday for those 7 years. Garace's mediation was interrupted when the door ringer beeped. “Yes?” asked a meditating Garace. “Hi!” a shy voice said. Garace looked back in amazement. “Degale is that truly you?” asked a surprised Garace. “Yes Garace, its me.” said Degale happily. As the two talked they were interrupted by the PA, “All hands ready to launch all jedi report to the assembly hangar for debrief.” "Well thats us i think it would be best for each of us to get there separately to keep suspicion down.” said Garace. “I agree with ya” said Degale with a smile. "My jedi brothern today marks the day we claim victory over the sith. The force is on our side, we will take this fleet out and into the battle to rescue the Admiral. The we shall take on the darklord himself and finally destroy him. You jedi are the strongest and most experienced jedi in the order. You are the elite squadron of the jedi because your are the best at what we do. May the Republic be victorious and may the force be with us!” exclaimed a confident Farrik. “Jedi you are dismissed.” said a proud Farrik. Garace walked up to Farrik with Degale at his side. “Master are you sure we can take on Vlug with just 20 jedi elite?” asked Garace. “I mean they will have swarms of droids and sith troops.” said a stern Garace. “Trust me Garace we can do this!” said Farrik. “Ok master we trust you” said Garace as he and Degale walked away. “Trust me,” Farrik thought, “one way or another this will end and Vlug will be destroyed.” thought Farrik gripping his fist ready for the battle ahead. Garace went back to the Harbinger class starship called the Ordo. “Master, do you think we can take down the sith with just this one punch,” asked Enach. “Honestly I just don't know if we can do it. It just seems all to convenient. The mission was to take Onis. And fall back to Coruscant for the counterattack by the Sith. This was never apart of the original plan. Something is wrong. It's like Farrik is ignoring the jedi rules and making this a personal vendetta.” said a questioning Garace. “Sir, it'll be alright plans always change within the military and the order. Besides if we can't trust Farrik who can we trust. It'll be alright you'll see.” said Enach with a nodding smile on his way out of Garace's quarters. “Degale I hope we are alright.” said a now nervous Garace. “I'm sure we will be....besides nothing can stop the jedi. And nothing can stop our love for one another.” said Degale. “Yes its true...” said Garace. As Garace turned around he was on the bridge. Garace was very confused. He was in a alternate reality. He looked around and the bridge was full of dead crew members. Two jedi on board were lying down lifeless including Enach. Then there was movement near the front of the bridge. Degale was held up by the throat and crying for Garace's help. Then an orange lightsaber stabs in the middle of her chest. “NOOO!!” yells Garace. Afterward Degale gets thrown down and a dark figure appears. Theres no doubt that he shadowy figure is a sithlord. He grins and starts smirking, as soon as Garace looked back up the face is darkened, and all that can be seen is a smile and a gouged out eye with a deep scar. Then it spoke to Garace, “This is how it ends....” Then he was shook by Degale. Garace are you ok, you seemed to have spaced out?” asked a concerned Degale. “Yes, it would seem I did. But no worries at all.” said Garace with a fake smile. “You know I can sense you know something is wrong. What is it, it was a vision what did you see?” asked Degale. “I.....I...saw suffering...I..I....I....saw..........Death.....” said a shocked Garace. Now Garace and Degale were both afraid, afraid this mission is doomed to fail. alright thats the end of Chapter 6 its not been beta read but hopfully its a good read... -----signature----- "A padawan's tie to his Master should never be broken in a time of WAR."-Jedi Knight Garace Ryn. http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22902108&brd=10475&replies=0 -Sith Wars Series: A Hero's Legend Ends Padawan to Darth Ishtar
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JediMasterGaraceDane Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 2/13/06 10:58pm Subject: RE: Sith Wars: A Hero's Legend Ends, Chapter 1 new edit 5,6 update 2-14-06
	Added some detail to my characters descriptions in chapter 1 and chapter 5,6 still being beta read. other then that have a joyful read. -----signature----- "A padawan's tie to his Master should never be broken in a time of WAR."-Jedi Knight Garace Ryn. http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22902108&brd=10475&replies=0 -Sith Wars Series: A Hero's Legend Ends Padawan to Darth Ishtar
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