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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/3/08 4:29pm Subject: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge) - Date Edited: 1/3/08 6:31pm (2 edits total) Edited By: Meredith_Kenobi
	This was written for the First Sentence Challenge. It was so quiet, one of the killers would later say, you could almost hear the sound of ice rattling in cocktail shakers in the homes way down the canyon. -Helter Skelter I wasn't sure which era I should post this in, but finally settled on Before. I decided this because it sounds like one of those stories Owen would tell Luke to get him to behave, or summat: "you better behave, Luke, or the Rogue Jawas will get you!" A horror story based on a true story that happened a long time ago. You know. That kind of thing. I still can't decide whether this story is horror or humor. It's kind of disturbing, but amusing at the same time because....well, it's Jawas! You'll see what I mean. I hope you like it. Thanks for reading, friend! ~!~ A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away.... ~!~ It was so quiet, one of the killers would later say, you could almost hear the sound of ice rattling in cocktail shakers in the homes way down the canyon. The canyon had been carved out many, many years ago by some long gone river. Many people found refuge in such canyons as a safe place from the sandstorms that were so common. The deep shadows of the canyon also provided a relief from the blinding twin suns that loomed above in the daylight hours, baking anything in their path. These people built and set up their lives in these dark places: living, dying, laughing, crying. There were fifteen small creatures huddled on a rocky overhang overlooking the deep crag below where the humble dwellings sat. They were dark creatures, body and soul. An aura of wrongness hung about them and smothered the night air. The silence was long and lasting. Nothing could break it. One of the fifteen licked it’s lips and jabbered something to one of it’s fellows. His companion responded with something that sounded like a laugh. They wore dark hooded robes as dark and shadowed as the night. With these robes they became like fingers of the darkness that could reach out and strangle any other living creature. They also wore tinted goggles to conceal the glowing orbs that were so individual to their race. They were Jawas. Jawas are generally even-tempered creatures that care only for shiny things. As harmless scavengers, their smell was known to be far worse than their bite. But in every race it is inevitable that you will find an exception. A black sheep. Or in this case, a bad apple. Fifteen bad apples. These fifteen were infamously known to the people of Tatooine as the Rogue Horrors. They did not scavenge, they stole. They did not sell, they took. They were not harmless, they were bloodthirsty. They were a dark splotch on the desert wall, a black stain that could not be removed. The people below knew nothing of the deadly hammer that hung above their heads. They celebrated the beginning of a new year in a humble, grateful manner. Most of them were poor farmers and honest workers just trying to get through life as honestly and happily as possible. All they wanted was to build a better path for their children than had been set forth for them. It had been a good year. The harvests had been brought in successfully. Their larders were full and their water cisterns brimmed. There had been three new tiny additions to their small community, and only one had left their numbers forever. They raised their glasses to another year as good as the last one had been. Things could certainly be worse. One of the Jawas shifted impatiently. Things were just about to get worse. Flickering yellow lights in the windows below could be seen to blink out as private celebrations broke up. The working class was packing it up early, ever mindful of the chores that would need to be done in the morning. One of the rogue Jawas wore over its robe the polished breast plate of some ancient battle droid. How it had scavenged such an item was beyond anyone’s thinking. The Jawa held itself with a confidence not seen too often in it’s race. It was clear just by looking at him that he was the leader of the bunch. This leader Jawa yipped something to his fellows and gestured with grimy cloth-wrapped hands to the houses below. The other Jawas scurried into action. They broke up into groups of two’s and three’s and began finding individual paths down the walls of the canyon. The best paths were those smooth and well-worn paths created by the diverse wildlife that thrived in the cool shadows of the canyon. The Jawas clambered down these paths like vicious spyders on silky webs, eager to ensnare their prey. Every now and again their scuttling feet would dislodge a large rock or stone and it would clatter noisily down the canyon’s sloped walls, bringing with it a landslide of pebbles and sand. The Jawa’s harsh breathing rasped in the desert night’s icy air, but the monotony of it only added to the night’s silence instead of breaking it. For such small creatures, it didn’t take them long to reach the bottom. They huddled in a group till each one had caught his breath again. They then fanned out in a ‘v’, making their way stealthily towards the human’s domed homes. They did not bother to hide in the shadows, or creep and skulk. The darkness would hide it’s brothers well enough on it’s own. They quickly reached the first dwelling. The leader stood on the tallest one’s shoulders and crawled inside a partially-opened window. He then unlatched the front door and let his fellows inside. Once they were inside, they removed their goggles. Sharpened teeth glinted maliciously within the darkness of their hoods. The first thing the humans would see when they were awoken would be many small, intense yellow lights glowing in the darkness. They wouldn’t understand what was happening. They would be too confused to worry or cry out. It would also be the last thing they ever saw. ~!~ THE END. Or is it? creepy music plays Yes, it is. ~!~ -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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Kidan Title: TFN EU Staff Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 1/3/08 7:23pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	I liked it!! Thought it was a great little job, especially as a story from within the universe. Thanks for participating! -----signature----- You sadistic Yank!! - McEwok No Krakana - http://nokrakana.wrighton.org Don't blame me, I voted for Ron Paul
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BrentusofGath Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 1/4/08 8:20pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	As harmless scavengers, their smell was known to be far worse than their bite. Uh, yeah, I imagine the smell would be rather... overpowering. One of the Jawas shifted impatiently. Things were just about to get worse. Hehe, I like the way he thinks. Sharpened teeth glinted maliciously within the darkness of their hoods. Oooo, I like the descriptions. Looks like there'll be a high time in the old town tonight. Cute viggie there Meredith. -----signature----- In time or so I'm told, I'm just another soul for sale, oh well Feel it in my bones when you break my back, break it just to watch me bend Why'd you have to go and Let it Die? -Foo Fighters http://conscienceoftheking.blogspot.com/
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Lola64 Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 1/4/08 8:31pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	That was a neat story. Yes, I can see this definitely be told to little children on Tatooine, a SW type boogeyman scarytale. Who would have thunk there could be evil jawas. A great use of the First Sentence. -----signature----- Kyp/Nurse Lola: the new ship I stalk people. It's a Lola thing. Senator & Dozen 11 of the KDFC
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/8/08 6:21pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	Kidan: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. BrentusofGath: Hee hee. "Cute". Thanks for reading this, friend. Lola64: I love the idea of evil Jawas. I hope to expand on it in a whole series of little vignettes and short stories. excited giggle Thanks for R&Ring! -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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HyperionRising Registered: Sep '07	Date Posted: 1/10/08 3:20am Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	That was simply brilliant. -----signature----- The Shattered Galaxy: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27470222&brd=10477&start=27470240 Adventure. Romance. AU. A depressing lack of Ewoks. Padawan of SIthGirl132 Proud Master of thesporkbewithyou
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KELIA Title: The Pretty In Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/10/08 3:47am Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	Ooohhhh that was creepy! But very well written. I can just picture the band of tiny jawas swarming down on their prey. Great response to the challenge -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 Undue Circumstances: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28530583/p1/?10
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager in Combat Boots Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 1/10/08 7:51am Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	The first thing the humans would see when they were awoken would be many small, intense yellow lights glowing in the darkness. They wouldn’t understand what was happening. They would be too confused to worry or cry out. It would also be the last thing they ever saw. Amazing! I loved it. -----signature----- Someone who loves me carries an M16. My baby boy wears combat boots.
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brodiew Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 1/10/08 10:34am Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge) - Date Edited: 1/10/08 10:39am (1 edits total) Edited By: brodiew
	What powerful imagery! You created such a sense of menace without scenes of groteque killings. The tension and anticipation was enough. They were dark creatures, body and soul. An aura of wrongness hung about them and smothered the night air. Brilliant. Again, wonderful description. They wore dark hooded robes as dark and shadowed as the night. With these robes they became like fingers of the darkness that could reach out and strangle any other living creature. That's pretty scary. Sharpened teeth glinted maliciously within the darkness of their hoods. I wouldn't want to wake up to that either. Very well done, Meredith. -----signature----- Drabble Babble the Third: http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29083113/p1/?23
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JadeSolo Title: NSF managing NSWFF Registered: Sep '02	Date Posted: 1/11/08 1:10pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	Ahhh! You made the Jawas scary. The best part was the pack attack at the end. I will now think twice before I make fun of their smell. -----signature----- "If you expect a kick in the balls and you get a slap in the face, it's a victory." "May God bless you and keep you always...I mean that in a civic deist way." -Prof. Siegel "No guaranteed money, but all guaranteed fun!"
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silverfighter Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 1/12/08 8:26am Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	Wow, that was creepy. I'm very glad I decided to wait until this morning to read it instead of 1AM last night. The first thing the humans would see when they were awoken would be many small, intense yellow lights glowing in the darkness. They wouldn’t understand what was happening. They would be too confused to worry or cry out. It would also be the last thing they ever saw. Oy. That haunts me now. That was well written. Good job! ~Silverfighter -----signature----- "Today in the town of David a Savior has been born to you; he is Christ the Lord." ~~*~~ "Glory to God in the highest, and on earth peace to men on whom his favor rests."
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/14/08 6:47pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	HyperionRising: And you are simply awesome for reading this. Thanks, HyperionRising! KELIA: Thanks, KELIA! I'm glad you liked it. VaderLVR64: Thank you so much, VaderLVR64. brodiew: Thanks for your awesome review, brodie! JadeSolo: You had better! Otherwise these little Jawas might come to yuor home to make you apologize. Thanks for reading, JadeSolo! silverfighter: Yeah, maybe not the best thing to read just before you go to bed. I'm glad you enjoyed this, silverfighter! Thanks for R&Ring, friend. -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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ZaraValinor Registered: May '02	Date Posted: 1/14/08 8:56pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	Okay, this kind of creeped me out, but in a fun way. I really enjoyed it. Bravo! -----signature----- Proud Master to Meredith_Kenobi & Lolly_Tolly "He full-on Obi-Wan'd me!" Dean Winchester - Supernatural
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Dar_manda Registered: Dec '07	Date Posted: 1/15/08 4:32pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	Really enjoyed that, well done! Nice to see good use of implied horror rather than out and out blood-guts'n'gore type stuff. I'll never look at a Jawa the same way again. -----signature----- Padawan to Darth_Gangrenous Karen Traviss For MANDALORE!! No I'm not going to kill ya! I need a sprinkle you onion! - The Hitcher Proud Fan-fic Padawan to BrentusofGath.
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/25/08 4:53pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	ZaraValinor: I'm always pleased to, um, freak you out. Thank you for the read, Zara! Dar_manda: I'll never look at a Jawa the same way again. That's a lovely compliment! In a sort of bizarre twisted way...I love it! Thank you! -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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Jade_Pilot Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 1/28/08 12:22pm Subject: RE: Tiny Little Horrors: when Jawas go bad (RE First Sentence Challenge)
	Oh wow! What a great job you did! That was totally creepy and believable. shudders Well done! -----signature----- "It is in giving that we receive." ~ St. Francis of Assisi
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