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moosemousse Title: CR - FF:UK South Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 1/8/08 9:16am Subject: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Title: Something Always Goes Wrong Author(s): moosemousse Timeframe: before TPM Characters: OCs Genre: Humour Keywords: Problems, travelling, humour Summary: Two young Jedi experience difficulties while travelling around. Notes: Written for the 'Essential Guide to OCs' January challenge. "There's been a complication." I stared incredulously at her as she walked over from whereever she had been. The journey so far had been wrought with problems and I really should have expected this. I tried not to bite her head off. "What's gone wrong now?" "Ah, well, the ship we were supposed to be travelling on has had a problem with the engines." To say that this girl had a penchant for understatements would itself be an understatement worthy of her. "What kind of problem." "They, um, blew up." She paused. "Along with the rest of the ship." Another pause, "and the dockyard as well." I hold my breath and guessed that I was going a strange colour as I saw her visibly flinch. I closed my eyes and sighed. "Have you managed to sort out a new ship? I was kind of hoping to be home by tomorrow, or the next day." "Yes, I have, but, um, it won't get there tomorrow." I open one eye, "how long will it take?" "A few days, maybe more." I raise an eyebrow. "A bit longer than a week." I raised my eyebrow a bit more. "Two weeks, at the most." I closed my eyes and tried to find my calm centre. "Two weeks? I supposed we'll at least have bunks so it can't be that bad." She cleared her throat and I sensed more bad news. "They don't have sleeping quarters." I open my eyes wide, fairly sure that they are now bulging out of their sockets. "They expect us to spend two weeks sitting down? How are we supposed to sleep?" "There's no seating either." My voice deserted me and I stood there gesticulating wildly. "Tell me everything," I managed to say after a few minutes. I then changed my mind. "On seconds thoughts, show me the ship." "OK," she said, smiling in a way that seemed to unnerve me though I can't think why. "It's this way," she turned and walked off. I followed behind her and we soon came to a reasonably large ship. It looked like it could have been a passenger vessel for trips between planets in the same system. The only difference was that it had no windows and it had markings to indicate that it carried plants and vegetable matter. I didn't take this to be a good sign. The captain saw us approaching and shuffled over to us. He was a gruff old man with limp, and tatty coat and a worn out cloth cap. His accent was weird as well. "So, you're the what-d'ya-ma-call-ems, the Jedi?" I was about to offer my hand when I saw his. They looked like they were made of stone and rough enough to wear away plasteel. I quite like my skin so I just nodded, "yes, we are." He nodded gruffly, "very well, I'll show you around." He turned and walked onto his ship. I followed last and missed the first few words he said. "-not much room, I'm afraid. There's bedding for the crew but that's it." We emerged into a vast hydroponics bay, a vast array and network of pipes ran overhead. "This is the what-d'ya-call-it, the hydroponics bay. Not much to say really. Stuff grows here." He shrugged. He pointed around and indicated various places before turning back to us. "Take off is in one standard hour, try not to be late." He turned and shuffled off. I looked at my companion who was looking very pleased with herself. "This is really quite nice," she said with a smile. "Remind me never to travel with you ever again, unless it's me who's in charge of organising everything. There's barely enough room in here to stand, let alone sit. Even if we could sit comfortably the overhead irrigation would . ." I trailed off and looked up. I ran off looking for the captain. When I found him he was signing some flimsies and I waited until he was finish. He turned and looked at me. "What do you want?" "The pipes in the irrigation bay," I began, "how strong are they?" He stroked his chin, it was thick with coarse stubble and it rasped loudly. "They're supposed to be strong enough to hold a what-d'ya-ma-call-em, a rancor, but I don't know." I thought for a moment. "Thank you very much." I wandered back to the ship and climbed on board. "I have good news," I said as I entered the hydroponics bay. "I've found somewhere for us to sleep!" "Where?" She looked at me sceptically. I pointed up. "Those pipes can hold a rancor, apparently, so they should be able to hold us. All that's needed is some padding, and our robes will do for that." Using the Force to get a small boost I jump up into the piping and climb onto a wide section of closely spaced pipes. It wasn't ideal, but at least the view of the plants was nice. -----signature----- Vader's Mousedroid Society Fanfic links in my bio My fan art: http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/26961879/ when infected with Small Child the victim continues to swell for nine months before the infection can be safely removed
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/8/08 6:26pm Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour) - Date Edited: 1/8/08 6:26pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Meredith_Kenobi
	The situation just kept getting worse and worse! I didn't know what she was gonna say next, I just knew it was gonna be something bad. The captain cracked me up, too, with all his quirky "what-d'ya-ma-call-em's". He solved the problem rather well. Certainly not ideal. The way his day was going, I expected the pipes to break the moment he climbed on! I really enjoyed this. -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 1/9/08 4:52am Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Very cute. Loved that the day just got worse and worse. Good job. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 9/22/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 11/20/08 jedidas3's Master At last - Hope for our country
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Thumper09 Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 1/10/08 4:30pm Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Wow, and I thought I had a trying day, but that's nothing compared to what the narrator was dealing with. Very cool story! I liked all the understatements, and it was fun trying to guess from those how bad the situation really was. Nice solution to the sleeping problem, too. Good job! -Thumper -----signature----- "Like anything worth writing, it came inexplicably and without method." -Karen Eiffel, _Stranger Than Fiction_ Commencement--Rebel pilot OCs, OT: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/29543892
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yodas_waiter Registered: Oct '06	Date Posted: 1/26/08 6:48am Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Oh to be the bearer of bad news! Very cute story, I especially liked the ending which had a pictoresque (for lack of better word) feel to it -----signature----- Padawan to Sionnach-Airgid Author of Chyler databank entry Nominated Best New Author in Before the Saga 06/07 The Enforcer (SW Super-hero tribute): http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28028864/p1/?2
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earlybird-obi-wan Registered: Aug '06	Date Posted: 1/26/08 10:05am Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	loved it and no place else to sleep? It's like a submarine. WW2 version where they slept on the torpedoes. Nice response to the challenge. -----signature----- writer and Star Wars fan FANART [link=http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/25793899]fanart[/link] stories in my bio
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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 1/26/08 12:04pm Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	My voice deserted me and I stood there gesticulating wildly. "Tell me everything," I managed to say after a few minutes. I then changed my mind. "On seconds thoughts, show me the ship." "OK," she said, smiling in a way that seemed to unnerve me though I can't think why. "It's this way," she turned and walked off. She reminds me of Luna Lovegood for some reason. -----signature----- "Change. It can be good. It can be bad. It can be expected or come as a thief in the night. Invited or not, it always comes." ~Koria "Tender Shadows", co-written w/ The Musical Jedi "Two Peas Out of the Pod" http://www.nanowrimo.org/eng/user/205643
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Commander-DWH Registered: Nov '03	Date Posted: 1/26/08 4:34pm Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Heh, excellent solution to the day that just seemed to get worse with every step. Very entertaining, and a great response to the challenge. Good work! -----signature----- Complements (KOTOR)- http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/21177927/ Luminosity- http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27900517/ Barefoot hippie in the OC revolution Master of the lovely and talented SoA
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Onoto Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 1/27/08 7:46pm Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	That situation was deteriorating so fast, it's not even funny. Well, yes, it is funny, but that's just an expression. Nice work! -----signature----- A mathematician is a device for turning coffee into theorems. ~Paul Erdos
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Jade_Max Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 1/28/08 2:51am Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Oh you poor, poor Jedi! No bunks, no seating and having to stay for two weeks in a hydroponics bay? ROFL! Could things get any worse? I love the Jedi's solution - sleeping on the piping might not be the most comfortable thing in the world, but at least they don't have to stand for two weeks now! -----signature----- You'll Like me when I'm Dead - V/P Dark Drama - http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/29236355 Don't think, write. And have faith that your subconscious mind is smarter than you.- lazy RIP my little Nibbler
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MsLanna Title: CR GSFF Central Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/30/08 4:58am Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	So this is how Murphy works in the GFFA. Good job at countering him, though. And they did get off planet. Not that i would want to travel with them. -----signature----- Padawan owned by Corellian_Ale Self-Appointed Indoctrinatress of CloneCaptainRex. Proud FanFic Master of Darth_Sathanos Master of MasterMonkey13 Welcome New Villains: The Puzzler!
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Luton_Plunder Registered: Jun '06	Date Posted: 2/1/08 4:19am Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Hey Moosemousse, great response to the challenge! Had me engaged right from the start, because I'm a sucker for lines like this: To say that this girl had a penchant for understatements would itself be an understatement worthy of her. Your character had a great voice [face_laughing]. Little moments like the one above, and: I quite like my skin so I just nodded really bring characters to life for me. Well done -----signature----- The Essential Guide to OCs. Say No to Mary. http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/25562370/p1
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Raptor517 Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 2/1/08 7:28am Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	I enjoyed this one quite a bit--though I'm curious as to whether or not there was actually a sign that said the pipes could hold a rancor. And if so, how would they know that...? Raptor517 -----signature----- Piercing the Darkness http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28010631/p1/?1 His Brother's Words http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/26020497/p1/?3 Metamorphosis http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24997946/p5/?7 Intelligence vs Canon htt
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BigE Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 2/1/08 9:58am Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Using the Force to get a small boost I jump up into the piping and climb onto a wide section of closely spaced pipes. It wasn't ideal, but at least the view of the plants was nice. Lol- that was funny. I loved how the bad news was delivered piecemeal: "A few days, maybe more." I raise an eyebrow. "A bit longer than a week." I raised my eyebrow a bit more. "Two weeks, at the most." A cute tale. Nicely done!! -----signature----- Aha! That's it. Hold it right there. Pronoun trouble. It's not "he doesn't have to shoot YOU now," it's "he doens't have to shoot ME now." Well I say he DOES have to shoot me now!! So shoot me now!
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The_Face Title: Ex-Manager, now with more real butter flavor Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 2/1/08 5:08pm Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Good response! The captain's tics added some good atmosphere. Especially enjoyed the slow reveal of every little thing going wrong. -----signature----- “The light shines in the darkness, but the darkness has not understood it.” - John 1:5
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moosemousse Title: CR - FF:UK South Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 2/2/08 12:48pm Subject: RE: Something always goes wrong (OCs, humour)
	Raptor517 posted: I enjoyed this one quite a bit--though I'm curious as to whether or not there was actually a sign that said the pipes could hold a rancor. And if so, how would they know that...? Raptor517 I don't really know, all I know is that they asked the captain and he knew. As for how he knew, I'm not so sure. -----signature----- Vader's Mousedroid Society Fanfic links in my bio My fan art: http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/26961879/ when infected with Small Child the victim continues to swell for nine months before the infection can be safely removed
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