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Princess_Arulmozhi Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 12/21/04 3:21am Subject: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui) - Updated 30/04/2007 - Date Edited: 4/30/07 6:28am (18 edits total) Edited By: Princess_Arulmozhi
	BY THE PRICKING OF MY THUMBS... Title: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' Author: Princess_Arulmozhi Timeframe: JA,I think. Obi-Wan's 19. Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi, Qui-Gon Jinn Genre: Hmm. Humour? Mush? A bit of both, I think. Summary: Obi-Wan learns...to sew. Among other things. Notes: This is my first fic, actually - and as I've never read any of the JA/JQ/whatever books (you don't get them where I live), I apologize for blunder(s) committed. And oh...English isn't my native tongue. Disclaimer: I make no money out of this, and the characters belong to George Lucas. Note 2: // Indicates conversation via bond. But you know that. *************************** "Argh." Obi-Wan Kenobi dropped the needle and sucked his finger, on which a bright red spot of blood had promptly appeared. "Oh, blast." //Padawan? Is something wrong?,// And double blast. He had forgotten to raise his shields. But what was his master doing, eavesdropping on his mind? //No, master. Nothing is the matter.// //The truth, Obi-Wan.// //When have I ever lied to you?// //50, 678 times.// Obi-wan blinked. //You actually kept count?// //Don't change the subject, Padawan mine. And the truth - what have you done now?// //Aside from pricking myself with this sith-blasted needle for about the thousandth time, nothing else, Master.// A mental sigh, though flecked with amusement. //Language, Obi-Wan, language.// //I do try, master. But it's hard to, with this new-fangled assignment you've seen fit to torture me with.// //Ah. Ingenuity is my middle name, young one.// Obi-Wan snorted. //I could think of better names, revered Master mine.// //I'm well aware of your proficiency with nicknames. Never try that with me, though.// Obi-Wan knelt down to pick up the errant needle from the floor, and ended up meshing it further into the carpeting. Stifling a curse, he pressed his finger firmly on it, and succeeded in bringing it up, firmly stuck to his finger. //Considering the leisurely way in which you're taking this conversation, Master...I gather the seminar isn't going well.// //On the contrary, Padawan, it is going exceedingly well.// //Ah.// There was a brief pause, during which Obi-Wan re-doubled his efforts to thread the needle. A smile apeared on his face as he waited. //As a matter of fact...// His Master's mental voice trailed away. //Yes, Master?// //I have a sore back, the Twi'lek to my left is snoring, and the speaker is an enthusiastic Corellian who insists on his audience receiving a bath.// Ob-Wan's smile grew. //A bath?// //Each word is a watery assault. And I'm seated in the front row.// Obi-Wan raised his eyes in mock anguish. //My poor Master. Though I must admit you deserve this.// //Insolent wretch.// //If you will insist on being one of the best swordsmen in the Galaxy, Master - together with being one of the most dignified members of the Most Enlightened Order of Force-Sensitive Beings...a lecture on 'The intricacies of Sebullian Funeral Customs' isn't something you can escape.// //Such impudence, padawan. Remind me to set you on kitchen duty the rest of this month.// //Thank the Force. We'll have Non-Charcoal toast the whole month.// //And cleaning the refresher tanks for the next six weeks.// A pause. //Pardon me, Master. No unsavoury word regarding your accomplishments will ever pass my lips again.// //Why am I not particularly glad at that statement?// //You possess an unnaturally suspicious nature, Master. As well as one that exults in torture. I've pricked my finger again.// //Which merely indicates that you're not doing it right. Take the thread and...ease it into the needle's eye. I did, after all, demonstrate it to you.// Squinting, Obi-Wan brought the thread slowly to the needle, poked it in...to see it appear on the other side - apparently without having passed through the eye at all. He sighed. //Careful padawan. There's a storm rising.// //I was sighing, Master.// //Indeed. For a moment I imagined myself on Tyrne IV, known for its typhoons.// //I would much rather be* on Tyrne IV, typhoon or not.// //Patience, young one. Remember why I gave this assigment to you, in the first place.// Obi-Wan raised tortured eyes to the ceiling. //To drive me out of my mind, once and for all?// //A praiseworthy object, though not stricly accurate. Try again.// The Padawan sent his thoughts back to a week in the past. They had been sparring... *************** I'm almost afraid of reviews. -----signature----- Perceptions (Xanatos/Obi/Qui/Anakin) AU:http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/25276178/p1/?7 - vignette Stones (Li'l Obi/Qui) - http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/23371821/p1/ Best Author, WFFA (BtS) 05/06 Lore-Master to 7
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 12/21/04 3:55am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	You shouldn't be afraid. This was adorable. I loved that Qui-Gon was so bored that he was having a telepathic discussion with his Padawan and that Obi-Wan was clumsy with the needle. Doesn't he know that the sewing is never complete without a little blood? LOL. Great job. Keep going. I'd never know that English isn't your native language. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 9/22/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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Master_Noi Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 12/21/04 6:09am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	I can just imagine Qui being bored at a conference. That was a cute little piece. -----signature----- For Such a Time as This ( 09/21/08) A Shrouded Path (08/31/08)
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager in Combat Boots Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 12/21/04 6:20am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	That was great! I really enjoyed it. You did a wonderful job with their banter, and they were both very much in character. Loved it! -----signature----- If you have to choose between tears and laughter, remember that laughter burns more calories. Proud New Army Mom - off to bootcamp!
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SarkaVrae Title: PR Emeritus Chattanooga Registered: Jun '04	Date Posted: 12/21/04 6:45am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	I too really enjoyed this! Very amusing conversatin so far. Can't wait for an update. -----signature----- http://www.connooga.com TEH BESTEST CON EVAR! are you crazy? it's a very dangerous thing to do exactly what you want TwiLekJedi is so silly "I will sin my own sins, with my eyes open"
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/21/04 7:29am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	Good god, your first fic, you try humour and English isn't your first language? Honey, if this is what you produce on your first try, you're not going to have any problems whatsoever. You succeeded wonderfully on all sides. The humour was dead-on and the conversation was totally realistic. Looking forward to more! Cheers, Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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MistiWhitesun Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/21/04 8:24am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	Fine job! English isn't your first language? [dropped_jaw] You've got to be kidding me… Keep writing! -----signature----- Fade to Black (Vader finds Scout) http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/25847641/p1 "I should've known it would come to this."
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Eme-ma_Himou Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/21/04 8:55am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	this is GREAT! great comedy and one of the best Fanfics I have read so far... But there is one thing I found a problem with: keep writing! Finish this story! Are you sure english isn't your first language? That's wierd... by the way, what is your native language?
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 12/21/04 9:53am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	This was really cute! You did a fantastic job with keeping Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon both in character and AI look forward to seeing more of this story Are you SURE english isn't your first language? -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/21/04 3:14pm Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui)
	Oh, that was lovely indeed! I love that Qui-Gon is trying to teach Obi-Wan to sew. Yes, it does require much patience. Just wait until the poor dear realizes he's made a mistake and then has to do it over again! Patience, patience, patience! The banter was great. I'd totally forgotten you said English wasn't your first language as I read. Very wonderful first stab at writing, so to speak. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Princess_Arulmozhi Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 12/22/04 1:12am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui) - Date Edited: 12/24/04 6:52am (1 edits total) Edited By: Princess_Arulmozhi
	Peeps in cautiously, wondering if anyone has looked in... *shrieks in ecstasy, at the feedback. Oh, oh oh!* levitates into the stratosphere at the thought of so many great writers responding - then reluctantly settles down.* dianethx: Thanks:) Have always wanted to portray something of this kind between Qui and Obi. I love mush and angst - but I also love ordinary conversation - sometimes! {And may I say here that I loved your 'The Loud Exhale'.:-) Master_Noi: Ah. (bows) Thank you, Master. VaderLVR64: heaves sigh of relief. Thanks. Now that was something I hoped I didn't mess up - the characters, I mean. It's easy to go over-board...and, well, make it - too sappy. Sarkavrae: And an update is what you'll get.:) Shaindl: skips in glee** Oooohhh! That, from another master story-teller...! I am glad the humour worked out - I was wondering if I shouldn't have included that word.:-)Thank you so much. MistiWhiteSun: Thanks. I will:) - so beware! Eme-ma_Himou: Wow. Thanks.:-)As for my native tongue - not sure if you've heard of it - it's Tamil. Now you know. Layren: Glad you enjoyed it - considering how I enjoyed myself over the Qui-Gon medical records:-). And I'm sure <grin> AthenaLeigh: 'My first stab' is right. I hope I make it through.:-)And Obi-Wan has a lot to get thru before he masters the art.:-) Now for the update. Note 1: I've no idea if healer Han'yaei appears in the JA series, or is the figment of someone's remarkable imagination here - I first read of him in Layren's 'Qui-Gon medical records' fic. If anyone'll tell me, I'll put in the necessary acknowledgements.:-) Note 1a: Healer Han'yaei is Layren's property - I'm putting him in with her permission. Thanks, L Note 2: I started out wanting to write a small bit, but it grew and grew and...you can see the result for yourself. keeping fingers crossed **************************************************** Part 2 At any rate, they had tried to. A week earlier, they had returned to Coruscant after what had, in both their opinions, been an irritating mission at best, complicated by exhaustion. Several warring factions on Nelth V, to which freezing planet they had been sent, served to break down negotiations - resulting in a whole-sale riot which the Jedi Master, in a rare fit of irritation, had described as a 'no holds-barred brawl - and one in which our younglings would have conducted themselves better.' Obi-Wan had not felt so charitable. A gash in his side caused during said 'brawl' had not made things any better - he had to admit that it might have been worse, if Qui-Gon had not despatched his attacker in short order. As it was, the injury had been serious enough to force him to spend the hours travelling back home in a healing trance. Returning to the city-planet invoked mixed feelings in him - he was glad to step inside the Temple, which had a calming influence on him - but had he been given a choice to spend a week in meditation, or a day at the healers - he would have taken the first choice without a murmur. Events, however, had proceeded fairly smoothly. Qui-Gon left to meet the Council, having assured himself that Obi-Wan received medical treatment - fortunately, the latter's presence had not been insisted upon. The apprentice had submitted, after extracting a promise from Healer Han'yaie that a ward would not be named after him. Reports, meetings and de-briefings followed, and a day later, the council had pronounced itself satisfied with the proceedings - excepting the riot. It was the tentative opinion of one or two honoured members that this could have been avoided. Fortunately, Master Windu and Yoda put their foot and claws down for once, claiming that all had been done that could have been done, and if the citizens of Nelth V derived amusement from butchering themselves against all reason - it was cold enough for that - then so be it. And Qui-Gon had left, filled with relief that the demands of protocol had been satisfied. The master's thoughts had then returned to his apprentice as he watched over Obi-Wan, recovering from the after-effects of Nelth V. Two days later Obi-Wan returned to normal - he seemed to have recovered his appetite, at any rate - and the master decided that they would proceed with their lawful pursuits. As far as possible. Their day had begun ordinarily - considering both master's and apprentice's reputation for seemingly normal situations turning awry. Qui-Gon had risen at his usual unearthly hour, and had succeeded in rousing his drowsy apprentice - he had simply Force-rolled the young man out of bed, sheets floating in mid-air. Obi-Wan briefly considered a show of in-subordination - but decided against it. Irritation was extremely un-Jedi-like...and might, possibly, result in hours of meditation on his wrong-doings. And meditation, he decided, was the last thing he wanted to do. Sleep, now, he mused. That wouldn't be too bad. "Obi-Wan," came the call of his master's voice from the kitchen. "I'm not going to allow you to take up permanent residence within your sleeping quarters, so you may as well step out." Obi-Wan stifled a yawn and dragged his unco-operative legs into the refresher. Qui-Gon walked out from the kitchen, in time to see his apprentice vanish through the doorway, sleep-robe trailing along the floor. Smiling, he set out the dishes on the tiny, space saving table in the common living area. I wonder if he's ready for it, he mused. I was, when I first encountered it...but then, I was considerably older. Old enough to concede defeat. I wonder if- His ponderings came to an abrupt end as Obi-Wan walked into the living area, fully dressed. "I'm ready, Master." He turned his attention to the braid falling to his chest, intent on adjusting it. Qui-Gon paused in the midst of re-arranging the plates, looking at him. An incident had chosen to unfold within his mind... Delra Ti. A not-so-popular little planet, tucked away in a corner of the Decura Sector. The Temple had sent them both to pick up a contact - why he had chosen such a place to be picked up had not been revealed to them. Ambush had occurred as they were hurrying all a narrow cliff-path towards their ship, waiting on a broader ledge - within a second, master and apprentice conferred among themselves, reaching a decision. Obi-Wan would hold the attackers at bay, while Qui-Gon rushed the shivering 'contact' to safety. There were ten in all - ten brawny yellow-brown beings, brandishing weapons in both hands - aided by a horn on their foreheads - a peculiar part of their anatomy, of which they seemed inordinately proud. It had its uses, certainly, as Obi-Wan found out. Keeping twenty odd weapons and ten horns from making contact with his body did not exactly fall within the bounds of a sparring exercise. Still... Qui-Gon watched the battle out of the corner of his eye, as he helped their contact within the ship. As soon as he was certain that the humanoid was safe, he ran out, his light sabre activated. Obi-Wan had managed to route out four of their attackers, and Qui-Gon joined him in pushing their way through four more. Each found themselves engaged in fighting the last two - who seemed to possess a single-mindedness worthy of a Jedi, as far as battle went. Neither would yield ground, and the master saw his apprentice tiring. Obi-Wan sported two or three impressive injuries on his arms and one on his forehead - it was time to end this. The master swung his blade neatly in an arc through the air, and as expected, the Delran threw his own battle-axe to counter the blow. A swift kick in the abdomen brought him to his knees, and the light sabre crashed down, neatly cleaving the axe in two. Nine down. One to go. Unless Obi-Wan had finished him- He had not. Qui-Gon swung around to see Obi-Wan fall back at a mighty swing of the Delran Battle-axe, and clutch the craggy mountain-face for support. Quelling a brief spurt of unease, the master launched himself against the last Delran warrior. To the left. Slash. Block. Left again. Advance. Block. Regain stance and... Strike. There. It was done. Not dead, but that hand would never raise a battale-ax again. He drew a deep breath, suddenly feeling weak as the moment passed. Now for Obi-Wan. Stumbling a little - his ankle had twisted itself, he remembered vaguely, and there was blood soaking his tunic from a gash in his arm - he took a step towards the cliff-face. "Padawan, are you alright?" he tried to reach his apprentice through the Force, assessing his injuries. "What-" He was tired, and he hadn't been careful. He had been worried about Obi-Wan - and that was probably why he hadn't sensed the last Delran stagger to his feet, raising his battle-axe... ...with his left hand. Oh, how stupid - especially for a Jedi Master, he remembered thinking idly, as he watched the enemy swing his weapon into the air. He was too close. Too near, yet too far, Obi-Wan. His arms felt like lead. Cannot raise my sabre. Wonder why. Oh yes, blood-loss. I wonder if it's too painful... There was an other-wordly shriek from somewhere behind him - to his right. Something streaked past him in a whirl of brown and tan. He blinked. Obi-Wan? The whirling dervish resolved into a young man -a young man who suddenly materialised in front of the Delran. His sapphire sabre rose to meet the Delran axe - swished into the air, leaving a trail of blue - cut into the weapon - as well as the Delran himself. The battle ax clattered to the ground in five pieces. The Delran looked down on himself, surprised at the blood that had suddenly appeared on his stomach. Mouth agape, he fell into a crumpled heap. Qui-gon fell to his knees, considerably weakened. //Obi-Wan?// The young man twirled around on his heels, his robe fluttering behind him in a graceful arc, his boots scrunching on the earthen floor. His right hand was well away from his body, still holding the activated light-sabre, the blue colour enhancing glittering blue-green eyes. The setting sun of Delra Ti fell beneath the horizon, sending soft, golden rays over the cliff-path, lending an aura of pure light to his form for a brief moment. An angel of light, Qui-gon thought inconsequentially. Now I know what they look like. And then there was nothing. ********* "Master?" Obi-Wan was waving his hands in front of Qui-Gon's face, chuckling. "Coruscant to Master Jinn, who seems to have lost his bearings..." Qui-Gon snapped back to the present, heaving a deep breath. "Focus, master," intoned his padawan. "The here and now. It is only the present that matters..." Qui-Gon smiled, swatting a napkin at the chuckling apprentice. What had he been thinking? Of course the boy was ready. -----signature----- Perceptions (Xanatos/Obi/Qui/Anakin) AU:http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/25276178/p1/?7 - vignette Stones (Li'l Obi/Qui) - http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/23371821/p1/ Best Author, WFFA (BtS) 05/06 Lore-Master to 7
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 12/22/04 4:10am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui) - Updated
	Thanks, Princess for your lovely comment. I love that Obi-Wan was able to rescue Qui-Gon this time. His musings were right on and I loved this part "Master?" Obi-Wan was waving his hands in front of Qui-Gon's face, chuckling. "Coruscant to Master Jinn, who seems to have lost his bearings..." Qui-Gon snapped back to the present, heaving a deep breath. "Focus, master," intoned his padawan. "The here and now. It is only the present that matters..." Qui-Gon smiled, swatting a napkin at the chuckling apprentice. What had he been thinking? Of course the boy was ready. Ah, gotta love it. Great job so far. I'm looking forward to more! -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 9/22/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/22/04 7:10am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui) - Updated
	I second Diane. Thank you for your lovely comment. You're too sweet. Wonderful flashback - Qui seems to be more injured than he realises. Loved his thought about stupid it was for a Jedi Master to underestimate an opponent. The end of the post was good too - I'm really enjoying the gentle humour here. Great job! Shaindl PS: If you don't mind my asking, what part of India are you from? -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/22/04 7:37pm Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui) - Updated
	Oh, interesting. Nice battle scene. The apprentice had submitted, after extracting a promise from Healer Han'yaie that a ward would not* be named after him.* giggles at that part Great work so far. Can't wait for more. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Valiowk Registered: Apr '00	Date Posted: 12/23/04 6:20am Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui) - Updated
	"Coruscant to Master Jinn, who seems to have lost his bearings..." That was cute! I can't really see the connection between the two posts yet, but I'm sure that you'll develop the story well in future. Looking forward to reading more!
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager in Combat Boots Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 12/23/04 2:29pm Subject: RE: 'By the pricking of my thumbs...' JA, (Obi/Qui) - Updated
	How did I miss the second post? I love this story. You're very good at battle scenes, a talent I envy! Great work! You're a very good writer. -----signature----- If you have to choose between tears and laughter, remember that laughter burns more calories. Proud New Army Mom - off to bootcamp!
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