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To You - - A Qui-Gon/Tahl Romance in Short Installments, JA, AU - COMPLETE - We Live - 17-Sept-2007
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ardavenport
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6/23/07 1:31pm
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To You - - A Qui-Gon/Tahl Romance in Short Installments, JA, AU - COMPLETE - We Live - 17-Sept-2007
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Title: To You
Author: ardavenport
Timeframe: pre-Episode I, pre-TPM, JA, AU
Genre: drama, romance
Characters: Tahl, Qui-Gon, Bant, Obi-Wan, Yoda, Jedi
Keywords Tahl, JA, Qui-Gon Jinn, Obi-Wan Kenobi, Yoda, Jedi, the Force
Summary: Qui-Gon was captured and held prisoner on New Aposlon in Jedi Apprentice #14, #15. Now Tahl deals with the aftermath.
Notes: This is a little experiment in style for me, first person and told in short installments.
And: typo is my middle name, with missing words and errors that spell checkers don’t catch being my speciality – if you see any, just post a reply or send a PM with the what and where and I will kill them with no mercy.
Disclaimer: All characters belong to George and Lucasfilm; I’m just playing in their sandbox
//^^\\v//^^\\v//^^\\_ He Lives _//^^\\v//^^\\v//^^\\
They finally let me into the room.
'His vital signs are dropping,' the doctor said. But he is only a doctor.
One of the medical people leads me in, but I push the arm away when I know we are close. I reach out and my hands touch the padded edge of a diagnostic table. Then I find him. The skin of his arm is cold and I cannot stop the sudden fear inside me. I brush past sensors and tubes and find his hair and face.
I am close enough to feel his breath on my lips. It is so faint. My fingers touch his mouth.
"Qui-Gon. . . ."
'The damage is severe,' the doctor said. Now I can feel it as I had not, as I would not hear in their voices when they finally came after working so long on him.
I feel his head move a tiny bit. He is weak. His great strength is gone, drained from him by the evil device he was imprisoned in for so long. It took so long to find him and the treachery in our midst. The betrayers are undone, but Qui-Gon . . . . there seems so little left of him.
"Tahl. . . ." he breathes. "I could not go without seeing you again."
"Stay," I plead. I have never begged for anything as I do now. "You came to me and told me my own feelings when I did not know them myself. You cannot go now." My eyes sting with tears. I press my forehead to his and they fall on him. "I pledge myself to you, Qui-Gon. You must stay."
I take everything I have inside me, my love, the Force, my own breath and I will it into him. It seems so small compared to the great strength that has always been Qui-Gon. There is so little left now that my blind eyes weep freely. There must be more. Just a little bit more. Just enough.
I feel movement and I know he feels what I feel. My hand goes to his chest; I search for the life left within him. He breathes in.
"Stay," I beg. "Please."
He breathes out.
He breathes in again.
It is a small motion of his body. But it is enough. His skin is wet and warmed under my tears.
He breathes out.
He breathes in.
I am frozen in place, breathing with him. I dare not move. Nothing else exists except for this. There is nothing else for a very long, long time. The Force is faint in him, but it stays.
Eventually there is motion around us. Medical sounds and then hands and voices. I will not be moved and the others move past me.
"Tahl?" The voice has been calling to me and I can no longer ignore it. "Please, the doctors need to put in a breathing tube. Let them help him." It is Qui-Gon's Padawan, Obi-Wan.
I lift my head and he pulls me away, his hands on my shoulders. I am startled when my hand no longer touches Qui-Gon's chest but Obi-Wan grabs my wrists; his grip is gentle but strong. Obi-Wan is so much bigger then I recall, almost man-sized. When did this happen?
"Tahl, please. They need to help him now." The voices of the medical people are no longer muffled. They have become efficient again amidst the beeps and buzzes of their machines. There are still doubts among them, but I know. . . .
. . . .Qui-Gon will live.
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Layren
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RE: To You - - A Qui-Gon/Tahl Romance in Short Installments, JA, AU - He Lives - 23-June-2007
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Ooooooooh a Qui/Tahl AU!  It's been ages since I've read a good Qui/Tahl story. Really interesting beginning, so Qui-Gon was the one injured instead it seems, looks like a great start! Please put me on the PM list for this story, I don't want to miss any of it 
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LilQui-Gon
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Oh goodie A Qui-Gon/Tahl Romance. My favorite.
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ratna
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6/23/07 3:25pm
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Ooooh! Love it love it love it!
Beautiful beginning to what I just know is going to be another one of your wonderful stories.
Can't wait for more. Please put me on PM list.
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Fifilla
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6/24/07 10:56pm
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 That was wonderful! I loved it very much!!!
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Nimloth
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Very moving beginning
I take everything I have inside me, my love, the Force, my own breath and I will it into him. It seems so small compared to the great strength that has always been Qui-Gon. There is so little left now that my blind eyes weep freely. There must be more. Just a little bit more. Just enough.
I feel movement and I know he feels what I feel. My hand goes to his chest; I search for the life left within him. He breathes in.
Please, continue soon.
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Kynstar
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Yay! One with those two and she's still alive! Awsome! Can't wait for more! Great start!
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Ooooo! Qui/Tahl romance! There isn't enough of that on these boards...Qui needs some love, too! Please put me on the pm list for this if you're doing one. Very much looking foreward to the next installment. Just one question--what continuity is this in? Does Tahl have a padawan?
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What a wonderful start. Found myself holding my breath whiel she willed him to breath. Please add me to the PM list.
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Current PM List
Layren
ratna
Luminara_Kenobi
Healer_Leona
Layren: Thanks for the reply! I don't do much romance, but this idea just demanded to be written.
LilQui-Gon: Thanks for reading!
ratna: Glad you like it; thanks!
Fifilla: Thanks!
Nimloth: Thanks!
Kynstar: Oh, it would be tough to do a romance with her dead! Force ghosts just arn't that romantic. Thanks for reading!
Luminara_Kenobi: Yes, Tahl does have a padawan, and Qui-Gon does get a little love. Thanks for reading!
Healer_Leona: Aaaaaah, but I couldn't start a 'romance' if Qui-Gon died in the first chapter! More to come. Thanks for the reply!
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//^^\\v//^^\\v//^^\\_ We Return _//^^\\v//^^\\v//^^\\
The medical people are still there, they and their machines and droids. They have just reconfigured themselves into a portable unit around Qui-Gon for the trip back to Coruscant.
Mace Windu came to New Apsolon to salvage the mission as much as it could be. The people I had come to help betrayed me for nothing more than political power. But I have no feelings left for them. Everything is for Qui-Gon now.
I take my seat in the ship's cabin. Bant, my Padawan, sits next to me. Mace Windu brought her with him. She has waited with me, with Obi-Wan, for the many days while Qui-Gon breathed until the doctors accepted that he would continue to do so and could be moved. We will finally return to Coruscant.
Bant is silent next to me, but I can feel her caring. She has remained silent, waiting for me. She has such patience. A Jedi's patience and a Jedi's heart. I never had such patience at her age. I offer smiles and kind words to her; she sees my concern for Qui-Gon, but the girl is too young to know how deep it goes. Bant and Obi-Wan are friends and they speak softly to each other away where I cannot hear the words. Most of the time. I leave them to comfort each other.
Behind us, I sense Qui-Gon, only half-aware in the medical cocoon they have wrapped around him, but he stubbornly still lives. I want to touch him, but we are belted in for the transition. But I know he can sense that I am near. Others have noted this as well. His heart would always beat stronger when I touched him. I told them it was the Force. But he never responded so strongly to Obi-Wan.
The ship jolts into hyperspace.
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Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
Behind us, I sense Qui-Gon, only half-aware in the medical cocoon they have wrapped around him, but he stubbornly still lives. I want to touch him, but we are belted in for the transition. But I know he can sense that I am near. Others have noted this as well. His heart would always beat stronger when I touched him. I told them it was the Force. But he never responded so strongly to Obi-Wan.
They're so hopelessly in love. That's just so sweet.
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Behind us, I sense Qui-Gon, only half-aware in the medical cocoon they have wrapped around him, but he stubbornly still lives. I want to touch him, but we are belted in for the transition. But I know he can sense that I am near. Others have noted this as well. His heart would always beat stronger when I touched him. I told them it was the Force. But he never responded so strongly to Obi-Wan.
That was so sweet!
I very much enjoy the story from Tahl's POV - very, very nice!!!
I hope there will be a happy end for both of them 
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I agree, it's wonderful to see things through Tahl's eyes. Love her thoughts on her padawan.
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His heart would always beat stronger when I touched him. I told them it was the Force. But he never responded so strongly to Obi-Wan.
Clearly the favorite passage among readers. No surprise there. Have adored your Master/Padawan "mush". I see that you master the lover genre just as beautifully.
The ship jolts into hyperspace.
Great last line. Feels so symbolic.
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Layren: Oh, thank-you. I'm glad the feeling between them is showing through. I'm using a very minimal writing style.
Fifilla: Thanks! Tahl's POV is an experiment. Since she's blind, there is no visual description of what's going on.
Healer_Leona: Glad you like it! Actually, the story is more told through Tahl's 'hands'.
ratna: Thank-you!
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