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Jedikma Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 9/25/04 3:52pm Subject: RE: The Sun Hasn't Yet Risen (Obi/Qui - drama {Complete})
	Hi Master! I was digging around for something else, but came across this. I know I wrote in-depth comments about this one when you posted it on ff.n, but I thought I'd tell you again how wonderful this story is. I love especially the way you portray Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan. ~Jedikma -----signature----- Twice in a Lifetime 7/31 http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/16813029 A Quiet Afternoon http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/23305946 follow up vig to: A New Order http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/17525231
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 9/27/04 3:09pm Subject: RE: The Sun Hasn't Yet Risen (Obi/Qui - drama {Complete})
	Awww I can't believe I never read this before now! So sad! and so sweet! Great job hon... -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 9/30/04 12:16am Subject: RE: The Sun Hasn't Yet Risen (Obi/Qui - drama {Complete})
	Jedikma: Thank you. I'm glad you liked it - and still like it! Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan are two characters I don't put together often. Layren: Yes, it's very sad. But thank you! -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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LukesTheMan Registered: Apr '04	Date Posted: 9/30/04 4:00am Subject: RE: The Sun Hasn't Yet Risen (Obi/Qui - drama {Complete})
	This was touching on so many levels. As always, your writing is both lyrical and powerful, a wonderful combination for your readers. Lovely, lovely, lovely. -----signature----- Of Metal and Flesh http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/19859245 Empty Vessel http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/19744934 Proud Master to Annika_Skywalker
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JediVeloJinn Registered: Nov '03	Date Posted: 10/2/04 2:22am Subject: RE: The Sun Hasn't Yet Risen (Obi/Qui - drama {Complete})
	I remember this. I'd read it before and I loved it, but I had to stop and read it again. I don't believe that I've given any feedback for it, so offhand, I'd say that I loved how you showed that Obi was a child, and yet not quite so young and innocent. I also enjoyed how the light bantering between Qui, Obi and Tawara showed how the three were really very comfortable around each other. I didn't quite realise at first that Tawara was of the species that had imprisoned Qui and Obi, but it clicked in my sluggish brain, eventually. I really liked the way that you portrayed the Master/Padawan relationship. I loved the way that you explained things in this fic. Because the fic fit in so well in the situation that a Jedi team could find themselves in, yet applied to earth as well, it made me stop short and think about the way that some things don't change. Hehehe. I could rattle on a lot more about this fic, so PM or email me if you want more feedback, which I'd be glad to give, if you want it. I always love your fics, Obaona, even if I haven't replied to your fics that I'd read earlier (possibly a year ago). Velo -----signature----- “I see,” laughed Strider. “I look foul and feel fair. Is that it? All that is gold does not glitter, not all those that wander are lost.” 'Nighty night, Padawan mine.' Link to fic in bio.
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solojones Registered: Sep '00	Date Posted: 10/3/04 4:38pm Subject: RE: The Sun Hasn't Yet Risen (Obi/Qui - drama {Complete})
	Really lovely and thoughtful story, Oba. I liked the foreshadowing to the Jedi Purge at the end of the PT. I think one of the things the PT does show is how an evil person can deceive. Also, how the public (and the Jedi are included in this one, I'm afraid) can let their own desires for power, appeasement, etc. get in the way of stopping something like this. The personal touch you added with the character of Tawara was really nice. That anchored this story, brought the 'reality' of it, as it were, home. Twi'lek or no, the idea of a young individual dying for such a cause is really powerful. It reminds me of the eventual Rebel Alliance, and what those young people do out of courage and refusal to give in to evil. I have to wonder how these same themes might be carried off in RotS. Anyway, lovely writing and thought provoking as usual. Your stories have a way of showing deep themes and I really like that. It's the side of Star Wars that appeals to more grown up tastes (though of course, we all love our inner child ). Bravo -sj loves kevin spacey -----signature----- 6 x 9 = 42 Proud member of the Colbert Nation My short films: http://www.youtube.com/solojones1138
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lvk1978 Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 1/23/05 12:51am Subject: RE: The Sun Hasn't Yet Risen (Obi/Qui - drama {Complete})
	I'm ecstatic at having found another one of your stories. This one was difficult to read. Not due to your writing (which, of course, was lovely), but because of the subject matter. The parallels to the Third Reich were subtle, yet clear enough to convey the sense of fright and horror that comes when contemplating such regimes. Unfortunately, it makes perfect sense that things like that happen everywhere in the universe. All that is necessary for the triumph of evil is that good men do nothing. Edmund Burke Irish orator, philosopher, & politician (1729 - 1797) And, of course, the foreshadowing of what's to come in the GFFA was chilling to say the least. No wonder poor Obi-Wan was cold almost all the time in the story. Brilliant work, oba! I enjoyed it immensely. -----signature----- “Kenobi was luminous, a transparent being, a window onto a sunlit meadow of the Force.” "This is Obi-Wan Kenobi: He is modest, centered, and always kind. He is the ultimate Jedi. And he is proud to be Anakin Skywalker's best friend."
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 1/24/05 2:31pm Subject: RE: The Sun Hasn't Yet Risen (Obi/Qui - drama {Complete})
	Oh, replies! LukesTheMan: Thank you. I like levels! JediVeloJinn: Writing Obi-Wan in this was an interesting balance. I think it's the youngest I've ever written him, actually. He is a child, and yet, I don't think the Jedi are too concerned with that childhood lasting, even if Qui-Gon is. So I think all Padawans would be a strange mixture of child and adult. I think originally Tawara wasn't the same species that had them captured - I think I ended up editing that in early on. I suppose I was thinking of the resistance in all dictorships, that kind of thing. And I did want it to apply to Earth, as well as the GFFA then, and later on (with the Jedi Purge). I'm glad you liked the way I explained things, though, as that was one of the things I worried about being too - summary-ish, as well as the more obvious concerns. Thank you. I'm glad you liked the story. Just thanks! solojones: Thank you. Foreshadowing the Jedi Purge was one of my main goals with this, but also with the last pieces of dialogue, I wanted to remind the reader of the OT, and how things are set right. Ultimately I like to think I view the world with hope, if a lot of pessimism otherwise. Tawara kind of inserted himself into the story. But I think he's really important to the story, because it's easy to put Jedi in a situation like this and have them get meaning out of it, but Jedi aren't the only ones who fight and die for causes in the GFFA - even at the 'golden era' of the Jedi. I'm also curious to see how ROTS handles this sort of thing. Oddly enough, I think this was my first story where I consciously made a real effort to get a deeper, thematic meaning in. I'm glad you liked it, and thank you again. lvk1978: Hehehe, they aren't that difficult to find, are they? It was difficult to write, in the sense you're talking about. But for some reason, I really felt that I had to write it. I adore that quote you have, and I think it's so true. I think that's a good statement to live by. It was my first signature on the boards, I believe. Thank you. As I said to the others, that was a big point for the story. Thanks again! -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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