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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 3/5/04 12:01pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/5
	Good girl, don't erase that file. If Qui told you to download it, he had good reason. Great chapter, Lilith! I like how you're showing Qui growing in his role and learning how to behave like one of them. Very realistic. Looking forward to more soon! Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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Calamity Jinn Registered: May '00	Date Posted: 3/5/04 1:55pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/5
	I agree, good thing she kept the file! I also liked the touch of Mason telling Crash he wouldn't take her out again, but at least she can appreciate why! -----signature----- Check out our website for "The Jemmiah Chronicles"; http://www.hellschancecantina.com
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Jedi_Nifet Registered: Feb '02	Date Posted: 3/7/04 10:57am Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/5
	Good girl, she didn't delete the file. Still wonder what is so important about it and am sure you're going to tell us - at long last. -----signature----- ~~Beauty is the food of soul~~
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Lilith Demodae Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 3/9/04 9:16am Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/5
	But it's a garbage file, I tell you. It means nothing.... Don't worry ladies, we'll get to the file soon enough. ___________________________________ "How's it look, Crash?" I didn't so much as glance at Mason as he walked up behind me. I was polishing up my report. Normally the Horsemen were pretty informal about things like that, but Death liked having things like the cop reports written down where he could look at them or check back on them. I don't blame him if that's what works best for him, but I'm a visual person myself, and I prefer to store my important facts in my head rather than on a data card any passing cop could pick up and walk away with. "Not too bad," I answered. "My data shows that I sifted through eighty-seven percent of the reports for the last three months. I can make some pretty accurate assumptions from that. There hasn't been much highjacking or pirating, all things considered." "What things do you consider?" Mason pulled up a chair, turned it around, and straddled it, leaning his forearms on the back. He must have picked that up from Trapper. The actions were smooth, but not as smooth or thoughtless as his bows had been. "If you swing your leg over the chair, like you would your ride, it'll look more natural," I advised. Continuing before he could do more than nod in reply, I answered his question. "First, I consider the fact that a third of the highjackings were gang related." "Other swoop gangs?" "Some, but not all. There are packs of homeless folks who'll attack almost any freight hauler that is slow enough, or sits still long enough. Doesn't happen often, but it's certainly not unheard of." I tapped out a command and brought up a map of the sector. "Then I take into account where they happened." Another couple of taps filled in the map with large blocks of hazy color indicating different gang territories and speckled it here and there with small red dots. I indicated a point just inside our northern border. "That's Telecom's main distribution point. As you can see, the area around it is pretty clear of incidents. Any retailer outside this immediate sector or the northern half of the sector south of us will get their shipments from atmospheric craft or long haulers. Anyone who can take down a long hauler would chew right through us, so we don't guard those." His eyes flicked here and there over the map, no doubt committing the various territories to memory. There were no labels, I didn't need them, and I waited for him to ask, but he didn't. "So you only have to worry about security for the immediate area?" "Yup." "What about the area south of Horsemen territory?" I shrugged. "Would you believe that there's no gang activity there? At least no swoop gangs. The only reason why it's not Horsemen territory is because we don't want to mess around with two different sets of cops." "So there won't be any problems there?" "Not likely, but we make those escorts heavier anyway, as a precaution." Mason nodded again, his eyes intent on the screen, and asked no more. I left the map up for him and moved my report to an auxiliary monitor and finished it there. Mason never moved. If he'd been a droid I'd have claimed I could hear him thinking, he was concentrating so hard. I loaded my report and the raw data I'd drawn it from onto a datacard and strode to Death's office. I walked right in, knocking only as an afterthought as I stepped through the doorway. Roble was sitting behind his desk, Shael leaned with one hip hitched up on a corner, the desk's surface covered with lists and a sector map. Death was gesturing to the map, one calloused finger tracing the route they were currently discussing. "This is the usual course they take for delivery to Bernard's. We've never had any problems on that run," Roble was saying. "Yes, but that cuts right between Angel and Demon territory, then heads right into the Imperium, and with the way things are going right now ..." Shael trailed off and both men looked up at me. "Done with that report, Crash?" Death asked. "Yeah." A lazy flick of my wrist and the datacard was airborne. More than half expecting that, Roble casually raised a hand and deftly snatched the card out of the air. "Everything looks pretty good. Numbers aren't down, but they aren't up, either. And most of our routes seem to be pretty clear." "Good. If I have any questions I'll let you know." It was clearly a dismissal, since he turned his attention right back to the map and lists, but I ignored that for the moment. "So, when do you expect to be done with my man?" "Soon." "How soon is soon?" Roble sighed and glanced at his chrono while Shael stifled a chuckle. "Give me another hour with him and then you can haul him off to do whatever you like with him." I tilted my head and leveled a steady stare at the man. "One hour, promise?" "Hour and a half at the very most." I rolled my eyes with an exaggerated slump of my shoulders and relented. //That means the meeting might end some time before dinner.// I moved to the door and was halfway out when Roble called after me. "Oh, and Crash, could you send Plague and Famine in here?" //Forget dinner. Make that midnight.// -----signature----- This post is brought to you by: This space for rent
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 3/9/04 11:03am Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/9
	Mmm, love the image of Qui swinging a leg over a chair and straddling it. Is it hot in here? Great post, Lilith! I know I said this before, but I love how you show Qui learning his chosen character slowly but surely. Really fascinating learning curve. Looking forward to more soon! Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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Healer_Leona Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 3/10/04 11:05am Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/9
	Much as I love Qui I think Crash is still my fave character here. HOw simply she notices things. How she doled out advice on how to straddle a chair or how she knows that the "Hour and a half at the very most." -meeting will really take til past midnight! LOL! It's those little things I just love. -----signature----- Feel so good, but I'm old 2000 years of chasing's taking it's toll
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Calamity Jinn Registered: May '00	Date Posted: 3/10/04 1:38pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/9
	"Oh, and Crash, could you send Plague and Famine in here?" //Forget dinner. Make that midnight.// ROFLOL! I agree with Leona, Crash knows how to interpret everything around her. She's one smart cookie! I too loved the casual insert of the line to tell Mason how to improve his picked up mannerisms. -----signature----- Check out our website for "The Jemmiah Chronicles"; http://www.hellschancecantina.com
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Miska Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 3/10/04 7:48pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/9
	WHEW!! Just finished a 2-day marathon read of this story and I have to say I'm loving it!! This is actually my first foray into the "Before the Saga" board, but I saw a clip of your story in the Fan Fictin Newsletter and I decided to check it out...and let me say I'm totally excited about it! I love Crash- what a great tradition of strong Star Wars females you're carrying on with her! And Mason/Qui- adorable! I'm still undecided about Shael but I'm sure you can convince me The whole idea is original and fun and I can't wait to see how it's all going to turn out! -----signature----- You know it's love when you can't fall asleep because reality is better than your dreams. H/L and L/M fics in my bio!
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 3/10/04 9:07pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/9
	Still here Lilith What a great few chapters. This story is very enjoyable and I think part of it is how well Crash is portrayed as a strong female character. Everything just flows so nicely together and that girl never misses anything does she... -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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Lilith Demodae Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 3/11/04 12:48pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/9
	I'm in the newsletter?! Whoa. Cool. Where?! ahem Sorry. I'll try and control my desire for a bigger feedback buzz. Nope, sorry, a junkie's gotta have her fix... -----signature----- This post is brought to you by: This space for rent
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Lilith Demodae Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 3/12/04 10:18am Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/9
	Okay, here's the next bit, ladies. ________________________ My messenger service finished and the men in question sent on their way, I passed by the table where Sloan and a few others were playing cards. "You gonna try and sit in on the meeting?" I asked him, jerking my head at the closed door to Death's office. "Nah," he shrugged. "Shael got all the bossy genes, I got all the lazy ones," he replied with an impudent grin. " ‘Nuf said," I agreed. I wasn't big on that being in charge stuff myself and couldn't blame him in the least for not wanting to follow in his big brother's shoes. Shaking my head, I ruffled his hair and began to amble slowly back toward my computers, but a hint of motion caught my eye. Mason was still sitting in front of the main monitor and was now tapping out short commands every so often. My first reaction was outrage. //How dare he use my computer without asking me first!// I don't mean to say that I'm jealous of my computers and don't want anyone but me to use them ... but I'm jealous of my computers. And I don't want anyone other than me to use them. There's no telling what some silly, wannabe slicer might do to my babies when I'm not around to protect them. It just hadn't occurred to me that a polite, well-trained Jedi like Mason might do more than look over my shoulder. If it had occurred to me, I still may not have turned the keylock on, but I would have been prepared for the trill of fear and worry that rippled down my spine at seeing someone else, anyone else, tapping commands into my computer. Outrage and worry trickled away and I just stood there for a moment. Now my curiosity was piqued. I just had to know what he was doing. Much as I trusted him, I didn't want to let him know that I was watching. He might just stop whatever it was he was doing. So instead of going right back, I turned from my original course and angled across the main floor, heading toward the maintenance bay. Conveniently enough, Shael's ride was parked closest to the computer bank, so I plopped down on the permacrete and began slowly extracting the micro-computer that controlled the air/fuel mix. From that spot I had a near perfect vantage point from which to watch the Jedi at work. I was even at enough of an angle that I could make some pretty good guesses at what commands he was typing in. The map was still up on the screen, still blocked off into the various colored territories, and still speckled with the red dots of the crime report locations. Mason had added several blue dots. He worked deliberately and with confidence, but slowly, like he was familiar enough with computers, but not with this particular configuration. His thick brown hair fell forward, obscuring his face as he worked, so I read the muscles of his back, the set of his shoulders, the tension in his arms, and the slight hesitations in the movements of his fingers. I glanced away for a moment to hook up an adapter from my datapad to the mix controller. Shael really did want me to check the program for bugs, since he'd been having a few problems with it recently, so it made a very convenient excuse. When I glanced back up Mason had shifted back in his seat, as if to get a better overall view of the map. I could see the scattering of blue dots better now, but I still couldn't figure out what they meant, or why he cared. Since he did care, I figured it was something I might want to look into a little closer. My attention was so fully on Mason and his actions that I missed the approach of Killek. Only when he stepped up to Mason and glanced around to check for me, did I finally notice him. I swore savagely when he laid a warning hand on the Jedi's shoulder. "Hey man," his voice carried to me easily, despite the other noises, "you'd better not let Crash catch you fiddling with her toys. I know she's your sponsor, but she's like to take your head off before she asks any questions." His reddish mop shook ruefully. "It's never a good idea to tick off your sponsor." "Oh?" Mason tapped out a quick sequence and the blue speckling disappeared from the screen. "I didn't know. Thanks, man." There was no point in staying where I was any longer, so I put the pad and controller into a check and repair sequence and stood, brushing off my pants while Killek eagerly followed Mason off to give the newest Horseman his ‘expert' opinion on the Jedi's swoop. I wasn't too worried about Mason wiping the little dots off the screen. Between my keystroke capture program that I always have running on my machines and what I observed, I was fairly confident that I could recreate most of them. What had me in a foul mood was that Mason hadn't finished normally. That would have told me much more about what he was doing. Had he wiped out his commands because he didn't want me to see them, or just because he thought I might be upset about him using my computers and didn't want me to worry? I fumed there, standing beside Shael's swoop, staring off into space as if I could find the answers I sought there. I have no idea how long I stood there before Shael's arms around my waist startled me out of my thoughts. "Deci-cred for your thoughts?" "They're not worth that much." He shifted behind me, to look down at my datapad. "So is there anything wrong with it?" "Dunno." I shrugged. "I started it running a bit ago, but I haven't checked it yet. It won't finish for another hour or so." I turned in the circle of his arms and looped my own around his neck. "So, why are you out here instead of in there with the rest of them?" "Roble gave me time off for good behavior," he smirked, his dark eyes twinkling at me. "Oh did he?" I replied and rose on tiptoe to bestow a small kiss on his nose. "Does that mean you have time to take me topside for a little picnic dinner?" Shael tilted his head sideways and closed his eyes, pretending to be thinking very hard. "Let's see," he drew out the syllables as if each were a deep and weighty matter, "go back into that stuffy office with three other men who only want to talk about reports and numbers, or go topside with you and eat and cuddle until the stars come out. Hmmm, decisions, decisions ..." Of course, the only stars we would be able to see were the navigating lights of transports and shuttles, and the winking of tower warning beacons, unless he was referring to the ones we always managed to see in each other's eyes. I turned away and pushed against the barrier of his arms. "Well," my tone was playful, "if you don't want to ..." I was pulled up tight against his chest before my foot more than lifted to take a step. "Mmm, it was a tough choice, but I'll take you and the stars," he murmured in my ear. -----signature----- This post is brought to you by: This space for rent
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 3/12/04 3:15pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/12
	Cuddling and the stars? snort Sure. Hmm, what was Qui doing with her computers? Sounds intriguing and I'm looking forward to finding out. I think the conversation between Crash and Shael could be interesting and it might put her off finding out immediately. Great job, Lilith! Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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Miska Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 3/12/04 3:17pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/12
	awww! Cute cute cute!! I'm still wondering who Crash should end up with though- something about Shael bothers me...although maybe that's because he reminds me of my old boyfriend! Anyway, anxiously awaiting the next post! -----signature----- You know it's love when you can't fall asleep because reality is better than your dreams. H/L and L/M fics in my bio!
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Healer_Leona Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 3/13/04 5:39am Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/12
	I don't mean to say that I'm jealous of my computers and don't want anyone but me to use them ... but I'm jealous of my computers. And I don't want anyone other than me to use them.-- that line still makes me laugh out loud! Awww, I do so like when Crash and Shael are getting along. They're such a cute couple. -----signature----- Feel so good, but I'm old 2000 years of chasing's taking it's toll
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Jedi_Nifet Registered: Feb '02	Date Posted: 3/14/04 1:50pm Subject: RE: Crash Course- Repost (Action/Adventure Non-JA OC) Updated 3/12
	I don't mean to say that I'm jealous of my computers and don't want anyone but me to use them ... but I'm jealous of my computers. And I don't want anyone other than me to use them Sounds so much like me! -----signature----- ~~Beauty is the food of soul~~
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