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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/9/04 6:25pm Subject: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5 - Date Edited: 11/5/04 12:42pm (4 edits total) Edited By: AthenaLeigh
	title - Imperturbable Serenity author - Athena Leigh summary - The beginning of Qui-Gon's saga, as it were. rating - G notes - ok, got a few things to say, first off, this is supposed to be my big project. However, I am not so good with long stories. As such, I have not worked on this in months, so I'm hoping posting the couple of chapters I have so far will inspire me to write the next chapter, since I have it all in my head, I just haven't been able to get it down. Trust me, updates on this are not going to be frequent. I have a serious love/hate relationship with this story, and I'll probably be editing earlier parts as I move on. Sometimes I think it's coming out so well and sometimes I think it's ridiculous, so please let me know what you think. This story revolves around Qui-Gon, but aside from him, Yoda, and Dooku (who will show up in a couple chapters), it is all OCs, my OCs, at least for now. It's all cuteness and stuff now, but it's supposed to be setting up for more serious stuff to come. Thomas Hardy said the movement of the Earth's shadow over the Moon had an "imperturbable serenity". In case anyone is wondering, that is the statement from which I got the title in this article about lunar eclipses. I would like to make special thanks to Charmisjess, Layren, and Kynstar for their continued support on this. Imperturbable Serenity Prologue - Cub Kalaya watched the couple in front of her. This was her first "adoption" of a Force-sensitive infant, as it had become known, but it felt to her more like a kidnapping. Tal-Nin and Mir-La Jinn had volunteered their son to meet his destiny with the Jedi, but there was still reluctance and great sadness at this moment. Kalaya waited for the parents to say their good-byes to their only child. "Knight Segun, please take him now, before we change our minds," Mir-La said. Kalaya nodded and took the baby from his mother. "We will take good care of him, you have my word." The three adults looked down at the now bawling bundle. His parents tried to hush him and Kalaya rocked him, but he would not quiet. "He feels your sadness. He must be quite strong in the Living Force. I'm sure he will make you proud." The parents stood close together, smiling through their tears. "One moment before you go," Tal-Nin said and reached into the now vacant crib. He removed a small toy animal and gave it to his boy. It had gold fur with a darker crown about its head and a matching tuft at the end of its tail. "I made this for him." Tal-Nin and Mir-La were crafters. They were poor but worked hard to improve life for the children they hoped to have. They lived in a small home with only two rooms: the main one where they now stood and a kitchen. Mir-La wove clothes and quilts; she had stitched the blanket her child was wrapped in. Tal-Nin made toys like the one he had given his son. "That seems to have done the trick," Kalaya noted after the boy's hand curled around the toy's paw and he silenced. "Jedi are not normally allowed personal possessions, but I think we can make an exception this time. It will help him transition. He will always have a piece of you with him." "Good-bye, Qui-Gon. We will always love you." The parents kissed their son one last time, and Kalaya took him from the house to begin the walk back to her ship. As they blasted off the blue-green planet into the inky blackness of interstellar space, she looked back at Algieba, the binary star system they had just left. The big, hot stars shone brightly over the worlds orbiting them. The yellow and orange spheres were like giant marbles in the sky. "Don't forget this place, little one. It is where you come from, and it is very beautiful." Qui-Gon, whose name meant "bright star," slept in her arms, and Kalaya pondered what the future held for him as they headed for Coruscant and the Jedi Temple. Chapter 1 - New Qui-Gon slept the whole ride home. Kalaya had thought the baby would fuss much more, especially after breaking from his family, but his unexpected serenity only further supported her guess at his strength in the Living Force. Only once did he briefly wake, only when his single possession was dropped on the floor. "Mama?" he cried and reached for Kalaya's face. "No, Qui-Gon, I'm not your mother," she said gently and retrieved the toy, placing it in his grasp again. He curled small fingers around it as before and said, "Daddy." Kalaya crooked a smile when the boy recognized the animal's maker, and she was glad when he rested and fell into slumber once more. * She was not surprised to find Master Yoda waiting at the entrance when she entered the Temple. "Ah, here at last he is," he said of the new child as Kalaya held him out to the old Master. "His name is Qui-Gon Jinn. I believe he is strong in the Living Force, stronger than I am." A small clawed hand gestured to the boy's small companion. "Hmm, what is this? Forbidden possessions are. Learn early the young ones must, or difficult letting go becomes. Know this you do." "It is a gift from his parents. He was as upset as they were. It was the only thing that relaxed him. Look at him." Qui-Gon still slept. "It was the only way he could let go. Please, don't take it from him." "Inappropriate it is. Wish to cause him difficulties, do you? Jeopardize his place with the Jedi?" "No, of course not, Master, but I won't part him from a piece of what he is." Yoda peered at the babe intently, then closed his eyes. Kalaya felt the Force swirl as the strongest of Jedi called upon it for guidance. When his eyes opened again, she inquired, "What do you see for him?" "Clouded, his future is. Difficult his life will be, but with or without the Jedi, I do not know." He mused a minute more. "Solace he will need." With a small nod, Kalaya knew Qui-Gon was given permission to hold on to the precious piece of his heritage. * In the creche, Qui-Gon's information was transferred to the Temple's system and a new bassinet set up for the addition to the Jedi's numbers. "There you are, little one. Another for you to watch over, Eladh," Kalaya said as she stood next to the crib. Eladh stood next to her. A Dimnara, his skin was bright, almost translucent blue and arced antennae hung from his snow-white hair. He had been a crecheling himself once, near in age to Kalaya and good friends with her, but he was not one of the lucky chosen Padawans. Instead, he was conscripted to watch over the Temple's children. In his heart, he knew it was best. Eladh was no coward, but the life of a Jedi was not for him. He was honored to be allowed to remain within the walls inside of which he grew, and felt the Force had guided him to the right place; he had always had a soft spot for the younglings. "I will care for him as I have the others." This phrase had become almost a credo for him, yet he did love each of the children equally. Kalaya was about to leave when a commotion began in the hall. She and Eladh exchanged annoyed glances. They knew who was coming. In just a moment, a tall woman charged into the room. It was Atash Ora, a member of the Jedi Council and Master Yoda's former pupil. She liked to think that her tutelage under the venerable Master gave her privileges over others. Many, including Knight Segun and Eladh, thought she was overbearing and a poor example of a Jedi. They were more pleased with Yoda's current Padawan, a hard-working dedicated lad, if a bit formal. Atash approached them, gazing down at the smaller woman and the baby. "Another new one?" she said as she pushed past. "Yes, Master, another crecheling, just as there often is." Kalaya was not afraid to let her scorn show in her words. They all knew Atash was only there to spy on Kalaya. She did not approve of the way she conducted herself, far less seriously than Ora, and believed the Council favored her, but Kalaya insisted the Council went against her as often as they agreed with her. She was also threatened by the interest shown in Kalaya concerning a retiring Master and a soon to be vacant seat on the Council. Kalaya was not long ago knighted, and it was unusual for one so young to even be candidate for such a position. Atash took every opportunity to harass her. "What's this, Pon?" She referred to Eladh by his surname. Atash had noticed the toy feline beside Qui-Gon and grabbed it. "Shouldn't this be in the rec area? None of the initiates are to think of the toys as their own." Due to his little friend being snatched and the volume of the room, Qui-Gon had waken and begun to cry. Instinctively, Eladh lifted him and rocked him on his shoulder. Kalaya grabbed the toy back. "Qui-Gon has clearance to keep his parent's gift." "Does he now?" Atash sneered. "That should be the Council's decision." "Yes, Master Yoda issued the approval, but take it before the Council if you like." Kalaya knew Atash would never go against her old Master's orders, and she was right. Atash huffed. "Very well, as long as he doesn't make any trouble over it." She backed down and without excusing herself, left the creche. "He's not the one causing trouble," Kalaya muttered when she had gone. Eladh had been walking Qui-Gon around trying to hush him before he woke the others, only marginally successfully. Now he lay him back in the bassinet and Kalaya replaced the furry figure and pulled his mother's blanket over him. Qui-Gon was asleep in moments. "She is out for your head, Kalaya. You had better watch out," the caretaker murmured. "I can take care of myself. Besides, she can't do anything to me. I haven't done anything wrong, and she's just going to have to learn to live with that." "Just watch out, or she might tattle on you to Master Yoda." They both laughed softly at this. Yoda may have taken Atash as his Padawan learner, but he nevertheless liked Kalaya and would judge her on her own merits, not someone else's ideas of her. "I've got to prepare for my next mission. Good-bye, Qui-Gon. Good luck," she said as she touched his little head. "I'll see you later, Eladh." "Good-bye, Mistress." Kalaya rolled her eyes at the title Eladh sometimes referred to her by though she had asked that he not. It was the title by which his people referred to females of superior position, and Eladh considered that since Kalaya was a Knight and he only caretaker of the younglings, hers was the higher position. Kalaya went into the hall. She was not worried about Atash, but she did wonder what the spiteful woman would try next. ****** The younglings crawled around the floor. It was one of Eladh's favorite sights. The innocence of a group of playful children was as dear to his heart as a sunset or the rush of a long, cool river. Yet he frowned. In the corner, Qui-Gon sat by himself holding his stuffed animal as if it were his only friend. In truth, it was. Qui-Gon was new and had no friends yet, but Eladh was sure he would soon. Either way, he had not the heart to take away the boy's comfort. It would take time, but Qui-Gon would fit in. Friendships would blossom and grow. It would not take long to start. Eladh sighed. The tot looked so alone, but he would be patient. He turned his mind to the day ahead and the tasks he must attend. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 10/9/04 6:37pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9 - Date Edited: 10/9/04 6:38pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Layren
	Yay! You finally posted it here! Such a great first post. It's so nice to read this again and to be able to refresh my memory. Cute little baby Qui-Gon. hugs him and rocks him to sleep so precious. I want to adopt him too -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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Rhea_Leonel Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 10/9/04 9:29pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9
	This is the first story I have read on this site and I must say it is very good. Qui-Gon doesn't get enough stories and it was nice to see him as a kiddy. And I love the characters and how they react with one another it feels real esspecially that little conflict between Kalaya and Atash. It just seems it would be that way sometimes. Even if they are Jedi they aren't going to be buddy, buddy with each other all the time. With all the different people and egos there would be conflict. This was a great beginning and I must remember to keep up with this.
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 10/10/04 1:14am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9
	All right! Way to go Athena!! I'm so happy to see you post it here! Can't wait for more! I sooo love this story!! Lil Qui is soooo cute! Hehehe even Yoda gave in -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/10/04 9:13pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9 - Date Edited: 10/10/04 9:14pm (1 edits total) Edited By: AthenaLeigh
	Thanks, Layren. You know it's in part to your encouragement that it's posted, that I even work on it. Yes, glad to refresh, I just hope I can make some progress on this next chapter before too long. sigh Yes, I would love to adopt him as well. Thank you, Rhea_Leonel. I am honored. I know exactly what you mean, that's why I wanted to tell Qui-Gon's story from the beginning. I really wanted to give the characters some depth, give some flavor to the Jedi. Thank you for reading. Thank you, Kynstar, I can't wait for more myself! Yup, and even Yoda gave in to adorable baby Qui-Gon. Who could not? Thanks for your encouragement, I need all I can get with this one. Is quite the burden. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Charmisjess Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 10/11/04 11:34am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9
	Athenaness, my wonderful writer friend, you know how much I love this story. hugs it I can't wait to read it all again!!! Am so much looking forward to seeing Rani!! dances the Rani dance I have missed him, alas. Oh, and I told you, it took me a while, but now I get imperturbable serenity...I think it's a perfect title, especially for such a lovely fic. You're doing such a great job, keep it up! -----signature----- I <3 Starrie. Strange Little Girls-> http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24496675/p1/?0 Where are you going?
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Jedi_Knight_Darkarna Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 10/12/04 6:10am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9 - Date Edited: 10/12/04 6:11am (1 edits total) Edited By: Jedi_Knight_Darkarna
	This is awesome, I’m totally hooked to this Athena. I wish I could write as good as this. If there was some sort of apprentice writer program I’d be your number #1 student. -----signature----- The force is trying to tell us something...I can feel it...
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 10/12/04 9:03am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9
	Wait just one minute! How did I miss this? What a great start! I am developing a real fondness for GOOD OCs and this will fulfill that need, I can tell already. A wonderful start, I can't wait to see where this goes. VaderLVR does the happy dance, thrilled to see a great new story just starting out to keep her out of trouble. -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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AnakinsHeir Registered: May '04	Date Posted: 10/12/04 10:04am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9
	"He's not the one causing trouble," Kalaya muttered when she had gone. Ain't that the truth!? I love your OCs! A baby Qui-Gon? What could get better than that? I'm sure it will though. I can't wait. A great start to this story. -----signature----- Let Me Go http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/18359174/?2 Master to JediCallista_1_6_e54 A Mother's Wishes http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20272243/?0
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/13/04 12:49pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9
	You guys are so awesome. Thanks for your inspiration, and you'll all be pleased to know that I'm working on chapter 5. It's coming along slowly, but at least I'm back to work on it. Oh Charmsian One, thank you many times over. I know! He'll be here soon! You've been a big support on this story, I appreciate it so much. Well, thank you, Jedi_Knight_Darkarna. I think I'd be a sucky teacher though. I'm glad you're enjoying it though. VaderLVR64 Thank you so much. I'm so glad you like my OCs, I'm rather proud of the ones in this story. We haven't even gotten to my favorite one though. He'll be here soon. AnakinsHeir Thank you very much. I'm glad you also like my OCs. They can be lots of fun to write, and you don't have to worry so much about keeping them in character. I hope it gets better, I personally feel that each of the next chapters is better than the last. Hope I can keep that going. Thank you so much, everybody. More soon. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 10/13/04 1:03pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9
	Yippy! More more! Yay! Can't wait! -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/15/04 11:00am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, prologue and first chapter 10/9
	Yup, Kyn, and here you go! Sorry it's so short, but Qui-Gon is a little bit older in chapter 2 so I went back and added this as a bit of a step between. Since it's so short, we'll have some more in a couple days. This is just some cuteness, but chapter 2 will get into more interesting stuff. * Qui-Gon crawled toward the blue area in the distance. The green space he scurried over felt good in his hands - soft - like his little friend, whom he was dragging along with him, but he had crawled all over that and wanted to explore something else. Getting to the edge of the green blades, he looked at the blue patch. Something in his head stirred and seemed familiar. He did not realize he was recalling a weak memory of a lake he had been to near his home. Not feeling any fear, he reached out and watched his little hand sink into the blue water. It felt cold and he pulled back. There was something - wetness - on his hand. He touched his cheek and then it was there too. He reached out again and brought it down on the water hard, splashing and giggling as water went everywhere. Then he got another idea. He wanted his friend to feel it too. Still giggling, he pushed the stuffed toy in. "Pwash!" he cried out as he also tumbled in up to his waist. He screamed and splashed about, unaware of the ruckus he made. Eladh was not so unconscious of Qui-Gon's activities. He came over and lifted the boy from the pond. "Qui-Gon, what are you doing?" "Bwash!" he yelled at his guardian, waving his arms as if he were still splashing. The Dimnara shook his head. "Well, it's good to see you are enjoying your new home." He tucked the toddler into his arms and bent to retrieve the sopping toy, shaking his head again. "Look what you did to him." Qui-Gon simply laughed. At bedtime, once the younglings were tucked in, Eladh made sure Qui-Gon was lying down and brought him the animal he was so fond of. The child reached for it hungrily, but Eladh held it back. "Shh, quiet, young one. I need you to sleep." He touched the little head, tiny eyes blinking tiredly, small hands curling up as if understanding what was asked of them. Eladh set the dry plaything next to his young charge, satisfied with his quiet, immature desire for it. Qui-Gon was happy his friend was back and smiled quite contentedly. It felt differently than he was used to. It always made a warm feeling in his mind, but now he felt it in his hands as well. He did not know it was simply from being dried. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 10/15/04 3:51pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, interlude 10/15
	Ahh that was cute! Lil Qui playing in the water! Thanks!!! Loved it! -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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Mistress_Renata Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Sep '00	Date Posted: 10/15/04 5:17pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, interlude 10/15
	Very cute, but I'm actually enjoying the OCs. A lot of personality in a fairly short post! -----signature----- "For over a thousand generations, the Jedi Knights were the Guardians of peace and justice in the Old Republic. Before the dark times." Denizen of the Crotchety Old Mods' Home... approach with caution...
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Charmisjess Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 10/15/04 9:17pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, interlude 10/15
	Awww, Athena!!!! YOU WRITE BABY QUI SO WELL! SPLASHY!! and I totally agree with Mistress_Renata...I think the OCs are really a huge part of Imp's charm...haha, besides baby Qui of course.....is a dork Charm-is-Qui-Gon! flops over at lameness of own authorname and bad jokeness but seriously. You've done such a good job, with such clear visualizations and what, and such great characters. ....haha, and for those of us who haven't cheated and read this elsewhere....JUST WAIT TIL WE MEET RANI!! squeals like small child and runs off -----signature----- I <3 Starrie. Strange Little Girls-> http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24496675/p1/?0 Where are you going?
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Jedi_Knight_Darkarna Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 10/16/04 2:32am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, interlude 10/15
	Very very well done. Can't wait for more squeals like a small child and runs off lol -----signature----- The force is trying to tell us something...I can feel it...
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