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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/24/04 8:30pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, rest of chapter 2 10/21
	Thanks, Kyn. He's not little, just young. I'm glad you like Rani. I love him so much, he's my favorite. I hope everyone else likes him too, as we're going to be seeing a lot more of him. Thanks so much, Arwyn. I'm very pleased you like. It means a lot to me. Yes, Jess! Here he is!! Isn't he just so lovable?! Thanks, I thought it was sorta silly, lol but it's ok. Yes, more soon, of course, but I'm more worried about future chapters than the current ones. But your support definitely helps in that area. Thanks so much. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 10/28/04 12:39pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, rest of chapter 2 10/21
	Awwwwwww poor Qui Qui -- at least Rani was there to save him!! Yay for Rani! Poor Qui nobody seems to like him much. He needs a hug. Great job! Kids can be so cruel. -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 11/5/04 12:41pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - little Qui, Yoda/Dooku, OCs, rest of chapter 2 10/21 - Date Edited: 11/5/04 12:46pm (1 edits total) Edited By: AthenaLeigh
	Layren Yep, Rani is the big hero! squeezes him Thanks, heehee. Don't worry, Qui-Gon will make a few friends. ok, in this chapter we meet Master Pring, my little homage to the best teacher ever, Dr. Pring. Just thought I'd mention it. If anyone who hasn't is interested in reading my recent story Mooncast Shadow, it sorta may someday to relate to all of this, somehow. Sorta. It could almost go under the same title. Anyway, I've only got one more chapter completed after this, and I want to do some editing before I post it. I haven't had any time to work on chapter five, but I definitely won't give up on it. Your encouragement makes me more committed to finishing than ever. Chapter 3 - Learning The Jedi crechelings were sent to school very early. There were many things that had to be instilled upon them, so their training began at a young age. Today was Qui-Gon's first day of class. He was going to be in with a new group of children, and a Master he did not know would teach them. He walked into the classroom slowly, eyes roaming around and taking in the new environment. Desks and chairs were set in neat rows, green and blue plants in the corners made the room cozy, and in front stood a Cirean clad in Jedi robes, the teacher. A chime sounded and the children took their seats. Qui-Gon sat beside a girl with dark hair and a pale white face. "Hi!" he said to her, trying to be friendly. "Hi." She smiled back somewhat shyly. He introduced himself, "I'm Qui-Gon." "I'm Nozomi," she replied. "Nice to meet you, Nozomi. That's a pretty name." "Thank you." Her smile grew, and she turned to the front of the room as the teacher was ready to begin. "Good morning, children. I am Master Pring." "Good morning, Master Pring," all the children intoned. "Today you will begin to learn about the Force." Pring paused a moment to let his first words sink into the small Force-users' minds, his brown bushy tail swishing behind him. "The Force is all around us, it guides us and controls us, but we can control it too. You will learn to do that in time. For now, I want to show you some examples of how you can manipulate objects using the Force." Pring gazed over his students, seeing them intently watching and listening. "We will start with something small." The vulpine Master smiled as he raised a hand toward a datasheet on a table near the wall and using the Force raised it into the air and floated it over to him. The room of children filled with gasps of wonderment, which then turned into shouts of how could they do that and who would get to be first. Pring held up his hands to silence the room. "Now, you will need much more instruction before any of you tries that." Indeed, they spent the rest of the day listening to Pring's lessons on the Force and its proper uses. Some were disappointed that they did not get to try the neat floating trick, but others, like Qui-Gon, were simply eager for the next day's lessons. When class was over, Qui-Gon ran to find his good friend Raniwasha. "Rani, there you are!" he called when he saw him outside the playroom. "Hey, little guy, where you been?" Rani responded with his typical good-natured smile. "I had class today! We learned all about the Force!" Qui-Gon was clearly very excited. "Oh, that's right," Rani said slowly as if thinking. "Sometimes I forget you don't know about that stuff yet." Qui-Gon was overjoyed to hear his friend knew about it too. "Can you do anything with it, like make stuff float?" "Well," Raniwasha pondered, "I can do some stuff." "Like what?!" "Like... this!" The Donitian boy threw out an arm and called on his limited Force abilities. Slowly, with widening eyes, Qui-Gon lifted off the ground. He started to wave about and shout. "Hold still or you'll fall!" Raniwasha told him. Qui-Gon became very still and hung suspended several centimeters above the floor. After a moment, he was lowered to his feet. Qui-Gon burst out laughing and clapping his little hands together. "That was great! What else can you do?" The winged boy shrugged. "Some other stuff. I'm more interested in what you can do." "Me? I can't do anything." "Not yet," Raniwasha smirked, "but I bet you'll be real good, when you learn." "Ah! When will that be?" Rani chuckled. "It'll be soon. I bet you'll learn fast too. Come on, let's go play." He tugged his friend's arm and ran off. * "Today, we will be having class in the garden." Master Pring watched his class stand and form an orderly line, as orderly as three-year-olds can be, and then led them to the Room of a Thousand Fountains and over to the area he had prepared for today's lesson. The children stood before a patch of empty soil. Pring held up a bag of seeds. "Each of you will plant one of these seeds." That was all he said. Each child came up to him, and he placed a seed in each little hand. The children knelt before the earth patch, some of the little fingers eagerly digging at the dirt, though not for planting. Some were quite unsure what to do. Qui-Gon knelt a moment, deep in thought. Then he stuck two fingers into the dirt and dug a shallow hole, placing the seed inside and pressing the soil back around it. Beside him, Nozomi gazed forlornly at her patch of dirt, a look of distress on her face, seed still clutched in her hand. "Nozomi?" She looked up at him. "I don't know what to do." "Just listen and do what you feel." "But it's hard." "It might help to close your eyes, and take a deep breath," Qui-Gon instructed like a little master. She nodded and did what he said. She opened her eyes and did what Qui-Gon had done with his seed. She looked at him again and smiled, "Thanks, Qui-Gon." He smiled back. Master Pring was looking over the children's work. Some of the little students had simply thrown their seed on top of the soil; others had had too much fun and were now covered in dirt. Pring smiled to himself and thought how some of the creche masters would certainly be busy tonight. There were of course those who had completed the task correctly, some better than others. Below him, Qui-Gon and Nozomi had both planted their seeds fairly neatly. "Well done, children," he praised the class. "Qui-Gon," he called on the boy, "how did you know what to do with your seed?" "I listened to what it told me it needed." Some of the children, the ones covered in muck, snickered at his answer. In response, Nozomi spoke up. "He helped me hear it too." Pring nodded. "That was the Force talking to you. It guided you in your task, and you listened well." Their next task was to tend a selected row of plants. Again, some of the children had difficulty, tearing off the healthy leaves and basically shredding the plant, while others like Qui-Gon did better. The children's abilities of course did not escape their teacher's notice. "It seems some of you are very strong Living Force-users. You have all done well. Now form a line, and we will go to lunch." ****** Eladh watched the active youngsters playing on the lawn, giggling and running about as children do. He performed this duty almost every day, but it never got boring. He enjoyed it too much to ever think of it as tedious. Today another joined him for a while as Knight Segun entered from the corridor. "Good day, Eladh. I brought those toys from Tonkin III." She had just returned from a mission and, as some of the Knights and Masters did after visiting exotic worlds, had brought back some rare playthings. She placed them on the table behind him. Eladh turned to look at her and her gift. "Thank you, Mistress." Kalaya let the reference slide this time. She placed another small object, quickly exchanging a glance with Eladh. Tonkin chocolates were a rare delicacy, and a favorite of the Dimnara creche Master. "How are the children?" she inquired. "Well-behaved, for the most part. Crage fell and hurt his leg, but not too badly. It took a while, but I finally got him to sit still until he feels better." "Ah, children," Kalaya chuckled. Meanwhile, Qui-Gon and Raniwasha were playing and laughing by a small pool. "All right, my turn!" Rani yelled before chasing his friend around the water until he caught up and tagged him, both boys then tumbling into a pile. "Hey, Ran! You gonna come play or what?" Untangling himself from Qui-Gon, Raniwasha looked around for who was calling him. "Oh yeah, Qui-Gon, Taal and those guys wanted me to play Tantas with them today. I didn't think you'd wanna play, huh? So we'll play some more later, 'kay?" "Oh. All right, well, have fun." He watched Rani run off. Qui-Gon was a little disappointed that his friend was leaving him, but he knew he could not be his only friend, and the others did not much desire to allow Qui-Gon in their games. So he walked out to the garden. He wandered about, feeling that same strong presence in his mind he always felt in a garden. It always felt like a close friend, even a garden he had never been in before. He did not feel alone here. He passed a row of colorful flowers, stopping to admire them in particular. Thinking how beautiful they were and that their beauty should be shared, he stepped closer and carefully touched the plant. "Forgive me, but I must show my friends," he said to the flora. "I will try to be gentle." With that, he picked five of the most perfect blooms, each of a different color. He returned to where the others were at play. First, he went to Raniwasha with his bundle. Rani did not notice him until another boy pointed, then Rani turned and smiled at him. "Hey, Qui-Gon. Whatcha got?" "I just wanted to bring this to you." He held out the white flower, its color the same as his friend's wings. Raniwasha accepted it with his big friendly smile. "Thanks, little guy." Qui-Gon smiled and started away until he saw Crage sitting with them. "Sorry about your leg, Crage." "Yeah, hey, thanks, Qui-Gon," he said without malice. Next, Qui-Gon took his gift to Lila. She was a close friend of Raniwasha, and of Qui-Gon too, but right now she was playing with some other girls and their dolls. He gave her a red flower. She giggled and thanked him. After that was Nozomi, who today was allowed to play with his group. To her he gave a pink bud; he knew she liked that color. She smiled shyly and quietly thanked him. Qui-Gon clutched the last two as he made his way to the only adults in the room. Holding his arms up beseechingly, Eladh bent down and lifted him. "I got this for you." Qui-Gon indicated the bright blue flower, a match for the Master's skin tone. "Thank you very much, Qui-Gon. That was very sweet of you." Eladh placed the stem at the tip of his antenna, which then rolled up and held the flower close to his head, prompting a smile from the child. A small hand held out the final bud. "Here, Master Kaya, for you." The purple petals were the same hue as her amethyst eyes, shining out brilliantly against her silver skin. "Thank you, Qui-Gon, but how did you know I was here?" The boy just smiled and rested his head on Eladh's shoulder. Eladh shrugged at her gently, so as not to disturb Qui-Gon, and gently rocked the crecheling. When Qui-Gon had fallen asleep, Eladh sighed forlornly. "I wish I could keep them this small." Kalaya smiled at the two. "But what of those that go on to become great Jedi Knights?" she queried. "I know, but they are put in so much danger. I wish I could keep them little and safe." Kalaya could not help musing that Eladh had a very great heart, particularly for one who was not even old enough yet to be knighted, had he been chosen. "They are so sweet and innocent. It is so hard to let them go." The young Councilor could see in his eyes how much he loved each and every charge in his care. She touched his empty shoulder. "Look at it this way," she suggested, "you are their very first role model. They learn a lot from you, not least of all responsibility. You are a good teacher, Eladh, and they will only benefit later from how you have shaped their lives early on." Eladh smiled broadly; he had never seen his influence that way, and it lifted his heart. They fell into a comfortable silence for a while, Eladh still rocking the sleeping tot. After a time, Raniwasha came running up to Eladh. "There he is. Can Qui-Gon come play, Eladh?" "Well, he is sleeping right now," the Dimnara told him. "No, I'm not," a sleepy voice interjected. Eladh looked to the heavy-lidded boy on his shoulder rubbing his eyes with a diminutive hand. "Do you want to go play with Raniwasha?" "I sure do." He scrambled to his feet as he was placed down, and the two scurried off. Qui-Gon and Rani dashed into the playroom. "Let's see if we can find something good to play with." Rani opened the toy chest and started rooting through it. Various toys came flying out of the box, flung away in the child's quest for the best plaything. Seeing a bauble that caught his eyes, Qui-Gon picked it up. It appeared to be some sort of stuffed animal, with round ears and buttons for eyes and nose but with a hole in its side where the insides were coming out. "What's this?" "What's what?" Rani replied. "What's this?" Qui-Gon said again, giggling. Rani finally paused in his search and turned around. "Oh, that's just some old Dontarran bear. We used to play with that when I was little, but the stuffing's all falling out now." "I think I'll hang on to it." "All right, little guy." Rani ruffled his hair. "Hey!" Qui-Gon laughed and batted his hand away. Later, Qui-Gon took his new find to one he thought could help him. "Eladh, could you help me fix this?" he implored, holding up the bear. Eladh looked at Qui-Gon's toy. "You want me to sew it up?" "I want you to show me how to." "Hmm. Let me see." Eladh retrieved a needle and some thread, then sat Qui-Gon in his lap. His little fingers had difficulty holding the needle, so Eladh got the stitching started. Once he saw how to do it, Qui-Gon took over, the Master's hand guiding his. It seemed the little one had some natural talent; Eladh did not know both Qui-Gon's parents were crafters. When they were done, Eladh held up the creature. "There, all better." Qui-Gon smiled and clapped. As it was getting late, Eladh carried Qui-Gon to his bed where his other animal awaited. He tucked the smiling boy in with his new friend and his new sense of accomplishment. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 11/5/04 1:07pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5
	Ahhh that was sweet! Learning a little about the Force Yep Qui would do great with gardening or even with animals hehehe You're doing an excellent job with lil Qui! Can't wait for more and keep up the good work! -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 11/5/04 1:07pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5
	Awwwwwww baby Qui so cute!!! I LOVED That he knew what to do with the seed before anyone else -- yep that's him alright Great post athena!! -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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Charmisjess Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 11/5/04 7:52pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5
	ATHENA, MOST BRILLIANT OF AUTHORS, ONE CALLED 'GREAT WRITER' IN THE FANFICTION BOARDS, MAKER OF THE RANI AND SO ON, AND SO FORTH... Sorry, had to herald just a little bit... WOOHOO! Review, from NY vacation edition... OH, Athena, I remember this part really well from before, and I still love it. The bit about the flowers is just so...so...awww, sweet, I love it!! And I think this is kind of character-developy for Rani, randomly...like in this chapter you kind of get more a feel for him. Oh, and the girl, with the cool name, with the N, that I won't attempt for fear of misspelling? Very sweet! I liked her. Not as much as Rani, naturally, but what can you do? it was just a very lovely, well rounded part. You did a great job, can't wait to see more... -----signature----- I <3 Starrie. Strange Little Girls-> http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24496675/p1/?0 Where are you going?
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Arwyn_Whitesun Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 11/7/04 5:11am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5
	Lovely, just absolutely lovely! You do such a wonderful job with baby Qui-Gon! You can see so much of the older Qui-Gon in him, the man and great Jedi he will become. I'm a sucker for little kids so I'm really loving this story. More please. -----signature----- In Love and War - - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20250548/?0 Obi-Wan AU Clone Wars Fic
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 11/15/04 7:56pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5
	Thanks, Kyn, he is just so adorable, but I try to keep him real too. Haha, yes, animals in the next chapter. Lol, thanks, Layren. Yeah yeah, there are those Living Force powers shining out. Jess, nice heralding. Yes, I remember your lovely review from last time, which was nice because I was a bit unsure of this chapter (like that's anything out of the ordinary) but I'm glad you like it. Rani! screams I so need to get to work on the next chapter so we can see how even more wonderful he is! Oh and her name is Nozomi. lol Arwyn Thank you, I'm so glad that's coming across. I'm trying hard to make him a little Qui-Gon and not just some random child. I'm glad you're enjoying it so. I do not know when I will get the chance to get the next chapter up, since my computer is being stupid, I'm not even on it at the moment, but as soon as things get worked out I'll have Chapter 4, Lost, edited and posted. Thanks for reading! -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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Jedi_Knight_Darkarna Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 11/16/04 4:52am Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5
	ATHENA, MOST BRILLIANT OF AUTHORS I agree. This is my favorite story on these boards at the moment. If I was part of the lucas licensing department, I would seriously think of having you do a series Cannot wait for more! This chapter has inspired me with my own fan fics -----signature----- The force is trying to tell us something...I can feel it...
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 11/22/04 5:36pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5
	Jedi_Knight_Darkarna Thanks, I don't know what to say. That's a very nice thing to say. It means a lot to me. I'm glad you're still enjoying it, and I hope I don't let you down. More to come as soon as possible! -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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AthenaLeigh Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/4/04 6:16pm Subject: RE: Imperturbable Serenity - Qui/Yoda/Dooku/OCs, chapter 3 11/5
	I just want to take the opportunity to thank the readers who nominated me for the awards. Thanks so much. I feel really humbled. -----signature----- Master to jedi_artorius Imperturbable Serenity http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/17159240/ "Hey, you monkeys are smarter than I thought!" "I smile because it hurts too much to frown."
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