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Princess_Arulmozhi Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 6/3/05 8:09pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	Xan and Obi were perfect! I loved the way Obi's frustration grew, and wanted to tear Xan apart when he was talking about knighthood not being his calling. Grrr.... Great writing, as usual. Sorry about your loss may. Here's hoping things go well. -----signature----- Perceptions (Xanatos/Obi/Qui/Anakin) AU:http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/25276178/p1/?7 - vignette Stones (Li'l Obi/Qui) - http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/23371821/p1/ Best Author, WFFA (BtS) 05/06 Lore-Master to 7
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PadawanKitara Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 6/3/05 8:14pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	I am sorry to hear about your loss This is really an interesting au. I can't wait until the 13th -----signature----- Courtier of the Royal Order of Shambling Dufi We are Dufi...Resistance is Futile! UCLA BRUINS
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Master_Noi Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 6/3/05 9:47pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	Sorry to hear about your loss. Was just able to get started on this. I like it. Those eyes ought to be always shining with life and vigor, brilliant, lit from within. They are not meant to sit so dully there, as if they have no purpose but as holes to let in the sights of the world. The boy’s soul should be looking out of them, eager to see and experience life. Something has gone awry for this lad. This was beautiful insight and made me ache. Please say Qui will be able to save him from misery. -----signature----- For Such a Time as This ( 01/17/09) A Shrouded Path (03/21/09)
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snowbee-wan kenobi Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 6/3/05 11:32pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	Wow! very intuiging so far! Can't wait for more! Love the way you wrote the playful banter between Qui-Gon and his wife! -----signature----- "Lost a planet master Obi-Wan has. How embarassing. How embarassing." -Yoda AOTC
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Healer_Leona Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 6/4/05 7:34am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	Ch. 1 - That opening was wonderful. Love how Qui-Gon willed the moment to last and how his wife very quickly seemed to read his mind. They're expecting?? Sweet!! I like the idea he pays heed to his 'feelings' and that Julune does as well. Oooh, who are the Jedi that've landed... is it??? Ch. 2 - It is the two of them, though not Master and Padawan. Ah, so Dooku trained Qui-Gon a bit.. I lke that... and how Knight Xanatos explains he sees too much of himself in the boy. Big papa... perfect nickname for him! maychorian, my condolences for your loss. You and your family will be in my thoughts and prayers. -----signature----- Feel so good, but I'm old 2000 years of chasing's taking it's toll
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DarthEwan Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 6/4/05 12:50pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	Sorry to hear about your great grandpa. Great story so far. i've never read anything like it before. I was right about who the two jedi in the shuttle were. Xani is so mean. Poor obi hopefully qui will make it all better. can't wait to read more.:) -----signature----- "When love and skill work together expect a masterpiece." by John Ruskin
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River_Stone Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 6/4/05 1:54pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	I'm sorry to hear about your great grand-father. All of us are here for you, if you need us. As for the story: wow! I can't get it out of my head. I find myself sitting at work thinking, "I wonder how she's going to do this bit?" I like the twisted symmetry of canon with Xanatos facing the same trauma of Qui-Gon in the originals. Did Dooku train him, I wonder? If my boss asks you're to blame for my lack of productivity. Just thought I would let you know in case they come after you with staplers (Random thought: Are you a counsellor? I didn't know that. That must be very rewarding and would explain your deep and sensitive empathy towards human emotions which you display so wonderfully in your writing.) -----signature----- "May it be a light to you in dark places, when all other lights go out." Galadriel, FOTR, LOTR trilogy Padawan to the wonderful dianethx
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Jedi_Tigris Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 6/6/05 2:28am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	I'm so sorry to hear about your loss. I'm glad I found this. Very different and interesting ideas! Find it hard to think of Qui not as a Jedi, but this is a believable alternative. Of course he would be like a farmer with his connection to the Living force And I like his family. Nice twist with Xanatos and Obi. Can't wait to see what happens next! -----signature----- "Who is more foolish? The fool, or the fool who follows him?" - Obi-Wan Kenobi, ANH padawan/adoptee of Myri_Antilles Battling DRL...otherwise known as college and work... Please add me to your pm list when I review. Thanks!
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Musing Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 6/6/05 6:19am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	My condolences on your loss, maychorian. Also, congratulations on another lovely chapter. It's not nice to gloat, I know, but I can't help but think that Xanatos is getting what he deserves by suffering all the uncertainty and anguish that Qui-Gon felt at that point in time. Will there be a new addition to the Jinn family much sooner than expected? Have to wait and see, I guess. sighs
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kateydidnt Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 6/9/05 11:27am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	I hope you are doing okay Laura, I know that loss is always hard. My thoughts are with you and your family. On the other side of things, this is a fantastic plot idea. Although I too find it hard to picture Qui-Gon as anything but a Jedi. He's just so good at it! Ah, poor Obi--you'll find a master if I don't miss my guess, just rather unconventionally. So when/how did Dooku decide to give a little training to Qui-Gon? I look forward to more! Goodness you turn out stories quickly my friend! I need to check back with you more often. Seems whenever I turn around you have another amazing piece started. -----signature----- R2D2: The Swiss-Army Knife of Droids The Outer Rim: Minor Character Index http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21597215
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JEDI-KNIGHTS_R_L Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 6/10/05 3:59pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	What an interesting take. This is a great stroy and i hope that you will continue it? I'm looking forward to the next post. -----signature----- When you play, play hard; when you work, don't play at all.-Theodore Roosevelt "No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. No suprise for the writer, no surprise for the reader."-Robert Frost
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maychorian Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 6/12/05 10:11pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	Thanks for the condolences! It wasn't really a sad time, though, because my great-grandpa really was very ready to go, and we know where he is. He's been sad ever since his wife died in '98, and I know he's happy now. You'll be happy to know that this story is written up through chapter 7 already, so you can expect regular updates for some time yet (I was productive while away from the internet.) I'm glad to be home! Missed you! Next post ETA: Tuesday or Wednesday Master mine Looooooooved the reading together bit! That's so sweet! Those two are so wuvable together! Oh, good! I think they're cute, too. Shaindl Xanatos needs to be smacked for what he's doing to him. Yeah, saying "it isn't you, really" never quite cuts it, does it? shanobi And I would love to take you up on it! Excellent! I look forward to hearing from you again. sheleigh I have to admit, I am relieved that the Qui-Gon of your story is drawn to Obi-Wan immediately, instead of fighting the connection as it happened in the Jude Watson books. Thanks. My Qui-Gon here is a little different tahn canon, though I'm trying to keep him in character. Without the betrayal of Xanatos and the hard life of a Jedi, I think he's a lot more open with his feelings--rather wears them on his sleeve, actually. And he feels no need to hold back, to be a calm and staid Jedi. It's fun to write him like this. Bastet Thanks! LuvEwan Thanks! VaderLVR64 I can't wait to read more. Qui and Obi! ::bounces:: Aren't they wonderful? Sometimes I'll just be randomly thinking about different stories I'm reading, and I'll wonder, "Hmm, what's going to be in the next chapter in that one story? I can't wait to read it!" And then I realize that I'm writing that one. It keeps me motivated. I want to know what happens next! dianethx I loved that Xanatos was a Knight and had almost turned and was now too afraid to take Obi on as an apprentice - a skewed play on the original. Hehehe. I like skewing canon. Princess_Arulmozhi I loved the way Obi's frustration grew, and wanted to tear Xan apart when he was talking about knighthood not being his calling. Xanatos is such an idiot. But hopefully he makes sense, too. PadawanKitara I can't wait until the 13th I'm early! Aren't you proud? Neither torrential rain nor torrid humidity nor motion sickness will keep me from completing my journey . . . Master_Noi Please say Qui will be able to save him from misery. Someday. Maybe. If all goes well. snowbee-wan kenobi Love the way you wrote the playful banter between Qui-Gon and his wife! Thanks! That was fun to write. Healer_Leona Big papa... perfect nickname for him! Everybody wants a Qui-papa! Well, everyone I write. DarthEwan i've never read anything like it before. AUs are fun! Thanks for reading! River_Stone (Random thought: Are you a counsellor? I didn't know that. That must be very rewarding and would explain your deep and sensitive empathy towards human emotions which you display so wonderfully in your writing.) I was counselor at a junior high girls' camp this last weekend, but that's not my profession, no. I'm still a student. I did consider counseling as a career though. In the end my desire to write was stronger, but if I had the opportunity I would major in counseling, too. Thanks for the compliments! Much of my empathy comes from personality, I suppose, and also because I have been through things in my life that make me sensitive to human suffering and eager to help in any way I can. Jedi_Tigris Find it hard to think of Qui not as a Jedi, but this is a believable alternative. I know, I know! ::groan:: It's so weird. Fun, though. Musing Will there be a new addition to the Jinn family much sooner than expected? Have to wait and see, I guess. sighs LOL! You're reading my mind. Yep, you'll see. kateydidnt I'm doing all right, thanks. I'm very tired right now from camp and all, but a good night's sleep will cure that. I'm glad you're enjoying the story! JEDI-KNIGHTS_R_L This is a great stroy and i hope that you will continue it? Ohhh, yes! You can count on it. I have most of the plot for the first part figured out now. Poor Obi-Wan is going to go through quite a lot before it all comes out okay, though. Wow, those replies took me a long time. Thanks for reading! You make me very happy and motivated. -----signature----- Kynstar's former Padawan The Unchosen: http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20049795/p1/ updated 2/16 When the darkness falls early, and the light hits the ground, there's a moment to be captured . . .
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maychorian Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 6/12/05 10:13pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/3
	Chapter 3: Communion Now, when Qui-Gon made his visits to the Enrichment Zones, communing with the Living Force was not his only reason. He did not fully acknowledge his other purpose, newborn and not yet grown to maturity, but it was there. His senses were always wide open, not only to the streams of the Force from healthy vegetation, rich soil, and clean air as before, but also keeping a corner of his perception open for a certain . . . something. It would have been simpler just to speak with Heim Shilbey and ask for a meeting with the newest Agri-Corps recruit, but somehow Qui-Gon couldn’t bring himself to do that. It just sounded . . . odd, for a grown man to want to see a young boy. A bit suspicious. He had no good reasons to offer for this strange request, either—he couldn’t exactly tell them that he was a half-trained Force-sensitive who thought he might be developing an unsanctioned connection with a stranger he’d never even spoken to. And the Force seemed to advise him not to speak to Shilbey, to wait. Qui-Gon was good at waiting, though as the days passed without contact, he did begin to wonder. Eight days after the shuttle from the Jedi Temple landed, Qui-Gon was able to visit the largest Enrichment Zone, the one in the south. The Agri-Corps workers knew him, greeting him cheerfully in the ways of their various species, often with a “May the Force be with you, good sir!” He had a friendly smile and wave for all. One of the younger ones, Nira, walked with him for a time, gossiping about the mining on Bandomeer, the negotiations between different factions. “They’re talking about this one mining corporation, Offworld or something like that,” the young woman chattered, lengthening her stride to keep up with his long legs. “It used to be a lot bigger, but about three years ago it had some trouble. I think the owner died and didn’t have an heir, something like that. Just recently they started shutting down some of their operations here, like that deep-sea platform. Apparently it just wasn’t making enough money.” “They’ve found traces of ionite at the Home Planet Mine,” Qui-Gon said, willing to gossip back. He considered asking her if there were any newcomers to this zone, but it didn’t seem like the right time. “I like what I’ve heard of the way they do business, very fair to their workers, unlike some corps. There’s also been an influx of Arconan immigrants, lately, which seems to bode well. They are very industrious and good-hearted. Perhaps things are looking up for Bandomeer.” Nira nodded. “We sure hope so. It’s about time. Well, I’d best get back to my seedlings. Nice seeing you, Mr. Jinn—don’t be a stranger! Been too long since you stopped by this zone.” He chuckled, and she rushed off, one arm aloft in a hasty wave. Qui-Gon continued toward the back wall, delighting in the feel of good, healthy mud squishing beneath his feet, fruit trees in ordered rows perfuming the air about him. He paused for a moment to take off his boots and continued barefoot, closing his eyes to soak in all of the Living Force he could gather, his deep connection to everything about him preventing any stumbles or wavering from his destination. At the wall, he settled down into a cross-legged position, closing his eyes and stretching out with his senses. One of the Jedi skills Knight Dooku had stressed most with him was meditation, for it had the greatest potential of helping untrained Force-sensitives grow more attuned to their powers—and what ought to be done with them. Qui-Gon had quickly found that he enjoyed it, becoming more aware both of himself and of everything around him. Certainly with guidance he would have been able to do much more in these times, but he had discovered quite a lot on his own, too. Sometimes he tried to direct this spiritual wandering, but he usually found that to be less fruitful than when he simply opened himself to what the Force had to show him. Today he did the latter, reducing himself to a mere wisp, willing to be manipulated by the currents and winds. And today the Force had a brand-new discovery to reveal to him, unprecedented and completely wonderful. It was a thread: a thin, insubstantial thread of pure light. The thread flowed through a corner of Qui-Gon’s mind, leading inward to the depths of his spirit, leading outward to . . . something else. Marveling, he studied the thread for endless moments, watching it waver and shift, seeming to pulse with a heartbeat not his own. Hesitantly, he reached out to touch it, just for the smallest fraction of time. The thread jumped at his touch as if it were alive, and he jerked back, wondering if he had done wrong. But the thread was brighter now, more lively, vibrating with . . . eagerness? Desire? Slowly, he touched it again, then firmed his grip, and watched the thread grow thicker and stronger with the mental contact. He pulled back, staring at the thread which was now a cord, glowing no longer pure white, but innumerable colors. All of them meant something, he knew they did, but he did not know what they were. It was frustrating and exciting at once—such a new sensation this was, both beautiful and unsettling. He wished he had someone to teach him what it meant, what to do with it. Knight Dooku. He would contact Dooku tonight, as soon as he returned home. He hadn’t spoken to the Jedi in . . . well nigh a decade, wasn’t it? But Dooku had said he would always be open to hearing from the younger man. He had felt a connection with young Qui-Gon, enough to ignore ancient practice and teach many Force skills to one who was outside his Order. Qui-Gon looked again at the cord in his mind, trying to open himself to anything the Force might have to tell him about what it meant. Now he noticed darker spots against the brilliance, ranging from light gray to dark, splotchy brown. They were rare, but definitely present, and they troubled him greatly. Something was wrong. But what did it mean, and what could he do to heal it? He sighed and withdrew, realizing that he had done all he could. He needed more information. This was too new and strange to meddle with—he might unwittingly do damage, not knowing how to handle this new part of his own mind. Qui-Gon opened his eyes, and immediately blinked. A boy with reddish-sandy hair sat cross-legged before him, chin resting on his fists, elbows on knees, blue-gray eyes studying the man intently. It took him a moment to recognize Obi-Wan Kenobi. The boy was grubby from working out of doors, his Jedi garments stained at elbow and knee, one hem beginning to fray. His hair was tousled and unkempt, sticking up in strange places, as if the youngster had just been roused from sleep. He looked just as exhausted as he had at the transport, just as pale and unwell, and was it possible that he had lost weight in only a week? Qui-Gon frowned at the thought, then stilled his features as he realized how that would look to the boy. He was not displeased to see him—exactly the opposite. But didn’t they take care of their young ones in the Agri-Corps? The child looked utterly forsaken and neglected. Qui-Gon, anticipating fatherhood in seven months, did not like it at all. He wasn’t fast enough. Obi-Wan saw the frown, and he leaned back, hands spread in apology. “I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to disturb you.” “You didn’t.” Qui-Gon shook his head quickly, and held out a hand in greeting. “I’m Qui-Gon Jinn.” The boy eyed his hand warily for a moment, then took it. His grip was loose and tentative, young fingers callused, though not in the pattern of a farmer. “Obi-Wan Kenobi.” “Pleased to meet you, Obi-Wan.” Qui-Gon shook his hand, squeezing gently but warmly, strangely aware of how small it was within his own, how chilled and uncertain. Obi-Wan took his hand back and held it in the other, as if unconsciously checking it for injury. “I . . . I don’t know how to say this, Mr. Jinn . . .” “Call me Qui-Gon. Please.” Obi-Wan hesitated, his lips drawn tight in indecision, then nodded slowly. “Very well. Qui-Gon.” “And it’s all right if I call you Obi-Wan?” “Yes. It’s all right.” And there was the echo of a bitter, sorrowful thought hanging in the air. You certainly can’t call me ‘Padawan.’ “Good.” Qui-Gon smiled, doing his best to make up for that earlier frown. “Did you have something to ask me, Obi-Wan? Feel free. If anyone is intruding here, it’s me.” “I . . . I . . .” Obi-Wan suddenly squeezed his eyes shut and shook his head as if trying to clear it. He looked to Qui-Gon again, helpless confusion in his face. “I don’t understand it. I thought I felt someone . . . touch me. I followed the feeling back, and found you sitting here. Did you touch me?” Qui-Gon felt his brow wrinkle in mirrored confusion. “Touch you? How could I have done that?” “I . . . I don’t know.” Obi-Wan scrambled to his feet, misery deadening his eyes and slumping his shoulders. “I’m sorry. I shouldn’t have bothered you. It’s silly, silly . . .” Without warning he hurried away, one hand to his head as if to hold it on his shoulders, or to ward off sudden pain. Qui-Gon jumped to his feet. “Obi-Wan, wait!” He wanted to follow, but felt rooted in place, staring as the slim figure vanished into the trees. “Obi-Wan!” The boy didn't even glance back. Qui-Gon bit back a curse, almost stomping his foot in childish petulance. The thread! Of course! How could he have been so dense? It was a connection, formed by the Force and leading to this poor, desperately confused child. Obi-Wan must have felt it move and strengthen when Qui-Gon touched it. Obviously, the boy didn’t know what it was or how to deal with it any more than Qui-Gon did. Once again, Qui-Gon couldn’t wait to get home and have a conversation. X Before Qui-Gon touched the comm, it buzzed with an incoming message. He stared at it for a moment, his finger centimeters from the button, then activated it. Heim Shilbey’s holographic face appeared, creased in concern. “Mr. Jinn? I’m sorry to trouble you at home, but Nira seemed to think you might be able to help us.” “I’m always willing to help.” Qui-Gon nodded and crossed his arms over his chest, hiding his impatience. Why now? He had been just about to get some answers! “Yes, you appear to have that reputation about Bandomeer. Quite commendable, considering you’ve only been here for a month and a half.” Qui-Gon shifted from foot to foot. “What’s your problem? I’ll be glad to offer any assistance that I can.” Shilbey kneaded his wrinkled forehead with a holographic hand. “One of our young workers has gone missing. Nira said she saw you talking with him, and she thought you might know something . . .” Qui-Gon felt his heart drop into his stomach, the collision making him feel rather sick. “Obi-Wan Kenobi?” “You know him! Yes, our newest recruit. He’s been very withdrawn, hardly interacting with anyone, so I thought it odd when Nira mentioned . . . Mr. Jinn? Are you there?” He was already gone. -----signature----- Kynstar's former Padawan The Unchosen: http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20049795/p1/ updated 2/16 When the darkness falls early, and the light hits the ground, there's a moment to be captured . . .
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ithesock Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 6/12/05 11:02pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	Welcome back. I hope everything went well. Ooh, an update! <gobbles post> Well, that was certainly a twist in the tale - they have a Force connection already?! And Obi-Wan's hurt, depressed and confused...oh the poor one. And he's missing! Hopefully, Qui will help. Soon. Great work, m'dear. -----signature----- Fields of Elysia (JA): http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20100957/?140 - 10/8 Epistles to a Master (JA, AU): http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20479680/?25 Lore-Master to Seven
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Jedi_Tigris Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 6/13/05 1:14am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	Yay, you posted early! Ooh, so they already have a bond? Interesting! Maybe that'll help Qui find Obi. I really liked the description if Qui meditating. It's cool how he listens to it too. -----signature----- "Who is more foolish? The fool, or the fool who follows him?" - Obi-Wan Kenobi, ANH padawan/adoptee of Myri_Antilles Battling DRL...otherwise known as college and work... Please add me to your pm list when I review. Thanks!
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