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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 6/13/05 3:22am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	I love this story. Have I told you that recently? If not, I really do. The way you describe things, the way the story is flowing, it's just so lovely and right. Poor Obi-Wan, he must be terribly confused. And poor Qui-Gon trying to find out what the thread was and what to do about it. The thing is that Obi-Wan wants to be a Padawan and a Jedi Knight and Qui-Gon cannot give him that. But they both have things to teach the other. I'm very much looking forward to that. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 9/22/09 jedidas3's Master Merlin - Diplomatic Immunity - http://boards.theforce.net/nswff/b10808/30459852
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Master_Noi Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 6/13/05 4:24am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	I just love how you show the Force bringing them together. But, they are both so confused and now Obi-Wan has run away. More soon please! -----signature----- For Such a Time as This ( 01/17/09) A Shrouded Path (03/21/09)
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 6/13/05 5:02am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	Welcome back Padawan! Missed chatting with you! Hope all went well? Oh lovely job there on their connection growing. Wonderful work! Those poor two Not knowing what exactly is going on... hopefully Qui can find Obi! The boy could get seriously injured if he isn't careful. Glad to see ya back and in action again! -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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shanobi Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 6/13/05 9:16am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	You have a beautiful writing style Laura One sentence just flows perfectly into the next. Very interesting first meeting. Obi sure is a little jittery - and quite obviously is heartbreakingly miserable This post WAS well worth the wait. Can't wait to see what you have in store for us --shan p.s. Glad your trip went well. The sorrow of losing a loved one is always made better when in your heart you know they've gone to a better place -----signature----- The Plot Bunny Thread: http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/8535413/p1/?1308
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 6/13/05 9:33am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	Oh, I loved Qui-Gon's reaction at the end of the post. That was beautiful, may, as all your offerings are. -----signature----- What Light Breaks-AU Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon Anakin angst (collaboration with Spiritweaver) http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/29979222/p1/?0 You want an Obi-Wan epic? We've got it right here.
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Qui-Gina-Jinn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 6/13/05 2:25pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	- Obi's gone missing??!! That's not good. Poor boy -----signature----- Dark Lady of the DLC Fan Force Denmark I was there - FFEurope Meeting Stockholm 2005, Celebration Europe 2007, JediCon 2008, FFE Meeting Copenhagen 2009 Not to worry - we are still flying half a ship! http://swawakening.proboards.com/index.cgi
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PadawanKitara Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 6/13/05 5:21pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	It's not looking good for poor Obi-Wan -----signature----- Courtier of the Royal Order of Shambling Dufi We are Dufi...Resistance is Futile! UCLA BRUINS
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Seven Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 6/13/05 10:19pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	This is very nice! I can't wait for more! Seven -----signature----- Mythology: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=23852079&brd=10475 Not So Cool: http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=22005893 The devoted little padawan of Master ithesock/Princess_Arulmozhi
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jodiwent Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 6/14/05 4:34pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	Sorry to hear about your great-granddad. There is something extra Qui-Gon about this non-Jedi version. He has to find Obi. -----signature----- Links to FICS in Bio on botom of profile http://boards.theforce.net/ASP/user.asp?usr=238155
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Bastet Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 6/14/05 9:15pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	Oh, poor Obi-Wan! I'm glad Qui noticed how miserable the dear child is, he needs someone to care about him, since none of the other Jedi did. Grr! I hope Obi only ran away and wasn't kidnapped or anything bad like that. Go find him Qui, you're his only hope! Beautiful story, Maychorian, can't wait for more! -----signature----- "Oh yeah. Ooh, aah. That's how it always starts. But then later there's running, then...screaming." --Dr. Ian Malcolm "Okay fine. Go ahead and scream. Then when that tricycloplots attacks you, don't come crying to me." --Paul Kirby
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Gkilkenny Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 6/15/05 5:32am Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	It never looks good for poor Obi-wan But that what we all like Obi angst -----signature----- Proud Padawan to p_stotts Peace over anger - honour over hate - Strength over fear. Links to Stories in my Bio. Obi-Wan forever.
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sheleigh Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 6/15/05 9:20pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	He's gone?! Where'd he go? Oh, May what a lovely post! Particularly loved the description of the link forming between Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon. I wonder where that will go... and how it will help in finding Obi-Wan? An excellent post, wondering what happens next. -----signature----- And In Conclusion... http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20582878/ Vader: The Force is strong with you.... Luke: Oh yeah? How strong... Vader: Uh... as strong as a small pony... - Eddie Izzard's Dressed to Kill
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maychorian Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 6/15/05 10:51pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12
	ithesock Well, that was certainly a twist in the tale - they have a Force connection already?! It's going to be needed, too. Thanks! Jedi_Tigris I really liked the description if Qui meditating. It's cool how he listens to it too. Thanks! It made sense to me that Qui would like to meditate. He just has that aura of calm and contemplation about him. dianethx The thing is that Obi-Wan wants to be a Padawan and a Jedi Knight and Qui-Gon cannot give him that. But they both have things to teach the other. I'm very much looking forward to that. Ah, how right you are. They do have a lot of to teach other. But if this is going to work, Obi-Wan is going to have give up his dream of being a Knight. And that's going to be very, very hard. Master_Noi I just love how you show the Force bringing them together. And fortunately neither of them is fighting this time 'round. They just don't know what to do with it . . . My Master Hope all went well? Yep! Camp was awesome--my girls were great. And it was even kind of interesting to visit Oklahoma again--it's harvest time down there, and I got to see combines working close up. Pretty cool. shanobi Obi sure is a little jittery - and quite obviously is heartbreakingly miserable Yes, the poor child. Neither of them quite know how to react to this. It's going to be an interesting ride. LuvEwan Oh, I loved Qui-Gon's reaction at the end of the post. Me too. He's not one to wait around when there's something he can do. And he’s gotten very attached very quickly to this frosaken young boy. Qui-Gina-Jinn Obi's gone missing??!! That's not good. Nope, not good at all. No fear—Qui-Gon is on the case! PadawanKitara It's not looking good for poor Obi-Wan Does it ever? Not this early into the story, usually. Thanks for reading! Seven Thanks! jodiwent There is something extra Qui-Gon about this non-Jedi version. Hmm. That's an interesting insight. I think it's true, too. This Qui-Gon is not a calm, reserved master--he is fully himself. All he has to give is himself, and that he does--freely. I've really let his personality--as least as it perceive it to be--to shine through unveiled. Bastet I hope Obi only ran away and wasn't kidnapped or anything bad like that. Oh, why would our Obi-Wan have any reason to run away? And we KNOW that he never, ever gets kidnapped. Glkilkenny It never looks good for poor Obi-wan How right you are! sheleigh Particularly loved the description of the link forming between Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon. Thanks! I work hard on my imagery. Thanks for reading, all! Next post ETA: Saturday or Sunday -----signature----- Kynstar's former Padawan The Unchosen: http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20049795/p1/ updated 2/16 When the darkness falls early, and the light hits the ground, there's a moment to be captured . . .
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maychorian Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 6/15/05 10:53pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/12 - Date Edited: 6/15/05 10:57pm (1 edits total) Edited By: maychorian
	Chapter 4: Following the Thread The dark spots smudging the cord in Qui-Gon’s mind were bigger, deeper, threatening to choke the brilliant flow of light. He kissed Julune good-bye with a brief, tangled explanation, and was out the door, grabbing his dark green cloak as he went. They had a speeder here, though they usually walked, or took public transports—Qui-Gon backed it out of the small garage attached to the temporary housing facility and roared off before he even thought of which way to go. The Southern Zone was a couple of hours away from Bandor by speeder. Qui-Gon wasn’t quite halfway there when he realized that he was heading in the wrong direction. Surprised, he slowed the speeder to a stop and idled it for a moment, staring sightlessly at the ravaged landscape as he pondered. No doubt the Agri-Corps workers were searching within and in the immediate area of the zone, assuming that the boy had run away afoot. But Qui-Gon’s instincts told a different story. Obi-Wan was quite far away from the zone by now. And he wasn’t necessarily running. Qui-Gon looked inward, almost in meditation but not quite. How had Obi-Wan described it? Ah, yes. He had followed the feeling back, and found Qui-Gon. There was no reason the man couldn’t do the same. The cord—the connection—pulsed, faltered, and surged again. Confusion, fear . . . loneliness. Pain. Trapped, unable to escape. Helplessness. Terror. North. North and west. Qui-Gon swung the speeder about and gunned the engine again, dust and small, chipped rocks flying up in his wake. The bloated red sun began to set, staining the tainted sky in blurs and streaks of sickly light. Qui-Gon tried not to breathe too deeply of the ash-flecked air, though his lungs strained to pant, to hyperventilate. He felt dizzy with urgency. It took too long. It took far too long. What was the use of even having a speeder if it couldn’t go faster than this? Qui-Gon was tempted to jump out and run. A sudden easing, a sense of release, and Qui-Gon exhaled slowly, the relief not his own. The tense urgency relaxed slightly, though his foot still crushed the accelerator to the floor. The feeling of being trapped and helpless was gone. But the pain was increasing, taking on a physical overtone. The boy was suffering, confused and alone. The thread became slippery in Qui-Gon’s mental grip, fuzzing in and out. He tightened his fingers, and it slid away completely, drawing a growl of frustration from his lips. What had happened? He didn’t know, didn’t know how to get it back. He reached the general area the thread had been leading him to and stopped the speeder, leaping out to continue the search on foot. The cord remained difficult to grasp, and he thought it might be thinning. Qui-Gon quit trying to grab it, afraid of causing more harm. He would continue this by other means. “Obi-Wan? Obi-Wan! Obi-Wan Kenobi! Where are you? Don’t be afraid, young one—I’m here to help you. Obi-Wan?” Qui-Gon tramped over broken boulders and parched, uneven ground, dust rising at each footfall, sometimes drawing a cough. The dry, cracked earth seeped residual heat from the now-sinking sun as if this were a desert, though Bandomeer was generally quite temperate, if a bit given to violent storms. All in all, it was a miserable place to get lost in. “Obi-Wan! Obi-Wan Kenobi!” By all the twinkling stars, why hadn’t he thought to grab the heavy-duty luma from the speeder? Qui-Gon fumbled on his belt, searching for the little multi-tool Julune had given him for his last nameday. Can opener, fuser, gripper . . . he flipped through the different heads and found the pin-light. It was better than nothing. “Obi-Wan? It’s Qui-Gon Jinn! Please try to answer me, little one! Obi-Wan!” Qui-Gon paused, listening, his heart in his throat. What if the boy couldn’t answer? What if he were seriously hurt? No, he couldn’t focus on “if.” Live in the moment. Find the boy now. The scent of this acrid wasteland stung his nostrils, mocking him with his futility. “Obi-Wan!” Was that a moan, or just the breeze murmuring in the pitted earth? Qui-Gon turned toward the sound, probing with the pin-light, reaching out with senses that cringed away from the devastation here. There it came again . . . definitely sounded very much like a human moan, pained and low. A mound of dirt, tailings from some failed mine, obstructed Qui-Gon’s path. He rushed around it, his senses focused on what lay on the other side. His pin-light bobbed from side to side, sporadically lighting the way before him. There, at last—he barely stopped in time to prevent stepping on a small, limp hand, flung out from the prone body as if reaching hopelessly for something lost. Qui-Gon fell to his knees by the boy’s side, his breath leaving him in a muffled whoosh. “Oh, my poor little one. What happened to you?” In the small but intense beam of light Qui-Gon could see little, but what he was saw was very clear. Fresh bruises marred Obi-Wan’s face, smeared with dust and slack in unconsciousness. Qui-Gon reached out to touch an unharmed portion of that smooth young cheek, and felt yet another spike of worry when he found it flushed and dry and burning with fever. Obi-Wan flinched from the contact, weakly turning his head away, another moan bubbling up. Qui-Gon gently urged him to turn back, trying to study the still face as the thin eyelids fluttered erratically. The boy was seriously ill, and it shocked him to see such a rapid deterioration since their brief meeting earlier in the day. The youngster’s eyes fluttered open, murky and hazed, fever-bright in the twilight, and Qui-Gon angled the pin-light away to avoid hurting him further. Words stumbled from lips numb and trembling, a shaky hand wandering wearily in the air as if in search of something. “It’s—it’s wrong. It’s all wrong. Isn’t it? It’s all wrong. It is. It’s all wrong.” Qui-Gon grabbed the wandering hand, cradled it gently to his chest. “It’s going to be all right now, Obi-Wan. You’re going to be all right.” Obi-Wan closed his eyes, drawing in a deep breath. He shook his head in tired negation, not defiantly, just very certain. “No. No. It’s wrong. It’s been wrong for a long time. It’s getting worse.” “Fever dreams, little one. It’s the fever talking.” Qui-Gon squeezed his hand. “What happened to you? How did you get out here?” Obi-Wan’s forehead wrinkled, and the confusion returned. His voice was suddenly very young and uncertain, lacking the conviction that had strengthened it before. “Can’t . . . can’t remember. A ship? A man. Don’t know.” He turned apologetic eyes to Qui-Gon. “Hurts. Sorry. Can’t remember. Sorry.” “Don’t apologize. It’s not your fault. Maybe you’ll remember when you’re better.” Obi-Wan sighed and closed his eyes, falling limp as the tension drained away. “Obi-Wan? Do you think you can walk? We need to get you to medical care.” The boy’s eyes flew open, and he weakly tried to grip back on Qui-Gon’s hand, distress tightening his body again. “Don’t take me back there. Please. Wrong. Not the right place.” Qui-Gon blinked, and realized that he hadn’t been thinking of taking the boy back to the Enrichment Zone at all. Bandor was closer, anyway, and the only thought in his mind was to get the sick child home to Julune. “I hadn’t planned on it. I want to take you home, as a matter of fact. Is that all right?” Slowly the pale eyelids slid downward once more. “Yes,” the boy murmured. “Better. Not quite right, but better. Thank you, Qui-Gon.” “You’re welcome, little one.” With that settled, the youngster fell back into sleep, or perhaps unconsciousness. Qui-Gon shook his head slightly. “How easily you trust me,” he whispered to the lost-and-found boy. “It’s a precious gift. I won’t treat it lightly.” With Obi-Wan found and his anxiety eased, Qui-Gon’s connection to the Force came more easily, though it was strangled and unhappy in this barren place. He clipped the multi-tool back on his belt and gently gathered the boy into his arms, the heat of the slight frame instantly soaking through his tunic. Obi-Wan huddled against him, shaking with chills, whimpering softly as the fever tightened its grip on his weakened body. “Stars above, child, when was the last time you ate?” Qui-Gon muttered, feeling the boniness of the wrist against his palm, the hip bone jutting into his abdomen. “Or slept, for that matter? Did no one care for you at all?” As once before today, the Force guided his footsteps, preventing any stumbles as he made his way swiftly back to the speeder. It was hard to abandon the boy to lay alone on the back bench—he wanted to keep him close, keep an eye on him during the journey back—but Qui-Gon forced himself to do so. He wrapped the shivering form in his thick green cloak to ward against the chill of the oncoming night, and pulled the restraints around him as carefully as possible. Obi-Wan tossed his head, muttering, but stilled when Qui-Gon laid a hand on his forehead, whispering soothing phrases. “Shh, little one. It’s all right. You’re safe. We’ll be home soon.” The trip back seemed just as urgent as the trip out. And, again, it took much too long. Qui-Gon fought to keep his gaze from slipping back to check on the boy every other second—he still needed to keep some of his attention on the ground ahead, patchily lit by the fore-illuminators on the speeder. The boy seemed to lay utterly still, and that worried the man even more than the restless shifting and muttering had. The bright cord in his mind was silent, dimmed, the gray blotches threatening to take over the brilliant light. Was it just the physical illness affecting the boy’s connection to the Force, or was something deeper amiss? “Hold on, Obi-Wan. Hold on,” Qui-Gon murmured, wrenching his gaze once more back to the dark terrain before him and the sporadically illuminated city looming larger with the passing of each second. “You aren’t alone anymore. Don’t give up. We have far too much we need to do.” He blinked, and realized immediately that it was true. They had a lot to do. -----signature----- Kynstar's former Padawan The Unchosen: http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20049795/p1/ updated 2/16 When the darkness falls early, and the light hits the ground, there's a moment to be captured . . .
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 6/15/05 11:28pm Subject: RE: The Unchosen (Qui/Obi AU) updated 6/15
	Oh, may, that was brilliant. I so loved this line: “You’re welcome, little one.” With that settled, the youngster fell back into sleep, or perhaps unconsciousness. Qui-Gon shook his head slightly. “How easily you trust me,” he whispered to the lost-and-found boy. “It’s a precious gift. I won’t treat it lightly.” Very sweet. Your stories always give my heart a little pang. I really liked how you described Qui-Gon's connection to Obi-Wan within the Force, and that he had automatically thought of taking Obi-Wan to his home. So wonderful. -----signature----- What Light Breaks-AU Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon Anakin angst (collaboration with Spiritweaver) http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/29979222/p1/?0 You want an Obi-Wan epic? We've got it right here.
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