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The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) Chapter 9 *Updated 23/09/08*
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dianethx
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7/15/07 1:34pm
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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Great job on the fight. I could picture it very clearly. Poor Obi-Wan. He may be wiry and well prepared to fight but against such a large opponent... gotta hurt.
Wonderful.
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ratna
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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wooooh!
holy  that was gripping!!
horrible that the only way Obi-Wan can get a chance to rest is by getting beaten within an inch of his life!
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dimyavie
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7/15/07 3:37pm
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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Wonderful update. I could picture what was going on very clearly! Poor Obi-Wan, having to against that monster of a man. Hopefully he'll be able to contact Qui-Gon soon and then his captors will have one very angry Jedi Master to deal with... Again, awesome update! 
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Nimloth
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7/15/07 4:13pm
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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Good action chapter! You were able to depict the scene in a very graphic and visual way... 
Please, continue! 
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Valairy_Scot
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7/15/07 6:09pm
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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I agree with everyone - wow. Wow! You do a wonderful job of writing action - believe me, I could see that.
Nicely done.
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ClaudiaR
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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Wow great fight scene... I am sorry the old man died but at least Obi is alive....
my favorite sentence is :
"Size matters not. Size matters not. Obi-Wan repeated the mantra to himself like a lifeline. That better not have been the only time you ever lied to me, Master Yoda"
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Fifilla
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7/16/07 1:47am
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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Wow! Great fighting scene! 
I hope Obi-Wan will recover soon - I guess that wasn't the last fight he was in. 
His mind reached blindly for Qui-Gon.
Master, help me!
Of course there was no answer, but Obi-Wan had not been Qui-Gon’s apprentice for over ten years without some of that infinite wisdom engraining itself deep down inside him, waiting to be called upon.
Focus, Padawan, Obi-Wan could hear his Master’s voice as clearly as if it had been spoken in his ear. Don’t try to match his strengths, use his advantage against him.
I liked very much that Obi-Wan remembers Qui-Gon's teachings althouhg he is not able to reach him through the Force.
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jedidas3
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7/16/07 4:31am
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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Well done! I could see every event play out in my mind as I was reading it! I  stories like that! Poor Obi-Wan...there is no doubt that he needs a hug and I volunteer to give him one! I can't wait for more! Keep up the great work and thanks for the PM!
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Gkilkenny
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7/16/07 5:11am
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Excellent fight scene
I hope Qui-Gon finds him soon.
Wonderful post.
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VaderLVR64
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Excellent update! 
Then one morning a body was taken that was followed only by silence, seemingly no soul present to mourn its passing. Obi-Wan’s sorrowing eyes followed its progression out of the room, wondering who this lonely person had been.
As if in answer to his thoughts, one of the bearers shifted their grip and the shroud covering the still form slipped, revealing an ancient face crowned by thinning white hair.
Unbidden tears stung Obi-Wan’s eyes as he recognised the old man that had helped him on his first day. Even though he had only known him for a few minutes, his death layered another stinging welt across Obi-Wan’s heart.
And as the empty shell of the man that had been was borne out of sight, the Padawan bowed his head and cast a prayer to the silent Force that his friend had finally found peace in its all encompassing embrace.
Another quickly followed in its wake, this one for himself.
Master. . . Please find me….
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Bastet
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7/21/07 2:12pm
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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Wow, I really love this story!
I felt so sorry for Qui-Gon as he mourned for Obi-Wan, thinking he was dead. 
And poor Obi-Wan! I hope Qui-Gon can rescue him soon!
You're a wonderful writer, Glenstorm, and I very much look forward to more.
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ardavenport
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8/1/07 4:52pm
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RE: The Game of Death (Qui/Obi, Angst, Hurt/Comfort) *Updated 15/07/07*
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Very nicely done fight. I was a bit concerned about permanent injuries for poor Obi-Wan! And he called out to Qui-Gon in the middle, too, even though he knew it wouldn't help. The whole story really makes the poor reader really want to see a rescue coming. Ooooooh, and from the first part I know it's going to take some time, since this is when Qui-Gon still thinks his Padawan was killed in the explosion. I'll be looking for that rescue.
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loved it. can not wait for the next post.
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Fifilla
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10/4/07 2:10am
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I think it's time for an update, isn't it? 
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Cole_Kenobi
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10/4/07 8:19pm
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Wow! That was an awesome fighting scene! I loved how you put emphazies on Obi-wan being thankful for not being able to feel the pain and hatred through the Force, and his hurt at seeing the man who treated him nice die. It goes well into showin that Obi-wan hasn't lost himself even though he's goign through such a terrible situation. I only hope Qui-gon finds him alive. Awesome chapter! I can't wait for more! I've enjoyed this story from the start! Great job! PM list please.
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