| Author |
Topic:
Gnarltree (horror; genesis of tree-cave on Dagobah)
|
brodiew
Registered:
Oct '05
|
Date Posted:
2/11/07 1:59pm
Subject:
RE: Gnarltree (horror; genesis of tree-cave on Dagobah)
|
Excellent and original job you've done in creating the origina of the Dark Force cave, Persephone. But, you're right that this is a creepy and unsettlleing story. The heart wrenching duel that took place just before this piece began must have been catostrophic. Not only was our Jedi's friend killed by the spider web, but she also lost her will to live?
It was certainly alive, but did not seem to have much mind, or at least not the type she could sense or touch readily. It felt more like a plant than an animal. She counted at least two dozen legs before she lost track of them, and they all moved without apparent organization, some digging into the ground, some merely tapping at it and bearing little or no weight. Some were spiked on the ends, others almost feathered. She wasn't sure if it had a head or body, but the center of it where all the legs sprouted did have a sort of green tuft at the top.
The arrival of the gnarltree was creepy for me, because the devastating scene had already been set and then this creature arrives and wants to squat on the corpse fo the Dark Jedi.
Satisfied with what it had found, it hooked itself over her and dragged her closer through the mud. She kept sinking deeper, digging a small shallow trench.
The root gathered her underneath the tree, next to her friend and enemy.
And, just when I thought our beleaguered Jedi would just leave the tree to its fate, she dies as well. Tragically well played, Persephone.
-----signature-----
|
Locked Topic |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Persephone_Kore
Registered:
Jan '06
|
Date Posted:
3/23/07 8:41pm
Subject:
RE: Gnarltree (horror; genesis of tree-cave on Dagobah)
|
Darth Muis: I'm glad you like it! It was a creepy thought, but the gnarltree was a fascinating-sounding creature.
brodiew: Thank you very much! I think that the Jedi was very battered herself during the fight, and ended it in pretty bad shape in several ways. I'm also not altogether sure whether there's an intact ship on the planet at the moment, but as she seems to have forgotten to look for one, that doesn't seem to matter.
The tree thinks they're both delicious and is probably congratulating itself on finding such a great place to put down its roots.
-----signature-----
|
Locked Topic |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Durhelediel
Registered:
Mar '04
|
Date Posted:
7/2/07 10:32pm
Subject:
RE: Gnarltree (horror; genesis of tree-cave on Dagobah)
|
I absolutely LOVED this! What amazing insight and imagination! I love how you weaved the dark and light Jedi into the shaping of this tree...the nameless Jedi's emotions and thoughts are so clear I can very easily see her kneeling there on the ground, mourning her friend and trying to keep the tree from planting itself there.
Simply amazing!
-----signature-----
has a youngling on the way! due dec 23.. it's a girl!!! Storms of Fate http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=23168591&brd=10476 UPDATED 7/12
|
Locked Topic |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
