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Fifilla
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With a full view of the whole Crystal Chamber, Master Yoda slowly turned his head to look at it. Then he settled down in place again, using his stick to clear a space for himself. Smiling, he looked up at Qui-Gon. The crystals on the floor were ankle deep for the tiny Jedi Master.
"Much thinking have you done, Master Qui-Gon," he commented, his uneven tones high and clearly amused.
Senior Jedi Master though he was, Qui-Gon Jinn suddenly felt like a six-year old Initiate who had failed to clean his sleeping space. Knowing that Yoda would see behind his pretense, Qui-Gon still folded his arms before him anyway, his expression neutral.
Funny, that even Qui-Gon feels like a scolded child in front of Yoda 
Very nice chapter! I really could imagine how the crystal chamber looks like.
"Go you must, but your friends must stay."
Just great!!!
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Wonderful chapter. It's a great insight on the relationship of a Jedi and their crystals. I also really loved the part when Yoda asks Qui-gon to leave his "friends" behind, and Qui-Gon finding crystals hiding in his clothes. I found that oddly funny.
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Qui-Gon and his chrystals, I loved it when Yoda claimed them all
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I love this... seems Qui Gon and Obi Wan are gonna have to take a trip to Ilum  
Tnx a lot for the pm... a great chapter, this was 
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Another wonderful story.
I loved the braiding, of course. And in this last part the image of the crystals in the air around Qui-Gon and then falling "like a rattling applause". Nice.
I will be impatiently waiting for more.
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It got a bit scary when all those crystals went crazy... but I agree, the choosing of the crystals together should make for the nice bonding moment
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Wow! This is great! Please PM me when the next part is up!
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Valairy_Scot: Glad you liked the hitchhiker! Sneaky little crystals, aren't they. 
Gkilkenny: Thanks! I suppose it was the Force pushing them together toward that bonding moment that Qui-Gon thought was missing. They may not leave their old memories behind, but they will have new ones.
Fifilla: Thank-you! Poor Qui-Gon made a big mess in the Crystal Chamber and Yoda caught him.
ctt: I enjoyed having Qui-Gon pat himself down for crystals. One couldn't possibly drop all of them on him without having some of them get into those loose clothes he wears. Glad you liked it!
earlybird-obi-wan: Well, I don't think Yoda was going to take all the crystals for himself. But he did put Qui-Gon's back into the pile. Thanks for reading!
Veloz: Thanks for reading! Yes, to Illum they both must go.
azizah: Thanks very much! Glad you're enjoying it.
judsta36: Ah, yes, they will learn together to find their crystals. Thanks for reading!
Shahar: Thanks!
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///o\\\’///o\\\’///o\\\’///o\\\’///o\\\’///o\\\ - - - Part 5
"I suppose Master Qui-Gon hasn't tied a braid in a while," Eclin Moli said while she looked over Obi-Wan's new appendage. He had to agree.
He sat in a chair next to her medical couch in the Temple Med-Center. He had at first been shocked at the idea that she re-braid it for him. Qui-Gon had tied it with his own hands. But Eclin had broken down his resistance with a huge load of Jedi common sense. He was going to have to wash it sometime, not to mention re-braiding it when his hair grew out. She eased his concern by first showing him how to tie and untie the tail lock on the back of his head. Since it would poke him there if he tried to sleep on it, he would have to untie that every night.
After he got a mirror, Eclin first had him look at the braid, so he would know how to re-do it with the bands in the proper places. Then she slid the green band off and showed it to him. It was just a thin elastic circle that when twisted many times around his hair formed the band. Eclin untied the braid, removed the white band and combed his hair out with her fingers. She held the bands up.
"Did he say what they were for?" she asked quietly.
"Skill and loyalty," he replied. She agreed with the choices.
They referred to the colors. Unfortunately there were not enough colors on the pallette, or enough agreement on which shades signified what to cover the multitude of things that Jedi Masters might wish to symbolize on their Padawans' braids. In ancient times, this had caused many petty arguments among Jedi. So, each color was assigned a wide range of choices and it was left to the Master to designate what the colors truly meant.
Eclin had Obi-Wan wrap the bands around his fingers to keep them safe before she showed him how to braid his hair on his own. The key to getting his braid to hang down was to have it loose at the base. She had him tie it a couple of times to make sure he was comfortable doing it. It was difficult. The three short lengths of hair would slip out of his fingers when he braided them, forcing him to start over. When it was done, his ear mostly concealed the braid in the mirror unless he turned his head to see it.
"It'll get longer. Faster than you think," Eclin assured him. She put the mirror down on the stand next to her medical couch. Her fingers brushed by her black and silver lightsaber, lying at the back of the stand. "Have you started building your new lightsaber?"
Obi-Wan nodded solemnly. "Qui-Gon took me to the Lightsaber Crafting Rooms right after he did the braid."
"It's not your first one," she said, looking at him curiously.
"No, but. . . . " Obi-Wan looked toward her lightsaber. "I made the last one here at the Temple. I've never been to Illum before," he admitted.
"Oh. Well." Eclin suddenly looked uncomfortable before sighing loudly. "Illum. That can go anywhere from a miserable day freezing your ears off to having your insides wrenched out by the Force and stuffed back in backwards."
Obi-Wan wanted to ask her more, but he didn't really know Eclin well enough to ask her about something so personal.
He had gotten along well with Eclin on their mission. She was easy to talk to and sympathetic to him, the youngest member of the team, without patronizing him. But a mission to Illum led though brutal, winding paths of revelation, or murky mysteries, too intimate or fantastic to share with casual friends, if anyone at all. No Padawan or Knight could be compelled to reveal what such a quest had flung them into, though they were encouraged to share it with close confidants. And fortunately for curious Initiates and fearful Padawans, some Jedi had generously recorded their journeys for the generations that followed long after they were dead.
"Illum is cold," Eclin told him. "It shows no mercy."
"Oh, it has been such a long time since I took you there."
Obi-Wan started and turned to see a stout, older woman, wearing a plain brown veil with a striped tan band over her forehead. She smiled and came into the room. Next to him, Eclin smiled back.
"Don't be in such a hurry to go to Illum, young one." Before he could move, the woman reached out and quickly pinched Obi-Wan's cheek. "Your Master will take you when you're ready. And the Force will decide that." Her hand brushed the end of his braid as she took it away. She then folded her arms before her.
"Your first mission, and you end up here, in the Med-Center." She shook her head and sighed; her veil waved with the motion. She was short with broad shoulders and a prominent chest covered by tan tunics and tabbards that went down past her knees. The lightsaber on her belt was mostly silver and gold with a few gray plastoid accents. Obi-Wan realized that she had to be Eclin's former Master, Guiyusinth. Eclin confirmed this by introducing them.
"Well." Guiyusinth leaned forward to look at Obi-Wan's new braid. "It will get longer, dear." She patted him on the shoulder. Obi-Wan shifted in his seat. She seemed to have sprayed herself with some floral scent that intruded on his nostrils when she leaned too close to him.
Master Guiyusinth clasped her hands together, her attention returning to her former Padawan. "I was concerned, when I heard, of course, but that is what our lives are." She sat down on the edge of the medical couch and patted Eclin's knee. "But I'm very glad to see you well."
"Thank you, Master," Eclin replied, blushing.
"And, if you don't mind playing my student just one more time, I wanted to ask you to help with your friend, Semko. The droid said that you should be healed enough to leave here tomorrow morning. And you, too." She leaned toward Obi-Wan, who remembered that the Jedi Council had assigned her to train Semko in sharpening her skills of observation.
"I surprised you when I came in, and I shouldn't have," she told him, holding up an instructive finger. "I think you could benefit from a little extra training on paying attention. I didn't surprise young Eclin here."
Obi-Wan gulped.
"Um, I would need to ask my Master." He wasn't entirely sure if he really needed Qui-Gon's permission, but he couldn't think of a civil way to get out of it.
"Oh, of course! I was going to ask him as well," Guiyusinth exclaimed in a melodious sing-song, raising Obi-Wan's hopes. This training did not sound like anything Qui-Gon would want to do and that could likely get both of them out of it. "It is always best to do these things in groups, just as a reminder that we can all fall into bad habits. And I really believe that this isn't anything more than that." She nodded sagely to herself. "It will be enlightening for you, child." She patted Obi-Wan's knee and didn't seem to notice his scowl at the word 'child'.
Obi-Wan got up to excuse himself. While her former Master's head was turned away from him Eclin flashed him an 'OK' sign and mouthed 'See you tomorrow' at him. Obi-Wan nodded. He liked Eclin, but he hoped that he wouldn't be seeing her with Guiyusinth as well.
He bowed and left the room.
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"Oh. Well." Eclin suddenly looked uncomfortable before sighing loudly. "Illum. That can go anywhere from a miserable day freezing your ears off to having your insides wrenched out by the Force and stuffed back in backwards."
Obi-Wan wanted to ask her more, but he didn't really know Eclin well enough to ask her about something so personal.
He had gotten along well with Eclin on their mission. She was easy to talk to and sympathetic to him, the youngest member of the team, without patronizing him. But a mission to Illum led though brutal, winding paths of revelation, or murky mysteries, too intimate or fantastic to share with casual friends, if anyone at all. No Padawan or Knight could be compelled to reveal what such a quest had flung them into, though they were encouraged to share it with close confidants. And fortunately for curious Initiates and fearful Padawans, some Jedi had generously recorded their journeys for the generations that followed long after they were dead.
Sometimes being a Jedi is just "fun." 
Class might be "interesting."
Great update.
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Doesn't sound like Obi-Wan thinks Master Guiyusinth will be much fun as a teacher. Can't wait to read the next installment.
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Master Guiyusinth is quite a "mother figure", isn't she? I don't think, that Obi-Wan likes it to be treated like a child.
"Oh, of course! I was going to ask him as well," Guiyusinth exclaimed in a melodious sing-song, raising Obi-Wan's hopes. This training did not sound like anything Qui-Gon would want to do and that could likely get both of them out of it.
I agree with Obi-Wan that Qui-Gon probably doesn't like this kind of training... but otherwise it could be fun
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Nice post.
She seemed to have sprayed herself with some floral scent that intruded on his nostrils when she leaned too close to him.
I loved that bit it reminded me of my Grandmother, she loved to
put plenty on. 
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great showing how to tie a braid properly and a tail at the back of your head is uncomfortable. Eager to see more of Ilum
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this was a very cute update
I get the feeling that Obi Wan wouldnt enjoy that lesson too much and i think Qui Gon wont help him get out of it either 
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Obi-Wan shifted in his seat. She seemed to have sprayed herself with some floral scent that intruded on his nostrils when she leaned too close to him.
Oh dear, that really sucks 
ardavenport posted:
She patted Obi-Wan's knee and didn't seem to notice his scowl at the word 'child'.
 poor Obi Wan... it sucks getting called a child when ur in ur early teens
Tnx a lot for the pm
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