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VaderLVR64
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Innocence Adorned - Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan vignette
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Title: Innocence Adorned
Author: VaderLVR64
Characters: Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan
Summary: A Master ponders his Padawan’s destiny.
Innocence Adorned
“Innocence is like polished armor; it adorns and defends.” - Bishop Robert South
This boy, poised just on the threshold of manhood, gives himself up to the sleep of the innocent. I lightly touch the auburn hair, which springs warm and vital under my hand and I cannot help but smile when he stirs. With a brush of the Force, I send him back to his land of dreams.
I hope his dreams are pleasing ones that bring him joy.
My own dreams trouble me lately, and it is that disquiet that has roused me from my own uneasy bed and brought me to the edge of his. I want to watch over him, reassure myself that is he is well and sleeping as he should be. All is well…for now.
For the first time in my life, I find myself experiencing true terror and my heart is a cold stone weight inside my chest. I feel my dread radiating out into the Force in dark tendrils, and I try to let it dissipate there, but it clings to me stubbornly. It will not be dismissed so easily as that.
Almost visible, the unknown enemy hovers beside me, lingering over Obi-Wan as well. Something dark and terrible stalks my Padawan and I am defenseless against it. I desire nothing more than to make my stand here and now, paying for his safety with my life if I have to.
The enemy, however, seems content to wait and so must I.
Desperate, I have tried to focus on the source of the danger, but always it eludes me as easily as if I have given warning of my intentions. It is a mist that surrounds him and I am unable to grasp or identify it. Gracefully, it wisps around him, grabbing him in its greedy embrace while he sleeps on unaware.
He is too innocent to grasp his peril or the darkness that slumbers in wait.
It is hungry and it is waiting for Obi-Wan. Silent and patient, the enemy is formidable indeed and perhaps beyond the skills of a humble knight like myself. I have pondered going to Master Yoda and revealing my fears to him. I am not ready for that, however. Not yet. The time may come, or I might yet defeat this unseen enemy on my own. It is not pride that prompts my reticence, but uncertainty. I cannot be sure I have interpreted the visions correctly. When I am sure, perhaps then I can speak to someone else.
But if my fears prove true, then the fault will be my own.
Somewhere, somehow, I will fail him. The mere thought of that failure lances through me like a saber and for a moment I cling to the pain, hoping it will bring with it clarity and purpose. Still, the details evade me. My fear is too vague and unfocused.
Already, I fail him. I cannot see what waits for him.
With an uneasy sigh, I sink down into the chair beside his bed and let my eyes drink their fill of him. Obi-Wan is the epitome of what every Jedi should want to be. Even when he has stumbled on his path, he has been a true and righteous light in a galaxy that is increasingly dark.
My pride in him knows no bounds.
Sometimes I fear that it is my very pride that will be his undoing. I know how much he is capable of and I worry that I push him too hard, too fast. It is true that he seems to thrive on the challenges I fling his way; he devours them, conquers them, and then asks for more. What more could any master ask?
This boy, this almost man, will be the Jedi I had always hoped to be. I always fell short of the mark, at least in my own mind, and that is where it matters most I suppose. In Obi-Wan, however, I see the culmination of all those dreams and hopes. He is a blinding beacon in the Force.
And yet I cannot dismiss my fears.
Almost as if I can sense our dark companion, I look over my shoulder, half-expecting to see some leering, demonic face staring back at me in evil satisfaction. Perhaps the enemy knows that I will prove an unworthy guardian. My heart feels heavy as if pulled down by the weight of my guilt. I do not want to fail him and yet I know I will.
My sorrow knows no boundaries and yet I lock it up within me for fear he will see and know my sin.
Once more, I am compelled to reach out and brush my fingers along his hair, unruly and disheveled by his sleep. Only in slumber does he seem to be more boy than man now. The time fast approaches when I will have taught him all that is in me to teach him and I will have to set him free to find his own path.
When that day comes will he look back on our years together with fondness? I can only pray that he will. If I fail in that, then none of my other accomplishments will count for anything at all. He is my last, and my best, legacy.
I rise to my feet and give him one last look. Still sleeping, his dreams untroubled by his master’s fears, and that is just as I would have it. The time might come when I will be forced to share what I have seen in my visions and nightmares. Until then, it will remain within me, mine alone, my burden to bear.
The evil that stalks him wears an unseen face. So I am left to ponder exactly how I will protect him – if I can protect him.
Perhaps the most I can hope for is that when it is time for me to pass out of his life, he will have someone else who loves him as much as I do, who will give their life to protect him as I would. There is some hope in that thought and I try to find comfort in it.
“Good night, my Padawan,” I whisper as I reach his door. “May the Force be your guide.”
It is as I say those words that I realize I have forgotten the most important tenet in a Jedi’s life. In the end, it will be the Force which shields him – or accepts his life as sacrifice – and that cannot be altered. Obi-Wan’s life is not mine to withhold.
Obi-Wan will always be protected by that core of innocence. It may not save his life, but it will save his soul. He belongs to the Force and he serves it as I must.
My fears are still present, lurking just beneath the layer of serenity which is the greatest gift of the Force. Now, however, I am strengthened by its promise, soothed by its unending power.
Even after I am gone, my Obi-Wan will not be alone.
It will have to be enough.
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dianethx
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Nice vignette on Qui-Gon's thoughts about Obi-Wan. A rather father moment. I know that sometimes I watch my kid sleep and wonder what is in store for her.
Loved the ending.
Even after I am gone, my Obi-Wan will not be alone.
It will have to be enough.
Great job.
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My fears are still present, lurking just beneath the layer of serenity which is the greatest gift of the Force. Now, however, I am strengthened by its promise, soothed by its unending power.
Even after I am gone, my Obi-Wan will not be alone.
It will have to be enough.
I just finished watching ROTS for the first time in awhile, and after that reading this, my heart is doubly broken.... *sniff* That was so beautiful, Kim.
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beautiful these thoughts of Qui-Gon. Seeing how they really are: two beings of light
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Wow. That was one of the best written vignettes I've seen written in this forum.
You did a great job depicting the inner turmoil of Qui-Gon.
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Beautiful.
I loved this - Obi-Wan will always be protected by that core of innocence. It may not save his life, but it will save his soul. He belongs to the Force and he serves it as I must.
Sad, but in a way uplifting. Nice work.
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I loved how you show Qui-Gons true feelings for Obi-Wan. If only he could put his thoughts into words.
The scene was lovely having Qui-Gon sit on the edge of his bed watching him, just like a Father would do.
Very nice. 
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How frustrating for Qui-Gon to have such overwhelming fears and not be able to do anything about them.
Now, however, I am strengthened by its promise, soothed by its unending power.
Even after I am gone, my Obi-Wan will not be alone.
I'm gald to see he put his trust in the Force
Great job on this
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beautifuly done
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Beautifully crafted, vadey. A touching father-son moment. Loved the image of Qui-Gon brushing through Obi-Wan's hair.
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sigh...*melts into a puddle of goo*
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 Oooh i hadnt seen this one! ... it's always a treat to find ur writtings 
This boy, poised just on the threshold of manhood, gives himself up to the sleep of the innocent. I lightly touch the auburn hair, which springs warm and vital under my hand and I cannot help but smile when he stirs. With a brush of the Force, I send him back to his land of dreams.
This was so sweet and tender, love it!
With an uneasy sigh, I sink down into the chair beside his bed and let my eyes drink their fill of him. Obi-Wan is the epitome of what every Jedi should want to be. Even when he has stumbled on his path, he has been a true and righteous light in a galaxy that is increasingly dark.
My pride in him knows no bounds.
Sometimes I fear that it is my very pride that will be his undoing. I know how much he is capable of and I worry that I push him too hard, too fast. It is true that he seems to thrive on the challenges I fling his way; he devours them, conquers them, and then asks for more. What more could any master ask?
This boy, this almost man, will be the Jedi I had always hoped to be. I always fell short of the mark, at least in my own mind, and that is where it matters most I suppose. In Obi-Wan, however, I see the culmination of all those dreams and hopes. He is a blinding beacon in the Force.
Great description of Obi Wan imo
Perhaps the most I can hope for is that when it is time for me to pass out of his life, he will have someone else who loves him as much as I do, who will give their life to protect him as I would. There is some hope in that thought and I try to find comfort in it.
“Good night, my Padawan,” I whisper as I reach his door. “May the Force be your guide.”
 and in the end it is Obi Wan who gave his life to protect others 
Obi-Wan will always be protected by that core of innocence. It may not save his life, but it will save his soul. He belongs to the Force and he serves it as I must.
Wonderfu, truly wonderful
I had to stop cause i was simply going to quote the whole thing 
I really enjoyed this, amazing job!
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aw, beautiful work VaderLVR64
I adored it.
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Absolutely beautiful! You have a wonderful talent and I am thankful that you share it with us. Looking forward to reading more of your stories.
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Aww, such a lovely image.  Love that bit of forboding feeling woven through the story, but as always they Qui-Gon will trust in the Force.
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I can't believe I didn't comment on this the first time I read it!?!?
Well, I'm back reading it again, because I remember how beautiful it is.
And it is.
Every image, every word, every emotion, pitch perfect.
And of course I'm all teary eyed over it.
Beautiful work MamaVader
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