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Ganki Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 8/4/07 10:31am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 4, Update 8/1
	Looks like it is going to get..."creative" I guess. LoL Hard to say when Ani has mixed things up now. However leaving it like that is just not right~! >.< I am dieing to see the reaction from Qui-Gon when he finds out who his new friends are. Oh for the love of the force. Knowing Qui-Gon he probably needs to be hit over the head before he comes to realize Obi-Wan is all grown up drools blink Uh yeah... Another GREAT chapter I am in love with this fic Cannot wait for more, sooooo looking forward to it. I hope more comes soon! Oh and DUH UPPERS!!! -----signature----- “The act of putting pen to paper encourages pause for thought, this in turn makes us think more deeply about life, which helps us regain our equilibrium.” ~Norbet Platt
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Magier Registered: Jul '07	Date Posted: 8/6/07 9:01pm Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 4, Update 8/1
	Fifilla - Obi-Wan is shielding quite heavily, but Qui-Gon is too in tune with the Force to not suspect something is odd. VaderLVR- It was very fun to write Anakin dueling Xanatos. Two opponents who are both a little too angry, and let it get the best of them at times. jedidas3 - Well, I think we can throw the timeline out the window now. Though, I still think Obi-Wan is stubborn enough to do what he can to try to preserve it. These are his memories after all. REALbluelightsaber - Perhaps Obi-Wan thinks his young self still needs to learn whatever he learned on the mining platform. He's just not quite ready to admit the timeline will never be the same. dianethx - I could just see Qui-Gon doing something like stealing Anakin's comlink. Qui-Gon wants answers, and he is about to get someone who is infuriatingly silent instead. Should be interesting. Valairy_Scot - Of course he had to step in. He made a boo boo and Qui-Gon was about to get killed. He just didn't think of how big of a boo boo it was at the time. ClaudiaR - I think that seeing all the anger Xanatos has toward his former master is puzzling and disturbing to Anakin. Hopefully it is something he won't forget. It is going to be interesting for Obi-Wan to interact with Qui-Gon, especially the Qui-Gon from his early apprenticeship. My understanding on young Obi-Wan's position is that he wasn't technically going to Agricorps until he was thirteen, so he was still an initiate, just checking it all out. Qui-Gina-Jinn - Yes, it is going to get complicated. And I am pretty sure the Council would frown on a master killing his apprentice, though for Anakin, they might make and exception. aliceandjasper - Yes, it has finally happened. Everyone knew Anakin was going to screw it all up, and now he has. Though, I think Obi-Wan has just as much capacity to mess things up. He is going to have to be careful as well. Healer_Leona - Anakin doesn't really like Xanatos, and he was letting that be known. xxxkbunnies - Yes, the braid does become an issue. Really hard to hide. And I always imagine Anakin as very arrogant, with a pretty saucy mouth, especially at this age. Ganki - Creative is a good word. We might have to keep Qui-Gon guessing a little longer, but he isn't going to let a nameless Jedi master just rest. -----signature----- No Legacy So Rich : Xan,OC, Obi, Qui (8/08) Seekers, Not Saints: SW/TB crossover (8/12)
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Magier Registered: Jul '07	Date Posted: 8/6/07 9:13pm Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 4, Update 8/1
	Chapter 5 Qui-Gon and Anakin arrived at the rendezvous place, a simple but functional dock on the banks of the Great Sea of Bandomeer. Obi-Wan was nowhere in sight yet as they stepped out of the speeder. The night breeze caught their cloaks, causing them to flap wildly. Anakin pulled his more tightly around his body. The chill that penetrated his body came more from the cold disposition of his companion than the wind. Qui-Gon, the man he remembered as warmly expressive, had not said a word to him on their trip. Qui-Gon took a seat on the steps of the dock, under a dim light strung at the top of a pole. “Let me take a look at that wound,” he said as he motioned for Anakin to sit beside him. “It’s nothing, really,” Anakin said, shrugging. “It should be treated,” the Jedi master insisted firmly. Anakin reluctantly sat down, first shrugging off his cloak, and then loosening tunics until he exposed the spot of charred flesh where Xanatos’ blade had touched. “You are fortunate. It isn’t as bad as it could have been.” Anakin didn’t so mush as hiss as Qui-Gon cleaned the wound and covered it with a bacta patch. The action reminded the padawan too much of the gentle care given by a much older Qui-Gon on Tatooine. He was only a small boy then, and it was just a cut. Qui-Gon had cleaned the wound and said that he was checking for infections. Had he only done it because he needed a midichlorian count from a “pet project”? It was startling how Xanatos’ skillfully crafted words still reverberated in his head. He tried once again to clear his mind and push his doubts aside. “I never would have imagined such a young padawan could have been so strong against Xanatos. You fought well … right to the point where you lost focus.” If the remark had come from Obi-Wan, Anakin would have sulked at first, but knowing it was true, worked all the harder to prove himself the next time. Coming from Qui-Gon, it was devastating. So many times he had imagined fighting along side Qui-Gon, as Obi-Wan described. How many times had he thought of the praise that might flow from the Jedi master’s lips as his padawan took each step closer to Knighthood? Anakin trembled ever so slightly, struggling against sadness and frustration, emotion bubbling up within. The Force around him shifted, obviously capturing Qui-Gon’s attention. The Jedi master peered at him, or rather through him, for a moment before simply saying, “I sense so much emotion in you … so much fear.” It was all Anakin could do to not collapse into a convulsing mess of tears. Instinctively he drew his shields tighter around his mind, but not before he felt a gentle, reassuring voice. {I’m almost there, Padawan.} He turned and looked out over the choppy gray sea, seeing a vessel emerge from the fog. It neared until it met the dock. A cloaked figure stepped from the hydrocraft. Anakin hurried to his master’s side. Qui-Gon stayed back to give the pair time. Obi-Wan planted hands on the young man’s shoulder looking him over carefully. His eyes were immediately drawn to the charred sleeve of his cloak. “You’re wounded.” “It’s fine, Master. Master Jinn patched it up.” “Are you okay? I have sensed much confusion.” Anakin lowered his voice to a hushed whisper. “It’s just some of the things he has said … I don’t know, Master.” He bowed his head and kicked at some loose gravel trapped on the dock. “I warned you that he was once a different man.” Obi-Wan lifted Anakin’s chin so that the young man’s gaze met his. “I apologize for sending you to trail him. It should have been me.” “I’m sorry I revealed myself, Master. I couldn’t see well and got too close. I tripped, and it distracted Qui-Gon. Xanatos would have killed him if I hadn’t intervened. Oh Force, what do you think is going to happen?” “I don’t know, but we will trust in the Force.” Obi-Wan gave his apprentice’s shoulder a reassuring squeeze. “Right now, I need you to take this vessel to the mining platform and watch over young Obi-Wan. The coordinates are already programmed. You can not miss it.” “I’ll go right away," Anakin said, relieved he would be able to get away for a while. “Stay close to him. Blend in with the other miners. But, only intervene if his life is in imminent danger. Do you understand?” “Yes, Master.” Anakin offered a quick bow before boarding the vessel. Obi-Wan watched him begin to pull away, and then took a deep, calming breath. Turning, he tucked his hands into the sleeves of his robe. It had never occurred to him before that the reason he had sent Anakin to trail Qui-Gon might have been selfish. The thought of once again meeting the man who had nearly left him unchosen was daunting. He pulled the warm memories of the Qui-Gon Jinn who had meant the world to him around him as he approached. “Master Jinn.” He bowed respectfully before drawing back the hood of his robe. Qui-Gon’s eyes followed the boat as it disappeared into the fog, but he didn’t ask where Anakin was going. “You promised answers to my questions,” he said as he directed his attention to Obi-Wan. “Perhaps I could have a name to start with?” Obi-Wan had given the issue of his name much consideration on the trip to shore, even thinking of an alias to use. His conclusion had been that he had never lied to Qui-Gon, and he certainly wasn’t going to start now. “I can’t give you that information,” he said. “Why not? It’s the simple matter of a name.” Obi-Wan stood composed, every bit the Jedi master he was, not blinking as he met Qui-Gon’s gaze. “There are some things I can not explain right now, Master Jinn. What I can tell you is that Bandomeer is in great danger, and I need your help. It is going to require you to trust me, even if you don’t understand.” Qui-Gon looked at him as though he had just spoken in an incomprehensible language. Though Obi-Wan was already garnering the reputation as a brilliant negotiator among the Jedi, he briefly wondered if he was going to be able to pull this off. “Trust … that is an issue,” Qui-Gon said. “I have never heard of a padawan named Anakin Skywalker. You are shielded so heavily, you are practically a void in the Force. For all I know, you and your so-called apprentice are working for Xanatos. Trusting you could lead me further into whatever trap he has planned.” Obi-Wan let out a deep sigh. The problem was that the truth, that he was from the future, would make him sound like a raving lunatic and raise more questions than he was willing to answer. He closed his eyes, searching for answers in the Force, only to realize that the Force itself was the answer. “Master Jinn, all I can ask for you to do is to test the Force and decide if it tells you that I am trustworthy.” Obi-Wan waited as the Jedi master studied him. The scrutiny from someone who should have trusted him as much as the air he was breathing was painful, but he reminded himself yet again that this was a different man and released the discomfort into the Force. Qui-Gon finally let out an audible sigh. “The Force gives me no warning of you. I am inclined to trust you, but to stay guarded.” It was a start. The reality of their situation had hit Obi-Wan hard as he meditated on Anakin’s entry into the duel with Xanatos. The fallen Jedi now had three Jedi to consider. It would most likely change the nature of the trap, maybe even speeding his plans along. Obi-Wan could no longer feel secure in his knowledge of the events on Bandomeer, and stopping the bomb was now their primary concern. “Fair enough,” Obi-Wan said. “We need to proceed to the Home Planet Mine. The boxes are all part of an elaborate bomb.” Qui-Gon started toward the speeder. “I’ve been in the Home Planet Mine and saw nothing …” “You haven’t yet been to Core 5 …” “Core 5?” Qui-Gon asked abruptly, stopping to study Obi-Wan again. That bit of information should have made him think of his dream. Obi-Wan saw him tilt his head as he ‘listened’ to the Force in the way only Qui-Gon ever could. “You seem to know quite a bit about the situation here,” the Jedi master observed before pinning the younger man down with piercing blue eyes. “Do you know where Obi-Wan is?” “Yes, I do,” Obi-Wan admitted readily. “Take me to him.” “He is safe for the moment, something that will change if we do not stop Xanatos. We need to go.” The two Jedi masters locked eyes, stubbornness flowing freely between both of them. Qui-Gon finally relented when he realized he had met his match. He turned to continue toward the speeder. Obi-Wan followed. “Is he well?” Qui-Gon asked. “His circumstances are not pleasant, but Anakin will watch over him.” “Are you certain?” There was obvious skepticism in the Jedi Master’s words. “Anakin is a gifted young man, and I trust him with my life.” Qui-Gon had reached the speeder, but was eyeing Obi-Wan with what seemed like amusement. “Is there a problem, Master Jinn?” Obi-Wan asked as he climbed into the speeder. “No,” Qui-Gon said as he took the driver’s seat. “You just walked behind me all the way from the dock, a little to the left, almost like you were still a … nevermind.” The Jedi master shook his head as he started the vehicle and pulled away in the direction of Bandor. -----signature----- No Legacy So Rich : Xan,OC, Obi, Qui (8/08) Seekers, Not Saints: SW/TB crossover (8/12)
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azizah Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 8/6/07 10:50pm Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	This story really has a hold on me, so I wanted to say something other than I love it (which I do ). Your plot is unique and interesting and, for a time travel piece, not overly complicated, gripping but simple. Your descriptions are great and there is just enough detail to make everything feel authentic without weighing it down. But your characterizations are, well, just brilliant. In some stories, you can pick out the author’s favorite character because of the way they are written, they might have some surface issues, but once you scratch the surface they are perfect. But your characters have real depth and real issues and I love them all. (Yes, you even make Anakin likeable and believable and no body has done that for me except for maybe Matthew Stover.) Did I mention dialogue? I’ll save that for another review. Ok, I’m starting to gush. Maybe I should edit this down to just a couple of smilies. Great job. azizah
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Fifilla Registered: Mar '06	Date Posted: 8/6/07 11:34pm Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	I really love your story! And you write the characters just perfect. Qui-Gon had reached the speeder, but was eyeing Obi-Wan with what seemed like amusement. “Is there a problem, Master Jinn?” Obi-Wan asked as he climbed into the speeder. “No,” Qui-Gon said as he took the driver’s seat. “You just walked behind me all the way from the dock, a little to the left, almost like you were still a … nevermind.” The Jedi master shook his head as he started the vehicle and pulled away in the direction of Bandor. Old habits are not that easy to shrug off, are they? I wonder how long it will take until Qui-Gon finds out what's going on. -----signature----- "There's always a bigger fish." Fear Of Failure - young Qui-Gon (WIP) > http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27642896 Padawan to Valairy_Scot
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 8/7/07 4:27am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	Loving it. I liked that Obi-Wan kept feeling such warmth for this distant and pained Qui-Gon. Anakin's devastation at seeing his hero have feet of clay will help him appreciate Obi-Wan more, I think. This was so sad. “No,” Qui-Gon said as he took the driver’s seat. “You just walked behind me all the way from the dock, a little to the left, almost like you were still a … nevermind.” The Jedi master shook his head as he started the vehicle and pulled away in the direction of Bandor. Great job. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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jedidas3 Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 8/7/07 5:42am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	Another wonderful post! The scenes between Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon were heartwrenching. I loved the last paragraph where Qui-Gon noticed Obi-Wan walking slightly behind him. That was so touching! You are doing a great job with this story and I really can't wait for the next post! -----signature----- The Past Revisited http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28440949 Lessons Learned http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28580784 Remembrance http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/28009025 Padawan to dianethx
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Valairy_Scot Registered: Sep '05	Date Posted: 8/7/07 8:06am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	Fantastic job on every level. Seeing two Obi-Wan's, two Qui-Gon's and how they have changed over time is a unique and fascinating idea. REally loved adult Obi-Wan talking to adult Qui-Gon. -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/25405090/p3/?52 Prolific Author thread: list & links there. A million wins; a gazillion "also rans" - not bad at all! So very honored. Thank you!
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Healer_Leona Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 8/8/07 3:32am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	Magier, I love how we see Qui-Gon observed as a different person here. It's true of course, we're constantly changing depending from new situations and circumstances. “No,” Qui-Gon said as he took the driver’s seat. “You just walked behind me all the way from the dock, a little to the left, almost like you were still a … nevermind.” The Jedi master shook his head as he started the vehicle and pulled away in the direction of Bandor. Ha, love that Qui-Gon noticed it. Still, easy enough to shrug it off with a coment of senior Jedi or whatnot. Superb post!! -----signature----- and i feel them drown my name so easy to know and forget with this kiss i'm not afraid to go but it goes so slow
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aliceandjasper Registered: May '07	Date Posted: 8/9/07 1:15am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	If the remark had come from Obi-Wan, Anakin would have sulked at first, but knowing it was true, worked all the harder to prove himself the next time. Coming from Qui-Gon, it was devastating. So many times he had imagined fighting along side Qui-Gon, as Obi-Wan described. How many times had he thought of the praise that might flow from the Jedi master’s lips as his padawan took each step closer to Knighthood? Anakin trembled ever so slightly, struggling against sadness and frustration, emotion bubbling up within. The Force around him shifted, obviously capturing Qui-Gon’s attention. The Jedi master peered at him, or rather through him, for a moment before simply saying, “I sense so much emotion in you … so much fear.” It was all Anakin could do to not collapse into a convulsing mess of tears. Instinctively he drew his shields tighter around his mind, but not before he felt a gentle, reassuring voice. {I’m almost there, Padawan.} I quite liked this chapter. I have to say that Anakins reaction to Qui-Gon´s observations was not wholly unexpected. He was a hero to a very young Anakin, not a teacher. That Qui-Gon has a sterner side was sure to bother Anakin (less room to blame Obi-Wan for things that are his job) I just wanted to say that I won´t be able to review for a few weeks because I won´t be at home.
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager Digging out from Fay Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 8/9/07 7:07am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	What a wonderful job you've done in your characterization! Everyone is just spot on! “Core 5?” Qui-Gon asked abruptly, stopping to study Obi-Wan again. That bit of information should have made him think of his dream. Obi-Wan saw him tilt his head as he ‘listened’ to the Force in the way only Qui-Gon ever could. “You seem to know quite a bit about the situation here,” the Jedi master observed before pinning the younger man down with piercing blue eyes. “Do you know where Obi-Wan is?” “Yes, I do,” Obi-Wan admitted readily. “Take me to him.” “He is safe for the moment, something that will change if we do not stop Xanatos. We need to go.” The two Jedi masters locked eyes, stubbornness flowing freely between both of them. Qui-Gon finally relented when he realized he had met his match. He turned to continue toward the speeder. Obi-Wan followed. “Is he well?” Qui-Gon asked. “His circumstances are not pleasant, but Anakin will watch over him.” “Are you certain?” There was obvious skepticism in the Jedi Master’s words. “Anakin is a gifted young man, and I trust him with my life.” Qui-Gon had reached the speeder, but was eyeing Obi-Wan with what seemed like amusement. Loved it! -----signature----- If you have to choose between tears and laughter, remember that laughter burns more calories. They call me NANA Vader. At least she doesn't lack confidence...
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emerald54 Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 8/9/07 11:37am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	I liked how Obi-wan automaticly stepped into the Padawan role, dispite the fact he'd a knight with a Padawan. I'll try and comment further later, but my barrowed computer is dieing. Emerald -----signature----- “Ideas are like rabbits. You get a couple and learn how to handle them, and pretty soon you have a dozen.” - John Steinbeck
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ardavenport Registered: Dec '04	Date Posted: 8/9/07 5:14pm Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	I'm always cautious of time travel stories....they so often don't go well, but this one is going exceptionally. Well, unless you're Anakin.......dumb kid. The characterizations, their actions and feelings, are just what I would imagine them to be. I liked that Obi-Wan wouldn't lie to Qui-Gon and that Qui-Gon would sense that he could trust him. -----signature----- Links to all fics -- http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=25405090&brd=10304&start=26223917 The Heart of the Jedi -- http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/26013327 ---- Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, JA and everything you wanted to know about lightsabers
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Qui-Gina-Jinn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 8/9/07 10:20pm Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6
	Qui-Gon had reached the speeder, but was eyeing Obi-Wan with what seemed like amusement. “Is there a problem, Master Jinn?” Obi-Wan asked as he climbed into the speeder. “No,” Qui-Gon said as he took the driver’s seat. “You just walked behind me all the way from the dock, a little to the left, almost like you were still a … nevermind.” The Jedi master shook his head as he started the vehicle and pulled away in the direction of Bandor. Somehow I get the feeling Qui-Gon WILL find out what's going on.... The two Jedi masters locked eyes, stubbornness flowing freely between both of them. Qui-Gon finally relented when he realized he had met his match. He turned to continue toward the speeder. Obi-Wan followed. Hehe - I guess Obi-Wan learned from the best Wonderful update! -----signature----- Dark Lady of the DLC Fan Force Denmark I was there - FFEurope meeting, Stockholm 2005, Celebration Europe 2007, JediCon 2008 Not to worry - we are still flying half a ship! Ke nu'jurkadir sha Mando'ade
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Gkilkenny Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 8/10/07 12:00am Subject: RE: Threads of the Past (JA, time travel - Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin) - Ch 5, Update 8/6 - Date Edited: 8/10/07 12:01am (1 edits total) Edited By: Gkilkenny
	WoW I missed a couple of posts sorry, I really like the way this is going. I think Anakin will see Qui-Gon and his Master in a different light after this. May I be added to your PM list Please. -----signature----- Padawan to p_stotts Peace over anger - honour over hate - Strength over fear. Links to Stories in my Bio. Obi-Wan forever.
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