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Meredith_Kenobi
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2/6 4:00pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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This definitely seems ominous. Evie assures us that she is all right, but she also says that darkness is on the horizon. Sure she's all right now, but what will happen in the future?!?! *gnaws on fingernails*
I can't wait for more, silverfighter!
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SUGARBANTJINN
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2/6 4:13pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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wow! this is getting rather intense! excellent, as always, silver!
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arthurweasley
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2/6 5:29pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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Evia sounds very nostalgic. I wonder what's making her that way. I love the crazy things Cleaya did when she was young!! I also REALLY like the music!!  I know of other writers that listen to music when they write. I think it brings a deeper insight into the characters to know the sounds you associate with them. Very cool!!
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jedidas3
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2/7 5:21am
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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Great job with this update!  I have to tell you that you really have me worried about Evia. So, the best thing for you to do is to update quickly!  
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Fel_Freak228
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2/7 10:28am
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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Oh! Visions! I love visions!! Well I guess Cleaya's was a little creepy, but I loved it anyway! Update soon!
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KELIA
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2/8 11:39am
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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Oh dear, between Cleaya's vision and Evia's message of dark times being near, I can tell times will be tense for quiet awhile!
I am glad to see Evia got a message through, and how typical she would be more concerned for her padawan than herself.
Great update
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silverfighter
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2/9 8:33pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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Trika_Kenobi: Thanks! The only problem with not going to sleep is that Cleaya had this vision while she was awake...
Blue_Lightsaber42: Yes, visions.  Possibly one of the most fun (and hardest) things to come up with for me.  Aye, Evia is fine, and unless another plot bunny bites you may see her rather soon.
Meredith_Kenobi: Sure she's all right now, but what will happen in the future?!?! *gnaws on fingernails*
Ahh, someone who sees into the future for this story. You're right that something rather major (not necessarily involving Evia, however) will happen over the horizon, but we still have to get there.
SUGARBANTJINN: I love intense things.  Thank you, although I don't really know if I would call my writing "excellent"...
arthurweasley: Evia tends to be rather nostalgic under normal circumstances, but you're right, she was a tad more so then normal in this letter.
I also REALLY like the music!! I know of other writers that listen to music when they write. I think it brings a deeper insight into the characters to know the sounds you associate with them. Very cool!!
I'm glad you do! I actually can't write without music almost at all, so I always end up with all these songs for certain characters...
jedidas3: Thank you! And if the plot bunnies release me from my "original story dungeon", then I'm hoping for the next entry to be up around Valentine's Day.
Fel_Freak228: Maybe I should have her have some visions based off of my dreams. Then you would know the true definition of "creepy".  I'm glad you liked it!
KELIA: Oh dear, between Cleaya's vision and Evia's message of dark times being near, I can tell times will be tense for quiet awhile!
That they will. I'm really rather excited to write about what will happen to her, I have some really good ideas. The only problem is that I might end up with too much plot so I might have to cut some of it out...
I am glad to see Evia got a message through, and how typical she would be more concerned for her padawan than herself.
Cleaya tries to push away concerns like Evia as well, but she has some more difficulties then her Master.
Thanks to everyone for reading! It means a lot to me!  Like I said before, I am aiming for posting the next entry around Valentine's day, but only of my Muses allow me.
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TrulyGhent
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Date Posted:
2/10 9:43am
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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Awesome post Silver!
also:
creepy 
scary
suspenseful 
has-me-hooked 
keep up the good work! '
edit: thanks everyone for accepting my fanart so well!
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silverfighter
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2/18 6:43am
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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TrulyGhent: Aww sheesh, Ghent. Thanks! 
Okay, so obviously I didn't get to post on Valentine's Day as I had been hoping, but hey, President's Day is just as good. This next post should be up in a matter of hours, if all works well. Darkness is looming on the horizon...
Thanks to everyone who's been reading this story! It means a lot to me!
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silverfighter
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2/18 1:10pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/6
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2/25 3:54pm (3 edits total)
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I am not too horribly pleased with how this came out, but then again I am almost never satisfied with what I write, so here it is.
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Three Days Later
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This morning Tomi and I met in one of the training rooms for a morning workout and sparing practice. We were warming up, when he asked something curious. He wanted to know if Evia had an orange cape, which sounds strange in itself, but what is stranger is he knows perfectly well that she does. I told him this, and a funny look came over his face before he asked if she brought it with her on her mission. Not being able to think of a reason that she would have, I told him no. “I saw someone walking through the Main Hall on my way here with an orange cape,” he then said. “The person was turned away, so I couldn’t see the face, and instead of a Force signature, there was in it’s place a void, but I know of no one else in the Temple who has a cape such as that.”
Evia left her cape in our quarters when she left, I am certain of it, so if that was indeed her, she is not only in the Temple but has returned to our quarters without telling me. She has been on comm-silence, so I have no means of contacting her, and her Force signature is dim at best. Why is she hiding from me?
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That Evening
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Evia is here. She walked in only a few minutes after I wrote that last entry. I have to say, I am rather annoyed with her, for she is refusing to tell me where she has been and what she has done. Why she was in the Temple without my knowledge, I still don’t know, I haven’t brought it up with her yet. Admittedly, I am relieved that she is here with me, safe and sound, and she is acting like her normal self again, yet something has changed. What that is, I am not sure.
Tomorrow, she tells me, she will talk about her vision. And tomorrow, I will tell her about my own. Perhaps she can give me better insight then I have received from Tomi. He swears up and down that my vision can be attributed to indigestion. I even asked Master Yoda for his take. “Pass in time, dreams and visions will, but take it for nothing, you must not. Difficult to see, the future is. Always moving, always changing, it is,” was all he provided.
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Six Hours Later
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It is the first hour, and Evia and I just got back to our quarters. We were summoned to the High Council chambers four hours ago for a mission briefing. The actual briefing by the Council members took no more then five minutes, but from there we were sent to the Temple Archives to meet with Master Hayate Quan, who proceeded to tell us what we needed to know. I am going to write some of the details here so they will stop distracting me so I can sleep.
A planet in the OuterRim known as Kotumba issued a distress call this afternoon, and requested the presence of “peace warriors”, as they call the Jedi. Kotumba’s governing system consists of one “High Leader”, who governs over the entire planet and is the representative in the Senate, twelve leaders, one for each colony based alongside one of the river systems, and twenty-four masters, one for each nomadic tribe that live within their “Great Desert”.
This afternoon three of the twenty-four masters were found in their beds, appearing for all the world that they died in their sleep, save for three long, red cuts on each of their left cheeks. We leave tomorrow to investigate those three tribes, to see if the killer is from the outside, or working within the system.
Many years past, Kotumba was dominated by the Sith. The presence of Darkness is barely detectable any longer, but we were told this so it would not divert our feelings and thoughts from the mission. Asides from anomalies in the Force, the only evidence of Sith habitation are the tall temples scattered throughout the planet. Most have since been refurbished and redone for living quarters, but a few still remain untouched. If we have the time, Evia and I will explore one for historical purposes, and our own curiosity. I have to admit, that I am slightly excited about exploring ancient Sith domains. As horrible as it sounds, the Sith have always been intriguing in a dark and morbid way for me. It should be interesting seeing the types of places in which they dwell.
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Three Hours Later
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The vision returned, and I fear I will not sleep the rest of the night, so distracted is my mind. I am tempted to wake Evia for her opinion now, but one of us must be well rested for the final mission briefing tomorrow- or rather, this morning.
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Thank you for reading, and any criticism is welcome, to let you know.
Edit: I hope I gave everyone who wanted a PM a PM, and didn't give anyone one who didn't, I had to send them all out in a matter of minutes. If I did something wrong, I'm sorry!
Edit 2/20: I have found why I felt I was forgetting something in this post: I had forgotten to put in how much time had passed at the top.
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Trika_Kenobi
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silverfighter posted:
I am not too horribly pleased with how this came out, but then again I am almost never satisfied with what I write.
That is the mark of nearly every writer I know. It's hard to let your work out into the public, but fear not! You've done a marvelous job once again.
I'm intersted to see how it plays out on this new mission. Her interest in the Sith may bring about some very twisted and unexpected trouble!
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SUGARBANTJINN
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2/18 2:28pm
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wow! the plot thinckens! I want to know why Evia didn't tell Cleaya she had returned!!!! that's frustrating!
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Meredith_Kenobi
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Evia is definitely acting in a very mysterious manner.  What reason does she have to hide things from her Padawan? Veeeery curious.
Greta update, silverfighter. Can't wait for the next one.
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jedidas3
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There was nothing wrong with this update! You did a tremendous job with it and I'm looking forward to seeing where you are going with it. I have a bad feeling about this mission...
Again, great update! Thanks for the PM!
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arthurweasley
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--"...the Sith have always been intriguing in a dark and morbid way for me."  OH NO!! What is she thinking!? No, Cleaya, noooo!!!
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