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silverfighter
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3/18 7:02pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 2/28
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Here is the next entry. This was originally going to be longer, but when I went a few days without coming up with anything more then I had I decided I might as well post it. 
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The Next Morning-
Travel Day 2
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When I came back from the gardens I found Evia mediating on a bench in the space port, oblivious to the hundreds of beings milling about her. Or so I thought. When I sat down beside her, she immediately began talking, her eyes still closed, face passive.
She began with five words that I will never forget in my life: “I will die on Kotumba.”
I can hardly remember anything else that she told me, but I do remember that when she described her vision to me, it was very much like my own, unfortunately even the part when she died. She refused to tell me much more then that, but it was enough.
She opened her eyes and watched me while I told her of my vision. She didn’t seem surprised with the similarities, merely distressed, which surprised me. Even if she does die, which she won’t, as a Jedi she would be fine with deat h, even welcoming it. So I am still puzzled.
How she can continue with the mission, even after a vision where she dies, I don’t know. All I know is I will not allow this vision to come to life. It’s only a vision. The future always moves, things can change.
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Two Hours Later
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I want to get off of this blasted ship.
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Ten Hours Later
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Evia and I have spent the past few hours meditating together. Her presence is soothing. I’m not sure where my calm will come from if she…
I will not allow myself to complete that sentence. It is time to accept and carry on.
If only it were that easy.
Before we meditated I slept some, but it was far from restful. Hearing Evia’s vision only enhanced my fears, and nightmares plagued my dreams. Evia knows, for when I woke I found her sitting beside me, soft waves of comfort traveling through our bond. She said nothing, but when she saw I was awake she stood and left the cabin, leaving me to my thoughts. I’m glad she didn’t ask, for I don’t want to tell her what I saw.
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Five Hours Later
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We have arrived on Denon, a planet that is nearly as densely populated as Coruscant. I am sitting at a small café in this busy spaceport, trying to convince my body that it’s tired with a cup of tea. I’m on my second mug, it doesn’t seem to be working.
After talking with Evia last night, everything seems surreal. I hardly want to leave her side. She insisted that I sit down and rest for a bit since we’ve been walking around the city since we arrived, buying any supplies that we see that could help us on this mission. I’m not tired, but she thinks that I am overtired, and will suddenly find that I am actually tired and spontaneously collapse. Not that that has ever happened before.
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Fel_Freak228
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3/18 7:16pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 3/18
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She began with five words that I will never forget in my life: “I will die on Kotumba.”
 That's just depressing. I don't know how else to describe it. Just. Depressing.
I want to get off of this blasted ship.
 ROTFL I know the feeling!!
Great post, silver!! Me like lots!!! 
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Trika_Kenobi
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3/18 7:21pm
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She began with five words that I will never forget in my life: "I will die on Kotumba."
Whoa. Freaky. And probably not something you'd feel comfortable hearing your master say. Heck, it's probably not something you'd feel comfortable hearing a complete stranger say to you, either. 
All I know is I will not allow this vision to come to life. It's only a vision. The future always moves, things can change.
Dern. This could get complicated, eh? I'm eager to see how this all plays out, but I'm definitely in favor of preventing this vision from actually happening.
Wonderful update, silver! Keep 'em comin'! I'm hungry for more!
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jedidas3
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3/19 4:34am
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Visions make me nervous...something bad is going to happen, isn't it?  Another wonderful update. I'm on the edge of my seat, wondering what is going to happen next.
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KELIA
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3/20 4:25am
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“I will die on Kotumba.”
I have to admire Evia's calm acceptance.
I don't think I'd want to know.
I hope Cleaya doesn't do anything foolish to try and save her...not that I would blame her for trying, though.
Great update
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Blue_Lightsaber42
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3/21 7:15am
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Noooo! Evia can't die!
Great update silver!
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silverfighter
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3/24 3:59pm
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Fel_Freak228: Sorry I depressed you. I have a warning somewhere in here that this story will get dark... This is only the beginning of this story that's been haunting me for the past two years... 
Trika_Kenobi: Complicated you say? Oh yes, it could get VERY complicated. Mwahaa, I was thinking of what to do for the end (or near the end at least) and I started laughing and laughing. Not a good sign for Cleaya.
jedidas3: Visions make me nervous...something bad is going to happen, isn't it?
What would make you think that? I'm kidding, nothing bad will happen... 
KELIA: I hope Cleaya doesn't do anything foolish to try and save her...not that I would blame her for trying, though.
No, don't worry, this isn't like Anakin trying to save Padme, but she will try some things that some would consider to be unnatural...
Blue_Lightsaber42: Nothing's happened yet! Don't worry!
Thanks everyone for reading! It means a lot.
I am going to attempt to have the next entry up by the end of the week, if everything works out and the plot bunnies behave. 
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Meredith_Kenobi
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3/29 4:15pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 3/18
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I’m not tired, but she thinks that I am overtired, and will suddenly find that I am actually tired and spontaneously collapse. Not that that has ever happened before.
Ha! Somehoe I don't think that's entirely true.
What a monumental update! Evia's had a vision of death, and Cleaya thinks she can save her. Somehow I don't think this story will have a completely happy ending...
More!
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silverfighter
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3/31 6:59pm
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RE: Trials of a Jedi Padawan-Cleaya Montu ("Dear Diary" 2008- OCs)- updated 3/18
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Meredith_Kenobi: Ha! Somehoe I don't think that's entirely true.
Yep, not true whatsoever.
Somehow I don't think this story will have a completely happy ending...
It will, just not your typical happy ending, I don't think.
More!
Yes ma'am!
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Two Days Later-
Travel Day Four
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Yesterday my physical needs caught up with me, and I slept the entire trip to Derra IV. Once we landed, Evia woke me, but I have no memories of the planet. I vow to never let myself get that tired again.
We have been traveling for five hours now, and I slept a majority of that time. When I woke, Evia told me of a transmission that came through this morning, right before we left Derra IV, and right after I fell asleep. Three more masters of Kotumba have been found dea d, each with the three cuts on their cheeks. It seems like the beginning of a pattern to me, three bodies, three cuts… I’ll have to wait a bit longer I suppose until I can have solid proof.
That’s actually a really interesting clue. One person in no possible way can traverse all around the planet to kill three people, so there must be more then one person. The killer is meticulous about when he kills, though. The bodies are always found in the early morning, so the killer (or killers) must wait until their next victim’s time zone is in the dark. But how they’re having the bodies be found in such rapid succession I still have yet to figure out. The obvious answer would be there’s inside work, but I can’t judge until I see and study for myself.
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Four Hours Later
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Tonight we’re docked on Naboo. Since it will only take eight hours to reach Kotumba from here, we will be on this planet for another twelve hours. Evia has granted me permission to go explore for a bit, and she says she’ll come with me.
She seems very pleased I’ve been writing in here, I’m glad that doing something so simple is making her so happy. Writing has gotten much easier, and much more comfortable, as well. I find it very amusing flipping through the pages and seeing all that I’ve written, it makes me feel accomplished. Although I’m not too pleased with how paranoid I was in some entries, it’s still fun to reread them all.
I am amazed at how being on this beautiful planet with the sun shining and feeling rested and rejuvenated for the first time in weeks is affecting my mood. Evia noticed and has been smiling since we landed, the first time I’ve seen her smile in quite awhile. Walking around with her will be enjoyable.
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Two Hours Later
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Evia told me I should write something about this café we've discovered. Nearly everything about it has this beautiful, natural feel to it. The café is partially indoors, partially out, and nearly every spare area is filled with flowers and shrubs. Tall bushes surround the outdoor area, blocking the streets from view, but they aren’t so tall to cast much shade. The indoor walls are a faint green, and every dish is an emerald color, which looks really nice against the grey marble tables and counters.
What I would give to live here, with all the plants and flowers.
Evia says I should add that the tea is amazing.
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That last little bit up there did not turn out how I wanted it to at all, I am so tempted to just delete it, but I've had an idea like that for awhile, and I can't think where else I'd put it, so I think I'll just keep it. Looks weird, though. 
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Trika_Kenobi
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I don't know whatever you're talking about, Kadi. I really liked that last little bit. It's a bit relaxing from the actual meat of the story... gives a bit of perspective on the relationship without coming right out and saying what it is. That a master would care to engage the carefree with her student is profound, and I found it perfectly fitting. If you delete it, I shall have words with you later. 
The other entries are excellent, too, though. A little bit of news on the mission, a little bit of interaction. Super stuff. Thank you for the update. Looking forward to more.
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jedidas3
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4/1 5:28am
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Excellent job! Don't change a thing! You are doing such an incredible job with this diary and your characters. I'm truly enjoying every aspect of this story!
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KELIA
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I'm glad to see Cleaya enjoying Naboo before the action really starts.
Multiple killers?
That is not a good thing!
Great update
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silverfighter
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Trika_Kenobi: That part is still bothering me. It didn't really turn out how I wanted it, because I originally wanted to add in something about the buildings around the café... But it was refusing to work out. I'm glad you liked it, though. Thanks. 
jedidas3: You are doing such an incredible job with this diary and your characters. I'm truly enjoying every aspect of this story!
Thank you very much. I'm glad you like it.
KELIA: Multiple killers?
I can't tell you how excited I am trying to figure out how to describe what's going on on Kotumba... Thanks for reading.
So I have the next update written... I'm just waiting for my friend to get back to me to tell me if 'tis "post worthy" or not. I get the weirdest typos, 'tis a good thing he manages to catch them all. I've already started working on the next update, so that should be posted soon as well. Thank you for reading! 
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MandalorianLegecy
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Hi master, I never commented, but I read before.
Very good, I'd enjoyed it from the begining.
Add me to the Update list and Make more.
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MandalorianLegecy: Hey ML. I'm glad you're liking it! You can consider yourself added.
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The Next Day-
Travel Day Five
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I am displeased to say that we arrive on Kotumba this afternoon. As selfish as it may be, I’m wishing we could just turn around and go back to the safety of the Temple.
It’s amazing how different places affect my mood. Yesterday in the open air of Naboo I was almost happy, enjoying time with Evia. Now back in this claustrophobic ship my spirits have been dampened, and I’m feeling rather paranoid. Meditating isn’t helping, Evia’s favorite tea isn’t helping… I just wish this mission were over and Evia and I were well and alive, flying back to Coruscant.
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Seven Hours Later
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We’re here. The first tribe we meet with is within walking distance, we’ll approach them at first light. For now we’ve landed in a small clearing where we’ll stay for the night. In a few minutes Evia and I are leaving to explore the surrounding area, to see if we can pick any clues out with the Force.
It’s suddenly very difficult to write. I feel as if something wants to be written, yet the words are not coming. I’ve gotten more relaxed with this journal, but at times it is still very difficult.
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