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Freedom in Bondage (2008 DDC; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) update, 9/28
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Alexis_Wingstar
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1/4 8:56pm
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Freedom in Bondage (2008 DDC; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) update, 9/28
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9/30 2:47pm (21 edits total)
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Title: Freedom in Bondage
Author: Alexis_Wingstar
Character: My new OC, Meb, who is a slave on Tatooine.
Timeline: Two years before TPM
Note: This is in response to the Dear Diary Challenge 2000. I have a companion piece called "Those Eyes!" which is told from Asta's POV.
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Entry 1:
Hi, my name is Meb. Just Meb. I was born a slave. My mom died giving birth to me and my owners didn't bother to put my family name on my birth record, so I'm just Meb.
I recently got sold to this old guy. He's wierd. He doesn't make me do any real work. He makes me study... reading, writing, math, galactic history and even art... like I'm a regular kid going to school. He gave me this journal to practice writing.
I don't get it. What's his angle? There has to be some catch. No one ever does something good for anyone unless there's something in it for them. He says he's only giving me an education so when he lets me free I will be able to do something with my life. Hell, all he has to do is give me enough credits to get off this ball of dust, and I'll do plenty.
Still, his daughter is kinda pretty, so sticking around isn't too bad. Not that she'd ever be interested in me. I'm just her daddy's slave, and if he actually does free me, I'll still just be the charity project her daddy worked on.
Well, dinner is ready. I guess that's another reason to stick around. The food is good and generously supplied.
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earlybird-obi-wan
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1/5 4:47am
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RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance)
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Like your character and please put me on your PM list
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KELIA
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1/5 1:40pm
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Ooohhh very intriguing beginning.
I'm glad to see Meb has been sold to someone who is trying to improve his life.
At least in the future.
Please PM me when you update
Looking forward to more
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DarthJainaSolo
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Very interesting start. I'll be watching this. Good job!
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Alexis_Wingstar
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Thank you for reading, DarthJainaSolo, KELIA, and earlybird-obi-wan. I hope to be able to keep this up all year.
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Entry 2:
I am an idiot! I forgot that my master was going to be reading this journal so he could correct any misspellings, grammar, punctuation and the like. Why did I have to mention his daughter? At least I didn't say anything stupid like... well never mind.
While I stood there watching him read my first entry, I was sweating... and not because of the desert heat. I was afraid he would punish me for what I said. I mean, I practically called him a liar when I doubted his intentions, not to mention showing interest in his daughter. My last master would have me flogged for that... that is if I was lucky and he didn't outright kill me. But like I said, before, my new master is wierd... lucky for me, heh?
All he did was smile as he read my entry, make a few corrective marks and hand it back to me. "Good job, Meb." Was all he said.
I still don't get it. I can't help but feel like he's just waiting to do something awful... I heard a saying among some spacers, "Revenge is a dish best served cold." What if he was offended and is just waiting until I'm off guard to do something?
Perhaps I'm just being paranoid. I don't know what to think. No one has ever been nice to me before. He scares me more than any of my other masters. I knew what to expect from them. I don't... I can't trust anyone.
Sorry, Master Ander. It's nothing personal. It's just life.
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earlybird-obi-wan
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1/5 9:22pm
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A great character you have with his uncertainties. Glad he has a nice master.
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KELIA
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1/6 5:02am
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RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance)
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Awww...poor Meb!
Though I can completely understand why he isn't able to trust anyone. Especially someone who is being nice to him.
I hope he'll come around, though.
Great update
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earlybird-obi-wan posted:
A great character you have with his uncertainties. Glad he has a nice master.
I'm glad you like Meb. There is both good and bad in this young man.
KELIA posted:
Awww...poor Meb!
Though I can completely understand why he isn't able to trust anyone. Especially someone who is being nice to him.
I hope he'll come around, though.
Great update
Thank you.
Yeah, he's afraid to trust anyone. It'll take some time before he can fully shake off his mistrust.
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Entry 3:
It has been a week since my last entry. I just didn't have time to write much of anything. Master Ander didn't put as many corrective marks on the second entry. I was careful to look up words I wasn't sure of the spelling and was even more careful of my grammar, but I still get puncuation wrong. Even though I didn't make as many mistakes, in those areas, master didn't seem pleased after reading it. He frowned and seemed as though he were about to say something, but then we heard a rumbling sound, and Caen came in and said that the roof collapsed in the store room.
We're not sure what caused it, but I've been helping out in the repairs. That's why I haven't been able to write. With working so hard on the roof with Caen and Master Ander, and my other studies (I hate math... adding subtraction multiplication division and fractions are easy, but algebra makes no sense! I get a headache studying it), I've been too tired to write anything that made sense.
Master Ander sent me on an errand to get some supplies yesterday. He actually trusted me to handle the credits for the transaction! Not that I'd steal anything, but, it just surprised me. I really don't know what to think about that trust. It kind of makes me feel guilty for not trusting him.
I want to trust him. I really do.
The thought scares me.
Anyway, as I was on my way back to the master's estate, Asta... Master Ander's daughter... rushed over to walk beside me. I am not sure how to act around her. I'm polite of course. I mean, I can't be rude to my master's daughter! What I mean is, she is my master's daughter, and she is BEAUTIFUL. The way she smiles at me makes me want to hold her. There, I said it. Either I'm going to get flogged or killed, but you can't say I didn't write the truth... in good grammar, no less.
I got my desire to hold her, though it wasn't in the way I intended. As we walked together and talked... well, she did most of the speaking and I just stammered like an idiot... a sudden sandstorm hit. We tried to hurry to the estate, but she stumbled and fell. I helped her up and kept a hold of her hand as we struggled together. We were almost there when she suddenly collapsed. I wasn't sure what happened, but I dragged her the rest of the way. I slipped and stumbled down the steps to the door, trying to keep her from getting any more hurt. We landed at the bottom of the stairs, her on top of me. She was unconsious and bleeding at the temple. Her blood stained her beautiful white hair red. I was in pain too, but ignored it as I banged on the door and yelled for help.
Caen was the one who opened the door, and he carefully lifted Asta off me. I'm probably being a fool in confessing this, but I felt an ache when I no longer touched her. I long to touch her again. Is this love? To long for someone and not care if I get killed or knocked around for admitting it? Another thing is, I was more concerned for her injuries... I didn't even realize how badly I was hurt until I tried to get up and my left leg wouldn't support me. I fell flat on my face, and Master Ander helped me.
Asta is alright. She came to my room and stood in the doorway to ask if I was ok. I have a broken leg which was set by a doctor. Master Ander had taken me and Asta to the hospital after the sandstorm left. I lay on my bed with my leg propped up as Asta stood in the doorway. I don't have the words to say how much seeing her stand there means to me, not to mention the fact that she was concerned for me.
I think I love her.
Master Ander, if this makes you angry, all I can do is ask for mercy.
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And now a girl who is friendly to. That will be intriguing.
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Aw, Meb! He's getting more and more adorable.
I love how sweet he is with Asta and I'm sure her father will appreciate it. At least he won't have to worry about Meb trying to take advantage of her or anything.
algebra makes no sense! I get a headache studying it
I second that! I never understood it 
Great update
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earlybird-obi-wan posted:
And now a girl who is friendly to. That will be intriguing.
As well as potentially heart breaking. 
KELIA posted:
Aw, Meb! He's getting more and more adorable.
I love how sweet he is with Asta and I'm sure her father will appreciate it. At least he won't have to worry about Meb trying to take advantage of her or anything.
algebra makes no sense! I get a headache studying it
I second that! I never understood it
Great update
Thanks. Meb is an interesting character. He's young enough to learn, but has seen so much bad throughout his life that he's not quite innocent.
I think algebra was invented by a mathematician who had too much time on his hands... and was rather insane to boot
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Entry 4:
Today has certainly been interesting, in both a good and bad way. Master Ander had me run another errand for him... but he asked me if I felt like it first. He was actually concerned about my broken leg. I told him it doesn't really hurt much unless I bump it against something on accident and I get around fairly well on the crutches.
While out, I overheard Watto the junk dealer and Yor Millto talking. Habit has taught me to keep an ear out for things. Past masters have had me spy on the streets for them... some even had me do other things I'm not proud of. When I heard Master Ander's name brought up, I immediately started listening. They were making fun of him for buying slaves and freeing them. They mentioned Cain being a former slave who willingly stayed to work for Master Ander, and took up bets on how long it would be before I was freed. I must confess my heart sped up as they spoke.
Master Ander wasn't deceiving me after all... he has a history of buying then freeing slaves. I wonder why I hadn't heard about it before. I felt happy for the first time in my life. More than happy, I felt hopeful.
“You’re lucky.”
I just about jumped out of my skin at the voice next to me. I had been paying so much attention to Watto and Millto that I had not noticed Anakin Skywalker walk up to me. I looked nervously over at the two slave masters then back down at Anakin. I suddenly felt a little guilty for the promise of freedom I’ve discovered and seeing that this kid and his mother did not have that. “Yeah,” I said quietly, “well, maybe I can suggest to Master Ander…”
“Don’t do us any favors.” Anakin snapped angrily and walked away.
I frowned as I walked on in deep thought. The excitement of hearing about my good fortune abated as I thought about Anakin. I couldn’t fault him for his anger. I knew exactly how he felt. I also knew that even if Master Ander were amenable to buy Anakin and Shmi and free them, it would not be possible. Anakin is too valuable to Watto to sell… and it would be cruel to free Shmi and not her son.
On my way back I saw Asta, though this time I saw her first, and she was with a boy. He was about our age, 15, and I could tell he was rich... and she liked him. She kept laughing at his jokes, and they leaned towards each other. She even let him put his arm around her shoulder.
I tried to hide so she wouldn't see me, but just as I trip over my words when she's around, I became clumsy and tripped over my crutches. The most embarrassing thing happened next. They saw me, and both came over to help me up.
I would like to say Asta’s boyfriend was an ugly stuck up jerk. That would be lying. He was very polite and didn’t look down on me even though I was a slave. Asta introduced us, “Meb, this is Undar Windcaller, Undar, Meb.”
When Undar asked what my family name was, I couldn’t keep the bitterness out of my voice. “I’m just Meb… a mutt.”
Asta gasped when I said it, and I looked anywhere besides her and Undar. “Um, Undar is going to be eating dinner with us tonight.”
“That’s nice,” I said flatly. I know I made Asta uncomfortable, but I didn’t know how to correct that. I felt so humiliated on so many levels. I had been hoping that perhaps Asta could someday feel for me what I did for her. Now I realize there is no way that could happen. She is so far above me. I could never give her what she deserves.
I’m getting tired now, but there is so much more that happened. I’ll get some sleep and get up early to tell the rest.
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Wonderful, wonderful! Your OC's are so original and full of life. I found myself wanting to read much more than you had written.
PM list, please?  And update soon!
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wonderful update with that meeting with Anakin and to see that Meb has such a kind master
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I am loving this. Meb is such a great character, so innocent in so many ways and so not in others. It's easy to feel for him.
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I hope Meb will now start to trust his Master.
Loved seeing Anakin show up - though it's heartbreaking he was lost to Watto and not Ander.
Great update
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This is really quite interesting. Poor Meb. At least he knows that his master was telling the truth. I would imagine that the other slaves would be jealous, like Anakin.
Good job.
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