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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 1/9 10:10pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance)
	It's late for me, and i'm much too tired to reply to everyone individually, but thank you all for reading and responding. That said, let me assure you, the spelling and grammar mistakes I put in this next entry, especially the ones near the end are intentional. Meb is even more tired than I am right now. ~~~~~~~~~~~ Entry 5: Ok, it’s three hours later and I haven’t slept a wink. My mind is just too busy to sleep, even though my body cries out for it. So… I might as well write. Perhaps it will help me clear my head so I can go to sleep already. Just don’t expect my grammar to be good. Dinner dragged on longer than an anooba’s tail. I can’t even remember what I ate or even how much. I just remember listening to everyone talking at the table. Undar’s family and Master Ander’s have apparently been close since the beginning of time. I could tell my master was fond of Undar. Let’s see now. Undar is good looking, tall, rich, has a good personality… though his laugh sounds like a cross between a tauntaun and a worrt… and is in my master’s good graces. I, on the other hand, have had my nose broken in several places, a jagged scar from the middle of my left cheek to the corner of my mouth that made my mouth stretch funny, I’m barely taller than Asta, am beyond poor, and can’t complete a sentence in front of her without stuttering every other word. On top of everything, my voice squeaks a lot when I talk. Sometimes it’s high, sometimes low. No contest; I’m the winner. Right? Only of the biggest loser in the galaxy contest. At least my laugh is decent. After dinner and Undar left, Master Ander asked to speak to me. I followed him obediently into his study. “There are a couple of things I’ve been wanting to bring up, but haven’t had a chance.” I remained quiet as he sat the chair behind his desk. He indicated for me to sit as well, and I did so in the chair opposite him. “Meb, have I been harsh with you in any way?” The question took me by surprise, and I stammered, “N-no, sir!” “I realize you have had a harsh life, but I hope someday you can come to trust me.” I looked down at my rough hands and bit my lip. Swallowing, I looked back up at him. For some reason I couldn’t speak above a whisper. “I do, sir.” I had to smile, though it was shaky, when he blinked in surprise. “You do,” he asked, the surprise in his eyes was in his voice as well. I nodded and told him about the conversation between Watto and Millto. “Ah, so you believe me now.” I nodded once more, and frowned. There was a question on my mind I didn’t feel confident in voicing. Even though I trusted him as much as I could at this point, I didn’t feel certain enough to pry. “However, you have a question?” Swallowing, I nodded. After he requested me to ask away, I did. “Why do you do it? I mean, why do you buy slaves and then free them?” “I had a sister who was four years older than I. We lived on Garqi in Pesktda. One day, she had taken me to a park, when two guys jumped us. I got away, but she didn’t. They took her while I ran home and told my parents. They called the authorities, and to make a long story short, they found her, but when they tried to rescue her from pirates who were into the slave-trade, she and others were killed.” Master, you stood and turned away from me then. I wanted to get up and go to you… to comfort you, because I could tell you were upset. But, I just sat there like an idiot. I don’t know why. “I never forgave myself for running away, even though I know I couldn’t have helped her. I know I can’t stop slavery itself, but I can end it for a few. I buy slaves one at a time, make sure they have the skills to make it on their own, then free them.” Gods, I can only imagine the pain the guilt has put on you. I’ve done things as a slave for masters in the past that I’m not proud of. But nothing I’ve done has caused anyone’s death. Well, you didn’t really cause your sister’s death! You did what you could. I so sorry for your loss sir. Though I’m grateful for what you have done and that you are helping me, I hope you can forgive yourself. Please do. Forgive yourself I mean. I don’t think your sister would want you to be so sad. Anyway, after that we then started talking about something that made me squirm. My feelings for Asta. I know you haven’t had a chance to read my last two entries here, but you have seen how I am with your daughter. You know I like her, and think both her and I are too young to have any strong feelings or too young to know or make a decision about our feelings… or even too young for those feelings to last. With all do respect, sir, you are wrong. I may be an uneducated slaveboy, but that doesn’t mean I’m stupid. I love Asta. I will never stop loving her. I want her to be happy. I wish with all my heart I could be the one to make her happy but she deserves better than me I’m no one and I won’t stand in her way to be happy. That’s how much I love her, sir so don’t worry I won’t do something stupid and hurt her she won’t even know I love her, because I won’t persue her. Well I feel my head nodding even as I rite and I’m probably making no sinse so I will go to bed. Goodnight. -----signature----- "Change. It can be good. It can be bad. It can be expected or come as a thief in the night. Invited or not, it always comes." ~Koria "Tender Shadows", co-written w/ The Musical Jedi Padawan to DarthIshtar NaNoWriMo participant 2nd year in a row.
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earlybird-obi-wan Registered: Aug '06	Date Posted: 1/10 7:51am Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/9
	nice to see the background to his master revealed. Great update -----signature----- writer and Star Wars fan FANART [link=http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/25793899]fanart[/link] stories in my bio
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KELIA Title: Moderator: Fan Fiction Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/10 1:13pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/9
	Awww I wish Meb wouldn't be so hard on himself. He may not be the pretty boy charmer Undar is, but he is a wonderful human being. That's much more important. Perhaps Asta will come to see that one day as well. Great update -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 Undue Circumstances: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28530583/p1/?10
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/10 8:22pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/9
	Hee hee. I liked the way his Grammar deteriorated. That was cute. With all do respect, sir, you are wrong. I may be an uneducated slaveboy, but that doesn’t mean I’m stupid. Amen. Meb is so sweet. I just wanna hug him. Thanks for teh PM! Can't wait for the next. Meb, get some sleep, than write us some more! -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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angry_bendu1 Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 1/11 10:04am Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/9
	Ooooh... this is really good so far! It takes a great writer to make it so easy to identify with an OC, but you did it. Hat's off to you! Please pm me with any updates! -----signature----- Ramblings of a Jedi (snarky Jesika's diary- filled w/ romance, sarcasm, etc.): http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28753761/p1/?0 I was staring at the orange juice because it said "concentrate". Proud owner of a '96 Geo Metro. "To the Crapmobile!"
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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 1/12 10:06am Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/9 - Date Edited: 1/12 10:08am (1 edits total) Edited By: Alexis_Wingstar
	earlybird-obi-wan posted: nice to see the background to his master revealed. Great update Thank you KELIA posted: Awww I wish Meb wouldn't be so hard on himself. He may not be the pretty boy charmer Undar is, but he is a wonderful human being. That's much more important. Perhaps Asta will come to see that one day as well. Great update Being raised from birth as a slave doesn't exactly breed a healthy self-esteem. Undar isn't the typical pretty boy charmer... there is some substance to him, which is why... well I'll keep my mouth shut before I give a plot point away. Meredith_Kenobi posted: Hee hee. I liked the way his Grammar deteriorated. That was cute. With all do respect, sir, you are wrong. I may be an uneducated slaveboy, but that doesn’t mean I’m stupid. Amen. Meb is so sweet. I just wanna hug him. Thanks for teh PM! Can't wait for the next. Meb, get some sleep, than write us some more! I'm glad you liked the deterioration. It was funny that while I was writing that part, I kept writing it in proper grammar and had to keep changing it! My brain was working in reverse to my muse. angry_bendu1 posted: Ooooh... this is really good so far! It takes a great writer to make it so easy to identify with an OC, but you did it. Hat's off to you! Please pm me with any updates! Thank you! A PM will be coming your way shortly. ~~~~~~~~~~~ Entry 6: I feel like I am a different person somehow. I'm not sure how to explain it. I mean, I'm still Meb, orphaned slave boy, but inside something has changed. I guess I should say what happened today... Master Ander read the last three entries. He chuckled at how my grammar and spelling became exceptionally poor toward the end of the last entry, and I couldn't help but laugh as well. Then he became serious. He apologized to me! "Meb," he said, "I'm sorry for making you feel like I thought of you as stupid or unworthy." I didn't know what to say, so I just shrugged as I looked away from him and mumbled that it was alright. That's when he came over to me and laid a hand on my shoulder. It was an automatic reflex for me to flinch away from him, though I knew he wasn't going to hurt me. All my life, I've been beaten and smacked around by those who owned me. Before Master Ander bought me, there have been only two people who have cared for me. The first was a woman who nursed me as a baby and until I was four, raised me as her own... then she was killed. The second was Shmi Skywalker... until she and Anakin were sold to Watto, we were owned by Gardula the Hutt. Anyway, Master Ander seems to understand why I flinch, though I can tell it saddens him. He explained to me that he knew I was sincere in my feelings toward Asta, and that what he meant was that he would prefer we wait to become serious... I guess he means becoming engaged and such... about each other until we are older. He also told me he doesn't look down on me because of my status as a slave. "Meb, you are special. You have a good heart, and are very intelligent. I have no doubt that you can do anything you set your mind on doing! In a few years, if you wish to persue a relationship with Asta, and she feels the same way, I have no objections to that." I stood there in stunned silence as he spoke to me... like an equal. He also told me that he signed the papers to free me. He said it may take a few months for the emancipation to become official, but at least it is in the works. I couldn't say anything or even move. That's when he gave me a hug and called me son. And I wept. Son. I feel like I never heard that word before. Well, I never have in reference to me. I never realized how much I longed for the love of a family, and the guidance of a father, until now... Now that I have it in Master Ander. I must say though, I'm glad he isn't my real father, or else my feelings for Asta would be... wrong! -----signature----- "Change. It can be good. It can be bad. It can be expected or come as a thief in the night. Invited or not, it always comes." ~Koria "Tender Shadows", co-written w/ The Musical Jedi Padawan to DarthIshtar NaNoWriMo participant 2nd year in a row.
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earlybird-obi-wan Registered: Aug '06	Date Posted: 1/12 10:14am Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/9
	Loved the update and what a lovely master Meb has. He will be alright. -----signature----- writer and Star Wars fan FANART [link=http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/25793899]fanart[/link] stories in my bio
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KELIA Title: Moderator: Fan Fiction Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/12 2:40pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/9
	I'm so glad to see Meb being shown by his Master what he really thinks of him What a wonderful gift to give him. I can only hope Asta will come to see how wonderful Meb is. Great update -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 Undue Circumstances: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28530583/p1/?10
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/12 6:58pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/9
	That was so wonderful. It brought happy tears to my eyes. The last line made me smile. Silly old Meb. More soon, please! -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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silverfighter Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 1/12 8:04pm Subject: RE: Freedom in (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/12
	This is rather interesting. I've been meaning to write about slaves on Tatooine for awhile, and you might have just inspired me. The grammatical errors really make your character feel human. Loved the part where Meb was almost falling asleep as he wrote. And I can sympathize with him about algebra. “I’m just Meb… a mutt.” ...Only of the biggest loser in the galaxy contest. Poor Meb. Ok, it’s three hours later and I haven’t slept a wink. My mind is just too busy to sleep, even though my body cries out for it. So… I might as well write. I can't tell you how many times I have done something like that. And I wept. Son. ((sniffles)) Aww... Send me a PM when you update, please! ~Silverfighter -----signature----- I praise my God with uplifted hands and sing 'till I can't sing no more. "You believe there is one God. Good! Even the devils believe that--and shudder." -James 2:19 Dreams = Plotbunnies Plotbunnies = Bad Dreams = Bad (Geometry CAN be useful. Ha.)
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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 1/15 9:41pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/12 - Date Edited: 1/17 8:01am (2 edits total) Edited By: Alexis_Wingstar
	earlybird-obi-wan posted: Loved the update and what a lovely master Meb has. He will be alright. Yes, but life can be complicated... and he's got alot of scars that aren't totally healed. KELIA posted: I'm so glad to see Meb being shown by his Master what he really thinks of him What a wonderful gift to give him. I can only hope Asta will come to see how wonderful Meb is. Great update He must see his own worth if he's to be whole. Meredith_Kenobi posted: That was so wonderful. It brought happy tears to my eyes. The last line made me smile. Silly old Meb. More soon, please! Your wish is my command... hope you enjoy it. silverfighter posted: This is rather interesting. I've been meaning to write about slaves on Tatooine for awhile, and you might have just inspired me. The grammatical errors really make your character feel human. Loved the part where Meb was almost falling asleep as he wrote. And I can sympathize with him about algebra. “I’m just Meb… a mutt.” ...Only of the biggest loser in the galaxy contest. Poor Meb. Ok, it’s three hours later and I haven’t slept a wink. My mind is just too busy to sleep, even though my body cries out for it. So… I might as well write. I can't tell you how many times I have done something like that. And I wept. Son. ((sniffles)) Aww... Send me a PM when you update, please! ~Silverfighter Yeah, I've written instead of sleeping as well... I've written while sleeping... and fallen asleep while writing too. I'm glad you like what I wrote so far. A PM will be coming your way shortly. ~~~~~~~~~ Entry 7: Just when I thought I was worth something... Just when I thought I meant something to someone who means the world to me... I get shot down. I know now I will have to get off Tatooine when I'm free. I have to get away from where anyone will know I was a slave. I have to go where no one knows me or my past to get a fair shake. Yesterday I noticed Asta was rather antsy all day, then this morning she looked rather pale and very tired. She hardly ate. Well, she usually is a light eater, but this morning she ate next to nothing. I was concerned, so after she left the table, I caught up to her to ask her if she was feeling alright. She took me by surprise when she burst out crying and hugged me. I couldn't do anything else but put my arms around her as she wept into my tunic. I didn't know what was wrong, but all that mattered was comforting her. If she wanted to tell me she would. I just stood there holding her and rubbing her back until she pulled away. She apologized for crying, and of course, I bumbled as usual, saying something stupid... can't remember what I said, but let's just say I almost broke a tooth with my boot when I put my foot in my mouth. Then Undar came. And she kissed me. I... I knew she was using me. I saw the look he gave her when he saw her with me, and I saw the look in her eyes right before she kissed me. But I kissed back. I knew she kissed me just to make him jealous. I couldn't help it... part of me wanted to make her want to keep kissing me. To make her forget about making him jealous. It was the stupidest thing I've ever done. When she pulled out of the kiss, she didn't even look at me. I was just her tool to get at Undar. Well, I could tell it made him jealous... and she relished the fact. Then Undar did somthing wierd. He said he came to talk to me and asked me outside. I was weary... I wondered if he wanted to talk with his mouth or his fists. I was up to either one to tell you the truth. I was angry... at Asta for using me... and at myself for thinking I just might mean something to her. I couldn't hit Asta, but, if Undar wanted to fight, he'd have one. As I looked back at Asta before going out the door, I felt as though I'd been beat up again on the inside. It turns out Undar did only want to talk. He sat and began telling me how long he had loved Asta... they'd always been like brother and sister when they were growing up, but it changed for him when he was thirteen... he suddenly started feeling something stir iniside whenever he saw her... then Asta and her father came to live full-time on Tatooine and he didn't get to see her in person again 'til the day before yesterday. "Does this have a point?" I wondered irritably. Then he told me what happened last night... including his comment that made her angry. And he apologized. "I have no right to talk about you like that. I'm sorry." I just looked at him without saying anything. I didn't know what to say. People are always putting me down as a slave. It's something I've come to expect. Sure, it makes me angry, but it's just life. No one has ever apologized for it. I didn't know how to respond. "Look, I know it's not a good excuse for what I said. But, I love her. I can tell she really likes you, and I was jealous. I shouldn't have said it. You are a sentient, feeling person, and I have no right to talk about you like that. I degraded myself as much as you when I did. I hope you can forgive me." He put out his hand between us. And I took it. I respected his honesty. He didn't have to tell me what went on between him and Asta or what he said. I couldn't think of any way he could benefit from telling me, except to clear his concience. After we shook hands, he left, and I went inside. Asta wasn't there when I came in. Why would she be, I thought... I gave her what she needed. I needed to work off some steam, so I went to the weight room. Master Ander let me work out here whenever I wasn't studying. The muscles I've developed are a good side effect of working out. The main reason I work out so much is not to gain strength but to let out all my anger and frustration. The repetition of lifting weights gives me a sense of control. I needed that right now, because right now I felt so totally out of control. As I worked out, I sensed rather than heard her come in. I know she has watched me many times. Today was the first time I wished she would leave. Instead, for the first time, she came all the way into the workout area, and sat down on a bench next to the one I was benchpressing on. Then she started talking. I tried to ignore her. I didn't want to talk. Why did she have to come in while I was trying to get rid of the anger? Didn't she know how angry I was with her? With me? With LIFE? "Meb, please speak to me." That's when I put down the weights and sat up and looked at her. "What do you want me to say? Huh? Thank you so much for giving me the pleasure of placing your lips against mine so you can make your pretty boy jealous? Thank you for blubbering all over me one minute and throwing me aside the next?" I got up and walked away from her, because tears started coming from my eyes. I couldn't let her see me cry. I didn't notice at the time that this was the first time I spoke to her without stuttering... actually I was yelling. She came up behind me and placed a hand on my back as she apologized. Instead of calming me down, her touch infuriated me further. All my life, people have touched me without my permission. People have used me and beat me and made me do things that I didn't want to do. I wasn't going to take it any more. Blind with pent up fury, I struck out. Gods, she fell so slowly. I never knew time could slow down like that. I can still see her fall like a holo-vid freezing every other fraction of a second. When she finally hit the floor is when I heard you yell, Master Ander. "Asta!" You must have just came into the room when I hit her... and you were kneeling at her side as I stood there looking down feeling all of a sudden numb with shock. "Asta," you cried as you took her in your arms. "Daddy?" "Master... Asta... I'm sorry!" I was trembling. I was so scared. I knew you would both hate me now. I couldn't blame you. I hate me, too. Your voice trembled with rage as you yelled at me to get out. Master Ander, I'm so sorry! I'm packed and ready to go... I've taken enough credits to get me off Tatooine, and I'll try to send you repayment... triple what I took... I... don't know if you deactivated the slave transmitter... I may blow up. I don't care, except for the fact I wouldn't be able to pay you back for all your kindness and taking the credits. I love you like a father, Master Ander. I'm sorry I hurt you and your daughter. Please tell Asta I love her, and I'm sorry. I guess this is my last entry into this journal. Goodbye. -----signature----- "Change. It can be good. It can be bad. It can be expected or come as a thief in the night. Invited or not, it always comes." ~Koria "Tender Shadows", co-written w/ The Musical Jedi Padawan to DarthIshtar NaNoWriMo participant 2nd year in a row.
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earlybird-obi-wan Registered: Aug '06	Date Posted: 1/15 10:04pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/15
	Noo Meb, don't leave. -----signature----- writer and Star Wars fan FANART [link=http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/25793899]fanart[/link] stories in my bio
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KELIA Title: Moderator: Fan Fiction Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/16 4:08am Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/15
	Oh Meb! I hope Ander is more understanding than you think. Not that he will excuse striking his daughter, but perhaps there is a way back from the mess. I'm impressed with Under. He really is a nice guy Great update -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 Undue Circumstances: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28530583/p1/?10
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karebear214 Registered: Sep '02	Date Posted: 1/16 3:03pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/15
	Aw... poor Meb. The most telling part for me, I think, is when he said he doesn't even really care if he blows up. Aw. Can't wait to see what happens next. -----signature----- “It is magic. The magic of the human heart, focused and made manifest by technology. Every day you here create greater miracles than a burning bush." - Babylon 5
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 1/16 4:21pm Subject: RE: Freedom in Bondage (2008 Diary Challenge; OC; Angst; Drama; Romance) Update 1/15
	I can't say I feel sorry for Asta. She didn't treat Meb very well, though in her credit, she did apologize. I'm still mad at her. And as for her pretty boy...I'm not sure. If he spoke down on Meb, then that's what he truly thinks deep down, no matter what else he says. That he's better than Meb. Meb, boyo, you shouldn't have hit Asta, but I think I'm definitely on your side for this. All three of you acted wrongly, but the other two were just being selfish; and in the end it was you who really suffered for it. Wow, what an update, Alexis. -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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