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Those Eyes! [re: 2008 Dear Diary Challenge; OC; Romance; Angst;Drama] Update 7/5 GROSS!
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star_writer24
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1/20 4:02am
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RE: Those Eyes! [re: 2008 Dear Diary Challenge; OC; Romance; Angst;Drama] Update 1/15
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Okay I've been lurking on this since it was started and I just have to say I am loving it. Do you have a posting schedule? Keep up the good work this is way to good not to be completed. 
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Alexis_Wingstar
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earlybird-obi-wan posted:
Oh please let those two come together 
I can't promise anything... but, she is leaning more towards Meb.
VaderLVR64 posted:
That was great! Poor thing, so torn between two people. 
And yeah, the change is funny. 
I almost forgot what change you were talking about. 
angry_bendu1 posted:
Well I was mad at her when I read the other journal, but it's good to know that she is remorseful.
But she is digging a really deep pit for herself! 
She'd better figure it out soon!
I think she will.
star_writer24 posted:
Okay I've been lurking on this since it was started and I just have to say I am loving it. Do you have a posting schedule? Keep up the good work this is way to good not to be completed.
I don't have a strict posting schedule, but I'll be slowing it to 2 - 3 posts per month.
Entry 6:
So much has happened since this afternoon, diary, I'm not sure where to start.
Well, Meb came back home with daddy and Caen. I am so grateful they found him before he left Tatooine! I don't know if I would have been able to stand the thought of Meb out there all by himself... well, I have a feeling he could take care of himself. I think he could do anything he sets his mind on doing. He's strong, smart, and even if he doesn't believe so himself, he has a certain charm about him. Actually, I think part of his charm is he doesn't believe he has it. But still, he has this vulnerability, too, and I hate to think of him being by himself where no one cares about him... and loves him.
Yes, I love him, diary.
How can I not? He is so sweet! When he came home he apologized to me... at the same time I apologized to him. He forgave me. Not only that, he told me he loves me. He was so sweet and tender. He was also very sorry for hitting me, even though I deserved it. He says I didn't, but I know I did. I was so insensitive to him. How can he love me?
I guess I'm lucky, diary.
I let him read you, diary. He didn't want to at first, but I begged him to. It's the least I could do for reading his. Well, he calls his diary a journal. I guess it's a guy thing to call a diary a journal. Anyway, he smiled when he saw I had drawn a heart around his name. That was kind of embarrassing... but it was kind of nice to share that part with him. He even held my hand when I became embarrassed, and kept holding my hand while he finished reading.
He was about to say something when he finished reading, but that was when Caen came in and told us daddy wanted to see us. He held my hand until we came to daddy's study. I'm not sure how to explain this, but it's like we both knew without asking each other that we should stop holding hands when we went in.
Diary, I was so nervous! I was convinced I'd done something so bad, daddy would hate me. I hated myself... not sure I don't anymore. I... hate that I could do things that hurt those I care about so easily. At least I know now daddy doesn't hate me.
Sorry, diary, here's what happened.
At the beginning of the conversation between my father, me, and Meb, I broke down crying. I couldn't help it. Daddy looked so sad. I couldn't stand that I'd disappointed him. Meb was so sweet, he got on his knees and begged me not to cry. That's when daddy asked him to wait outside while he spoke to me alone.
Meb almost made me laugh... I'm laughing about it now as I write about it... but anyway, he was so sweet... he stood up and asked daddy not to be mad at me. He said I was a good person... he said I was like my daddy, only better looking. Oh, diary, that was so sweet and funny. I could have hugged him if I hadn't felt so bad right then and afraid father was going to send me away.
Then when Meb left the room, I tried to stop crying. I looked up at him as tears still were in my eyes as I spoke, "Please don't hate me daddy! Don't send me away to live with mother!" Then put my hands on my face as I bent over, weeping harder than I've ever wept in my life.
"Oh, baby girl," he whispered in my ear and I felt him stroking my hair. "Please, look at me."
I sniffled as I looked up at him.
He was kneeling where Meb was just seconds ago. Cupping my chin in his hands, he leaned his forehead against mine. "I could never hate you, honey!"
I swear there were tears in his eyes! It broke my heart. My daddy was crying!
"I'm sorry, daddy! I'm so, so sorry!"
"Come here, Asta." Once again he cradled me on his lap and we both wept in each other's hug.
When we stopped crying, we told each other we loved each other.
My daddy loves me!
We had a long talk, and I'm not going to go into detail. Suffice it to say, I had overheard him talking a few weeks ago about me needing more feminine influence and that I should stay with my mother... ever since then I'd been kind of walking on eggshells, thinking that I wasn't doing something right and that he was sending me to live with her to punish me.
Well, the thing is, he does want to send me to live with my mother, but not a permanent thing. See, I will be attending a university on Minashee in a couple months. Instead of living in the dorms there, he wants me to stay with my mother who lives nearby. I have mixed feelings about this, but it's what my daddy wants. I'll do it, but I won't enjoy it.
We hugged each other once more before we ended our conversation, and it was time to let Meb back into the room.
Again I have to say, Meb is so sweet. He quietly asked me if I was alright as I went out and he went in.
I love him, diary. Gods help me. I do!
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earlybird-obi-wan
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RE: Those Eyes! [re: 2008 Dear Diary Challenge; OC; Romance; Angst;Drama] Update 2/3
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Lovely and a perfect match with Meb's diary. Those two together hmm?
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VaderLVR64
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2/4 8:58am
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RE: Those Eyes! [re: 2008 Dear Diary Challenge; OC; Romance; Angst;Drama] Update 2/3
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Meb almost made me laugh... I'm laughing about it now as I write about it... but anyway, he was so sweet... he stood up and asked daddy not to be mad at me. He said I was a good person... he said I was like my daddy, only better looking. Oh, diary, that was so sweet and funny. I could have hugged him if I hadn't felt so bad right then and afraid father was going to send me away.
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Alexis_Wingstar
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RE: Those Eyes! [re: 2008 Dear Diary Challenge; OC; Romance; Angst;Drama] Update 2/3
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Thank you, VaderLVR64 and earlybird-obi-wan.
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Entry 7:
The funniest thing just happened, Diary. I was thinking about Meb, and closed my eyes picturing him when suddenly Undar's face appeared... kind of juxtaposed on Meb's.
I just realized, they kinda resemble each other... sort of.
It's wierd.
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earlybird-obi-wan
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and it is not weird if she reads Meb's diary
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Alexis_Wingstar
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Entry 8:
Dear Diary,
If there was any doubt about who my heart belongs to before, there is none now. Meb holds it in his hands, and it would stop beating if he ever wanted to give it back.
I heard a knock on my bedroom door just after my last entry, and was surprised to see him standing there looking close to tears. He asked if we could talk. Diary, he looked so sad and vulnerable, I couldn't deny him. I took his hand, guided him into my room, and shut the door before asking him what was wrong.
He stood there looking down at his feet as he spoke so softly I could barely hear him. "I'm thinking about going to live with my family."
"What?" I heard him, but I couldn't wrap my mind around what he said. He had said before that he had no family... he'd described himself as a mutt, which broke my heart when I heard it.
"You don't know?" He looked up at me with those big brown eyes that made my heart melt.
I shook my head in confusion, and he told me what he learned from both my father and Cain. I stood there in stunned silence as he spoke. Suddenly things made sense... the vision I saw just before he came to my door of his and Undar's faces... they're brothers! I don't know why I didn't see this before.
"I... don't know what to do, Asta." His bottom lip trembled as he said that.
I reached out and caressed his cheek and he began to cry. I took him in my arms and held him. Next thing we were sitting on the bed and he had his head buried into my bosom. I ran my fingers through his hair and my heart pounded wildly as he wept.
Gods, I would have let him make love to me right then if he wanted to.
As his sobbing calmed, I whispered, "Whatever you choose to do, I'll always be here for you, Meb."
I feel his body stiffen then, and he slowly pulled away. First, he was looking at where his face had been, blushing, but then he looked into my eyes and swallowed.
"I love you," I whispered, and damn it if my voice didn't shake.
I saw him swallow as he reached up and caressed my cheek. He then got up as he said, "I'd better go."
I stood up and held his hand as I asked if he was ok.
Meb's smile was shaky as he nodded. "Yes, thank you." Then he kissed me.
On the lips.
It was soft at first, but as I responded... wow, it felt like my heart was exploding, and every nerve was tingling pleasantly.
Diary, I don't know how long that kiss was, but I still feel his lips and his body pressed to mine.
And I know he feels the same way... because, well... let's just say there are signs that point to a man's desires.
Yeah.
Anyway, when he pulled away, he said he loved me then left the room.
I don't know if he's going to stay here with my father and me or go stay with his family. Even though I hope he stays, I can't fault him if he decides to go.
I'll miss him, but as I told him, I will always be here for him.
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VaderLVR64
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Anyway, when he pulled away, he said he loved me then left the room.
I don't know if he's going to stay here with my father and me or go stay with his family. Even though I hope he stays, I can't fault him if he decides to go.
I'll miss him, but as I told him, I will always be here for him.
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Loved it and let him stay. Those two are meant for each other.
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Alexis_Wingstar
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Entry 9:
After Meb left my room, I went out to the garden and helped Telma tend the plants. I find it relaxing to work with the flowers.
That's when Undar showed up. It seemed like so much has happened this morning that the horrible incident where I kissed Meb to make him jealous was months ago instead of just a few hours. I stood and found myself unable to look him in the eyes. "I'm sorry... about earlier."
He took my hand and guided me over to the bench. He frowned and asked what happened to my nose... I guess it's kinda swollen.
"I ran into a wall." It was lame, I know, but I couldn't tell him what really happened.
I could tell he didn't really believe me. He rose an eyebrow as he spoke. "Um, yeah, you really have to watch out for those things. They tend to pop up out of nowhere."
I started giggling. I couldn't help it. He's always been able to make me laugh. He smiled for a little bit, then looked sad as he looked down at the ground. We had a nice talk and got things cleared up. He knows now that I love Meb.
Then I said something stupid. I mentioned how much they... him and Meb... look like their father. He looked at me as if I were crazy. That's when I realized he didn't know! So I explained what Meb told me.
He got up and paced. He stopped and looked at me. "Meb is my brother." He shook his head as a smile slowly played at the corners of his mouth and he started laughing.
"What's so funny?" I didn't get it.
"I'm sorry, it's just funny. Our lives are worlds apart, yet we both fell in love with the same girl. We truly are brothers!" He laughed again.
I blushed. I couldn't say anything to that.
"He and your dad are going to be having lunch with my uncle and me. No doubt that was when they were going to tell me the good news."
I studied him to see exactly how he was taking this news. "It is good news, right? You aren't being sarcastic."
He looked at me in surprise. "Of course it's good news! Mom told me I had a brother somewhere... she told me what happened with my father. I always dreamt of the day I'd find him." He shook his head again, "It's funny, when I met Meb somehow I think I knew."
His eyes sparkled as he grinned, "Don't tell anyone that I know."
I narrowed my eyes at him. "What are you up to?"
"What makes you think I'm up to something?" He looked innocent.
"Come on, it's me, Asta."
"Nice to meet you, Asta." He shook my hand. I giggled as he said, "It's me, Undar."
I smacked his arm. He left a few minutes ago. He's up to something, the little brat. I wonder if I should warn Meb?
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I just found this diary today. Great work--could you please PM me with updates? Can't wait to see what happens next!
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WONDERFUL!
"I ran into a wall." It was lame, I know, but I couldn't tell him what really happened.
I could tell he didn't really believe me. He rose an eyebrow as he spoke. "Um, yeah, you really have to watch out for those things. They tend to pop up out of nowhere."
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what is Undar up to? Brothers should be nice to each other.
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slow_dawn posted:
I just found this diary today. Great work--could you please PM me with updates? Can't wait to see what happens next!
You'll be getting a PM soon.
VaderLVR64 posted:
WONDERFUL!
"I ran into a wall." It was lame, I know, but I couldn't tell him what really happened.
I could tell he didn't really believe me. He rose an eyebrow as he spoke. "Um, yeah, you really have to watch out for those things. They tend to pop up out of nowhere."
Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying this.
earlybird-obi-wan posted:
what is Undar up to? Brothers should be nice to each other.
You shall see in Meb's diary when I figure up what Undar is up to. 
Entry 10:
Dad and Meb left to have lunch with Undar and his Uncle Glens. I am so nervous, I can hardly make myself write this! I've been pacing quite a bit. Goel and Felmon started up a game of following me around. They're such funny little guys.
I wish I knew what Undar was going to do! I'm sure he doesn't mean to do something hurtful. I think he was genuinely happy to find out Meb is his brother. But, sometimes Undar's little pranks can backfire... and I don't want to see Meb's feelings hurt.
Telma made lunch, but I can't eat. I'm way too nervous! I can't wait 'til Meb gets back.
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