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(KotOR) Road to Mandalore. (Updated 10/03)
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Trika_Kenobi
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3/2 2:34pm
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RE: (KotOR) Road to Mandalore. (Updated 03/02)
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Lets find him and go to this trap, I mean, meeting.
LOL. I can see this getting interesting all the way around. 
Fantastic update. 
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BrentusofGath
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3/3 2:29am
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RE: (KotOR) Road to Mandalore. (Updated 03/02)
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"I don't want to have to hurt you," she said. "Again."
LOL! Yeah, right and I'm the Queen of England.
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Dar_manda
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3/3 2:13pm
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RE: (KotOR) Road to Mandalore. (Updated 03/02)
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If you say so Master. I like the hats btw, and that handbag was great, went beautifully with the high heeled shoes.
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MsLanna
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3/6 1:55am
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RE: (KotOR) Road to Mandalore. (Updated 03/02)
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Update. 
Mallia commented that he made a convincing Sith, despite being as she put it, as Force-sensitive as a brick.
So what? many great people are force-sensitive as a brick. And he also has a head as hard as one.
I like the idae od a Mando Sith, wearing black armour and all. Should be a great view. Too bad Canderous is not able to do the job.
Somehow I get the feeling Mallia and Canderous are not sure about their hierarchy yet. But it's nice to see them fight it out. More or less. Maybe they have different plans? 
I like the way they try to get the better of each other. 
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Dar_manda
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He enjoyed being right, and as the odds racked up he shifted his shoulders under his armour, assessing his possibilities and forming plans of attack in his mind. She was contented and could feel the tide of the impending fight, but something was not right, there was a disruption in the Force near her, she pushed it from her mind and concentrated on the present.
There were about thirty of them, a ragged but effective little band of mercenaries. They had placed themselves well, including the two snipers on a gantry who thought that they had not been noticed. The three stood back to back inside the shrinking circle of mercenaries, Tural stood with his sword drawn. There had been a short discussion and the outline of the future had been simple, they would die. Which 'they' abruptly became a moot point as Canderous erupted into action. He pulled the robe off and spun it over his head, the heavy material billowing out. He was no longer there as it fell, having taken three steps and drawing his blasters, made long dive. He barrelled through the line and disappeared into thin air. The two men he had knocked over stood up and dusted themselves down. Mallia bent down and picked up the robe, he had dropped the lightsaber inside it. As she straightened up she had the robe draped over her arms, a lightsaber in each hand concealed by the folds. She walked up to the commander of the mercenaries and nodded to him, he returned the gesture.
“I shall try not to kill too many of your men, I know training costs etcetera, really piles up doesn't it?” She said casually.
“Yes, it's why I've taken a better offer.” He said, she stared into his face. He was not an unpleasant man to look at and she studied his scars. She wondered for a moment what he would be like in bed and she sighed softly.
“You're reneging on the deal with me?” She moved closer, and licked her lips. “You do realise you've made a mistake, you've double crossed me and I won't stand for it. I know you aren't scared right now and I can almost forgive you for that. I can excuse stupidity, grand crass stupidity in your case, but betrayal....”
“You think I'm scared of a woman?” He interrupted her, looking down her body. “Even a Jedi witch like you. You don't frighten me and neither does your 'Order', I'm with the Exchange now and there's nothing you can do to me. Well, not unless...” He put both hands on her hips and pulled her into him.
“T'ad,” she muttered. “It is better that you know why you died, in the the afterlife, if you have one, so I will tell you. I am a Mandalorian.” The last syllable whispered from between her lips, joining the last breath of air from his lungs. She shut off her short lightsaber and let his body fall to the floor. There was a brief silence as the rest of the mercenaries assessed their situation.
Canderous watched from the gantry, he was still invisible and lying between the two men. They were watching the fight below, he was very disappointed but he waited for an opportune moment. One looked through him and whispered to his mate.
“Cor she can move can't she!? Nice bit a stuff that.”
“You an idiot or sommat Rel?” the second man said. “You saw what she did to The Captain, you think she'd have any hesitation in doin' the same to you?”
“I'd rather I was the one doin' the stabbin', if you get what I mean?” They leered at each other through Canderous' head for a moment and turned back to the fight.
It was in full swing, the warrior wanted nothing more than to drop down like avenging fury and destroy all who stood against him. He restrained himself however, the thought that she would be upset, forming a wry smile on his lips.
“I don't think she'd let you do that, Mandalorian women prefer their men to actually be proficient at combat.” His cloak disengaged, he was lying on his stomach arms outstretched, a blaster at each man's neck. “Me, I'm what you might call ideal. But I stand as much of a chance as you boys do, for a much different reason.”
“Oh yeah what'd that be?” Rel asked. “You her grandfather or sommat?” The other man sniggered. “Or maybe you're into that, I heard some weird stuff about the Mandalorians. But what make you think you ain't got a chance old man?”
“I'm not dead.” Canderous said.
“Neither are we.” Rel replied looking puzzled.
“You are, you're just too dumb to realise it.” Both men went white. “Now get the hell out of my sight!” They looked at the ground, the gantry was over a void, it would be a long fall. “What are you waiting for, you boys want to hold hands or something? We heard some weird stuff about the Republic too, difference was, most of it turned out to be true.” Canderous was getting bored. “C'mon have some guts for one time in your life, I've battled children with more tenacity than you. They were fighting to defend their homes,” he rolled onto his back and folded his arms both weapons still trained on their targets. “You have nothing to defend. Either you get off now or I'll shoot you until you fall.”
“Go to hell.” Rel spat. Canderous shrugged.
“Have it your way.” The two shots sheared through the chains supporting the gantry and it dropped into the hole. “Save a seat for me at the bar.” Canderous leapt to his feet, and stepping over Rel he ran to the end of the tilting chunk of metal. Pausing momentarily until the gantry shot past the edge of the hole, he jumped into the abyss, feeling life truly return to his body for the first time in years. His line fired and he ran along the wall parallel to the edge until he was close enough to bound up the rest of the way. Activating his cloak once more, he shot two distracted men, one in the face and the other in somewhere painful but survivable.
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Trika_Kenobi
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Date Posted:
3/16 2:37pm
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RE: (KotOR) Road to Mandalore. (Updated 03/16)
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"I'm not dead." Canderous said.
"Neither are we." Rel replied looking puzzled.
"You are, you're just too dumb to realise it."
 Oh, what a mess! Great dialog going on there. Super update! Thanks. 
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KELIA
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3/17 3:44am
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“I shall try not to kill too many of your men, I know training costs etcetera, really piles up doesn't it?”
I love Mallia's sense of humor.
he shot two distracted men, one in the face and the other in somewhere painful but survivable.
Ouch!
And I thought Mallia was the one not to triffle with!
Great update
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Dar_manda
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3/17 9:50am
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Everyone knows Canderous is extremely hard-core. This is really fun to write and I'm glad you folks are enjoying it.
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MsLanna
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3/19 5:57am
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"I'm not dead." Canderous said.
"Neither are we." Rel replied looking puzzled.
"You are, you're just too dumb to realise it."
One of the best bits of dialouge I read lately.
I only know canderous from stories, but he seems to be a really nice guy.
Good action for a guy who's just 'not dead'. 
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BrentusofGath
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3/19 11:36pm
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But what make you think you ain't got a chance old man?"
"I'm not dead." Canderous said.
"Neither are we." Rel replied looking puzzled.
"You are, you're just too dumb to realise it."
ROTFLOL!!! Sounds like they ought to be listening instead of trying ol Canderous.
Another good update.
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Dar_manda
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3/27 12:55pm
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Ok folks, Bit of a long one right here but I'm sure you'll enjoy it.
He was glad beskar deflected lightsabers, he could feel the buzz of the short blue one against his side. She stared into his eyes as he de-cloaked, and he winked. Grabbing her wrist he pulled her into him and kicked a man swinging a sword at her back in the groin.
Her hand snaked up his chest and she caught hold of top of his breast plate. She pulled, the Force propelling her away from him to Tural, who was losing a fight against five men. She landed on one hip, slid between Tural's feet, and came up on one knee, a mercenary impaled on each lightsaber. She crossed the blades concentrating on the sound they made as the control fields repelled each other. The Force welled inside her and she threw the mercenaries away like trash. A protracted scream indicated that at least one man had been unfortunate enough to join Rel and his companion. She looked up at Canderous, he was in his element, having switched to a pair of short swords. Whirling like a battle droid, he cut through any opposition in front of him. He will make us proud once more. Mallia thought wishing, not for the first time that she was just a warrior. At that moment she would have followed him into the core of a planet. The world blazed around him, his blades almost glowing like lightsabers. She could see the future before him, and suddenly it was darkness, Mallia dropped to her knees as she saw him scream in agony. She knew what it was that had disturbed the Force. She wanted to run and knew there was no point, wherever she went he would find her, and she would be dead.
But the sound was not Canderous, and the screams were those who stood in front of him being cut to ribbons. Rising to her feet she felt exhausted, and an instinctual need made her reach out with the Force to a young man near her. His eyes opened wide and he tried scream as the blood drained from his skin, the power flooding through her system like adrenaline. Sith troopers piled in to the cavernous hall, the free-falling odds not seeming to trouble either Canderous or Tural. The engineer was on form, it was disturbing to watch. Tural did not like to kill his opponents, a left-over from the war. Wounding a Mandalorian so that he could no longer fight meant a dishonour. That was what each blow was carefully calculated to achieve, however he was not fighting warriors now. The men before him fell like a harvest and all the while his eyes showed nothing, as emotionless as though he was staring at a wall.
But it was not enough. They were being backed towards the void, and even with Mallia's efforts causing localised disruption to morale, it is hard to find the will to fight when the man beside you has just moaned and had the life sucked out of him. They were lost, but they fought on, her lightsaber deflecting blaster fire, Canderous' armour soaking much that was aimed at him. Then the view in front of them was empty of enemies, the troopers where pulling back. Canderous rumbled in the back of his throat and rattled a blade against his leg armour.
"You boys getting tired already? Call yourselves warriors?" He sheathed one sword and drew a blaster pistol. "You're not even soldiers! Come back and fight me you cowardly scum!" But even he would not shoot a man in the back. He waited until some of them turned their heads to look at him when he shouted.
The crowd of troops split down the middle and a Dark Jedi stalked down the gap, he stopped in front of Mallia, flanked by two apprentices. He was human once, but the Dark Side had stripped more than just the light from his soul. The scars from an attack during the Mandalorian Wars, deeper than just his flesh. He reached out and stroked her face with his right hand, the one remaining limb that was his own.
"Mallia, my dear, I see you had the good sense to come back to me." His voice did not seem real, it sounded like the words came from a great distance, but were spoken beside the listener's ear. He laid his hand flat on her chest and lifted her off of her feet. Canderous started to move forward, but the Sith raised one hand and with a smile threw Tural over the edge. The Mandalorian tried the grab the engineer as he passed but even he was not fast enough. He turned to look at Mallia and with effort she flicked her fingers in a gesture that meant he should stand down. Her body jerked as the air was crushed from her lungs, he dropped his blaster.
"What do you want from us?" He said, the grip on Mallia loosened slightly.
"Not 'us', just you. It could be said that you made me the man I am today." The man's voice shifted like a breeze. "You probably don't remember Desria III, but I do. The falling stars that signalled the end of my home, I remember them all too clearly. Each one a nail in the coffin of my father and brothers. They came into my home and dragged my mother and sisters away screaming. They thought I was dead but the Force was with me that day and still is. My hatred of your people burns as the light that keeps my soul in darkness."
"Does this have a point? I'd rather be shot in the back of the head than listen to you talk any more. You going to tell me what you want?" Canderous unclipped his gauntlet, pulled it off and probed the inside of his ear with a fingertip.
"The Helmet of Mandalore, such a simple thing." He spun Mallia, examining her from different angles, as though she were an expensive sculpture. "But that is not all I want. She has always been mine, and will be until the day I die." The lightsaber deflected Canderous' first blaster shot, but not the explosive tipped dart that buried itself in his leg. As he collapsed he motioned his two apprentices to the attack. The Force was a powerful ally, and both were still young, he used every trick he knew, but it was no use. He was pinned in place by one, a man barely in his twenties, whilst the other, a girl, gleefully stripped him of his armour and weapons. He offered no protest, even when his hands were chained together and the tears fell from Mallia's eyes.
The Dark Jedi got to his feet, the sound of his bionics snapping back into place, reminding Canderous of a time when had a broken his arm and had to reset it. "I will remind you of why you lost the war," he stood next to Canderous, his dark brown eyes staring into impassive grey ones. "For as long as you can tolerate it, and I know that will be a very long time."
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KELIA
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RE: (KotOR) Road to Mandalore. (Updated 03/27)
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Nice action sequence
"You boys getting tired already? Call yourselves warriors?"
Only Canderous would taunt in the middle of a fight
"I will remind you of why you lost the war"
Uh oh!
Great update
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Trika_Kenobi
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Super stuff. I just wanted to comment on the writing quality, actually. I seem to see it getting better along with the story. That's exciting! You're doing such a good job... great update!
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Dar_manda
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Thanks, it's actually mostly thanks to BrentusofGath for his imput into my style (or lack thereof! ).
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A great update. Already hate that Sith. 
Canderous, I think I really do like him.  My kind of ToS-violation.
"I will remind you of why you lost the war," he stood next to Canderous, his dark brown eyes staring into impassive grey ones. "For as long as you can tolerate it, and I know that will be a very long time."
Now this is very powerful. If I wasn't so curious how things will get put right again, I wouldn't want to come back and see this. Sounds awful.
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