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silverfighter Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 2/3 11:27am Subject: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs) ~updated 4/18~ - Date Edited: 4/18 3:31pm (4 edits total) Edited By: silverfighter
	Title: Dream Story Author: silverfighter Timeframe: About six or seven years before The Phantom Menace. Obi-Wan is fifteen. Summary: Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan are on a short, nameless mission on Kamino when a vicious storm strikes. They have to help children off of a dying settlement, and in the process meet some interesting people who may or may not want to help them. Notes: This is a weird, slightly AUish story. Weird and AUish because this story is based off of a dream I had when I was thirteen, in the POV of Obi-Wan Kenobi. This whole first part is pretty much an exact copy of the dream, but later parts will be what I come up with now. I'm only planning on one, maybe two more parts, but if a plot bunny bites, there might be more. ^^^^^~~~~~^^^^^ Lightning splits through the air, lighting the night sky a split second before thunder rumbles ominously. The rain pounds on the metal roofing of Akban City, one of the few that remain on the watery world of Kamino. Waves thrash savagely against the supports that keep the city suspended above the water, the white foam occasionally crashing against the window which separates me from the outside world. This is a monster of a storm, stronger then the one before this and the one before that. Perhaps the strongest of all the storms we have experienced during this two month stay. I turn to my Master, the Jedi Knight Qui-Gon Jinn. "I have a very bad feeling about this, Master." A small smile quirks the edges of the older man's lips. "You say that about every storm, Obi-Wan." I shake my head, looking out the window again. "Something is going to happen, something bad. I can feel it." "This is a dangerous storm to be sure." Qui-Gon places a hand on my shoulder. "But the future is always in motion. Don't wor-" He didn't get the chance to finish those words, for a loud, piercing alarm splits through the air. I raise an eyebrow, biting back an "I told you so". Qui-Gon's comlink signals and he steps away for a moment and speaks quietly into the device. "Come, Obi-Wan," he says, putting the comlink back in his belt. "They need our help in the orphanage." "What for?" I quickly shrug into my long, brown robe and follow him out the door. "Evacuation," comes the curt reply. "Your feeling served you well." My feelings always serve me well, but Qui-Gon just doesn't listen, simply brushing them aside as petty worries, which can be frustrating. We walk through long hallways, passing many people in their rush to leave, carrying packs on their backs and their children in their arms. The whole settlement suddenly shakes and my stomach lurches. "Oh, not good," I mumble. "Relax, Padawan." Qui-Gon glances at me, though his own worry radiates out through our bond. When we reach the orphanage, which is nothing more then two small sleep rooms, nine children greet us worriedly. The caretaker has abandoned them, fearing for his own safety and leaving them to us. One young child, not much older then six years old looks up at me with dark blue eyes, her blond hair twisted into two knots on the top of her head. "You are going to help us," she says solemnly. "We are," I say softly. "But you must do what we say when we say it." I look each child in the eye. "Is that understood?" They all nod their heads, a few venturing a "Yes, sir." Qui-Gon takes out a cord of rope and lashes it about his waist before carefully tying it around each child. "Stay close to us," he orders, handing me the end of the rope. He leads us out into the now crowded hall, attempting to clear a path to the landing dock. He shouts over the din, trying to make it known that he is leading children, but to no avail. Everyone is concerned for their lives and their lives only. My Master was about to lead us down a semi-empty hallway when the settlement shook violently, throwing us against a panel of windows. Horrified, I notice that the floor was slanting beneath my feet. "The supports are failing!" I hear the shriek, but it doesn't register that it is my own. Terrified screams fill the air, the young children press against my side, whimpering. "Obi-Wan," Qui-Gon calls. I glance at him, quickly brushing away the fog of fear, bringing my mind back to the here and now. "Yes, Master?" "We must cut through the windows. We have better odds fighting the sea then being trapped in here." I nod, igniting my lightsaber. It's blue glow fills the halls, joined by Qui-Gon's own green saber just as the lights flicker and die. "It's alright," Qui-Gon reassures the panicked people. "Follow us." "That's suicid e!" A voice of a young woman breaks across the noise, and others agree. "If we stay in here, we will die," I say calmly. This is met by boos and hisses as everyone tries to drown me out. I glance down at the young children tied to me. "Will you come?" They nod hesitantly, glancing out at the wild sea. I quickly plunge my saber through the window, cutting a gap large enough for us to climb through. "Don't try to fight the water," I call above the screaming wind and thunder. "Just remain afloat, Qui-Gon and I will swim us to safety." Wherever safety is, if there is any. "One...two," Qui-Gon counted. "Three!" We all throw ourselves out the window, and the icy water sends a shock up my spine. As the children struggled to keep their heads above water Qui-Gon and I fought the current, trying to pull us away from the supports so we won't be dashed against the sides. We swim for more then an hour, leaving the dying settlement behind. When I notice some of the children really beginning to struggle, I put them on my back. Swimming with extra weight on one's back is no easy task, and I went under many times, but always managed to crash back to the surface. The storm slowly dies away for the most part, but the waves are still monstrous, picking us up and throwing us where they like. "I'm so tired," one of the children say, his arms wearily moving in circles. "We are almost there," Qui-Gon reassured. //Almost where?// I send across our bond. //I don't know. The Force is leading us somewhere, but I can't give a name.// We swim for another hour and the clouds part to reveal a rising sun, painting yellow and pink light across the rough water. The child with the knots on the top of her head begins to have a difficulties, gagging on seawater, constantly going under water. I make my way to her but it is slow moving, I now have three children on my back. By the time I reach her it is too late. Pounding on her back, forcing air into her lungs does no good. We are forced to leave her body, the tips of the knots on her head sticking out of the water, her head floating just below the surface, bobbing in the waves. I feel so helpless. All the children are now on either my or Qui-Gon's backs, making swimming difficult at best. Just when I feel I can go no further, there is a dot on the horizon. //Courage now, Padawan, we are almost there.// With last bursts of energy we shoot forward, coming alongside a long wooden ship. Finding sea worn ropes dangling to dry over the side of the ship we carefully drag ourselves and the children over the side, only to be met with the ends of blasters. "Who are ye?" A man with an empty eye socket growls at us, one hand resting on a knife hilt. "We are merely weary travelers, looking for a place to rest," Qui-Gon replied. "We were forced to leave our settlement and have been swimming for hours." "Which settlement?" A tall man with shiny black hair that hangs down his back parts the group of rough looking men and woman, coming to stand before us, hands resting on slim hips. "Akban City," I supply. A strange look passes over his face as he repeats softly to himself: "Akban City..." He suddenly looks up and studies us. "I am Captain Toneo. You may stay with us until we reach a settlement." He turns and stalks away, and one by one his crew follow him. //He isn't saying something, Master.// //I am well aware. Don't trust him until he reveals what he is hiding.// ^^^^^~~~~~^^^^^ Alright, reading over this again, that was weirder then I thought, but can one expect from dreams? Thanks for reading! And thanks to TrulyGhent for betareading it for me! -----signature----- I praise my God with uplifted hands and sing 'till I can't sing no more. "You believe there is one God. Good! Even the devils believe that--and shudder." -James 2:19 Dreams = Plotbunnies Plotbunnies = Bad Dreams = Bad (Geometry CAN be useful. Ha.)
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SUGARBANTJINN Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 2/3 11:36am Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs)
	you're right, it IS a cliff hanger! Can't wait to read more! -----signature----- Bant and Jonny. Forever one. Two hearts entwined God's Will will not take us to a place where His Grace will not carry us. Padawan Sunkisser 288days O my, my this here Anakin guy Maybe Vader someday later, Now he's just a small fry!
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 2/3 4:48pm Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs)
	Wow, that must have been some dream! It was really sad when that little girl died. Did that happen in your dream, too? This is a really cool story, silverfighter! Would you mind sending me a PM when you update? -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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Cole_Kenobi Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 2/3 5:26pm Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs)
	Oh, that was a daring rescue! But it seems, they are not out of the water yet. Aha. Lovely begining! Can't wait for more! Plesae add me to your PM list. Thank you!
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jedidas3 Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 2/4 8:34am Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs)
	Wow! Very interesting beginning. Please PM me when you update this cool story! -----signature----- The Past Revisited http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28440949 Lessons Learned http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28580784 Remembrance http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/28009025 Padawan to dianethx
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Blue_Lightsaber42 Registered: Dec '07	Date Posted: 2/4 2:32pm Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs)
	Yaaaay! Obi and Qui save the day! But that was so sad when the girl died! PM me when you update! -----signature----- SSEoCDaC/PFEEoCDaC,BDTAT Twin Sun 17 Co-Founder of the Rebellion Proud Master of DarthAnakin101 and Ithonya from Trika-> //hug
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silverfighter Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 2/10 12:34pm Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs) - Date Edited: 2/10 12:39pm (1 edits total) Edited By: silverfighter
	SUGARBANTJINN: Only just a little... Thanks! I'll try to have more soon. Meredith_Kenobi: That it was. And compared to some other dreams I have had, this one was rather pleasant. And yes, everything in this first post happened in my dream. I wouldn't mind sending you a PM at all. Cole_Kenobi: But it seems, they are not out of the water yet. Aha. That's clever. Thank you very much! ((adds Cole to the list)) jedidas3: Thank you! Of course I'll PM you too! Blue_Lightsaber42: Yes... Or do they? But that was so sad when the died! Try seeing it happen in a rather vivid dream. I'll be happy to PM you. ^^^^^~~~~~^^^^^ Alright, the next post may be up this time next week, but only if I figure out some dialogue, and how closely I want to follow the end of the dream. I remember the beginning and the end of the dream, but not the middle, so I'm trying to figure out how the two will meet. Thanks for reading! PM List Meredith_Kenobi Cole_Kenobi jedidas3 Blue_Lightsaber42 -----signature----- I praise my God with uplifted hands and sing 'till I can't sing no more. "You believe there is one God. Good! Even the devils believe that--and shudder." -James 2:19 Dreams = Plotbunnies Plotbunnies = Bad Dreams = Bad (Geometry CAN be useful. Ha.)
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1Yodimus_Prime Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 2/11 12:33am Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs)
	Oooo, dream-inspired! I like. Sounds pretty wild so far. Is this one of those crazy dreams that somehow fool you into thinking several days have passed over the course of the ninety minutes it actually lasted? Those dreams hurt my mind. I once had a dream like that involving a zombie outbreak started by a cult. In dream-time, it lasted a week, during which I was either escaping from things, generally on the run, or hiding in safehouses. Then one of the people I befriended in the dream betrayed the group at the end of it, basically dooming us all to certain death inside a grocery store. Hopefully your's wasn't quite so nihilistic.. -----signature----- Rule 12: A soft answer turneth away wrath. Once wrath is looking the other way, shoot it in the head. --- http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/26481069 - The Wise http://boards.theforce.net/B/b1/21283317 - Planet Hopping
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Gkilkenny Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 2/11 2:56am Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs)
	I love dreams that turn into stories they are the best kind. Especially with Obi-Wan in them. Can you add me to your PM list please. -----signature----- Padawan to p_stotts Peace over anger - honour over hate - Strength over fear. Links to Stories in my Bio. Obi-Wan forever.
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silverfighter Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 3/19 7:00am Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs)
	1Yodimus_Prime: I don't remember how long passed in the dream exactly, but yeah, twas one of those. I actually have had a dream like that before, but this isn't one of them. Gkilkenny: Dream stories are some of my favorites too, they can turn out to be really amusing. PM List Meredith_Kenobi Cole_Kenobi jedidas3 Blue_Lightsaber42 Gkilkenny This next update is really short, simply because I only finally figured out what I'm going to do with this story a few days ago, but I want to post it so I can't change my mind again. Hopefully over Spring break I'll have time to write out the last part. Thanks to everyone for reading! ^^^^~~~~^^^^ The old ship rocks and moans in the rough sea, the wind whistling through the sails and the boards creaking beneath my feet. Ships are not made like this anymore, they haven’t for millennia, so I am surprised that this one so much as exists, much less on Kamino, where monstrous waves and storms have been known to tear apart even the most finely crafted vessel. Much as the storms and sea claimed Akban, and all its inhabitants. My stomach lurches as we travel up the side of a wave, and quickly come crashing back down the other side. I grip the table at which I sit, which is fortunately nailed to the floor, and reach up a hand to steady the rocking of the glowlamp that hangs above my head. The map that lies before me is old, the parchment yellow and stained. It displays landmasses that were swallowed by an onrushing sea when the polar icecaps of this planet melted. According to the claims of Captain Toneo, some of that land still pokes above the ocean. He is taking us to one of them, one that he says has a spaceport so Qui-Gon and I can get off this planet. Our comlinks were ruined in the storm, so we have no way of calling for help. The captain is refusing to take us to any of the surviving settlements, but he is not revealing why. For now we will go along with it, but if we travel much longer with no land in sight, something will have to be done. I pull a newer holographic map towards me. The one glowing dot amidst a vast expanse of dark blue represents our ship, and the glowing cross our destination. Using the key in the right hand corner I estimate three more days of traveling until we reach wherever it is we are going. Qui-Gon comes below deck hugging a cloak tightly across his body. “Have you found anything?” he asks quietly. I shake my head and sigh. “Nothing. The captain is very meticulous about what he does. If he’s hiding anything, I haven’t found it.” I wave a hand at the maps. “While not very useful, these maps are interesting.” Qui-Gon fingers the parchment of the oldest map. “This one could be centuries old,” he says, then picks up the holographic map. “This one however, this one doesn’t have the appearance of something of more then a few years.” “It seems to be a positioning system of sorts,” I say, pointing to the various points. “If that is where we are headed,” Qui-Gon says, tapping the glowing cross, “then we should be arriving shortly.” “That’s just what I was thinking, Master.” I stand and stretch my sore muscles. “How long have I been down here?” “I’m not sure,” Qui-Gon says, hesitating slightly. “The sun has been in a setting position much longer then it should. Almost as if time itself has stopped.” “Nothing would surprise me now,” I mutter, gathering up the maps and carefully putting them away. “So many strange things have happened on this ‘routine’ mission.” A smile tugs at Qui-Gon’s lips. “No mission is routine, Obi-Wan.” I grin. “I am well aware, Master.” ^^^^~~~~^^^^ -----signature----- I praise my God with uplifted hands and sing 'till I can't sing no more. "You believe there is one God. Good! Even the devils believe that--and shudder." -James 2:19 Dreams = Plotbunnies Plotbunnies = Bad Dreams = Bad (Geometry CAN be useful. Ha.)
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jedidas3 Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 3/19 7:21am Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs) ~updated 3/19~
	A smile tugs at Qui-Gon’s lips. “No mission is routine, Obi-Wan.” I grin. “I am well aware, Master.” Especially with those two! NIce update...I'm looking forward to the next part. -----signature----- The Past Revisited http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28440949 Lessons Learned http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28580784 Remembrance http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/28009025 Padawan to dianethx
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Cole_Kenobi Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 3/19 10:15pm Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs) ~updated 3/19~
	Ahah. Love the banter between Master and Padawan! How true! Nice update. Thanks for the PM.
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Blue_Lightsaber42 Registered: Dec '07	Date Posted: 3/21 7:11am Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs) ~updated 3/19~
	silverfighter posted: A smile tugs at Qui-Gon’s lips. “No mission is routine, Obi-Wan.” I grin. “I am well aware, Master.” So true. Great update, silver, thanks for the PM! -----signature----- SSEoCDaC/PFEEoCDaC,BDTAT Twin Sun 17 Co-Founder of the Rebellion Proud Master of DarthAnakin101 and Ithonya from Trika-> //hug
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silverfighter Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 3/24 1:11pm Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs) ~updated 3/19~
	jedidas3: Thank you. I am horrible with dialouge, but those lines seemed to fit. Cole_Kenobi: Really? Thank you, and you're welcome. Blue_Lightsaber42: Sheesh, I guess I did good with those last words. Thanks and you're welcome. I have a goal of finishing the story by the end of the week, whether or not that will happen I don't know, but the last bit should be split into at least two if not more parts, so a new post should be up by the end of the week. Thanks for reading! -----signature----- I praise my God with uplifted hands and sing 'till I can't sing no more. "You believe there is one God. Good! Even the devils believe that--and shudder." -James 2:19 Dreams = Plotbunnies Plotbunnies = Bad Dreams = Bad (Geometry CAN be useful. Ha.)
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Gkilkenny Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 3/27 10:41pm Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs) ~updated 3/19~
	“That’s just what I was thinking, Master.” I stand and stretch my sore muscles. “How long have I been down here?” “I’m not sure,” Qui-Gon says, hesitating slightly. “The sun has been in a setting position much longer then it should. Almost as if time itself has stopped.” “Nothing would surprise me now,” I mutter, gathering up the maps and carefully putting them away. “So many strange things have happened on this ‘routine’ mission.” wow I wonder if time has stood still. This is interesting. very good. -----signature----- Padawan to p_stotts Peace over anger - honour over hate - Strength over fear. Links to Stories in my Bio. Obi-Wan forever.
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 3/29 8:53pm Subject: RE: Dream Story (Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, OCs) ~updated 3/19~
	Glad to see this one up and running again! I'm really enjoying this story, short though it may be. -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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