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Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Epilogue 29-May-2008
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Cole_Kenobi
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Aug '05
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4/19 11:08pm
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Complete - 19-Apr-2008
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Awww, this was such a cute, and appropriate ending. Delightful to read. Enjoyed the lessons learned, and the funny image of a little Yoda going down teh laundry shute. Ahah.
Awesome story! Brillant job!
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Qui-Gina-Jinn
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4/20 2:24am
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Complete - 19-Apr-2008
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What a wonderful story!
I can imagine both Qui-Gon and Yoda doing just that 
And of course Obi-Wan would be stealing food...
Great story!
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Gkilkenny
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4/20 3:36am
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Complete - 19-Apr-2008
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Wonderful and mushy so nice a change from all the angst stories 
They seemed at peace while they spoke, and it sound like they are going to have fun playing with the crechlings.
Excellent. 
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Jedi-Gon
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4/20 6:17am
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Complete - 19-Apr-2008
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Oh dear! Qui-Gon bouncing and Yoda getting stuck in a laudry chute! Too comical!
This was very, very well done. Kudos to you!
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Bastet
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4/20 10:15am
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Complete - 19-Apr-2008
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Aww, that was a great ending, ardavenport! 
Shame on Obi-Wan for stealing desserts! 
Aaaaah. What desserts did you take?"
"They were nyokco cream-filled pastries and I could conceal one on each side of my tunic if I was careful of the crumbs." I guess he got caught when too many crumbs got away. 
I loved the glimpse into Yoda's initiate days:
"They investigated what had happened and found that Yoda had been using his small size and jumping ability, as well as being exceptionally strong in the Force, to get into quite a few other places in the Temple that he wasn't supposed to be in. Now I have this image in my head of a frog jumping all over the temple!  
Thanks for sharing this story, I've really enjoyed reading it! 
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Alexis_Wingstar
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4/20 10:35am
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Complete - 19-Apr-2008
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This last post was filled with many fun images... my favorite is the possibility of Obi-wan making Qui-gon bounce.
This was the funnest laundry day I've ever had privelege to experience. Thank you.
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azizah
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4/20 9:45pm
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This was a really great story, I know you called it fluff, but it was so much more than that. The scene where Qui-Gon asked Obi-Wan what he had done was great. Poor Obi-Wan! But I also like how Obi-Wan knew there was more to Qui-Gon’s story as well. Qui-Gon may not let his padawan get away with anything, but Obi-Wan turned it right back on him.
It says the end, but you left it wide open for an epilogue. 
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dianethx
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4/21 8:53am
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Very cute. I especially liked the idea of Obi and Qui bouncing on things. Getting into trouble - I guess every youngling does it.
Sweet. Great job.
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earlybird-obi-wan
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Loved the great ending of the story.
Just something for Yoda, Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan to do.
Great to see Jedi having fun.
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ardavenport
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5/29 1:16pm
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Complete - 19-Apr-2008
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Cole_Kenobi: Yoda looks like he could have been a very devious and difficult to catch child, so he could have been quite a handful. Thanks for reading!
Qui-Gina-Jinn: Thank-you! 
Gkilkenny: It's nice to take a break with a little cuteness and mush every now and then. I think we'll see that play will go well. Thanks for the reply!
Jedi-Gon: Thank-you! All Jedi can be cute when young and/or bouncing I think.
Bastet: Thanks and thanks for the reply! I think everyone had a tale to tell about their own misbehavior. Obi-Wan covered with crumbs and little Yoda hopping everywhere would have been very cute.
Alexis_Wingstar: Thanks! And we might get Qui-Gon to bounce yet. 
azizah: Thank-you! I think that if a story involves the characters' pasts before the story started that gives the story more depth since there is more there than the action going on.
And weeeeeeeeelllll, since you mention it, there might be just a bit more......
dianethx: Thanks! I like a bouncy Qui-Gon.
earlybird-obi-wan: Yep, Jedi can have fun, too. Glad you liked the story and thanks for the reply!
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ardavenport
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5/29 1:17pm
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Complete - 19-Apr-2008
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%O% ||| %O% ||| EPILOGUE ||| %O% ||| %O%
Obi-Wan folded his arms before him, tucking his hands into the opposite sleeves of his robe. The young Duro boy, Ntlaah-et, stared up at him for a moment, his featureless red eyes inquisitive. Then the youngling looked back toward the play area. A pair of booted feet stuck up out of the huge bulging cushion there. Obi-Wan had been right in his prediction that Qui-Gon was too big for it.
After sinking down into middle of the cushion, Qui-Gon had mischievously declared that he was stuck. Obi-Wan had immediately offered to help, but his Master had declared his Padawan too big and he would just get stuck, too. However, if the younglings helped by taking a good run and, using the Force, jumped on the cushion, that might be enough to free the trapped Jedi Master out.
The Quermian boy, Taem Goot, had tried first, but his slight body, all arms and legs and neck had landed on Qui-Gon, who had cheerfully admonished the others to mind their aim. Taem did better on his next try though Qui-Gon remained embedded in the cushion.
The Human girl, Yemma Yom had tried next. The impact had pushed Qui-Gon upward, but he sank down again. He told the younglings that they were doing much better.
Obi-Wan looked down at the Duro boy whose thoughts were a wordless confusion. He had at first fearfully stayed back from Qui-Gon during their initial game of hoverball. Qui-Gon had minded Ntlaah-et caution and not come too close, even while the other younglings played freely with the tall Jedi Master.
"It's not play," Ntlaah-et finally declared though he looked uncertain about whether or not he should be unhappy about this.
"No?" Obi-Wan asked.
The boy frowned, his lipless mouth tight. Obi-Wan sensed the confusion of young thoughts that had not matured enough to find the words that would express them.
"He only wants the Force." Ntlaah-et pointed at Qui-Gon's feet that were only shifted and bounced around a little bit when the Twi-lek girl, Mazana, landed next to them and then slid giggling on top of Qui-Gon. "When they jump. It's not play."
"No." Obi-Wan agreed. "It usually is not."
Ntlaah-et's critical stare changed to open surprise. Obi-Wan sensed the dawning realization as the boy looked at the activity at the cushion and then back up at him, that 'play' for a Jedi youngling was much more than it seemed.
The little Bothan girl, Glurf, took her turn. She jumped too far and Qui-Gon caught her furry little body easily. Obi-Wan was quite sure that he spotted some tickling before Glurf joined her clan mates.
Stepping to the spot where the others had started their runs, Ntlaah-et looked intently at the inflated gray mound and the boot soles sticking out of it. Obi-Wan sensed the Force around the boy. He ran and jumped.
Grinning, Qui-Gon popped right up from the cushion. Ntlaah-eh laughed with triumph as they both slid down to the floor and his clan mates cheered.
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Bastet
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5/29 5:18pm
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RE: Laundry Day - Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, Temple business - humor, fluff - Epilogue 29-May-2008
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I was so glad to see an epilogue for this, that was so cute!
A pair of booted feet stuck up out of the huge bulging cushion there. Obi-Wan had been right in his prediction that Qui-Gon was too big for it.
I loved that the little Duro boy was the one to free Qui-Gon, now maybe they can be friends.
Thanks for the great epilogue, ardavenport, I really enjoyed it!
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earlybird-obi-wan
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5/29 8:53pm
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Loved it Qui-Gon in the laundry and rescued.
Great to see that Jedi play.
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ardavenport
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9/9 8:07pm
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Bastet: Thank-you! I hadn't thought I'd put an epilogue on this one, but it didn't seem right without some closure with the kids and with Qui-Gon. So, they all worked out.
earlybird-obi-wan: Thanks!
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