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daeana Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 6/12/04 4:14pm Subject: Fish & Bird - future tense challenge - Date Edited: 6/12/04 4:15pm (1 edits total) Edited By: daeana
	Timeframe: takes place during SbS (beware major NJO spoilers) Notes: I wrote this in like an hour, during a lab meeting (don't tell my advisor ), so it's a little fractured and unpolished. Then I realized that fractured and unpolished lends well to the setting of the story, so I kept it that way. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I see our future. We will fight. And we will survive. And most of all, we will win. We will redefine the Force, and we will redefine the role of the Jedi. And we will do this together. After the war, we will be the core of the order. Everyone will envy how well we work together. They will envy our power. They will wish to learn more about it. We will perfect the Force meld, and the order will be virtually invincible. And we will do this together. Because we will always be together. We will fight together, and we will live together. You will dance at our wedding, barefoot as always, peeking out from underneath your veil. You will teach at the new academy, leading the children in mischief. Your scars will fade. You will discover strengths you never knew you had. Remember, together, we are stronger than the sum of our parts. Pain pulls me back to reality. I am dying. Now I see your future. You will mourn. Because we will be apart. You will feel a pull. A pull to join me, one last time. And you will fight this pull. Because you will realize that you need to live. Riina will emerge, and you will meld with her. Together, you will be stronger than the sum of your parts. You will become a bridge between the Jedi and the Yuuzhan Vong. You will become a leader in your own right. You will help lead a new breed of Jedi. You will become part of my family. You will leave. Because you will feel separated from our world, and because you will feel a pull towards theirs. You will find a new family to join. You will return to the Jedi to share your knowledge. You will build a lightsaber that perfectly reflects your meld. It will be organic, yet technological. You will find your place in the galaxy without me. And you will be content, maybe even happy. The last image I see is your face smiling at me, green eyes sparkling, framed by your luminescent hair. Goodbye, Tahiri. I will wait for that kiss.
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Lady_WinterCelchu Registered: Dec '03	Date Posted: 6/13/04 5:08am Subject: RE: Fish & Bird - future tense challenge
	That was really beautiful. Wow describes it perfectly. Very bittersweet but brilliant all the same. -----signature----- Doesn't expecting the unexpected make the unexpected expected? Commander of Hitwomen_United. Master to Hans_Highness and EmpressJade
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Rowan_Jade Registered: Nov '03	Date Posted: 6/14/04 8:44am Subject: RE: Fish & Bird - future tense challenge
	oooooooooooooooooo! Pretty! I do like the fractured take on this. You're right, not polished is good because it reflects the "my whole life is passing in front of my eyes" feel of this. Very nice! -Ro -----signature----- "If you have legs and are flamable, you are not blocking the fire exit" -Mitch Hedberg I am Evil, I am Old, I am YodaRo! Fear my snarkiness! "You're insane you know." -everyone around me Evil Old Wisdom Giver to the Maniac Mountain Clan
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daeana Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 6/15/04 7:04pm Subject: RE: Fish & Bird - future tense challenge
	Lady_WinterCelchu: thanks. this was my first attempt at writing something more "stylized", so i'm glad it turned out relatively well. Rowan_Jade: I do like the fractured take on this. You're right, not polished is good because it reflects the "my whole life is passing in front of my eyes" feel of this. that's what i decided too. the dying teenager really wouldn't be having polished, eloquent, well-defined thoughts.
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