Author Topic: Noise (L/M vignette)
JediMaster_Jen  1795 posts
Registered: Jun '02
Date Posted: 9/14/04 10:44pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
Brava! You write Luke and Mara perfectly. She's threatening and he's...not. laugh I thoroughly enjoyed this one.

 

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obaona  4725 posts
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Date Posted: 9/14/04 11:02pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
*sighs happily* love

You know I love this. wink It's just such a little cute thing - LP was right (and hugs to you, out there), I do like slices of life type thingies. tongue I'm not sure about it being oba-style shock , but it's good! grin It just makes me smile. happy happy happy happy happy

(in a quiet, dark corner of his mind where Jedi principles had yet to reign supreme)

STILL love that line. grin It's so within Luke's character, adds an extra dimension to 'tortured-soul-Jedi-goody-two-shoes' Luke. tongue Mara is done just as well - you give her a softness (boy is she mad here tongue , and yet we see she doesn't murder Jaina wink ) without ever taking away her fierceness. What a lovely balance.

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Gabri_Jade  5087 posts
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Date Posted: 9/15/04 1:21am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette) - Date Edited: 9/15/04 2:08am (2 edits total) Edited By: Gabri_Jade
*sighs* Hit post by mistake. I'll paste the feedback in properly once I finish it. tongue

EDIT: Here we go. silly

Jieh: This exchange just sums up beautifully the relationship between Luke and Mara. She being crusty and cranky and deadly and him being basically patient and tolerant, but not above poking fun at her just to see her temper explode.

Luke always does like teasing Mara, doesn't he? grin 'A Jedi craves not excitement and danger' - yeah, right. tongue

Great job, Mei! Your muse is so good. When she deigns to work, that is

*grins* She's talented but lazy. *thwacks muse* silly

TahiriSoloFan: Thank you! grin

dreamspirals: You posted on the JC! shock Will wonders never cease? tongue Thanks, sis! grin

Jedikma: I'm glad you enjoyed it. happy

Bri-chan: Just a fun, mundane little snippet of normal, everyday life. Those are some of the best ones.

I always think so too. happy

Although Mara did seem right ticked. Bwahaha, poor Jaina

Maybe the brandy will calm Mara down enough that Jaina will be out of danger. silly

At least Luke had enough sense to more or less stay out of the way. Force knows what troubles he can get himself into by getting on her bad side

*laughs* Yes, Luke's learned a little common sense over the years. Fortunately for him. tongue

Ariapaige: I kind of like that line myself. happy Thank you! grin And I love your sig. *has a sudden urge to go watch Joseph and the Amazing Technicolor Dreamcoat again*

TheCrazyRodian: Gabri, coming to the boards to find a new vignette from you is kind of like going to check my mail and finding a package of cookies--first I frown in surprise, then I smile, then I make a gleeful sound, and then I enjoy the sweet contents.

Wow. That's very flattering. blush Thanks so much! grin

StarFighter5: Kids, they get into everything, don't they?

Do they ever. *eyes niece and nephew warily*

Michele: Loved this paragraph! LOL!

That does seem to be a favorite line. happy

A great viggie all around, dear. You really need to do more of these.

Thanks. blush I'm trying to bribe my muse into productivity, really I am. She's a stubborn thing. silly

TKL: Hi! I'm so happy to see that you've bounced back from Frances. hugs

You do write Dorkwalker and Mara so well.

*grins* Do you remember Jessica Rabbit's line? "I'm not bad; I'm just drawn that way." Luke's not a dork, he's just been written that way. tongue And thank you. grin

It's amazing how words can capture a character's state of mind so powerfully. I can just see Luke rubbing his itchy palms on his thighs while a myriad of possible fixes fired through his brain.

Exactly! I think that Luke is even more his father's son in the piloting and mechanical ability department than Jedi-wise, myself. It would drive him crazy to be right next to this malfunctioning engine and not be able to play with it himself.

Oh how can I not comment on the fact my girl Jaina was the instigator of Mara's bountiful headache!

Of course! For all her good qualities, Jaina must have been more than a handful as a child. tongue Glad you liked it! grin

Vongchild: Thank you! And yes, of course you must read more L/M. happy

RebelMom: Thank you. blush I'll do my best to write more often. happy

Jedi Trace: Thanks! grin That line is definitely a favorite. tongue

Lonewolf89: That is so Mara. Good characterization of both her and Luke.

Thanks! Good characterization is one of the best compliments a writer can get. happy

I also really liked the way you wrote the story: descriptive, so that I could almost hear the noise myself.

*grins* Well, I had a head start on describing that, because I did hear it myself. The whole vignette was inspired by some horribly noisy repairs being done at work last week. tongue It annoyed me greatly - then I remembered oba telling me sternly that story ideas were everywhere if I'd just look for them, so I decided okay, I'd write a story about the noise. silly Glad you liked it. happy

Jaded Girl: I LOVED this exchange!

I loved writing that exchange, too. Some things are just so undeniably Luke and Mara that they're easy to write. tongue And thank you so much! blush

JediMaster Jen: She's threatening and he's...not.

LOL! Yes, that's Luke and Mara in a nutshell. tongue Thank you! grin

oba: I'm not sure about it being oba-style

It feels oba-style to me, it really does. happy

It just makes me smile.

blush

STILL love that line. It's so within Luke's character, adds an extra dimension to 'tortured-soul-Jedi-goody-two-shoes' Luke.

LOL! Poor, poor Luke. He is so often written that way, isn't he? I much prefer fighter pilot/military commander Luke of ESB, or 'am I in over my head, and what in the galaxy do I do about it if I am?' Luke of TTT.

Mara is done just as well - you give her a softness (boy is she mad here, and yet we see she doesn't murder Jaina) without ever taking away her fierceness. What a lovely balance.

Thank you! blush Mara is definitely all about balance; she's much more three-dimensional than she's often written in the profic. I'm glad you think I got it right. happy



Thank you so much, everyone! All your lovely feedback really made my day. hugs

 

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Darth_Lex  3881 posts
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Date Posted: 9/16/04 10:42am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
Great viggie! grin grin

As others have said the characterization is superb from start to finish. Both Luke and Mara are exactly as they should be.

Hee hee! I liked Luke's musing on the fact that Jaina's tinkering would lead to threat of death from him or Han too. tongue

Mara glared evilly at him, and Luke took a moment to admire her skill in that area (long years of practice as Emperor's Hand, he supposed)
laugh laugh laugh Loved this! And very wise of him not to share that thought with her. wink

And the ending is great - sometimes there's nothing like a good smash to make technology work better. cool

 

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red_rose_knight  3413 posts
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Date Posted: 9/16/04 12:02pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
LOL! laugh That was a wonderful story. I loved Luke and Mara's interactions, especially as they got more frustrated with the noise.

 

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Gabri_Jade  5087 posts
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Date Posted: 9/18/04 3:05am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
Lex: Thanks! grin I'm so glad you think the characterization is accurate. grin

Hee hee! I liked Luke's musing on the fact that Jaina's tinkering would lead to threat of death from him or Han too.

LOL! Why am I not surprised that you'd like that part? tongue

Loved this! And very wise of him not to share that thought with her.

Luke has learned some wisdom over the years, yes. wink

And the ending is great - sometimes there's nothing like a good smash to make technology work better.

I couldn't agree more. Technology and I have a troubled relationship. It often comes to blows. tongue I'm pleased that you liked the vignette. grin

red_rose_knight: Thank you! grin Luke and Mara are always fun to write; they play off each other so beautifully. happy I'm glad that you felt the interaction worked well. happy

 

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JediArwen  703 posts
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Date Posted: 9/19/04 12:48am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
Hi, Gabri! happy
I almost missed this...

A wonderfull vignete! Love it! love You are so good in describing L/M!

As many others my favourite phrase is
Besides, Luke had to admit (in a quiet, dark corner of his mind where Jedi principles had yet to reign supreme) that had Jaina played mechanic on Luke's own beloved X-wing, he'd likely feel the same as Mara did now.

I am sure Jaina had and will have a lot of life threats...

Anyway, this delicious little story deserves a huge plate with baklavas, especially reading it after all your evil twin's angst... wink

And don't you dare to give any to her under the table... angry I am looking... devil

[wispering] Ok, give her a little piece, she deserves it for H/L's "night before the morning after"... mischief I'll pretend I am not looking... whistling
But if you let her now that I have said so... frustrated

 

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LadyPadme  5235 posts
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Date Posted: 9/19/04 7:15am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)


...sneaks baklava off sister's plate...







...and scampers.... tongue

 

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Gabri_Jade  5087 posts
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Date Posted: 9/20/04 11:14am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
JediArwen: You're here! hugs I'm so glad you liked the story. grin

I am sure Jaina had and will have a lot of life threats...

I can't imagine that she wouldn't. tongue

Anyway, this delicious little story deserves a huge plate with baklavas, especially reading it after all your evil twin's angst...

Baklava! shock drooling grin Yes, we like to take turns with the angst. That way at least one of us is likely to get the baklava. tongue

[wispering] Ok, give her a little piece, she deserves it for H/L's "night before the morning after"... I'll pretend I am not looking...
But if you let her now that I have said so...


raised_brow grin shhh

Jieh: Away from those baklava, you! You're too angsty for baklava! *furtively hands LP one baklava while doing shifty eyes* wink shhh

 

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Knight_Aragorn  1431 posts
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Date Posted: 9/20/04 5:00pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
Great fic! I loved the way you had Luke and Mara interacting. I think Luke was very wise in being wary of Mara's temper... He clearly values his life! wink

 

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maramijade  4445 posts
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Date Posted: 9/20/04 6:21pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
hehehe, I think I would have wanted to kill Jaina too, that is if she touched my computer wink . . . but then I'm not having that great of luck with it at the moment. . . I'm at that stage in my Techie developement where I know just enough to be a danger. . .

 

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Gabri_Jade  5087 posts
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Date Posted: 10/3/04 1:55am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
Knight_Aragorn: Thank you! grin Yes, Luke knows to be careful around Mara. tongue

maramijade: I don't even know that much. tongue But yes, I'd want to kill Jaina too. She just has that effect on people sometimes. tongue

 

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jedi-lelila  694 posts
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Date Posted: 10/4/04 9:29am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
Usually, I'm not a L/M fan, but I liked this little viggie a lot.

Especially this part: "What did you -" Luke began, then stopped himself and started again, quietly this time. "What did you do?"

Mara gave him a smile of grim satisfaction, and held up the hydrospanner, which now sported a dent in its side. "Sometimes the old-fashioned way really does work best."

Luke gave a startled laugh. "You hit it? You hit the Fire? And you were afraid of me touching it?"

Mara grinned at him, and it was the closest to sheepish he'd ever seen her. "Shut up, Luke."
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Gabri_Jade  5087 posts
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Date Posted: 10/7/04 11:15pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
jedi-lelila: Thank you! grin It's high praise when a non-L/M fan enjoys one of my stories. grin I'm glad you liked it. happy

 

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EmilieDarklighter  4707 posts
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Date Posted: 10/23/04 8:35am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
Jieh! How I have missed thee! Wonderful vignette darling, and more on your greatness later...

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