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JediMaster_Jen Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 9/14/04 10:44pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	Brava! You write Luke and Mara perfectly. She's threatening and he's...not. I thoroughly enjoyed this one. -----signature----- "Qui tacet consentit"~~ (silence implies consent) NY Yankees!! 2009 World Champs!!!
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 9/14/04 11:02pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	sighs happily You know I love this. It's just such a little cute thing - LP was right (and to you, out there), I do like slices of life type thingies. I'm not sure about it being oba-style , but it's good! It just makes me smile. (in a quiet, dark corner of his mind where Jedi principles had yet to reign supreme) STILL love that line. It's so within Luke's character, adds an extra dimension to 'tortured-soul-Jedi-goody-two-shoes' Luke. Mara is done just as well - you give her a softness (boy is she mad here , and yet we see she doesn't murder Jaina ) without ever taking away her fierceness. What a lovely balance. -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 9/15/04 1:21am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette) - Date Edited: 9/15/04 2:08am (2 edits total) Edited By: Gabri_Jade
	sighs Hit post by mistake. I'll paste the feedback in properly once I finish it. EDIT: Here we go. Jieh: This exchange just sums up beautifully the relationship between Luke and Mara. She being crusty and cranky and deadly and him being basically patient and tolerant, but not above poking fun at her just to see her temper explode. Luke always does like teasing Mara, doesn't he? 'A Jedi craves not excitement and danger' - yeah, right. Great job, Mei! Your muse is so good. When she deigns to work, that is grins She's talented but lazy. thwacks muse TahiriSoloFan: Thank you! dreamspirals: You posted on the JC! Will wonders never cease? Thanks, sis! Jedikma: I'm glad you enjoyed it. Bri-chan: Just a fun, mundane little snippet of normal, everyday life. Those are some of the best ones. I always think so too. Although Mara did seem right ticked. Bwahaha, poor Jaina Maybe the brandy will calm Mara down enough that Jaina will be out of danger. At least Luke had enough sense to more or less stay out of the way. Force knows what troubles he can get himself into by getting on her bad side laughs Yes, Luke's learned a little common sense over the years. Fortunately for him. Ariapaige: I kind of like that line myself. Thank you! And I love your sig. has a sudden urge to go watch Joseph and the Amazing Technicolor Dreamcoat again TheCrazyRodian: Gabri, coming to the boards to find a new vignette from you is kind of like going to check my mail and finding a package of cookies--first I frown in surprise, then I smile, then I make a gleeful sound, and then I enjoy the sweet contents. Wow. That's very flattering. Thanks so much! StarFighter5: Kids, they get into everything, don't they? Do they ever. eyes niece and nephew warily Michele: Loved this paragraph! LOL! That does seem to be a favorite line. A great viggie all around, dear. You really need to do more of these. Thanks. I'm trying to bribe my muse into productivity, really I am. She's a stubborn thing. TKL: Hi! I'm so happy to see that you've bounced back from Frances. You do write Dorkwalker and Mara so well. grins Do you remember Jessica Rabbit's line? "I'm not bad; I'm just drawn that way." Luke's not a dork, he's just been written that way. And thank you. It's amazing how words can capture a character's state of mind so powerfully. I can just see Luke rubbing his itchy palms on his thighs while a myriad of possible fixes fired through his brain. Exactly! I think that Luke is even more his father's son in the piloting and mechanical ability department than Jedi-wise, myself. It would drive him crazy to be right next to this malfunctioning engine and not be able to play with it himself. Oh how can I not comment on the fact my girl Jaina was the instigator of Mara's bountiful headache! Of course! For all her good qualities, Jaina must have been more than a handful as a child. Glad you liked it! Vongchild: Thank you! And yes, of course you must read more L/M. RebelMom: Thank you. I'll do my best to write more often. Jedi Trace: Thanks! That line is definitely a favorite. Lonewolf89: That is so Mara. Good characterization of both her and Luke. Thanks! Good characterization is one of the best compliments a writer can get. I also really liked the way you wrote the story: descriptive, so that I could almost hear the noise myself. grins Well, I had a head start on describing that, because I did hear it myself. The whole vignette was inspired by some horribly noisy repairs being done at work last week. It annoyed me greatly - then I remembered oba telling me sternly that story ideas were everywhere if I'd just look for them, so I decided okay, I'd write a story about the noise. Glad you liked it. Jaded Girl: I LOVED this exchange! I loved writing that exchange, too. Some things are just so undeniably Luke and Mara that they're easy to write. And thank you so much! JediMaster Jen: She's threatening and he's...not. LOL! Yes, that's Luke and Mara in a nutshell. Thank you! oba: I'm not sure about it being oba-style It feels oba-style to me, it really does. It just makes me smile. STILL love that line. It's so within Luke's character, adds an extra dimension to 'tortured-soul-Jedi-goody-two-shoes' Luke. LOL! Poor, poor Luke. He is so often written that way, isn't he? I much prefer fighter pilot/military commander Luke of ESB, or 'am I in over my head, and what in the galaxy do I do about it if I am?' Luke of TTT. Mara is done just as well - you give her a softness (boy is she mad here, and yet we see she doesn't murder Jaina) without ever taking away her fierceness. What a lovely balance. Thank you! Mara is definitely all about balance; she's much more three-dimensional than she's often written in the profic. I'm glad you think I got it right. Thank you so much, everyone! All your lovely feedback really made my day. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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Darth_Lex Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 9/16/04 10:42am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	Great viggie! As others have said the characterization is superb from start to finish. Both Luke and Mara are exactly as they should be. Hee hee! I liked Luke's musing on the fact that Jaina's tinkering would lead to threat of death from him or Han too. Mara glared evilly at him, and Luke took a moment to admire her skill in that area (long years of practice as Emperor's Hand, he supposed) Loved this! And very wise of him not to share that thought with her. And the ending is great - sometimes there's nothing like a good smash to make technology work better. -----signature----- Return to Bolis Island (J/J wedding, post-LOTF) http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29571370/p1/ ----- Christie Golden FTW!
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red_rose_knight Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 9/16/04 12:02pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	LOL! That was a wonderful story. I loved Luke and Mara's interactions, especially as they got more frustrated with the noise. -----signature----- The beautiful part of writing is that you don't have to get it right the first time, unlike, say, a brain surgeon. – Robert Cromier
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 9/18/04 3:05am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	Lex: Thanks! I'm so glad you think the characterization is accurate. Hee hee! I liked Luke's musing on the fact that Jaina's tinkering would lead to threat of death from him or Han too. LOL! Why am I not surprised that you'd like that part? Loved this! And very wise of him not to share that thought with her. Luke has learned some wisdom over the years, yes. And the ending is great - sometimes there's nothing like a good smash to make technology work better. I couldn't agree more. Technology and I have a troubled relationship. It often comes to blows. I'm pleased that you liked the vignette. red_rose_knight: Thank you! Luke and Mara are always fun to write; they play off each other so beautifully. I'm glad that you felt the interaction worked well. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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JediArwen Registered: Dec '02	Date Posted: 9/19/04 12:48am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	Hi, Gabri! I almost missed this... A wonderfull vignete! Love it! You are so good in describing L/M! As many others my favourite phrase is Besides, Luke had to admit (in a quiet, dark corner of his mind where Jedi principles had yet to reign supreme) that had Jaina played mechanic on Luke's own beloved X-wing, he'd likely feel the same as Mara did now. I am sure Jaina had and will have a lot of life threats... Anyway, this delicious little story deserves a huge plate with baklavas, especially reading it after all your evil twin's angst... And don't you dare to give any to her under the table... I am looking... [wispering] Ok, give her a little piece, she deserves it for H/L's "night before the morning after"... I'll pretend I am not looking... But if you let her now that I have said so...
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LadyPadme Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Sep '02	Date Posted: 9/19/04 7:15am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	...sneaks baklava off sister's plate... ...and scampers.... -----signature----- Evil Twin of Gabri_Jade When a baby smiles the world is happy
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 9/20/04 11:14am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	JediArwen: You're here! I'm so glad you liked the story. I am sure Jaina had and will have a lot of life threats... I can't imagine that she wouldn't. Anyway, this delicious little story deserves a huge plate with baklavas, especially reading it after all your evil twin's angst... Baklava! Yes, we like to take turns with the angst. That way at least one of us is likely to get the baklava. [wispering] Ok, give her a little piece, she deserves it for H/L's "night before the morning after"... I'll pretend I am not looking... But if you let her now that I have said so... Jieh: Away from those baklava, you! You're too angsty for baklava! furtively hands LP one baklava while doing shifty eyes -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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Knight_Aragorn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 9/20/04 5:00pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	Great fic! I loved the way you had Luke and Mara interacting. I think Luke was very wise in being wary of Mara's temper... He clearly values his life!
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maramijade Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 9/20/04 6:21pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	hehehe, I think I would have wanted to kill Jaina too, that is if she touched my computer . . . but then I'm not having that great of luck with it at the moment. . . I'm at that stage in my Techie developement where I know just enough to be a danger. . . -----signature----- If computer Geeks were wizards. . . . . . I'd be a second year at Hogwarts, born to muggles
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 10/3/04 1:55am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	Knight_Aragorn: Thank you! Yes, Luke knows to be careful around Mara. maramijade: I don't even know that much. But yes, I'd want to kill Jaina too. She just has that effect on people sometimes. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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jedi-lelila Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 10/4/04 9:29am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	Usually, I'm not a L/M fan, but I liked this little viggie a lot. Especially this part: "What did you -" Luke began, then stopped himself and started again, quietly this time. "What did you do?" Mara gave him a smile of grim satisfaction, and held up the hydrospanner, which now sported a dent in its side. "Sometimes the old-fashioned way really does work best." Luke gave a startled laugh. "You hit it? You hit the Fire? And you were afraid of me touching it?" Mara grinned at him, and it was the closest to sheepish he'd ever seen her. "Shut up, Luke." - ~Lelila -----signature----- Ghosts From the Past http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=12695606&replies=0 In love with the most wonderful man in the Galaxy :x I love you darling
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 10/7/04 11:15pm Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	jedi-lelila: Thank you! It's high praise when a non-L/M fan enjoys one of my stories. I'm glad you liked it. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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EmilieDarklighter Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 10/23/04 8:35am Subject: RE: Noise (L/M vignette)
	Jieh! How I have missed thee! Wonderful vignette darling, and more on your greatness later... Emmi -----signature----- Master of Jedi_Emeritus Former Padawan of Gabri_Jade Little sister to Gabri_Jade and LadyPadme 25 Rules for Successful Writing http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/28400222/p1/?2
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