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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/22/04 11:08pm Subject: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Thanks for clicking. Title: Ethereal Summary: On a rainy day . . . A/N: Partially inspired by a thread in the CT forum - see here and a comment made in it. Um - not really sure what to say otherwise. Please note - some mature themes. Feedback is always appreciated. I really wasn't sure why I was there. I'm not the type – never have been – to stand out in the rain, to see some famous person passing by, to have something to tell my grandchildren, should I ever have any. I've never understood the appeal; what is the difference between looking at someone you don't know personally in person, or via a hologram? With neither will they know you. But there I was, on my day off, having passed by the area and not gone any further. It was a big deal, I can tell you that much – I knew why there weren't a whole lot of people here, and that was because there had been so little advance warning that he would be coming. Luke Skywalker. Enough said with that name, right there. I stood right at the edge of blockade meant to keep the crowd in control, probably the best position to have. It's always warm here, so despite the rain, I wasn't very cold. I wondered what he would be like. I wondered if he would be different in person, then the solemn man I saw in the news. He stepped out of his ship, and looked around at the crowd, smiling slightly, the expression distant and polite. Almost unreal, ethereal. Not so much after all, I thought, disappointed, and then he met my eyes. There's something I've gone through that I had never told anyone before. When I was a child, an older child really, I used to think about death a lot. About killing myself, to put it offensively. I went through it. I took a good look at my life one day, and decided – not now. When I've done the things I wanted to do, I thought, then I would let myself. Learned another language, been to space, seen all the wondrous things the universe has to offer. Hasn't been all it's cracked up to be, those things, but I've found other things since. I made myself stop thinking about death, about killing myself. I thought about a certain holodrama instead, whenever I let myself dwell on the subject again. Until finally . . . I no longer wanted to. Still, there's something inside that changes, when that happens. Some little sad, reflective spot on my soul, which I can't rid myself of, and truly, I don't think I want to. Something to mark that experience in me, and I don't really mind that, anymore. I see that in the eyes of others, people that I know have gone through horrible things, but picked themselves up and decided to make the best of it, despite not knowing why, not ever understanding why them. But they accept it; I accept it. It's made me who I am; I even think it's even made me a better person, more compassionate, more understanding. Given me a depth, perhaps. Sometimes I see that look in other people's eyes, and I wonder – what was it for them? I don't ask, I don't know what I would do if I were ever asked, but I understand, and when I look at them – I try to show that in my eyes, too. Luke Skywalker had eyes like that. He had that look that I know I get, where there's some mark inside of you that has changed you, and no one really understands what that is, because you've never told, because they are not you, and you are. Something distant but ethereal, and I think to myself: I wonder if it's true, that pain makes us beautiful. Do the scars of this world become treasures in the next? He slowed when he came to me, and that look still in his eyes, he smiled at me. He whispered his words, meant for me, even if those crushed beside me heard them as well: "There will be someone who will see and understand," he said to me, "one day." I just nodded, those beside me quiet, confused. I wasn't looking at Luke Skywalker at that moment, but just a man who carries his scars inside, same as I do. His wife slipped her hand into his, whispered something in his ear, and his face lit up, and I suddenly saw – he'd found his, that person who would see and understand. She smiles at me, not sure who I am or why he was speaking to me, but choosing to be polite for his sake. They continue walking away, and for the life of me, I can't see those scars in his eyes anymore; just light and happiness. Someday, I thought, certain of that. Maybe not today. But in the meantime, I'll wait, and make the best of what I've learned. [finis] -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 12/23/04 1:23am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Lovely, dear. Although it's not a particularly long vignette, it contains so much: A look at GFFA life that we don't usually see much of (Luke's celebrity status), a bit of angst, philosophy, hope, and even a nice L/M moment. Wonderful job. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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RedGold Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 12/23/04 3:03am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	You know, I always figured Luke would get the "celeberity treatment". I'm just guessing that the paparazzi wouldn't dare try to come after him though. Be kinda stupid, especially with an ex-assassin as a wife. Wonderful little incite there about just how human Luke is, just like everyone else out there when you come down to it. Aweful nice of him to do that for the POV character. Now I'm curious as to this thread you mentioned. Maybe I'll go take a peak. -----signature----- Legend... Recluse... Forgotten... Will one day return... http://www.starwarsfanfic.com
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WhosScruffyLooking Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 12/23/04 8:46am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	That was incredible! Really, really loved it.
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StarFighter5 Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 12/23/04 11:02am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	This was really sweet. -----signature----- "I hope I slept with you to get the job. if not, then who the hell was that guy?" - Carrie Fisher "Now that I'm a pez and a lego, I shall want for nothing else." -Jeremy Bulloch "Thank you for going to the movies. Especially mine." - George Lucas
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Jedi_BMK Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 12/23/04 11:13am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Excellent work. You did a great job with relating Luke to the character. -----signature----- Destiny of the Skywalkers II: Splintered Paths OT AU (L/M H/L A/P) http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28042042/
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Jaina_and_Jag Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 12/23/04 11:27am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Very nice oba! You really handle the depth and importance of the themes nicely. nods And plus you added that little ending that made it the perfect viggie; that little L/M part that truly made us understand why Luke still went on. Great job!
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MasterSareBabe Registered: Dec '04	Date Posted: 12/23/04 11:43am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	I like it too...It reminds me of Luke's fame. Nice!
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ThePariah Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 12/23/04 12:39pm Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	I wonder if it's true, that pain makes us beautiful. Do the scars of this world become treasures in the next? Such an exquisite statement. I've always believed in this through my life, but only you could put it so eloquently. -----signature----- Eternal Groveler to rhonderoo, VaderLVR64, Knight_Aragorn, Oba, & the SJRS crew Has a postcard from the Dark Side. "I suspect that most if not all the world's ills could be cured by humour transplants."--Karen Traviss TEMPORARY SET-UP!!!
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/23/04 6:33pm Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Gabri: Thank you. Aye, it's very short, shorter than I realized until I posted it. But yeah. I kind of went on a bit of a tangent (I will admit), but I think I connected it at the end. RedGold: LOL, and I'm sure Luke is very skilled at evasive maneuvers. And yeah, Luke is very human. I also wanted to kind of express some of the difficulties he's gone through, and how that changed him (as it did the POV character). Thanks for reading. WhosScruffyLooking: Thank you. StarFighter5: Thank you. Though I think it's kind of sad. Jedi_BMK: Thanks. It was different, exploring Luke through someone else. Jaina_and_Jag: Thank you. A lot of that part came very easily, I don't know why. I'm glad you liked the L/M part - I realized at the end that I hadn't even mentioned Mara yet, but then, she wasn't a celebrity like Luke. But I wanted to include her, and it ended up working perfectly. MasterSareBabe: Thank you. I bet Luke did not care for his fame, though. ThePariah: So have I. It's amazing how sometimes the words just come out so easily, expressing exactly what you want to say. Thanks for reading. -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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Jedikma Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 12/24/04 7:28am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	What an interesting and haunting little viggie. Sad and yet, the fact that Luke acknowledged the stranger, in a way reminds us how the littlest thing we do can effect someone else and we may not even know it. Nicely done. -----signature----- Twice in a Lifetime 7/31 http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/16813029 A Quiet Afternoon http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/23305946 follow up vig to: A New Order http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/17525231
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Leia Registered: Aug '98	Date Posted: 12/24/04 9:40am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Lovely, obaona. I especially liked the part where the OC describes the journey back from his depression. He didn't have a sudden epiphany: "Oh, my gosh, of course I don't want to die!" Rather, it was gradual. Very realistic. Some little sad, reflective spot on my soul, which I can't rid myself of, and truly, I don't think I want to. ... I accept it. It's made me who I am... I think this is also very true to reality. Just because he has moved past his desire for death doesn't mean he should lock up that part of himself. It's a reminder of how far he has come. It has made him who he is today, just as Luke's trials (fighting the Emperor, turning his father, falling to the Dark Side, yada yada yada) have shaped him. [/rambling] Also, loved the L/M, of course! -----signature----- Those who don't believe in magic will never find it. (Roald Dahl)
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/26/04 7:34pm Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Jedikma: Thank you. Aye, it does, at that. Sometimes I think we can't really ever know how the littlest things can effect other people so deeply. Leia: Thank you. Interesting that you think the OC is male. No, it wouldn't be sudden. You can't undo that kind of thinking overnight. But no, the OC shouldn't and doesn't ignore or push away that that happened, and that it changed him/her. Denying it does no good, and accepting it can, I think. I'm glad you liked the little L/M part, too. Thank you. -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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LianaMara Registered: Oct '00	Date Posted: 12/30/04 6:02pm Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Ooo, oba! This was quite a meaty little piece. I'd never really thought much about how Luke's famous status could influence people, so you gave me some stuff to chew on. You portrayed the OC very well, I think. I have a friend who struggled with depression and suicide, and it's certainly not something that you can immediately snap out of. And I like how the OC recognized that pain and sorrow in Luke's eyes - très neat. And I like how you had Luke acknowledge the OC in the end - I like to think that even though he doesn't know what the OC has been through, that he was still caring enough to just briefly acknowledge someone in a crowd. huggles -----signature----- "For us, there is only the trying. The rest is not our business." --T.S. Eliot Leilaé, handmaiden of the Crest \|\| petit Jedi enfant of obaona \|\| Lani & Lali's blonde triplet
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Jedi-2B Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 12/30/04 6:36pm Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	Beautiful viggie, oba. You always do a wonderful job of getting inside a person's head and making us care about people, even strangers. -----signature----- It was on her fifteenth day in the darkness of the Nirauan cave when Mara Jade awoke to discover a rescuer had finally arrived. It was not, however, any of the potential rescuers she would have expected. It was Luke. ~~And the rest is history~~
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 1/2/05 4:43am Subject: RE: Ethereal (L/M, OC vignette)
	LianaMara: Thanks. I like giving stuff to people to chew on. Like chewtoys. The interaction between the OC and Luke was very important to me. I wanted the reader to understand both, and see that at their core, they share something in common - having aged, gotten through things, and learned from their experiences. They say the eyes are the window to the soul, and while that's very cliche now, in a sense it is true. If you watch people (and we so rarely do these days) you see things in their eyes. In the end, to me, this vignette is about struggling on, and finding it worth it. huggles Jedi-2B: Thank you. I don't really know what to say otherwise - just thanks. -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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