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lurker2209 Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 5/19/05 2:53pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara, major angst. -- COMPLETED!
	I'm taking Music and Art History over the summer and we just learned that Vespasian was the roman emperor who had the Coliseum built. There are some interesting parallels, intentional perhaps? Emperor Vespasian -----signature----- "When I face the desolate impossibility of writing five hundred pages a sick sense of failure falls on me and I know I can never do it. This happens every time. Then gradually I write one page and then another." ~ John Steinbeck, Travels with Charley
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 5/21/05 12:44am Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara, major angst. -- COMPLETED!
	It had reminded him of another Rebel – suspected Rebel, to tell truth – whom he’d had in his cells years before. An old man, practically decrepit, hardly worth the effort. He’d had a similar steadfastness to Organa, but the expression in his eyes as he’d looked at Luke was – inexplicably; eventually infuriatingly – that of pity rather than contempt. Obi-Wan! The Force roiled. If ever there was an example of the incredible power just a few words can have, this is it. Excellent choice of words. “But you hid it,” she whispered. “As you do some many things. You smother yourself, with such…” Her voice faltered for a moment. “With such brutality.” I love Mara's insight here. That's absolutely the perfect way to put it. She bore her pain and always had, in her silent way. He – he was crippled by his. Corrupted. How he envied her that. How he admired and hated and loved her for it. Do you know how hard it is to keep trying to find different ways of saying, "Perfection"? “This isn’t over,” she said, her voice low. It was both a threat, and a plea. He brushed the tears away gently, and swore, “Not ever.” Curling herself to the side of the galaxy’s most hated man, Mara Jade wept. “He’s beyond us now.” Leia paused a moment, then said, “That was always her intention.” It's a mark of high quality writing, that with all Luke's horrendous acts and crimes, I still feel for him (and Mara) enough that my first reaction to Leia's words was "Good for Mara." Leia returned to Vespasian’s bedchamber later, much later, as the long, long night succumbed to dawn. Jade was gone. What bothers me more than almost anything else in the whole dark story is the thought of Mara loving Luke as she did, yet having to continue life alone, knowing the pain of his life, knowing that she had been the one to kill him. No matter how it freed him, she still had to live with the memory of killing him. And now where is she? All by herself, undoubtedly missing him, never being able to mention him or her past life to anyone, having to bear that level of pain completely alone. After a long time, she reached and brushed aside a strand of tow-blonde hair falling over his forehead. “Wretched creature,” she whispered. “I’m glad she gave you release.” And, finding her own peace, she rose and walked from the room, not looking back. I'm glad that Luke was given release too, and that Leia found peace, but Mara's fate is haunting me. Overall - I don't think I have any words that can do this story justice. It's one of those rare, marvelous, treasured finds that's practically perfect to the word. The story is impressive and insightful, the phrasing is always elegant and evocative, and the characterization is wonderfully accurate. It's a terrific achievement, and I'm so glad to have been able to go along for the ride. I can't wait for the sequel (though I hope to maybe find out what eventually happened to Mara ) - or pretty much anything else you choose to write, really. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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GirlJedi Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 5/21/05 2:54pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara, major angst. -- COMPLETED!
	What was good about this story were the interactions between Leia and Mara. And how mara was somewhat ambiguous about her loyalties, though she was devoted to Luke, in a way, in a deep way. I had some sympathy for Luke til he started torturing Leia, then it was time for the gloves to come off, so to speak ). Interesting that many readers / writers / fans seem to like this dichotomy of both Leia and Mara having this courtly, royal, high society side along with being tough fighters / warrior women. It's almost like Leia is willing to give that up easily to be with Han. The ending was suspenseful, though I had a bit of idea about tragic scenarios. Hope to keep reading many more of your fics, Knightly! Thank you -----signature----- Chancellor Palpatine, Sith Lords are our speciality. -Obi Wan Kenobi
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maramijade Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 5/23/05 11:34am Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara, major angst. -- COMPLETED!
	just must say. . Wow. . . -----signature----- If computer Geeks were wizards. . . . . . I'd be a second year at Hogwarts, born to muggles
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Knight_Aragorn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 5/23/05 6:01pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara, major angst. -- COMPLETED!
	Lurker: Thank you! You were right, it wasn't everyone that died -- just Luke. The sequel will be going backwards in time to begin with. But I think Leia would have some definite issues with Mara, were they to meet again. Thanks for posting that link about the Roman Vespasian, as well. I hadn't really looked into him that deeply, so some of that info was surprising to me as well. There's some interesting stuff there... Jedi_Anais: Yes, reconciliation, but no picket fences... Thank you for reading it! AvenKiel: It was a pretty intense ride, wasn't it... Thanks! RebelPrincess: 'Happily ever after' definitely doesn't cover this story. Glad you liked the ending, and thank you very much for reading! RedGold: Mara did love Luke, and he loved her, in his twisted way... Thanks for the feedback! Jedi-2B: Good to know I managed to thoroughly depress everyone. The sequel isn't nearly as dark and depressing as this one is... though I think it'll have its moments. Thank you for reading. AG88: Thank you! GirlJedi: blushes Thank you for the lovely feedback. I enjoyed writing the Mara/Leia interactions, so I'm glad you liked them. The two women are very alike, and yet the circumstances of their lives have led to them being on opposite sides. It's interesting to look at the similarities between the two of them. And you're right about Mara being highly ambiguous in her loyalties -- her devotion to Luke seems to be constantly at odds with her extreme discomfort with his actions. Thank you very much for reading! StarFighter5: So you saw Luke's death coming? I tried to drop a lot of hints through the story, so it didn't come as a complete shock... Because really, it's not a surprise to either him or to Mara. They've both known that this was coming for a long time. Thank you for the feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed the story so much. FelsGoddess: Thank you. JadeLotus: You got it exactly! Luke barely touches the Force, and doesn’t carry his lightsaber with him. Something about that is very strange… Sith aren’t exactly known for their reticence. It’s been great to have you reading. Thanks for the feedback! Gabri: No, not Obi-Wan!! No, no, no… I wouldn’t kill Obi-Wan like that. That was just a completely random OC. The possible confusion didn’t even occur to me. And it’s really, really interesting that you brought out about how Mara’s going to be alone now. Things may not be entirely as they seem…. Thank you for the wonderful feedback! I’m glad you enjoyed the story. maramijade: Thank you!
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Knight_Aragorn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 5/23/05 6:13pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara, major angst. -- COMPLETED!
	DRL is pretty hectic at the moment, so it might be a couple of weeks before I start to post the sequel... Here's a bit of a teaser to give you an idea of what's in store. It begins a little while after Mara leaves Luke in Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore... Tatooine. The young woman steps into the dark night, pulling a dirty cloak around her shoulders, tight over the bulge of her stomach. Her hair whips in violent winds as she clings to the edge of the building that houses the rundown spaceport she has just left. The darkness swirls around like a living thing, impenetrable, angry. After a moment, she gathers the frayed bag by her feet and walks further, the rough sandstone wall scraping her shoulder. She doesn’t stray from the lee of the building, unwilling to test the power of the harsh winds. After a dozen steps, she lets out a small cry and drops the bag. She leans forward, hands pressed to her swollen belly. Her eyes turn inward. She breathes carefully, fingers massaging her taut stomach through the rough tunic, her lips moving wordlessly. A few minutes pass. She closes her eyes, then awkwardly crouches to lift the bag again. She only makes it a step before the pain comes again, sharper this time. She whimpers for the first time in her life, and sinks again the wall. “Luke,” she whispers, the sound raw, torn from her lips by terror. Tears streak down her face, cutting through layers of fine dust. She leans her head back and snarls, “Luke!” The night wind whirls around her, lifting her hair around her face in streaming fingers of red-gold. She lifts her head. Her lips curl, baring her teeth to the shadow, her eyes blazing defiance and pain. Alone and in darkness, Mara Jade gave birth. .... so who's interested?
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Mirax_Corran Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 5/23/05 6:17pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23
	OMG! I'm interested! I'm interested! Me! Me! Me! Can't wait for the fic. Wait, back up. Gave birth? Luke - Vesparian - has a KID?!? Okay, that's out of my system. Really can't wait for the fic. ~Myra -----signature----- "Pretty. What do we blow up first?" * * * * The Wise Words of Myn Donos * * * * Fics in my profile
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AvenKiel Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 5/23/05 6:18pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23
	Ooh Oh Oh, ME!! raises hand -----signature----- I'm a naughty little Kitty... Meow! Grilled Cheese..... mmmmmmmmm..... http://www.livejournal.com/~jediliz/ I don't know what I'd do if I couldn't dance , sing and hop around all day, I'd probably die. Death from fidgeting!
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 5/23/05 6:21pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23
	dies And you want us to wait now? :O Okay, I'll try to be patient. bangs head on keyboard But I'm glad it was an OC and not Obi-Wan. hugs Obi-Wan protectively -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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JadeLotus Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 5/23/05 6:42pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23 - Date Edited: 5/23/05 6:49pm (1 edits total) Edited By: JadeLotus
	Oh, you tease. I had wondered why in this fic (since they had been together so long) they'd never had a child. But then again, I suppose that was one of the things that Luke would fear most. And they took their damn sweet time in the profics as well . But wow. Poor Mara. Alone, frightened and in pain, giving birth to the son of a monster. I would say something else but I wouldn;t want to breach the spoiler policy. She doesn’t stray from the lee of the building I find this phrase wonderfully interesting. Lee isn't really a word you read very often and never hear. It reminds me on The Secret of NIMH..."Move your house to the lee of the stone..." But yes, i'm interested! -----signature----- You are the only thing that makes sense Just ignore all this present tense
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 5/23/05 6:44pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23
	I'm SO behind on this! My apologies. I'll get caught up as soon as the kids get out of school. Yikes! Lots of great reading to do. -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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lurker2209 Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 5/23/05 7:33pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23
	ME!! Definately interesting. Mara left to have Luke's baby! On Tattooine! Which means their kid is out there somewhere, right? This is going to be good! (If you can't tell, I love fics about Mara and Luke's kids!) ~Lurker -----signature----- "When I face the desolate impossibility of writing five hundred pages a sick sense of failure falls on me and I know I can never do it. This happens every time. Then gradually I write one page and then another." ~ John Steinbeck, Travels with Charley
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Valin_Halcyon Registered: Jan '05	Date Posted: 5/23/05 7:36pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23
	MEMEMEMEMEME!!!!!! Sounds interesting... -----signature----- Shadows of the Unknown: http://boards.theforce.net/Beyond_the_Saga/b10477/18120474/?6 Virtual little brother of Jesina_Dreis
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RebelMom Title: TFF Secretary Registered: Apr '00	Date Posted: 5/23/05 8:17pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23
	I had a pretty good idea that something like this had happened. She wouldn't want the baby to grow up in such darkness. Looking forward to more. -----signature----- Short Story: Pressure Point http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/26961243/p1/?7 Jacen Solo and Anakin Skywalker - as it should have been. TFF: Cheryl
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Leia Registered: Aug '98	Date Posted: 5/23/05 8:50pm Subject: RE: Your Eyes Aren't Blue Anymore -- Dark Luke, Mara -- sequel teaser up 5/23
	Teaser? Baby?! Wait?! Just go ahead and change your name to Black_Knight_Aragorn, K_A, because you have a heart of stone. I guess I'll just be hangin' around, waiting with the others. passes Gabri_Jade some Tylenol You might want this--you smacked that keyboard pretty hard there, Miss Gabri. -----signature----- Those who don't believe in magic will never find it. (Roald Dahl)
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