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Obsessed With Flowers (L/M, Ben, AU) (update, 8/17)
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DaenaBenjen42
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Date Posted:
2/27/06 6:36pm
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RE: Obsessed With Flowers (L/M, Ben, AU) (mini update, 2/21)
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RedGold: Yes. Yes it is. And thankyou.
mavjade: Glad you liked that. Thankyou.
jackyyy17: Can't wait for more  plaese?
Working on it, jacky.  And thankyou.
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emeraldshadow
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Date Posted:
3/3/06 8:55am
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RE: Obsessed With Flowers (L/M, Ben, AU) (mini update, 2/21)
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Okay, now that I’ve read this, the part I betaed makes a lot more sense.
I love this story. Its mixture of silly humor, drama, and intrigue make it an extremely enjoyable read. I’m looking forward to seeing where this goes. I don’t suppose you’re in the habit of giving your master spoilers, are you?  
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MirandaFair
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3/3/06 11:54am
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RE: Obsessed With Flowers (L/M, Ben, AU) (mini update, 2/21)
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How did I miss this? 
That's right bad man...keep far, far away.  Can't wait for more!
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DaenaBenjen42
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3/20/06 6:53pm
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RE: Obsessed With Flowers (L/M, Ben, AU) (mini update, 2/21)
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3/23/06 7:58pm (3 edits total)
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emeraldshadow: Thankyou.
MirandaFair: It was missed because I didn't do Update PMs. And yeah, The bad man just needs to stay away. Thankyou.
Note: Thankyou to everyone for your patience. Sorry this took so long. And a special thankyou to BrentusofGath and emeraldshadow for the betas.
On with story...
"Is she all right?" Han asked when Luke entered the Falcon's main hold.
Luke nodded. "She seems to be."
"Seems?" Han looked at him with an expression that was hard to read.
"Well... She'll seem perfectly fine one minute, and the next will go and do something way off the charts."
"Oh."
Luke glanced at the flowered vest that Han was wearing and chuckled. "Speaking of off the charts... that vest looks good on you."
Han sighed and rolled his eyes at his brother-in-law.
~*~*~*~*~
Mara was dancing in another part of the Falcon, her eyes closed, letting the force guide her steps.
Around and around she went, in a calming, meditative rhythm.
Images of people floated through her mind's eye. People she was close to, served, loved.
Her parents.
Luke.
Ben.
The family she'd had before, the man who took her and made her his own in every way.
The family she'd gained in all the struggle. That she had nearly lost because she had refused to believe or even trust ever again to avoid the pain of another separation.
The man she loved.
The child she cherished, and the one yet to come.
The pain of indoctrination, of evil’s mask settling down upon her.
Mara spun and turned, blocked and waited. Listened.
What would have happened if she'd stayed in the house, Mara wondered.
In answer to the unspoken question, a series of events unfolded in front of her:
A man in the heat of battle, calling out orders and not seeing the blow that strikes him down. That same man lying next to a woman in bed, a menacing figure holding a knife, and lashing out. That same battle again, only this time without the man, and this time they lose.
The woman finding the man on the ground after the battle and letting out a heart-wrenching cry of grief.
A funeral. The woman laying a familiar flower on the casket. Three young people joining the woman at the graveside.
The woman standing outside in the darkness, staring up at the night sky.
The woman being presented with military honors for the dead.
As the images faded, Mara opened her eyes and considered what she had seen. She really had saved her parent's lives by going outside that night. Her father was no longer alive, but her mother was.
What was she like? Would she want to see her?
Mara sighed, not wanting to think of all the uncertainties, and went to join her husband in the main hold.
~*~*~*~*~
Far away on Naboo, Widia stared up at the night sky, wondering if her daughter was even out there.
Even after all this time, she refused to give up hope.
"Mom?"
Widia whirled around at the voice of her son and smiled. "What is it, Torath?"
"Jaelle said you'd be out here, star gazing." He glanced up at the night sky and then looked at her again. "What are you looking for?"
"There's hope out there," Widia said simply.
"For what?"
Widia sighed. She really hadn't wanted to talk to anyone about this, least of all her son. "For Marani."
"Who?"
~*~*~*~*~
On the Falcon, Luke was meditating when Mara came in and sat beside him. "Feel better?"
"Define better," Mara muttered, as she glanced toward their sleeping child.
Luke glanced at her, slightly confused. "Tell me?"
Mara looked away, biting her lip. "He used me. He took me from my parents and he used me."
Wordlessly, Luke took her in his arms. "It's okay, Love. He can't use you anymore."
"That doesn't change it," Mara whispered, barely audible.
"No, no it doesn't." He considered his next words very carefully. "But... it is in the past and it can not be undone."
A soft cry escaped her lips, and she furrowed deeper into his embrace. "I loved him as if he was my father, and he wasn't, Luke. He convinced me that he was. And all along, my parents were alive on some distant planet, fighting for their freedom. And dying." Her voice took on a bitter tinge, and Luke held her, rocking slowly back and forth in an effort to comfort. "If he weren't dead already, the betrayal alone would be worth killing him for."
Luke didn't respond in words as she began to cry in earnest. Instead, he comforted her through their bond long into the night.
TBC...
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LilyHobbitJedi
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Date Posted:
3/20/06 7:17pm
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RE: Obsessed With Flowers (L/M, Ben, AU) (update, 3/20)
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Oh wow, what an excellent update!! Poor Mara, that must have been very hard to be betrayed by Palpatine like that. It's almost like Anakin's betrayal to Obi-Wan, and that was Palpy's fault too. I hope Mara meets her mom!! Great job, can't wair for the next update!! 
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JediFalcon
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3/20/06 7:22pm
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its about time, and is there a family reunion in the works? I hope so it will help Mara ease the pain and guilt. I can't wait for more
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RK_Striker_JK_5
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3/20/06 7:26pm
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RE: Obsessed With Flowers (L/M, Ben, AU) (update, 3/20)
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I was wondering when this was gonna get updated. Nice, Daena. Loved the thoughts as Mara danced. Odd juxtaposition of thought and movement. But in a great way. And off to Naboo.
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MirandaFair
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Date Posted:
3/20/06 7:31pm
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Powerful. The use of imagery really brought me into Mara's recollections of her past. The cut to Naboo and Widia was a surprise. I'm excited to see there's more to Mara's family than was originally thought. Curse you, Palpatine...err. 
The child she cherished, and the one yet to come.
Eh-em. Did I read that right? Are you speaking in terms of the future or present? Baby "yet to come" literally? Am I reading into that a little too much?  Probably.
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Meredith_Kenobi
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3/20/06 8:47pm
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 Yay an update!
Luke glanced at the flowered vest that Han was wearing and chuckled. "Speaking of off the charts... that vest looks good on you."
Han sighed and rolled his eyes at his brother-in-law.
*giggles* Han in a flowery vest? Yeah right.
A soft cry escaped her lips, and she furrowed deeper into his embrace. "I loved him as if he was my father, and he wasn't, Luke. He convinced me that he was. And all along, my parents were alive on some distant planet, fighting for their freedom. And dying." Her voice took on a bitter tinge, and Luke held her, rocking slowly back and forth in an effort to comfort. "If he weren't dead already, the betrayal alone would be worth killing him for."
Luke didn't respond in words as she began to cry in earnest. Instead, he comforted her through their bond long into the night.
 That's so sad. *wipes away tears* More soon?  Please?
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MoeTharen
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3/20/06 9:45pm
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Cool updates, Daena. I'm sorry I missed a few.
-Commander Tharen-
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RedGold
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3/21/06 10:20am
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Poor Mara, having to compromise all the conflicting emotions!
And her mom, still having hope.
I can't wait for them to all get together!
thanks for the pm btw
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ginchy
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3/21/06 10:31am
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Wow, Mara's mom. Won't she be surprised when Mara shows up with a whole family?
Can't wait to see what happens next!
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Trimaj
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3/21/06 1:04pm
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great update, i'm really enjoying it. definitly not a story i could write as well. or one i'd have thought of for that matter.
also really good job with the motion to images to motion etc... it was extremely effective.
Luke glanced at the flowered vest that Han was wearing and chuckled. "Speaking of off the charts... that vest looks good on you."
Han sighed and rolled his eyes at his brother-in-law.
oh how i laughed at this. han in flowers... it'd never happen.
On the Falcon, Luke was meditating when Mara came in and sat beside him. "Feel better?"
"Define better," Mara muttered, as she glanced toward their sleeping child.
i know i shouldn't have but i chuckled at this. it's just so mara... and highly amusing.
Luke glanced at her, slightly confused. "Tell me?"
Mara looked away, biting her lip. "He used me. He took me from my parents and he used me."
Wordlessly, Luke took her in his arms. "It's okay, Love. He can't use you anymore."
"That doesn't change it," Mara whispered, barely audible.
"No, no it doesn't." He considered his next words very carefully. "But... it is in the past and it can not be undone."
A soft cry escaped her lips, and she furrowed deeper into his embrace. "I loved him as if he was my father, and he wasn't, Luke. He convinced me that he was. And all along, my parents were alive on some distant planet, fighting for their freedom. And dying." Her voice took on a bitter tinge, and Luke held her, rocking slowly back and forth in an effort to comfort. "If he weren't dead already, the betrayal alone would be worth killing him for."
and this was really touching. stories rarely do that with me, but this was one of them. great job.
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emeraldshadow
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3/21/06 4:19pm
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I smell a family reunion in the works!
I loved the cryptic flashbacks and the hints of what's to come. I'd be hooked even if I wasn't your master.
On a side note, it's about time Han got to share in the joy of wearing flowers.
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Courtney_Solo
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3/21/06 4:28pm
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Lovely update, Daena! This is really coming along, and you can feel attached to "Marani"'s mother already!
I'm enjoying this!
C  S
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