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ZEGO Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 4/14/06 9:24am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE - Date Edited: 4/14/06 5:10pm (1 edits total) Edited By: ZEGO
	Everyone get ready because chapter 5 is pretty long. And they just might find who they're looking for...and so might the Sith. -----signature----- Awaken Darkness- http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/23633458/p1/?4 Gamma Cell- http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27091571&brd=10476 Cole: "Please, Landon. You and Zego are in great danger!" Landon: "Welcome to Tatooine."
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Landon16 Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 4/15/06 7:16pm Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	I can't wait! Ch.3 really captured the doubt and desperation in that kind of situation. Caina was just pure evil in Ch.4! Man...I wish I could tell a story like you and Skalenfehl . -----signature----- "Ya know...if I wasn't so sure you were a lesbian, I'd say you were hitting on me." -Peter Griffin
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SkalenFehl Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 4/17/06 10:27am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	Caina scoffed unconvincingly at Neevog. “Fear’s only place with the Sith is in the eyes of your enemy. Remember that, apprentice.” I liked this line. Looking forward to chapter 5, but may I recommend more bite sized updates? I enjoy reading stories, but long posts tend to overwhelm me. If you broke them down into two or three parts daily, you might have more comments and feedback as well. Just my two cents. -----signature----- Founder of The Gentlemen's Writing Guild New Christmas Fic--http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27837048/p1/?0
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ZEGO Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 4/17/06 10:37am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	Thanks for the feedback, Skalen . But to be fair, on my computer, Ch.4 is only 2 and a half pages long. If I go any shorter, they may just get the body of the story and miss out on the soul. But I will take your advice . -----signature----- Awaken Darkness- http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/23633458/p1/?4 Gamma Cell- http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27091571&brd=10476 Cole: "Please, Landon. You and Zego are in great danger!" Landon: "Welcome to Tatooine."
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SkalenFehl Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 4/17/06 10:52am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	When I write my stories, I write my chapters ending them with small cliffhangers. It makes you want to read what happens next when you move to the next scene/subplot. I break down my chapters into scenes that basically do the same. That way you keep the reader hooked. It is a common technique used by writers. Do you ever find yourself reading a novel and skipping over a whole scene just to get back to the subplot you were on to see what happens next? -----signature----- Founder of The Gentlemen's Writing Guild New Christmas Fic--http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27837048/p1/?0
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bi0nic Registered: Feb '06	Date Posted: 4/17/06 1:05pm Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	Good work ZEGO, the suspense is really ramping up as to what will happen on Tatooine. It's intriguing that the Council is hiding something from Cole, I can't help but wonder what the deal is there. I enjoyed Caina smacking around the Sith soldier, that was some nice, visceral action you had going there. I don't want to tell you how you should post your own story, but I'm afraid I agree with Skalen that smaller chunks would be a lot easier to digest. The main reason I've taken this long to reply is that I skimmed Chapter 3, saw how long it was and then thought "I don't have time to read this now". What Skalen said about chapters being like scenes is an idea I share. Chapter 3 seemed to have about 3 scenes that could have been posted separately: the Council meeting, the journey and the battle. Feel free to tell me to shut up, but it would certainly appear a lot more inviting to readers if every update contained around 1 scene like that, 2 at most. Apart from that minor niggle, this has been great stuff ZEGO, keep it up! -----signature----- "I'm the sickest linguistically illicit lyrical misfit in the business And probably in existence, what's your consensus?" - Canibus Padawan to furrylittlebantha
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chaotic-force Registered: Feb '06	Date Posted: 4/17/06 4:02pm Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	Great job ZEGO. This story is getting better with each chapter. You write the Sith very well. Caina is a great character, and I can't wait to see what everyone is up to next. The suspense is great, and I am eagerly waiting for the next update.
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ZEGO Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 4/17/06 9:41pm Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	I would never tell you to shut up, Bionic . I'm not so cocky as to believe that my writing is perfect. I will be posting in smaller chapters from here on. Hopefully this will attract even more readers! -----signature----- Awaken Darkness- http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/23633458/p1/?4 Gamma Cell- http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27091571&brd=10476 Cole: "Please, Landon. You and Zego are in great danger!" Landon: "Welcome to Tatooine."
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ZEGO Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 4/21/06 5:07pm Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE - Date Edited: 4/21/06 6:48pm (1 edits total) Edited By: ZEGO
	CHAPTER 5: REUNION A giant pillar of smoke stemmed up through skies of Tatooine like a large weed growing from the mineral surface. The root of this weed extended from a scorched Star Sparrow resting its wings from within the sand. Inside the battle torn vessel, Cole and the crash survivors access the dilemma at hand. “Is everyone okay?” Cole surveyed, as he examined a small red gash just over Seraphine’s left eyebrow. “I’m fine, Master.” Seraphine responded, gently pulling away from Cole. “As am I.” Naudo spoke from across the room, feeling his bruised arm. No doubt caused from bashing into the sides of his seat during the turbulence. The Republic Pilot steadily ran his fingers through his brpwn hair. “I could use a drink.” Master Wan Yee grinned at the mentally drained pilot's comment. How could he blame him? In a previous second, Cole didn’t even think they were going to survive the trip down. Why everyone appeared to have accepted the Sith’s assault on the Star Sparrow, something inside Seraphine couldn’t let go of their enemy's sudden appearance. “Master, what were the Sith doing so far out in Tatooine’s solar system?” Cole brushed his fingers through his gray beard. “Our mission objectives must’ve been leaked out to the Sith. No doubt they were here to stop us from reaching Zego and Landon. But we cannot allow this setback to stop us. How far are we from Mos Eisley?” The Republic Pilot then fiddled with the control console established in the center of the conference room. However, his attempts were futile. The scanner atop the console would only fizzle and rain snow, showing only quick seconds of actual data. “Well, the ship’s navigation system is pretty fragged. But if I read this scanner right; you can reach the city in about an hour and a half’s walk.” This news failed to please Cole. But he didn’t expect this mission to be easy. “What of our supplies, Pilot?” “I already checked on them. Most of our rations were burned up when the reverse thruster’s fuel line exploded. A few canteens of water and two food packs are all that’s left.” “What else could go wrong?” Cole thought to himself. “Hopefully that’s enough to reach Mos Eisley. What about reinforcements from the New Republic?” Thankfully, the Republic Pilot had already acquired that answer for Cole. “I sent a distress call and the Republic is sending a small but speedy fleet to assist in the repairs to the Star Sparrow. They should be here in about ten hours.” “Well, that will have to do. Our only course of action now is to continue on to Mos Eisley.” “Okay, I guess I’ll stay here and repair what I can.” Once lifting up his tool case, The Republic Pilot was off to fix any damage that was in his means. The old Jedi Master reached out to him before he could leave the room and shook the Pilot’s hand. “I believe we owe you a debt of gratitude.” “What for? If not for your Jedi powers we would’ve been fragged for sure.” “Our powers may have raised the nose of the Star Sparrow, but it was you who managed to evade an entire squadron of Sith Fighters and land us safely.” The Republic Pilot smiled at Cole’s compliment. He did indeed do all the things Cole spoke of. It was his duty to the New Republic that blinded him from that fact. “Thank you, sir.” A salute followed the two’s handshake. Wan Yee grinned. “Call me, Cole. And you are?” “I’m private, Galet Senmar...sir.” The Jedi Master returned Galet’s salute. “Thank you again, Galet.” Once due gratification was delivered, Master Wan Yee and Galet separated to go off and complete both their duties. The Jedi made short work of preparing themselves and eventually headed off on the beaten path to the city of Mos Eisley. The neighboring suns that sat aside the planet showed little mercy to the traveling Jedi, soaring down on them with relentless heat. It took little time before the two remaining canteens were dry of water and their food packs left empty. Thankfully, the disciplines of the Jedi teachings made the long hike pass by relatively quickly. Before long, the appearance of Mos Eisley could be viewed from afar. Mos Eisley was a less than impressive sight to begin with. Its buildings were constructed with a mixture of dried clay and scrapped metal, all housing either a poor starving family or groups of thieves and bounty hunters. Governed by chaos, it’s a wonder the city still remains standing. The Jedi entered the city gates with no trouble, only to find a crowded marketplace of various races of aliens heeding their progress. “I feel this mission may be more difficult that we imagined, Master.” Naudo pointed out, looking around at the large mass of integrated species. “Perhaps, but we must complete it nonetheless.” Cole replied sternly. From out of nowhere, Seraphine was bumped into by a local resident passing by her. “But, Master. How are going to find them in a city this vast with life?” “You forget that I know Zego and Landon better than most, my padawan. We need only look to the nearest cantina.” Naudo found this suggestion troubling. “Cantina? Jedi would never reside in a cantina.” Wan Yee shook his head shamefully. “Believe me, young one. They’re in a cantina.” A look of sadness fell upon Seraphine’s beautiful lips. The idea of speaking to her once true love after all these years still haunted her. What would she say? How would she act? How much has she changed since they last gazed into each other’s eyes? No answer was an easy one. But only thinking of these things would distract her from what must be done. “Landon...”Seraphine spoke under her breath, unknowingly catching the attention of her master. In a means to divert his padawan back to the mission, Cole pointed to the nearest cantina. “Come now. We’ll start with that one.” The old Jedi led the way down the long filthy streets and to the front door of a jazzy cantina, called Morbo’s. The cantina was as impressive as a one could be on such a decadent planet. Morbo’s ranged to the height of three stories, an unheard of size for a cantina not build on more populated planets such as Coruscant, Bespin’s Cloud City or even Onderon. The club was mostly assembled from scrap metal, rather than clay and sand, like the majority of housing on Tatooine. Morbo’s could definitely be considered a diamond in the rough. Though a widely popular and accepting club to many, passage would not come as easy to the Jedi as a regular customer. Just as they were about to enter the cantina’s doors, a Twi’lek bouncer latched a hold of Master Wan Yee’s robes. “Not so fast, Jedi! We no like your kind in here.” Cole passively removed the Bouncer’s hand from his robes. The fact that he could speak Galactic Basic was the only redeeming factor about this unexpected interruption. “Please, sir. We must get inside and search for our friends, immediately.” Seraphine begged, hoping an inkling of sincerity would arise from within the Bouncer. The Bouncer sneered disgusted at Wan Yee and his padawans. “Me not care about Jedi business! Me want you gone...now!” Knowing that reason was lost on this odious vandal before him, Cole turned face to face with the Bouncer. He proceeded to wave his index and middle finger across the Bouncer’s face as he spoke. The Padawans quickly recognized this technique as the legendary Jedi Mind Trick. “You will let us in.” Cole ordered. “Me will let you in.” The Bouncer answered in an almost trance like state, displaying his eyes straight forward and his body devoid of movement. “We will receive no further interference from you or any others.” “You will receive no further interference from me or any others.” “You will answer all my questions.” “Me will answer all your questions.” Master Wan Yee lowered his hand, seeing the Bouncer was completely entranced with the powers of the Force. It was now that Cole could run down his list of unanswered questions. “Do you know Zego Tetrin and Landon Kinoda?” “Yes.” The Bouncer replied blankly. Seraphine and Naudo’s faces lit up with joy, believing that after all they had been through; they had finally found Zego and Landon. Master Cole on the other hand, knew better than to get so excited before examining further. “How?” “They be regular customers of Morbo’s. Drink lots of Juma Juice.” Cole knew he needed to dig deeper. “Are they inside now?” “Me not know? Me just start shift.” The Bouncer’s lack of knowledge nearly depressed Seraphine and Naudo’s once bountiful bliss. They thought themselves foolish to think they it would be that easy to find these pariahs. But despite this minor setback, Master Wan Yee had found this information of great interest to him. He now knew that Morbo’s was a common place to find Zego and Landon. Perhaps, if they were to post their efforts within the cantina’s vicinity, they would stand a better chance of locating the Exiles. “Very well, you will continue doing your job.” “Me will continue job.” Using his hand, Cole signaled his puppet to walk back to his post and the Bouncer did as he was commanded. The Jedis then entered the doors to the cantina, and found it was even more crowded than the streets outside. A band’s jazzy music ripped through the air with a rather catchy uplifting beat. But all this was nothing compared to the feeling Cole felt next…the feeling of the Exile’s presence. Continued... -----signature----- Awaken Darkness- http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/23633458/p1/?4 Gamma Cell- http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27091571&brd=10476 Cole: "Please, Landon. You and Zego are in great danger!" Landon: "Welcome to Tatooine."
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bi0nic Registered: Feb '06	Date Posted: 4/22/06 6:56am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE - Date Edited: 4/22/06 6:57am (1 edits total) Edited By: bi0nic
	Nice work ZEGO, Tatooine felt very true to the way it's been shown in the movies. Good use of the old jedi mind trick, it's always fun when Jedi flex their Force powers. It ended on a an intriguing note as well, I can't wait to see what happens when Cole and company finally meet up with the Exiles. Sparks will fly, methinks. -----signature----- "I'm the sickest linguistically illicit lyrical misfit in the business And probably in existence, what's your consensus?" - Canibus Padawan to furrylittlebantha
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Landon16 Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 4/22/06 8:53am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	Bionic's right. This was very nice work indeed ! I forgot to mention it in my last post that I'm very impressed with how you're building everyone's backstory. Such as...Cole and Zego seem to have a deeper feud than just his banishment. And Seraphine and Landon used to be in love was a good twist for both characters. But I have one question. Why did the the Exiles choose Tatooine? Not really the most vibrant battleground for a story . Knowing you, there is probably twists abound coming, so like everyone here I guess I'm just gonna have to watch and wait. I'm eagerly awaiting the next update!!!!!!!!!!! -----signature----- "Ya know...if I wasn't so sure you were a lesbian, I'd say you were hitting on me." -Peter Griffin
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ZEGO Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 5/20/06 8:38am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE - Date Edited: 10/8/06 11:19am (1 edits total) Edited By: ZEGO
	CHAPTER 5: REUNION "Continuation" The alien bartenders seemed to have their hands full with orders for drinks and food. Every booth appeared to be packed to its capacity with customers and bounty hunters alike. From one side of the cantina to the other, each Jedi observantly viewed the room for the location of Zego or Landon. Yet found no sign of either. “Master, I do not see them.” Naudo sighed, then turning to see if Seraphine had any luck. “Nor do I.” Seraphine shrugged in failure. “Remain vigilant, padawans. Let us travel to higher ground for a better look.” Cole suggested, leading his padawans through the crowded floor of the cantina and up the stairs to the second floor balcony. Many of patrons in the cantina seemed afraid of the Jedi’s mere presence, each one taking quick glances at the Cole and his pupils before retreating back to their business. The second floor was littered with this type of shady figures, indulged in deal making of every devious sort. Trying to attract as little attention as possible, Wan Yee and his padawans kept their eyes locked on the straight path before them and nothing else. But even from the height of the second floor balcony, no sign of Zego or Landon could still be found. “I don’t believe they’re here, Master.” Seraphine noted, while looking down upon the mass of patrons cluttered on the cantina’s ground level. “Perhaps not...” Cole thought with slight doubt. “It’s possible that they have been here often enough to leave a trail in the Force. But even if they were, it is difficult to track their life-energy in such an environment.” Naudo found himself taking one last close look over the entire cantina, and didn’t turn away until he was satisfied. “Then should we move onto the next one, Master?” “Yes, time is of the essence. If we do not find Zego and Landon soon, then I fear the flagship of those Sith Fighters will make its presence known to Mos Eisley all to well.” Though Wan Yee’s words spoke of a frightening thought, Naudo seemed at ease, watching his Master stand firm and unafraid of the Sith approaching. Seraphine, however, saw right through her Master’s calm eyes. She knew as well as he did that Cole deeply feared for the safety of Mos Eisley’s people. They had to discover Zego and Landon’s whereabouts…they had to find Luke and end this war. If they don’t accomplish that task here on Tatooine, then this city’s citizens would suffer a dark day on this sun-reigned planet…as would the entire universe. “Then let us go, Master.” Seraphine suggested. Believing there business in Morbo’s was finished, The Jedi turned to leave the cantina but found themselves met by the tips of a blaster pistols in the hands of five armed Rodians. “Hello, Cole Wan Yee. A pleasure it is to see you again.” The leader of the Rodians spoke in species’ tongue, still holding his blaster pistol centimeters from Cole’s nose. “Master!” Seraphine exclaimed, seeing their attackers. Following their natural Jedi instinct, both she and Naudo rashly reached for their lightsaber’s hilt. “No, Padawans!” Wan Yee warned with a shout, knowing they were not quick enough to stop all of the Rodian’s attacks at this close of range. Acting with nervous haste, the wise Jedi vigorously stuck out his arms to heed his students from acting. “But, Master…” Naudo screeched while struggling with his Master’s arm for a moment before finally submitting along with Seraphine. “It is all right, Naudo. I know these men.” Cole nodded. The young padawan didn’t know what to think. Clearly these men meant the Jedi harm, yet Cole remained almost scarily calm. “If it is your will, Master, I shall listen.” Naudo retracted his arms away from his lightsaber. Once everything was down to only a minimal level of threat, Master Wan Yee began to reply to his attacker. “Allow me to introduce you to, Urdrack. He is the leader of the Ronheer Family. They are a band of galactic smugglers and bounty hunters extraordinaire.” “You flatter me, Cole, a wise decision for one whose life is so void of time.” Urdrack boasted, then letting out a hideous Rodian laugh. Cole returned a smirk to his attacker. “How long has it been, Urdrack? One…two years since you and your siblings were sentenced to life imprisonment.” Memories of the many days he spent pacing behind a force-fielded cell set Urdrack’s fury to a boil. “We never would we have been sentenced if not for your interference!” Cole was now the one boasting a laugh. “Come now, Urdrack. You didn’t believe I could let you deliver those weapon shipments to the Empire, did you?” “It matters not, Jedi. Even your powers can’t save you at this range.” Urdrack began slowly pulling back on the trigger of blaster-pistol. This Rodian Criminal was known for such acts. Urdrack would always taunt and tease his enemies before sending them into the next world. “I care not what happens to me. But our quarrel has nothing to do with my padawans. I ask only that they go free.” Cole asked with the greatest of sincerity. Urdrack stopped his advancing finger just under the last centimeter before firing. “Friends of yours are enemies of mine, Cole Wan Yee…goodbye.” Urdrack was dead set on ending Wan Yee’s life this time. But just as he finished what he thought would be his final words to Cole, a surprising voice rang from the corner of the second floor. “Tsk, Tsk, Urdrack. Why are you being so hasty?” Urdrack and his peers glanced in suspicion as to who would dare interrupt them at this crucial moment, missing a hidden grin given off by Cole. The mysterious voice came from an individual masked in the shade of a corner booth. There he sat with his head hunched downward, sheathed in his ragged brown jacket’s hood. Leaving his viewers in awe, the individual took time to down a shot of juma juice before stepping out into the dim light of the cantina. Even then, this questionable man hid his intentions well. Urdrack and the others looked on in intrigue as the stranger grasped each slide of his hood and began to pull them back behind his head. Like the final breath before passing on, a short gasp of air escaped from Seraphine’s lips. The sight before her was a familiar one. As was the stranger’s face…the face of Landon Kinoda. Continued... PICTURE LINK: http://allyoucanupload.webshots.com/v/2001107527228547649 -----signature----- Awaken Darkness- http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/23633458/p1/?4 Gamma Cell- http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27091571&brd=10476 Cole: "Please, Landon. You and Zego are in great danger!" Landon: "Welcome to Tatooine."
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bi0nic Registered: Feb '06	Date Posted: 5/20/06 10:08am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	It’s possible that they have been here often enough to leave a trail in the Force. That's a neat idea, ZEGO, I like it. They are a band of galactic smugglers and bounty hunters extraordinaire That's one hell of an endorsement, coming from a Jedi. You gave Landon a brilliant entrance too, it felt very Aragorn from the first LOTR film. Good job on doing a shorter post too, the length felt exactly right, with a great setup and then ending with the entrance of the hero to save the day. Nice one! -----signature----- "I'm the sickest linguistically illicit lyrical misfit in the business And probably in existence, what's your consensus?" - Canibus Padawan to furrylittlebantha
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Landon16 Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 5/22/06 7:42pm Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	Great cliffhanger, Zego! I both love and hate you for leaving it like that. I can't wait to see what kind of personality Landon and Zego have? I imagine it's probably a little different from the Jedi. I'm eagerly awaiting the next update. -----signature----- "Ya know...if I wasn't so sure you were a lesbian, I'd say you were hitting on me." -Peter Griffin
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CodyMonKenobi Registered: Jan '01	Date Posted: 5/23/06 8:08am Subject: RE: Awaken Darkness: OC/ EU/ ACTION/ ADVENTURE/ ANGST/ LUKE
	Wow, once again I am impressed with your writing. Be sure to pm me when you update this story. It is so intriguing, you give out just a little bit of info in each posts, just enough to make your mouth water and have you begging for more. I love all of your charecters so far. Especially the Dark Lord, man he is creepy. You show all the charecters emotions well and keep them in carecter, you can tell that you have really taken your time to plan them out. Keep it up man this is one of the best stories I've read in a long time...a long time. Also as for the who exile on Tatooine, and these guys being close to Luke I would imagine them to be following in old Ben's nature. can't wait to see if I'm right. -----signature----- We rednecks like to stay with-in the four main food groups. Steak, potatoes, gravy, and beer, with hard liquor in moderation. U.S. Army Field Artillery The Shoe Make's Gift http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/3034
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