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ZaraValinor Registered: May '02	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:02am Subject: Darkest Before the Dawn - Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne L/M Leia Author's Note 05/07 - Date Edited: 5/7 10:59am (28 edits total) Edited By: ZaraValinor
	Tempus Water lapped at the edge of the sea, the sun was high in the sky but sinking towards the horizon. Light danced over the waves, glittering like the finest gems of Hapes. It had been a long hot summer day and the residents of Utaleen were gifted a reprieve from the intense heat in the evening hours. Fishing skiffs lined the shores, each magnetically sealed to the harbor. A slight cool breeze blew over the ocean tossing the smell of salt water into the air. Ben took a deep breath of the gritty scent but otherwise stood quietly meters into the sea of Ues. He turned his eyes to the shoreline where a small figure was being careful not to go any further then his father had proscribed. The waved at him and he put a single finger to his lips before he could speak. He did not own a skiff or much beyond the hut that he’d constructed for himself and Arielle. But that did not keep him from fishing the seas. Taccati fish swam around his feet. He’d held his position for so long that they now believed that he was as much a part of the ocean as the sand beneath his feet or the tiny shelled creatures that crawled over them. He was patient, the sea had taught him that, and waited forthe right moment to strike. He never brought anything with him. He’d seen a number of the fishers come with harpoon guns or stun nets, and even some with archaic staves, ends shaved down to sharp points. Weapons were something Ben had forfeited when he arrived here. For the first few months, when he was perfecting his system, he’d been the talk of the town. A boy who refused to use even the basic tools of what was the working class on Utaleen. They had watched in amusement first and then with dubious awe and respect as Ben lured the fish into his nets. That had been six years ago. No longer a boy, he had never dreamed he’d ever be a man. As a child, Ben had lived a life far different from that of a quiet fisherman. Trained to kill, he’d played the assassin for his cousin. With some help from his parents he’d escaped the manipulations of his clever captor. Slowly, he lowered the net into the water. A subtle suggestion in the Force brought the fish into the middle of his waiting net. Too fast for even the instinctive fish, Ben gathered the ends of his net and yanked it up through the water, flapping fish struggling against woven threads. Expertly, he twisted his wrist and flung the net full of fish around his shoulder to rest on his back. He marched out of the water, his knees popping out from below the surface. He stepped onto the beach, in his near threadbare trousers. And grabbed the hand of the small boy who’d been waiting for him. “You ready to go home, Arrian?” he asked. The little boy nodded, swinging the arm that was held by Ben. At three Arrian was already the best thing besides his mother that had come into Ben’s life. He was an amaglamation of his parents, having Arielle’s blonde hair and pale eyes with Ben’s nose and chin. He wouldn’t be tall, but he already showed signs of Ben’s compact build. They were headed to the little hut when Ben felt a stirring in the Force. One that he had not felt in a long time. He only paused for a moment before leading Arrian back to the hut. He opened the door and peaked his head inside while patting Arrian into the room. “Arielle, I’m going to be outside for a little bit. Arrian’s inside.” “Okay,” she called back. “Come here, Arrian.” He heard her clap her hands and instantly their little son squealed running for where the kitchenette was. Ben dropped the load of fish onto the porch and walked a ways back onto the beach. He closed his eyes and identified where the Force emanated brightly. Turning towards the beacon, he said, “You can come out now.” His father emerged from behind one of the locked skiffs. Straight-backed as always, there was an air of fatigue about the aging man. There was more silver in his hair and the face that had still been boyish was now lined in approaching age. His father was still compact and sinewy. A warrior. But he knew that his father’s greatest strength lay else where. “Hello, Ben,” the Jedi Master greeted. “Father,” he said back. “I knew you would be here some day. Though I must admit that I had hoped that day would be further in the future.” A trace of an embarrassed smile, one that if his mother had been here she would identified from his farmboy days, smoothed some wrinkles and deepened others. His father was still a very handsome man but there was a deep sadness to his features and it was reflected in his smile. “I regret the necessity.” “You needn’t,” Ben assured him. It was awkward. They had never really lived in each others lives and yet they longed to be more then just casual companions. “Would you like to come in? We could have evening meal.” “I would like that,” Luke agreed. Ben nodded and gestured for Luke to follow him. Inside Arielle was waiting for them with Arrian at her side and Talia in her arms. “Father you remember Arielle better as Ahn’ra Lee.” He expected his father to welcome her in his usual warmth and cordiality, but he was staring at Arrian and Talia. “You have children,” he said hollowly. “Yes,” Ben answered the not quite question. He leaned down and picked up his son. “This little guy is Arrian and the sleep beauty over there is Talia.” “I never saw children,” he whispered, putting a hand to his eyes. “Ben, I’ve done something terrible.” Since arriving on Utaleen, Ben had become distant from the oppressive fear that had once dominated his existence. He felt its return like a hit to his gut. Breath came more difficult. “What do you mean?” His father didn’t answer, just pushed his thumb and middle finger deeper into his eyes. “Father, what has happened?” “I’ve brought them to you,” his father informed. “I’ve brought the Shadow to your door.” “Who?” Arielle asked. “Jacen,” Ben supplied. “How did you lead them here? Why would you?” His voice had grown hard, unyielding. He had long ago suspecting that his father would come here and beg of his help. But he also had counted that Arielle and his children could stay here in peace and safety. Luke’s voice broke as he explained, “I came for you because I need your help. When I learned that Jacen’s Shadows were following me, I tested the Force and found that it was only you and Ahn’ra Lee here. Because of this, I was sure I could protect you both as we made our escape. I never saw your children, Ben. Believe me I would not put them in danger.” “I’ve been hiding them.” “Much like you hid yourself as a child.” “Yes, I thought I was protecting them.” Ben suddenly understood his father’s desperation. He felt it slither into and around his heart. “How far behind you are they?” “We have hours,” Luke said. “An hour at the most.” Ben didn’t waste time on getting angry, he could do that later. Right now, he had to get Arielle and his children to safety. “Love, grab as much as you and the kids will need.” “But...” she tried, her fear obvious to the man that was all but husband. “I know, we no longer have a choice.” A thousand emotions passed over her face, settling on the strong determination that Ben believed she’d been born with. “I’ll hurry.” “You’re a goddess,” he said, leaning forward to place a kiss on her cheek. “I’ll take Talia and keep my eye on the mischief maker.” Arielle placed Talia in Ben’s awaiting arms. Together, he and his father watched her leave. “If I had known of the children, I would not have come.” “They are your family as well,” Ben reminded gently. “Yes, they are. How old is she?” he asked, placing a finger in the palm of Talia’s hand. Reflexively, her fingers closed around her grandfather’s. “You’ve got them locked so tight.” “Father?” Luke continued on as though Ben had never spoken. “You’ve built yourself a lovely family here and a wonderful house.” “It is a simple life.” “I spent my childhood running away from such a place and you spent yours running to it.” There was a opaque glaze over his father’s eyes, his gaze in a time and place far away from here. “We’re desperate, Ben. I’m desperate. The Jedi are crumbling. I have had no contact with Leia or Jaina. Jacen’s power, as I’m sure you know, is more than visible, it is all encompassing.” Ben waited, weathering his father’s shaded guilt. “Father if it is time for a stand. If we need to bring Jacen down and restore freedom, I will do whatever I can. But I will not kill. And I want Arielle and my children safe.” “To promise that either was possible would make me a liar,” Luke countered. “That isn’t up to you, that’s up to me,” he insisted. “I have a debt that I cannot possibly repay.” His father shook his head, placing a hand on Ben’s shoulder. “That debt isn’t yours to repay.” “I was the one who gave the killing blow, not Jacen.” “And you were the one who stopped it.” Ben closed his eyes and gave a sigh. “If I am to claim one I must take responsibility for the other. I was a child and that makes things both better and worse. Having Arrian and Talia in my life, I can imagine the horror you went through during my own youth. I understand after knowing everything I’ve done, that you can forgive me. But I cannot forgive myself, not ever. I have made an oath to keep my hands clean.” “Your oath will cause more danger for you.” Ben straightened perceptively. “I’m prepared to take that risk.” “What of your wife and children.” “Arielle is not my wife.” Luke’s eyes widened. “But I thought.” “I do not deserve her,” Ben informed him sharply. “I will not bind her to a murderer.” Wisely, Luke did not object but just nodded. “We will go to the base we have set up as a refuge for the Jedi.” “Where?” “A moon with minimal gravity that rests outside of the known regions. We have yet to give it a name.” He walked over to the kitchenette where fish was cooking on the heat plate. “Fish. Water. Far cry from Tatooine.” “And after that?” “The Chiss Empire.” Since the fall of the Jedi Order, the Galactic Alliance had also dwindled in prominence. It seemed more and more the galaxy was being lead by the voice of the Queen Mother of Hapes. And where Tenel Ka spoke it was Jacen’s words that poured forth. Ben had kept an eye on him as well as Gwynne. So far, Jacen had yet to turn his daughter into the extension of his will that he’d done to Ben and to a greater extent, Tenel Ka. The power of his mental manipulation, the way he changed events subtly to meet the requirements of his vision, was needed less now that he held the might of the galaxy in his hand. When Chief of State Traamsorn died and Ben’s own aunt had been accused of the murder, the replacement Chief had been little more then a spineless puppet. He was pulled by the strings of Jacen and his Shadow Warriors. Unlike the time of the Empire the intrusion was minimal, so unobtrusive that most didn’t recognize it all the way. “The Empire is occupied. It’s going to take a lot more then you and me to free it.” “There is already a resistence built, we are going to provide a catalyst.” Ben nodded, his strategic mind already beginning to see all the difficulties that an environment like Csilla could provide. But those troubles could be turned into advantages if you knew how to use them. “Jaina is already in position,” he guessed, remembering that she had been sent on a diplomatic mission with Jagged Fel and Kyp Durron before Csilla had become occupied. “From what we’ve been able to gather. Your mother’s connection to her isn’t as strong as it had been when they were Master and apprentice, but that link is not easily severed either,” his father instructed. “She insists that Jaina calls for our help.” “Why me?” “Because I need someone who knows what to expect from Jacen’s men. You have worked with them and that will give us a greater possibility of survival.” Luke studied him intently. “And I’d like to get to know my son and grandchildren.” Ben gave him a playful push. “Always so selfish.” Chuckling, Luke said, “Your sense of humor has improved.” “I find more to laugh at.” Unexpectedly, his father pulled him into a hug. Arms hardened by years of labor, as a moisture farmer and a Jedi, crushed Ben to the point of asphyxia. He’d grown more comfortable with such intimate touches, having two children with a beautiful woman did that to you, but he had forgotten the simple pleasure of his father’s arms around him. “Oh, my boy, I’ve missed you. Missed knowing you, watching you grow,” his father whispered into his ear. “Tell me that I have not given you too much space. Have not done irreparable damage to build a relationship with you.” Ben grabbed him by the shoulder’s and pushed back to gaze at him. Again he was hit by the age that had sat upon his father. This was a man not beaten by time but by tragedy, yet he stood with such a power and presence that Ben could not help but feel cowered in his proximity. Time had given Ben perspective, age understanding. “You are my father. Every step a father takes is to protect their children.” Wisdom beyond his years, sparked in Ben’s electric blue eyes. “Even when we stumble.” The sun had set completely by the time the Skywalker family stole away. Ben had gone into the chest that held the one blaster he procured in the event they were ever found. He set it to stun. “You know, in the future, it might be handier for us to keep the escape ship closer.” “I’ll keep it in mind for the future,” his father bantered back. “Don’t worry. This time, the Rapier will come to us.” “I figured Mother couldn’t be far. She doesn’t seem to be the stay at home and wait type.” He looked back at Arielle and the two children packed around her. “Let me guess, she’s coming in with blazing laser cannons.” “Slightly more discreet,” Luke admonished. “I hope.” “They’re close.” Malevolence tainted the normally clean atmosphere on Utaleen. “Yes.” Ben gnawed at the inside of his cheek. “I suppose I better go welcome them.” “What? No!” Arielle objected for the first time. “Master Skywalker you can’t allow him to do this.’ “Allow me?” Ben asked even as his father said, “I had planned it to be me.” “Ben,” Luke continued. “I am trained better.” “Which means they’ll be expecting the double cross from you.” He saw the struggle on his father’s features and the more overt denial on Arielle. This was something he had to do. The first test of molding his lives together. It was the first test of his ability to fight without landing the killing blow. To approach that redemption that seemed so impossible to reach. “One of these days, Master Skywalker your son is going to get himself killed,” Arielle related caustically. “He cares nothing for the life that he has built here.” It was an old argument, one that Ben did not have time to deal with. “You know that’s not true,” he said warily. “Isn’t it,” she snapped back. “You have no ties, not to me and not to this village.” “It is safer for everyone this way,” he argued. “Could we discuss this another time?” He was beyond his patience. Could Arielle not see that he kept himself from her because he only wished to protect her. That if he were to bind himself to her, marry her, that he would only bring her death and darkness. He’d learned that six years ago. Why was she so blind to it? He felt her sink into herself, becoming distant from him. He mourned the loss but knew its necessity. The farther she was from him, the safe she and the children would be. Luke frowned. “Ben, there is no need for you to sacrifice yourself.” “That isn’t my plan,” he assured, pulling his blaster and checking the power back. Stun blasts used more energy. “What is then?” “Get us out all in one piece. I can look after myself but I’ve been out of practice for too long. I won’t be able to protect Arielle, Arrian and Talia,” he explained. “You on the other hand are capable of watching after yourself and the ones I love.” Satisfied that he would have adequate energy, he stuck the blaster in the band of his trousers at the small of his back. “I go out all friendly like and when Mother comes in with laser flying, you take Arielle and the children and run for the ship.” “And you?” “I can take care of myself until you can swing back to pick me up.” “I like this plan about as much as Arielle,” Luke grunted. “But I’m also willing to see the merit in it.” He looked his gaze on Ben’s, his pale blue eyes piercing to the very soul of Ben. “Just be careful.” Ben gave a lop-sided grin. “I’m always careful.” -----signature----- Proud Master to Meredith_Kenobi & Lolly_Tolly "He full-on Obi-Wan'd me!" Dean Winchester - Supernatural
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SilSolo Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:09am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	Oooh lovely first post. PM me when you update, will you? I wanna see what happened to Gwynne. -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27517284/p1/?11 Like this quick sketch: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/32848083/ ? Then commission me. Prices are negotiable.
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Kidan Title: TFN EU Staff Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:19am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	a great start here Zara!! You can see Ben's enjoyment at his simple life, and of course it then comes crashind down upon him... And poor Arielle, she so whats to be married to Ben, and he won't allow it. He thinks he's protecting her from his past, but all he's doing is telling her that her past is still true. He's hurting her, by trying to protect her.... Great job on this, can't wait for the next post, and PM's please. -----signature----- You sadistic Yank!! - McEwok No Krakana - http://nokrakana.wrighton.org Believe in the Constitution? Ron Paul '08
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rebel_cheese Registered: Jul '06	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:28am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia - Date Edited: 7/24/06 1:16pm (2 edits total) Edited By: rebel_cheese
	Very nice opening. I see you took the story into the future by six years or so. Wonder what kind of trouble Jaina got into this time? Wonder if Tesse is a full Knight, and if Jaina's married either Kyp or Jagged. I hope Gwyenne (it's hard for me to not call her Allana) and Tenel Ka will be all right, it seems Jacen's been slowly corrupting them over time . . . Quite an AU you've got going here. And thanks for the PM! I'm happy to have asked for it, I want to see where this goes . . . -----signature----- Padawan of princess_of_naboo E-married to the amazing padawanlost Member of Charon_Force Beginning's End: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28450077&brd=10477&replies=1
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UnderCoverJedi Registered: Jul '06	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:29am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	Great work! I'd like to make sure I don't miss a post, so could you PM when you update? “Hello, Ben,” the Jedi Master greeted. “Father,” he said back. “I knew you would be here some day. Though I must admit that I had hoped that day would be further in the future.” A trace of an embarrassed smile, one that if his mother had been here she would identified from his farmboy days, smoothed some wrinkles and deepened others. His father was still a very handsome man but there was a deep sadness to his features and it was reflected in his smile. “I regret the necessity.” Great little exchange here. -----signature----- Not e-married, e-engaged, or e-attached. I prefer to do those things in person. In His Master's Wake http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/28185973/p1/?0 Never http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/25789579
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Jaina_Solo_15 Registered: Dec '02	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:41am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	Hmmm, so it's been six years...Ben's grown up. I'm curious as to what's happened that's making Jaina call for Mara now, however. You've given us so many things to wonder about! The J/J shipper in me wants to know what's happened between them in the past six years that Jaina's been in the Unknown Regions. That kiss was a good start, but with Jaina's talent for messing things up... Ben and Arielle with two kids...very interesting. I hadn't been expecting Ben's justifications and reasons for wanting to not marry and not kill. They certainly make sense for him though I'd imagine that Arielle and Mara are going to be working on that not wanting to get married bit. All in all...it was an awesome beginning to this part as usual and I certainly look forward to more! -----signature----- http://jaina47.livejournal.com/ - Come here for fic teasers & writing news
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G__Anakin Registered: Apr '06	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:41am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	Great start! 6 years Keep me on the PM list and thanks for the PM -----signature----- Knighted by Courtney_Solo - - - My fanfic - - - Jedi Sith - http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=26751105&brd=10476&start=26759554
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iamobiwan1970 Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:48am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	I'm so excited to see the story continue!!!! I love the way you described Utaleen and the life Ben was now leading. He had to grow up fast due to Jacen and I wasn't surprised to see he had children. I keep thinking how horribley close to profic this story is. Jacen had basically set himself up as Emperer in Hapes and the whole order is descintigrating. Brings new meaning to the LOTF: "coming full circle.." -----signature----- Whatever tomorrow brings, I'll be there, with open arms and open eyes.
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Yoda-i_am Registered: Jun '06	Date Posted: 7/24/06 10:49am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	that was a good opening to this fic. thanks for the pm and could you keep them coming so i can keep up to date with this one -----signature----- "Difficult to see, the future is" "May the Force be with you" "I NEED HELP" workin on a new fic has to do with vader wantin to make it a round robin if anyone is interested pm me
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PRINCESSCAMBRIA Registered: Jan '06	Date Posted: 7/24/06 1:01pm Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	Very nice start indeed I really liked the interaction between father and son. Looking forward to more -----signature----- Cyar'ika of the Mando'ade Mando’ads... burk’solu. Kyrami’tom. "Mandalorians... dangerous alone. Deadly together."
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aurrasingrules101 Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 7/24/06 1:26pm Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	dances Yay! i'm so glad you didn't make us wait long! I love the plot possibilities you have set up, as well as the fact that six years have passed. leaves a little more wriggle room. One, I know you're going to have Ben confront this "i can't be close to anyone" thing, because that's a problem the skywalkers seem prone to, and one that needs to be stopped. i hated in the NJO when they put Jaina through that. having children does complicate things a bit, though, doesn't it? and i doubt his "no killing rule" will hold out for long. ben has a lot to come to terms with, and i'm guessing this story is going to be primarily about him overcoming his own guilt and selfworth issues. i wonder how you're going to have Gwynne set up in this? if she's already been bred into evil by Jacen, or if she's still holding out? and where does TK stand?? Hmm, i wonder how jaina and jag's relationship has progressed over the last six years. hey, maybe they're married with kids too!! I know, wishful thinking. i'll trust you'll let us know soon. Wow, i think this is the longest reply i've ever given! oh, well. i'm excited! thanks for the PM, and i'll be waiting for the next chapter! -----signature----- Stories in profile 1st Peter 4:16 and John 3:3 Dubbed the Mistress of Cliffhangers "You can call me 'Great One'. Most people do." -Jaina Solo
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Maul Brady Registered: Mar '99	Date Posted: 7/24/06 4:00pm Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	Gosh I love you Zara. That father and son hug was A++++++++ -----signature----- Anakin Solo Day : October 30, 2006 President of the "Tenel Ka sure has a lot of fun wink wink" Social Club. I WON'T LOOK AT SACRIFICE SPOILERS, I WONT LOOK AT SACRIFICE SPOILERS I WONT LOOK AT SACR----aahhh my eyes!!!!!!
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MirandaFair Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 7/24/06 5:33pm Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	The sequel begins!!! Beautiful descriptive passages of Utaleen. I'd love to vacation there, minus the approaching Shadows, naturally. Taccati fish swam around his feet. He’d held his position for so long that they now believed that he was as much a part of the ocean as the sand beneath his feet or the tiny shelled creatures that crawled over them. He was patient, the sea had taught him that, and waited forthe right moment to strike. So vivid and colorful. And Ben...a father! Even more to fight for now. The life he has built for him and Arielle is simple, I can tell they loved it there. Sad that they have to leave, but very necessary. “I spent my childhood running away from such a place and you spent yours running to it.” Loved the moment shared between Luke and Ben. True to their characters. It'll be good to see how everyone has grown in the span of six years. I wonder if Gwynne has been corrupted by her father. Wonderful start. Thank you for the PMs. P.S. - The title is great! I love the symbolic theme you're sticking with. -----signature----- May the Muse be with you.
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Briee-Targaryen Registered: Jul '06	Date Posted: 7/24/06 11:10pm Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia - Date Edited: 7/25/06 3:55am (1 edits total) Edited By: Briee-Targaryen
	A great beginning, Michelle I hope you are fine with me sinking my teeth into this one without first having gone through Evolution -----signature----- And so the ROSE begins...
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Jessoass Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 7/25/06 8:07am Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia - Date Edited: 7/25/06 8:08am (1 edits total) Edited By: Jessoass
	This is starting great!!! Can't wait for more! Jess PS: thanks for the PM -----signature----- http://jessoass.deviantart.com/ "Life must be lived as play." -- Plato "The universe is change; our life is what our thoughts make it."--Marcus Aurelius Big fan of J/J & J/TK
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ZaraValinor Registered: May '02	Date Posted: 7/25/06 8:53pm Subject: RE: Darkest Before the Dawn (Contiuation of Evolution) Ben/OC, J/J, J/TK, Gwynne (Allana) L/M Leia
	SilSolo posted: Oooh lovely first post. PM me when you update, will you? I wanna see what happened to Gwynne. Thanks, Sil. Will definitely put on the list. Kidan posted: a great start here Zara!! You can see Ben's enjoyment at his simple life, and of course it then comes crashind down upon him... And poor Arielle, she so whats to be married to Ben, and he won't allow it. He thinks he's protecting her from his past, but all he's doing is telling her that her past is still true. He's hurting her, by trying to protect her.... Great job on this, can't wait for the next post, and PM's please. Ben's got some serious issues and though he's worked through some, he's still a crapload more to get things together on. rebel_cheese posted: Very nice opening. I see you took the story into the future by six years or so. Wonder what kind of trouble Jaina got into this time? Wonder if Tesse is a full Knight, and if Jaina's married either Kyp or Jagged. I hope Gwyenne (it's hard for me to not call her Allana) and Tenel Ka will be all right, it seems Jacen's been slowly corrupting them over time . . . Quite an AU you've got going here. And thanks for the PM! I'm happy to have asked for it, I want to see where this goes . . . I almost changed her name a number of times when I started writing this new chapter. I nearly decided to just let it be Allana, but it just didn't feel right. UnderCoverJedi posted: Great work! I'd like to make sure I don't miss a post, so could you PM when you update? “Hello, Ben,” the Jedi Master greeted. “Father,” he said back. “I knew you would be here some day. Though I must admit that I had hoped that day would be further in the future.” A trace of an embarrassed smile, one that if his mother had been here she would identified from his farmboy days, smoothed some wrinkles and deepened others. His father was still a very handsome man but there was a deep sadness to his features and it was reflected in his smile. “I regret the necessity.” Great little exchange here. Thanks, I'll put you on the list. Yeah, I'm a sucker for a good father/son scene. Jaina_Solo_15 posted: Hmmm, so it's been six years...Ben's grown up. I'm curious as to what's happened that's making Jaina call for Mara now, however. You've given us so many things to wonder about! The J/J shipper in me wants to know what's happened between them in the past six years that Jaina's been in the Unknown Regions. That kiss was a good start, but with Jaina's talent for messing things up... Ben and Arielle with two kids...very interesting. I hadn't been expecting Ben's justifications and reasons for wanting to not marry and not kill. They certainly make sense for him though I'd imagine that Arielle and Mara are going to be working on that not wanting to get married bit. All in all...it was an awesome beginning to this part as usual and I certainly look forward to more! Yeah, things might be a little more advanced with Jaina and Jag. We'll just have to see. Ben will have Arielle and Mara and Luke and anyone whoever met him talking to him, whether he listens is another thing. G__Anakin posted: Great start! 6 years Keep me on the PM list and thanks for the PM 6 years and a lot of cool stuff happening. Sure thing. iamobiwan1970 posted: I'm so excited to see the story continue!!!! I love the way you described Utaleen and the life Ben was now leading. He had to grow up fast due to Jacen and I wasn't surprised to see he had children. I keep thinking how horribley close to profic this story is. Jacen had basically set himself up as Emperer in Hapes and the whole order is descintigrating. Brings new meaning to the LOTF: "coming full circle.." I tend to like to play with the 'coming full circle' of alot of things. I always like to have a theme and to run with it. I've started Betrayal so I can't wait to see the parallels between the two. Yoda-i_am posted: that was a good opening to this fic. thanks for the pm and could you keep them coming so i can keep up to date with this one I'm glad you liked it. I'll put you on the list. PRINCESSCAMBRIA posted: Very nice start indeed I really liked the interaction between father and son. Looking forward to more Thanks. I appreciate your kind words. aurrasingrules101 posted: dances Yay! i'm so glad you didn't make us wait long! I love the plot possibilities you have set up, as well as the fact that six years have passed. leaves a little more wriggle room. One, I know you're going to have Ben confront this "i can't be close to anyone" thing, because that's a problem the skywalkers seem prone to, and one that needs to be stopped. i hated in the NJO when they put Jaina through that. having children does complicate things a bit, though, doesn't it? and i doubt his "no killing rule" will hold out for long. ben has a lot to come to terms with, and i'm guessing this story is going to be primarily about him overcoming his own guilt and selfworth issues. i wonder how you're going to have Gwynne set up in this? if she's already been bred into evil by Jacen, or if she's still holding out? and where does TK stand?? Hmm, i wonder how jaina and jag's relationship has progressed over the last six years. hey, maybe they're married with kids too!! I know, wishful thinking. i'll trust you'll let us know soon. Wow, i think this is the longest reply i've ever given! oh, well. i'm excited! thanks for the PM, and i'll be waiting for the next chapter! Ben will have to get over some more issues. After everything he did as a child he can't really see how valuable he is. Gwynne will have a bigger role in this story much more then in the last. Her character is a little more grown-up. Maul Brady posted: Gosh I love you Zara. That father and son hug was A++++++++ Thanks Maul. I'm a huge father and son fan. MirandaFair posted: The sequel begins!!! Beautiful descriptive passages of Utaleen. I'd love to vacation there, minus the approaching Shadows, naturally. Taccati fish swam around his feet. He’d held his position for so long that they now believed that he was as much a part of the ocean as the sand beneath his feet or the tiny shelled creatures that crawled over them. He was patient, the sea had taught him that, and waited forthe right moment to strike. So vivid and colorful. And Ben...a father! Even more to fight for now. The life he has built for him and Arielle is simple, I can tell they loved it there. Sad that they have to leave, but very necessary. “I spent my childhood running away from such a place and you spent yours running to it.” Loved the moment shared between Luke and Ben. True to their characters. It'll be good to see how everyone has grown in the span of six years. I wonder if Gwynne has been corrupted by her father. Wonderful start. Thank you for the PMs. P.S. - The title is great! I love the symbolic theme you're sticking with. It's so fun for me to go into these place and have a greater adventure. Most of this next fic will take place in Chiss territory, but we've got Leia and a number of others going to exotic place. Briee-Targaryen posted: A great beginning, Michelle I hope you are fine with me sinking my teeth into this one without first having gone through Evolution No problem Brian. I'm glad you're enjoying it. Jessoass posted: This is starting great!!! Can't wait for more! Jess PS: thanks for the PM You're welcome. More soon. Hopefully thursday. -----signature----- Proud Master to Meredith_Kenobi & Lolly_Tolly "He full-on Obi-Wan'd me!" Dean Winchester - Supernatural
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