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Blue_Milkshake
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Nov '05
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4/25 9:28am
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RE: An Alliance at Alida's (L/M) ~Pt 14: The Onlooker's Observation (Update 4-25)
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Squee, squee, squee, squee!!!! An update at Alida's! 
Talon raised a knowing eyebrow. “To further the advantage, someone you know is already working on the problem. I hear from my sources in the New Republic that Luke Skywalker has joined the project.” Talon glanced at Mara to see her reaction. She froze for an instant at the sound of the Jedi’s name, and Talon noticed a faint blush play across her cheeks before she quickly recovered. Talon smiled to himself.
Talon, you sly vornskr you! I can just imagine how self-satisfied Talon felt to have confirmed that little mystery. Cats and canaries come to mind...
Assured of her privacy, Mara quietly reached into her jacket and retrieved a piece of flimsi from the inside pocket. Carefully, she unfolded the flimsi and pressed the wrinkles down. Her eyes scanned the handwritten words again. She traced the signature beneath the Coruscanti post-code, her slender fingers looping through the letters of his name. To have something he actually wrote her, something she could literally hold onto, was almost like having a part of him with her.
Girl, you've got it bad. But that's oh so good!
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Friendship... is not something you learn in school.
But if you haven't learned the meaning of friendship, you really haven't learned anything.
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Jedi-2B
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Nov '00
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4/25 10:45am
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RE: An Alliance at Alida's (L/M) ~Pt 14: The Onlooker's Observation (Update 4-25)
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Great to see an update on this!
Mara's discourse on the Jade's Fire just makes her decision to sacrifice it that much more poignant.
To have something he actually wrote her, something she could literally hold onto, was almost like having a part of him with her.
Now you've got me thinking of Mara's last scribbled note to Luke, and how he'll carry it with him the rest of his life. 
Wonderful chapter. 
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It was on her fifteenth day in the darkness of the Nirauan cave when Mara Jade awoke to discover a rescuer had finally arrived.
It was not, however, any of the potential rescuers she would have expected.
It was Luke.
~~And the rest is history~~
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Jedimaster_JainaSolo
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Jun '03
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4/25 11:00am
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RE: An Alliance at Alida's (L/M) ~Pt 14: The Onlooker's Observation (Update 4-25)
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Awesome! I've always admired how Mara, though independent, can learn from others and gracefully tweak her weaknesses...Especially if its someone like Karrde. That was perfect how she acts like no one will change her mind, and then gives in without letting it seem like she gave in. You did a wonderful job. And the letter? beautiful touch.
BTW, can you add me to the PM list?
 Dana
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JEDIFLYSWATTER
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Dec '04
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4/28 8:58pm
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RE: An Alliance at Alida's (L/M) ~Pt 14: The Onlooker's Observation (Update 4-25)
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I want to know what the letter said!  Did like the little notion of Mara placing it inside her jacket next to her heart. Also liked the little teenage love type thing about her having a piece of him with her. Cute.  Those feelings are always wonderful to go back to when you become a mature adult. Reminds you that you are still alive. Love Talon. He can read people so well that sometime you have to think that maybe he is somewhat Force sensetive. Wonderful post and thanks. 
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New Orleans will rise from the ashes!
You knew it was a rattlesnke when you picked it up.
Kitty cats do not lie about love.
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JadeLotus
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Mar '05
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5/10 9:41am
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I love it when Talon makes an appearance - you know he's going to talk sense! 
Love love love Mara explaining what the Fire means to her an why. The best explanation I think I've ever read.
And letter! 
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You are the only thing that makes sense
Just ignore all this present tense
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Jedi Trace
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Dec '99
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5/12 11:08pm
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RE: An Alliance at Alida's (L/M) ~Pt 14: The Onlooker's Observation (Update 4-25)
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I love the way you write Talon! And Mara's off with Shirlee, now. Very nice tie-in with canon events.
But I can't even imagine where you're going next... 
Wonderful chapter!
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Captain of the Cade Brigade “Light, dark – They are just directions. Do not be fooled that you stand on anything other than your own two feet.” ~ Shaak Ti, The Force Unleashed The Society for Girls Who Like Things that Go Boom
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Jade_Pilot
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6/27 9:57am
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RE: An Alliance at Alida's (L/M) ~Pt 14: The Onlooker's Observation (Update 4-25)
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Hooray for Bruno! Qualifying as Best Male OC!!
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Jade_eyes
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Aug '04
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6/27 11:00am
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RE: An Alliance at Alida's (L/M) ~Pt 14: The Onlooker's Observation (Update 4-25)
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Well... congratulations on Best Male OC for Bruno  LOL I still think of Alida frequently--she and an OC I mention in my bio are the standards for classy ladyness.  Hugles!!!!
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divapilot
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7/1 9:52am
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RE: An Alliance at Alida's (L/M) ~Pt 14: The Onlooker's Observation (Update 4-25)
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Jade_Eyes: Thank you! Talon is interesting to write. I try to think “elegant” when I write him. And he is very smart. The challenge is to be smarter than Talon and Mara when I write them! I think Talon wishes he had someone to love him, and he knows the happiness it has cost him because he chose his career over love. That’s what makes it so poignant when he finally does have a relationship.
Jade_Pilot: Thank you, Jade_Pilot! I had a good time with this one, getting Talon to make Mara see some sense and perspective without driving her away by becoming preachy. Luke must have eventually taken some lessons from him, huh?
Blue_Milkshake: Yes, Mara has it bad, but she is too unsure of exactly what she has to allow herself to enjoy it. The fact that she cherishes his letter proves that she cares much more than she’ll admit to. Thank you!
Jedi-2B: Mara's discourse on the Jade's Fire just makes her decision to sacrifice it that much more poignant.
That’s what I was after. I couldn’t see at first why it was so big a deal that her sacrifice of a ship was what made Luke decide she had advanced as a Jedi. A little back-story on Jade’s Fire seemed in order.
Now you've got me thinking of Mara's last scribbled note to Luke, and how he'll carry it with him the rest of his life.
Again, that was deliberate. I’m thrilled you picked up on that.
Thank you very much for the thoughtful reply!
Jedimaster_Jainasolo: Thanks so much! I wanted Mara to hear it from someone that cared about her enough to not allow her to throw away a chance at true love. She respects Talon, she will consider what he tells her. Thanks for the reply, and I would be happy to add you to the PM list.
JEDIFLYSWATTER: She keeps the letter handy, but it’s because of what the letter represents. Wearing a wedding ring is like having a piece of the person you love with you, too. And that Talon – who wouldn’t want a friend like him? (I sure know I wouldn’t want him as my enemy!) Thank you for the comments and the reply.
JadeLotus: Thank you! I’m glad you liked this. Like I said earlier, I felt it necessary to explain why Mara felt that way about Jade’s Fire. I’m glad it came out making sense.
Jedi Trace: I love the way you write Talon! Only because I learned from the best, my friend.
Yes, I’ve started wrapping the story into the canon. Hopefully we can fill in some missing scenes along the way. Thank you!
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Thank you very much for considering this fic when voting for the Beyond the Saga Summer Awards. The OC in this story, Bruno Maritin, has qualified for Best Male OC. I’m honored!
Thanks, Jade_eyes and Jade_Pilot, for the congratulations!
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